Reviews for The Hostile Takeover Job |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ... Wow. This story is pretty good so far. I like it. Annie seems like a great victim for them to help. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh no oh no! |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol. i loved elliot playing bingo! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg, is Parker ok? And maybe I'm a little paraniod but that guy seemed weird to me. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Don't tell me something happened to Parker? Don't tell me that something is going to happen to Annie while Eliot went to see what's up? What's up with the guy who left his wallet, was that just filler stuff or did it have something to do with the whole plot line? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love THIS! uPDATE SOON. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Going great so far, I like the story premise you came up with. Very original for the setting and involving the team. Keep going I wanna know what happens. If you need a beta I'd be willing to help. Just drop a message if you want, |
![]() ![]() ![]() More Please? I take it Eliot has a little interest in out Annie gurl? I'd like the rest please with non posioned honey on top! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The plot is starting out on a fantastic premise. I'm loving the small town, A-Team feel, and of course, having Eliot's protective streak at the heart of it. You also made Annie into a very real character and I can clearly picture and feel for her. There were a few grammar and punctuation mistakes that were a bit distracting, but overall I can't wait for the next chapter. |