Reviews for The Harem War
Squarekiddo chapter 4 . 9/22/2015
Scratch my earlier comment, this is literally too hard for me to ignore, i know i hit my own set roof when I lash out and hit my desk cause something disgust me and this chapter alone did it 3 times during the beginning alone, Im sorry sailor this seriously isnt my cup of tea, in that metaphor I dont drink tea.

Keep up the good work though, People except me obviously seem to like it, so youre obviously doing something right, its to bad we cant please everyone.
I did give the story a try though.

Squarekiddo chapter 2 . 9/22/2015
Seriously the way you moved their relationship makes my skin crawl every time they call eachother love, especially fiance, damn thats creepy.

I dont like it, not a single bit, so im going to skip most of the corny fluff til later when I feel they spent enough time to actually call each other Love, seriously creeps me out just writing it :C
vikarti.anatra chapter 76 . 9/22/2015
I hope this great story will be continued and finished
charcoal11 chapter 73 . 8/29/2015
how many errors am i going to find, you had mr delacour as the french minister for magic and now he's only the deputy
charcoal11 chapter 66 . 8/29/2015
another mistake here, yo had voldemort recognize snape as the new deputy headmaster but in this chapter you have dumbledore feel that's impossible because of the strings he had to pull to keep snape out of prison
charcoal11 chapter 65 . 8/29/2015
gotta point out an error, in a previous chapter you had hermione's parents in canada with a flight from toronto to britain, in this chapter you have them in the states
charcoal11 chapter 60 . 8/28/2015
to answer your question at the start about charlie and oliver regarding quiditich captain, i remember reading somewhere that charlie had been offered his position on the dragon preserve during his last year and left right away, don't remember where, could have been another fanfiction story though, not sure. charlie could've also resigned as captain to further his studies for working on the preserve once he graduated
charcoal11 chapter 42 . 8/27/2015
earlier in this chapter(more shocks) you had daphne and astoria introduced with the wrong names, you had daphne potter and astoria black
TheBeginingsEnd chapter 11 . 8/21/2015
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juan chapter 76 . 8/10/2015
thank god the site hpfanfic archive does not have rules we can have so many sex scenes and not be taken down like shit hole like here
juan chapter 59 . 8/10/2015
good thing in my story all death eaters and tom and anyone who supports them but not mark will be dead by chapter 10 of my third story whil the rest of the story is herem love and going to the past to destory tom and his girls
juan chapter 31 . 8/10/2015
good thing harry sister will be part of the herem incest is better two whores going at it and leaving harry's herem t each other for life that's lesbians do hump each other
juan chapter 1 . 8/10/2015
thank god my herem story will be better since no bashing of the wesleys and in fact they will be brain wash and control and the so called myth of the love potion and it will be finish unlike this one
madcrazystoryteller chapter 15 . 8/6/2015
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Guest chapter 76 . 7/21/2015
Rrslly letd get on with thr show mr worl
D smith unfinishrf story just suvk bout like my spelling serious put yout hand to yer plough and grt some action going I have read 50 k hpff story and I like to see this one thru shootists hotmail. Com
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