|Reviews for Anastasia: Retold|
| Shelby S chapter 24 . 10/6
Chapter 24 covers the dancing scene BEAUTIFULLY. Also, I love when a story is written well-not only grammar/syntax-wise, but also in pace. A lot of fics have an almost pornographic feel without plot or character-development. This has just the right amount of sensuality with slow build and I LOVE it. Keep up the great work and don't worry about your talents as a writer, because you are blessed with a gift!
| Guest chapter 24 . 9/30
You are AMAZING. This story is perfect and I'm so glad you are still updating! I don't know what I'd do if was ever abandoned! Please update whenever you can :)
| AkkaTik chapter 24 . 9/30
Hi ! I’m so sorry about your agent troubles… it takes time, but don’t lose hope, your writing is great and I’m sure you’ll get your chance to shine soon! :)
As for this chapter, I really like how you fleshed up the bus part. It nicely resonates with the scenes in the train, which puts emphasis on the fact that you’ve been coming back to the movie narrative. You’ve definitely ended the darker original part set between the diverging disaster in the train and Anya’s complete collaboration. For instance, the line “chewing with her mouth open wide because she knew he’d find it repulsive” is a reference to her lack of table manners in the train (and her quiet acceptance to be dolled up and trained in dire contrast with her reluctance to be taught back then). Her brutality in waking Dimitri with a start in the bus also refers to her hitting him accidentally in the train when he woke her up… and his concern (“how do you feel anyway” “about Paris being so close now”) is in contrast with his dismissal of her question about him missing Russia in the compartment… This whole mirroring thing effectively puts an end to the dangerous part of their trip, as well as it allows readers to assess how their dynamic has progressed. Indeed, her willingness to put her legs on Dimitri’s lap is a nod to Dimitri propping his legs onto the seat to unnerve her: same move, different motive and reaction… They’ve progressed from reaching out by arguing aggressively to a more genuine approach. They’ve come to an understanding and are feeling more comfortable, not only in their companionship but in their need for touching the other physically. And, obviously, it’s another example in the string of sleeping/waking up scenes that frame their emotional growth.
(and on a side note, I’m glad the travel brochure that she was reading in the train in the movie made an appearance here, lol ! It definitely helps giving a lighter note to this part of the trip!)
Now, about the scene in the boat, I’m happy that you insisted on the little detail of her dress still being too large, even after putting it on. In the movie, it mysteriously went from being a “tent” to fitting her to a T. In your story, it’s more realistic.
It was also a good move to write the dance lesson from her point of view: she understands instinctively his reactions and how they match her own, allowing her to let go of her belligerence and to open up, unlike her previous refusal to recognize the nature of what was brewing under the surface. And, of course, it makes his backing off even harder to accept for her. One can suppose that she’s guessing the dilemma he’s struggling with, caught as he is between feeling the same way and wanting more on one hand, and sticking to his years-long logic of withdrawal and manipulation on the other… How do you romance a girl you know you’re setting up for ruin? The expressions you use (“split in her face”/”meant nothing”) hint that to some degree she’s aware that he’s using her…
Last, not least, you very cleverly brought in the idea of the ragging storm that takes place in the nightmare scene by wowing it into their emotions while dancing: the attraction, “like lightning in a storm”, gets expressed by the weather as the waltz comes to an end ("the wind picked up”/”to smell the incoming rain on his skin”). It’s fitting, since the real threat in your story is no longer caused by an evildoer’s plans, but by the growing pull they can no longer resist as heartily as they wanted to.
Again, I love how you took an almost complete scene from the movie and managed to incorporate it into your own timeline and development. Well done!
Good luck in your publishing project!
| Guest chapter 24 . 9/28
Ah! You updated! Thank you for updating. I'm sorry to read that personal life was giving you hardships, but I (and obviously others) do enjoy reading your work so eventually an agent has to pick you up!
I think you caught that spinning bit well.
Also, I like how you stay in-character: Ayna doesn't know more about Dimitri than she should, just how he looks and acts not what he is thinking. That's a pretty difficult thing to do according to a one of my friends who is always writing.
| hello chapter 24 . 9/27
amazing, absolutely amazing, i loved it
| Just A Muggle Artist chapter 24 . 9/25
Oh my gosh this story is the freakin best! You rewriting the movie is so wonderful I wish I could bake you cookies or something! Seriously I facepalmed when I caught myself grinning from ear to ear reading the parts from the movie. Seriously it's like I'm 6 again. Your descriptions and dialogue is so freaking perfect! I can only wonder how your going to write about Anya's speech about the boy in the wall. It's going to be so good. I can just tell!
| BeneathaMoonlessNight chapter 24 . 9/24
OMG THANK GOD YOU UPDATED I didn't know how I was going to survive without this story. Been waiting for the waltz scene since I first started reading this, it's my favourite part of the film. So perfect 3
| hm813 chapter 24 . 9/24
Lovely! Of course the two of them would be too absorbed with each other to not hear Vladmir's whispered song ;). Can we have a bit of it from Dimitri's POV next chap though? I can tell he's feinting ignorance but I would still like to know why he looked like he saw a ghost :) Thanks for still writing even though you went through some tough times. Please inform us when your novel is publish as I, for one, would like to read an original book written by you.
| callmeasinnercallmeasaint chapter 24 . 9/24
Yay you updated! This chapter was so great! I think you captured what was going on in Anya's head during the dance scene really well. Can't wait to read what comes next!
| dragonfairy2360 chapter 24 . 9/24
You'll get someone to pick up your novel, the right agent just needs to come along. It might just take a little time. You are super talented. I've been loving this story. The banter between Anya and Demetri is great. Can't wait to read the next chapter...we all know what's coming but your take on it is always a little different.
| Just a Little Spark chapter 24 . 9/24
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I love this chapter. Yes, yes you /have/ done this scene justice; maybe even a bit better, in my opinion. :) Poor Anya, at the end. I can't wait to see what you do with the next chapter; presumably the scene where she nearly jumps off the boat and drowns. Another lovely moment between the two. I don't doubt you'll give us another wonderful chapter.
Don't ever let rejection get you down. You are a wonderful author who creates magic with your fingertips and electrify us through your writing. Don't you ever, ever give up, because one day, some hotshot agent out there is going to find out your true worth, and all those other agents who rejected you are going to wish they hadn't said no to you.
Continue writing, and kudos!
| Parsat chapter 24 . 9/24
It's awesome to see your dedication to finish this story, long as it has been. Keep it up!
| Guest chapter 23 . 9/17
Ah. I thought 23 chapters was too short to be finished when I started reading. This pretty cute, and a nice way of adding some realistic touches to the plot. I especially liked this chapter where it specified they just spent a month waiting- and Vlad selling his ring. I really hope you will update, but this was started in 2010 so I understand it probably won't be any time soon.
| Guest chapter 23 . 9/10
I love it! Please update
| Cara chapter 23 . 9/4
Pretty please finish this?