|Reviews for Scheme Of Fate|
| jk chapter 14 . 6/8
this is getting reeeeaaallllllyyy boring
| jk chapter 10 . 6/7
I find it VERRRY conveinant to your story that bella "NEEDS" help from Edward only the second day of knowing him...stuuuupid
and then to have her know that she loves him...soooo soooon? ya its chapter 10 but shes known him for two days and he was a cunt for awhile...it took him what WEEKS to even give her the time of fucking day in twilight but bella just gives herself away...cheap bitch
| jk chapter 6 . 6/7
give him leeway until he trusts her? wheres the fucking "deal" in that? whats in it for bella?
so he smiles and she turns into melted butter? realllllllllllllllllllly? after hes been a cunt all afternoon?
and having the cullens laugh like that when bella said NOTHING FUNNY? weeeeird
| JK chapter 4 . 6/7
I don't get it! why does bella have NO fucking back bone? she follows Edward out like shes going to the gallows...even though she doesn't HAVE TO...then she not only goes with them to their house but she lets alice push her into the passenger seat of her own fucking truck? and then she says alice is "charming?" what the fuck is charming about alice? NOTHING! shes annoying, bossy and fuckin pushy. I want alice to slap a hoe! Alice needs to but the hell out...you should kill her off...that would be better
and having bella talk about Edward "warmth"? when hes been nothing but a douche? FUCK THAT...make that prick work for it
and then on top of all that bullshit you have bella be one of "those" people...you know the kinds of people that are pussies? the kind that faint or end up with ptsd...the ones that have a hard time talking about their feelings...or things that have happened...its ...fuck! so annoying...whats so damn hard? I was taken, then he drank my blood! stupid fuckin bitch
| jk chapter 3 . 6/6
it comes off really fucking odd reading bella refer to her PEERS as "human CHILDREN" hello? their the same mother fucking age
if bella was to be believed and she was really scared that the vamps were gonna kill her...why would she go with Edward? that's the dumbest shit ive ever heard...shes a vamp..why not run away? why not get in a group of other kids and stay there...why not go to the office and call daddy to come pick her up...theres so many options that are waaaaaay more believable then supposedly walking to your death without a fucking fight!
and bella pretending to trip on stuff to act like her old self? KNOWN OF THOSE KIDS FUCKING KNOW HER! SO IT MAKES NOOOOOOO FUCKING SENSE.
HOW DOES ONES EYES "NARROW IN SURPRISE?"
WHY IS EDWARD SO WEIRD? HOW OLD ARE YOU BELLA SWAN? HE KEEPS REPEATING IT "BELLA SWAN" DUDE SHE KNOWS HER OWN NAME YOU DONT NEED TO REPEAT IT...
THEN HE DOES THE SAME FUCKING THING WITH "NEWBORN"
YOUR A NEWBORN? WHERE IS YOUR SIRE NEWBORN...WHATS WITH THE REPATITION? ITS FUCKING ANNOYING!
| jk chapter 2 . 6/6
I really don't like that you keep pointing out that bella "felt something other then fear" first off...why have her say it so many times that it becomes annoying?
second...it makes me dislike her character that she keeps saying that shit when Edward is being a fucking dick ...all I can think is why in the hell would she feel anything other then pissed the fuck off that hes holding her arm like that acting like hes the fucking vampy boss of forks...Edward can go fuck himself
| iAmLiloH chapter 7 . 6/5
I find it very disgusting that Alice let Bella go through that when she is 'suppose' to be her friend why did she not stop it ? & why is Bella so self-depreciating ? In twilight when she became a vampire she was able to notice her beauty so why not in this fic ? I get that its fanfiction and your writing is good but you could have at least made it realistic.
| featherdusterpixie chapter 9 . 5/15
alice didnt even say sorry for not saving bella,
i mean she felt it was bad to interfere but she let bella go through all that alone.
kind of crappy of her.
and to not even say sorry. humph!
| Anonymous chapter 4 . 4/25
I like the excerpts
| Oneway2011 chapter 21 . 3/16
I just read the note on chap 22 and you can put me in the just plain MORE categorie! I have lived your story! Thank you and don't stop here.
| craaazyaboutMalfoy chapter 5 . 2/21
Fate in Hindi is 'Karma' ( कर्मा ) or 'Kismat' ( किस्मत ) - your hindi text reads 'Karna' - which means to do something. I'm not sure if reviews can hold Hindi text, but I've typed them out in Hindi as well. Correct it if you can :)
| PAT2024 chapter 22 . 2/8
Thank you for sharing this Nice story, I really enjoyed reading it. A sequel would have been great... May be one day... One can dream.
| lamelurker chapter 22 . 1/18
Thank you for writing and sharing your story! I really enjoyed reading it.
| Montara chapter 23 . 12/20/2015
I like it. Good luck! :)
| Montara chapter 21 . 12/20/2015
She accepted the ring! And his conditions of courting...that's kind of unfair since she's a modern woman...but if she's ok...not that most modern women would accept him setting the pace like that, giving her only small kisses whenever HE wants...