|Reviews for One World Together|
| Luiz4200 chapter 9 . 2/11/2010
Great ending. What's the baby's name?
| Luiz4200 chapter 8 . 2/3/2010
Alex's comment at the end of the chapter was so in character. Was the dream something fabricated by the necromorphs? Please update.
| Luiz4200 chapter 7 . 2/2/2010
Please let her survive. Will she be turned into a necromorph? Please update.
| Luiz4200 chapter 6 . 2/1/2010
Uh-oh. Please let Alex escape.
| Luiz4200 chapter 5 . 1/27/2010
Poor Alex. Will her child have anything zombie on her?
| Luiz4200 chapter 4 . 1/19/2010
And he should say he should slap her for risking their child's life like that. It'd be a funny way to tell her about the pregnancy. Please update.
| Luiz4200 chapter 3 . 1/17/2010
Is Dean in Space too?
| Luiz4200 chapter 2 . 1/15/2010
Please update. When will Alex notice she's pregnant?
| Luiz4200 chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
Good beginning. Please update.
| Evil Riggs chapter 1 . 1/5/2010
Undeniably interesting, but also extremely hard to follow. The narrative is extremely rushed, with almost no set-up or descriptive detail for the reader to latch onto. Even if the reader is intimately familiar with every setting and fandom you include here, they'll inevitably be confused by the way you're combining them.
My main advice would be to slow down and take much more time to describe the setting, its history, and how the characters move through it. Delete the flashback section entirely - it's abrupt, choppy, and stands out from the rest of the text. You can cover the same backstory within the text later, at a slower and detailed pace.
Despite my reservations, this is indeed a fascinating combination of settings and characters. I hope you slow down and consider the mix in full. Good luck as this progresses!