Reviews for Wraithing Hearts
sahrmael chapter 6 . 6/19/2011
You really need to update this more. It's really very interesting to be reading a fantasy story like this. Makes me think of Final Fantasy, as it's like a mix of past, present, and future.

I'll be nagging you about this from now on.
St. Harridan chapter 1 . 1/30/2011
Hey there, remember me? Finally got around to reading your fics. :)

The concept is rather entertaining, but be sure to read over it once you're done to look out for mistakes and do a self-edit. I'd recommend having a beta to read over your work before publishing. And, one thing that I might have to add is that try to refrain from using abbreviations of words like "18 yrs. old."

Since this is an original piece though, it would be better if you published it on fictionpress dot com. That's where original works are archived.
sahrmael chapter 3 . 6/18/2010
You've got a good story going, but you need a little more detail. In other words, try using some different vocabulary to describe different things. And, even if everything looks perfect, double and triple check for spelling and punctuation. (Like the word "flier", for example. It's supposed to be spelled "flyer.")
Hiro2258 chapter 1 . 2/10/2010
I hope someone replies