I'm surprised he was able to hurt her earlier. He'd be mortified.

I'm surprised all the Collins didn't gang up on her in the parking lot.

I literally read this whole fanfic in just one day, I couldn't put it down! You are a truly talented writer and I can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for being awesome! :)

Great fic

this story is a very touching version of the original twilight only with the exception of Isabella already being a vampire. it has truly been a delightful read.

I find it very unrealstic that Bella is that much in control, even when she had no one to advise her.

I am a little disappointed that this story has become the book/movie. I was expecting something different with Bella being a vampire already. You hinted at them before, which was to be expected, but now it's jumped right in with no discernible difference.

Great story. I love Elizabeth Browning's poetry, especially the "How do I love thee?" poem.

I loved your rendition of this story. I couldn't stop reading until the end!

When title a chapter 'Extra!' to an existing story it makes a reader think there's some more of that story ring published. However, that was not the case here for it was just part of another separate fiction.

The transition from Bella as a stranger to Bella as a mate was done very smoothly and I liked it. Even if it happened very fast, it wasn't rushed. They didn't act like teenagers, acting all silly, I really hate those types of fanfics, so your story was very refreshing and believable. Thank you!

I just want to thank you for not swearing in this story and for keeping it clean. It's really hard to find something like that in today's time, but you certainly proved that it is possible to have a great story without all the dirty things you find almost everywhere. Thank you.

here is a Sample as my human life was gone away then heard Moans groans it was my besat friends inuried but totally dead then in my Grief and Vegeance all of the Sudden totally Tore off the Veins first then suddenly Lost all Control then a Sudden Sicken total Crash! Onto their own necks both sides and suddenly totally gave up and gave venom to my beloved but dear friends very way tribazillions and all of them very titanic and a ten thousands or ten hundrteds or much many more of them suddenly all screamed very too loudest and too screeching they were transitoning into different inhuman then their last beat of their own heart beats went slient then their eyes blasted open they were Crimson I Was their creator of my progeny then all the sudden they were hearing a CRASH of all arks then the Cullens sighted teenagers they were frozen at different ages frozen at death who shot up very well then oh my god the ASrks we much create more Vampires then fled with them used all the Codes and barged into as very all of the roms and suddenly totally attacked them in their grief and Vengeance and suddenly totally killed them and drained their wholly blood forever and bit the Second vein had their blood share4d all of them were totally drained the very way all of them suddenly top as very all of their mated bodies the children were sharing more blood we were currently drinking all the blood then a scout heard us feasting like a Carnivorous vampire coven created all member coven then the blood we drank suddenly with them totally burst outside totally free of the stoniest but much too hardest bodies then threw to the Scout then fled back to base the Volturi who later had them all killed with us then reawakened into the ark unable to mate or breed lost the ability to reproduce created heirs instead then the Volturi were enraged of us having a large but low coven forced to obey their law the Vulcans had kids looked 7 years old ballooned our coven were children in control and the families were both young and mature people wore Robes and low shoes the young preferred terran clothes with shoes Steacy discovered her ability she was flirting to Emmett Rose's husband was very friendly to Rose was impressed the way her bow her eyes began turn gold after raiding their fridge was hungry again with the others were stark thirsty Again then suddenly the bodies were tainted with poison in death if in life then my best friends's eye colors were Butterscotch golden they lost their families to diseases and illness with my own 3 families Who raided the fridge you hunted at night in our home yes the only logical choice it made us a whole like strongest and more powerful oh man got bulging muscles Watch it you Ape We are mated it now forever Jessica oh gross yuk It was Claudia rolled her Golden eyes me and my Martian mouth that's it our cover story invaded Earth good idea over here Pack members it was Stacey then the pack sighted all vampire females were so very desirous was Paul himself Great Moons of Krypton! he reeks of wet-dog it was Dawn Read Spier mess with us Mongrel you are going to be moondust Watch it when you call us Dogs well well you learned from me you passed the test all the Sudden they were showing both with my own then suddenly a strange black cat shooting here golden moon on our heads and with both shooting their then suddenly remembered of my last life then we unification felt a calling then suddenly Transformed as the Super Sailor Guardians of the 30th century our aging was over Ten thousands years old trapped in our different age bodies was altered by the Silver Imperial crystal we were of royal blood lineage of our kingdoms burned in our veins we were princesses guarding the three she is royalty as a Vampire princess of high class and money and wealthy but upper class then powered down clad from as very many new but international clothes so they were dressed in international clothes were rich but upper class but more wealthiest had to live in a fused palace oh man we are in style then it happened the death blood serum worked it's dirtiest spell then slipped outside and with as very all of the Shifters and mated women later had kids followed us in death with their allies with the both with the Nomads with mates with hybrids suddenly slipped away totally for real then the bodies vanished after breaking out again twice made us infertile in bopth genders then the each and all suddenly Smashed then reawakened very differently Pardon me madam yeow my eye color is Golden so ours as well oh no what happened All of you look outside it had changed what world is this Vulcan my planet finished sucking in a black hole we are trapped in here the 4 cities are merged with as very all vampires turned we have to do drain then give venom so we did then the Turned Vulcan with child both young and old blew up from their own bodies with the wholly priesthood of Gol then blew yup gained total immortality and the bodies were all gone to Earth to the Volturi had us with them eaten foe their mealds again banned us from our planet and the wholly solar system we were nationals of Vulcan for good here is my next but new life resumed on her planet and world with as very all turned Vulcans were unable to die or grew old with time but with compassion.

liked it!

That was cool. I mean, really. It was so much better than the original Twilight. I'm quite surprised actually but I really enjoyed this and your little changes made the original plotline that much better. Awesome!
I also quite enjoyed that little preview at the end, you should really continue it, it made me curious!
You're a really awesome writer and I'd love to read more from you! :)