|Reviews for Complete Combustion|
| tc chapter 1 . 4/5
please come back and finish story
| b chapter 12 . 10/29/2014
u should finish the story it kept me on edge
| darkmoonlady chapter 12 . 3/17/2013
I loved it
| KakaIru 4 ever chapter 12 . 3/1/2013
0o0 i read this for NOTHING not to be mean but ughhh that sucks
| xRachelx chapter 12 . 10/13/2012
I know you haven't updated in about two years and you said you would probably never finish this story but I'm BEGGING you to please finish it. Words can't even describe how much I love this story and I really want to read on. It's absolutely fantastic!
It gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling in my stomach and it makes me smile. It's absolutely amazing.
Maybe you could re-read this whole story and then get into it again and finish it? PRETTY PLEASE? I'm begging you here. You'd be the best ever if you finished it. xxxx
| Dead account no longer here chapter 4 . 6/26/2012
Wow. Rape turned into sex that WAS wanted. That has to be something that never happened before...STOP THE PRESSS THIS IS A GOOD STORY!
| Girlof1000NickNames chapter 5 . 3/7/2011
When the SS ask Kyle to repeat his barracks # he says 1587 B instead of 1567 B. was that on purpose, or a typo?
| Shakuhachi Jade chapter 5 . 2/2/2011
Sexy chapter! I think this one could have been looked over a bit more - there were quite a few wording errors and grammatical things that could have been fixed - but other than that it was yummy and sick and oh-so kinky. ] Keep up the great work!
| Shakuhachi Jade chapter 4 . 1/28/2011
Wow... What a story, my friend. And you've done your research as well, I see (which is great, because a lot of fangirly authors don't research their subject matter, and their stories end up falling far short of what they could be). Here's my review for the first four chapters all crammed into one (since the story was so enticing I couldn't stop reading until this point...;;)
I actually liked the 'boring family stuff' at the beginning. ;) It set up a completely different dynamic from the exciting anticipation of the train ride, and later the shock of the camp. The story started out fairly normally, and then suddenly BAM! Nazis. Freakin' Nazis. xD
I won't go into detail about how much I disliked reading about a guard dog tearing a little girls throat out. This is a good thing (I think...lol). It means your story is graphically accurate, and it was a nice way to foreshadow the impending doom that Kyle and his family will soon have to face themselves...
This chapter in particular was...deliciously evil.
Originally I thought that Kyle enjoying something so degrading would be completely out of his character - especially for someone who was supposedly straight - but after I thought about it, you did mention that he'd never had any sexual contact other than his own. It would actually make quite a bit of sense for him to enjoy it, being his first sexual experience and all. And despite threatening to kill him, even *I* could tell that Cartman wasn't in it to take Kyle out just yet. ;) Maybe Kyle will realize that? If he's a good boy and let's Cartman have his way with him, maybe he'll live a little longer... lol XD
This is so sick and twisted, but you've given us quite a show so far. I loved the detail of the sex scene - all the way down to the the canisters and the barbed wire biting into Kyle's skin; 'twas lovely. My mouth actually dropped open when I realized what Cartman was going to do with the gun. "No effing way," I said. But then he did what my mind said he wouldn't do anyway. Exclusive, explicit, graphic detail. And nicely written, too.
A tiny bit of con crit for you: watch where you put your commas. There were certain places where I'd be reading along and then an unexpected comma would appear and throw off the entire flow of the sentence. My English teacher once told my 12th grade class to just use less commas in general and that would help. :) Too many pauses are distracting, and your sentences are so wonderfully crafted! Experiment some and see how you like the sentences without the commas too.
Overall, a wonderful (and starkly accurate) beginning to the overall story. I'll definitely be returning for more to see what kind of fate befalls our poor, beloved, red-haired Jew boy. Great job, and thanks for sharing! :D
PS: I love long reviews, so I write long reviews. Sorry if I ranted or anything. ;;
| Darkfire359 chapter 12 . 1/2/2011
Nooooo! *cries for the end of the story* This is such an amazing fic... but I guess I can't blame you for being interested in things like Death Note and Hetalia. *Looks at own list of fics* Yeah, Death Note especially is something I can excuse. And it's nice to see someone else into both SP and DN. Still, it'd be wonderful if you could resolve that little cliffhanger you left.
| Ashes Of The Innocent chapter 12 . 11/29/2010
Well, even if it's a shame that you will not be continuing this story, I must say that it was freakin' amazing, despite it not being finished. I loved Kyle and Cartman's relationship - how it was based at first mainly on sex, and then they both started to open up a bit. You made me feel sorry for Eric, even though that's probably not a good idea. XD
Either way, this story was awesome (as stated above), and I guess I'll just have to beg, in my mind, for you to find the time to continue; but I guess I understand your losing interest and all. I suppose it's one of the things which cannot be helped.
Just know that's it one of my favorite South Park stories (I've read a handful of them, and all were awesome, but yours by far is the best. :))
| KennyMcC chapter 12 . 11/28/2010
Hey there it's a shame to hear that you won't be finishing this story :( I was wondering if you would mind if I attempted writing more of it? I would of course give you credit for the portion that you have already written. e-mail me your reply. Kenny
| AbbyluvsKyman chapter 2 . 11/3/2010
teehee cartman is in this XD i just wonder though, did kily still have the same backround? like is he friends with stan or used to be did her know kenny, and cartman and mr. garrison b4?
| crazy-nerd chapter 12 . 9/23/2010
aaawwwwwwwww! well, that sucks! i rally like this story. :(
| MisterBlik chapter 12 . 8/27/2010
When I found this fanfic, I was merely shocked at first. I did always think of a likewise relationship between Cartman and Kyle, because I love a guy being domineered by another one. But I really never thought of anything like this. Cartman and Kyle in Nazi time, it seems crazy when you think about it at first, even though it might be logical. So I ignored this fanfic some days. But this story always kept creeping back into my mind and I felt the urge to read it. I thought it would be wrong, and I didn’t want to cross that line because I already do like really strange things. I thought it would be wrong because I am german and feel so sad for all the things that happened. But I really wanted to read this. I couldn't ignore that feeling anymore so I did. At first, there were deep feelings of guilt inside of me. They got less but they are still there. Thing is, I just didn't really care anymore, because this story fascinated me so much from the very first moment. I love it that you brought lyrics and important quotations into the beginning of each chapter. Your writing skills are amazing and your english is really magnificent. At first, I was shocked that Kyle didn't seem to care about this whole nazi thing at all. It shocked me too that he found it arousing to watch the SSer's walk by his window while jacking off. But it was so interesting too, in an exciting way. There is something so wrong about this whole fic that I really have to wonder why I like this so much. Then, when the action between Cartman and Kyle began, I couldn't stop myself anymore from enjoying to read this story. Their first meeting was so much fun to read because they acted just like they would in the actual show. I love Kyle's stubbornness and Cartmans narcisstic behaviour. When the scene in the car began, I really didn't expect Kyle to like it that much. But it does fit him. At first I was disappointed when I noticed that Kyle was turned on when they did it in the car, but I was wrong. That was just as good. Kyle liking it to be practically raped and hurt... that's just like him. The sex scenes in this story are amazingly hot, I just have to say that. You were really creative in letting Kyle suffer, I have never read anything like that before. I also love their dirty-talk. Since years I haven't been so excited when reading something like I was while reading this. I read seven chapters in succession because I couldn't stop. I love the whole idea of this story. I love how Kyle lives at Cartman's house and how he acts like he doesn't want to do all those things Cartman wants him to do at all, but secretely liking it. I love all the dirty things they do and reading how Kyle is being punished and all. By the way, I also like it how you brought Ike into the story and how smart he is. And for the dark and disturbing parts of the story: you really did a great job on that too. I was deeply disturbed, I wanted somebody to come and just hug Kyle. Oh and I am impressed that you know so much about the nazi time. You did a really good job on writing it so realistic and detailed. Also, you are very good at describing places with a lot of atmosphere, and emotions too. Later, when Kyle showed Cartman more how he liked his games, that was really exciting too, even though I really expected this story from the beginning to be full of rape only. When I was getting to the later chapters, I was kind of overstrained with all the information. Maybe you should have written some sex scenes between the chapters, but that is probably just my perverted mind speaking. Whatever. By the way, I have a question. Did you do that whole commotion about who Cartman's real father is on purpose because of that episode where he's trying to find out who his father is? Because it reminded me of that. That would be ingenious. And in chapter five, did Kyle say the wrong number on purpose or was it just a typo? What I'm really concerning myself with is if Cartman dropped the key accidentally or not... You could interpret that as an open ending, but I don't want to. I have to say that I am really touched by this story. Believe it or not. Reading how Cartman and Kyle are slowly getting along with eachother and learning to, maybe, just a little bit, like eachother, was so touching. I bet they are getting feelings for eachother without even noticing it themselves. I have never before read about such a forbidden love like this. A nazi and a jew... it's so strange. So wrong. So absolutely not right. Two boys who are bound to hate eachother like hell... but then grow accustomed to eachother... and share their problems... it's so heartwarming even if it's only implied and even if there's such a cold history behind this love (?) tale. Well, that's how I see it. In my imagination, they will fall in love with eachother and everything will end tragically. I am sorry if this isn't how you've planned it at all. But when Kyle was hesitating to ask for the keys and was remembering the good times he had with Cartman, I wanted to cry. It was so sad. And Cartman's story kinda touched me too. Maybe they are alike, even if it's just a little bit.
I know that you said you're not going to finish this. I know that very well. But I am so hoping that you will find your way back to this fandom. Maybe I'm trying to get you back to this fanfic by writing such a ridiculously long review, maybe I am doing that in my subconscious. But I am mainly doing this because never before, I was so captivated by a fanfic. If any fanfic on the whole planet deserves this comment, it's yours. This story makes you think "it's wrong, don't read it" but you will do it either way and you will love it. Just like I do. You will be sceptical and all, but all your doubts will turn into pure admiration and amazement.