|Reviews for The Art of Subconscious Illusion: Rewritten|
| xlunatica chapter 11 . 12/10/2012
Well I've just finished reading up to this chapter and I have to say I like where the story is going so far. I haven't read the original so I have no idea how its going to end but I look forward to it.
But I have to say I am thoroughly confused about how much it follows the storyline. Is Light really Kira or is he jut believing he is, and when I say that, does he actually have the notebook? From the diary entry (or whatever that was) he doesn't have it since he can't kill efficiently, but then how can he see Ryuk? And confused about the original Kira and stuff but I guess I'll find out eventually XD
| Ruin Dun Burnit chapter 1 . 9/4/2012
A note to all of you who will call my foul for chapter 2:
Yes, I realise now that, where TB vaccinations in America are concerned, I made a bit of a boo-boo. Let me explain why: If you didn't know already, I am actually British. I live in England, and as you can expect, there are certain things here that are different to how they are in the US. Apparently, TB vaccinations are one of them. Where I am from, and due in part to our National Health Service (which you Americans might get one day if you step aside for ObamaCare), TB vaccinations are just another milestone we reach at around 13 or 14 years old. When we are in year 9, abouts (think Middle school age), a day is set aside where we are each, in an organised fashion, given the vaccine or 'jab'.
I could be wrong on this - all I seem to recall is a rather thick needle being stuck in my arm and wondering why I gave express permission for such a procedure - but that's the crux of the issue. As I didn't really have a way of knowing whether or not American got this jab too, and I sort of assumed that you did anyways, that's the reason. Now, I've never claimed to be a medical expert by any means, and I'm not going to start doing so any time soon, but the fact is that I WILL occasionally make a mistake. There is only so far I can go with research, although let me be clear that I always research when it's called for. That is the truth.
If it still niggles you, then let us suggest that this is an AU fic, and there WILL be occasional points of 'phantasy science' every now and again (that is, where we'll allow artistic license to come in so that tiny details don't get in the way of a good story). However, I do agree that House WOULD know about the state of TB vaccines in the US, although I suppose one little cover is that his actor is British, like me.
In any case, please enjoy. You've heard my side of this, but please don't let little details get in the way of the story. If I expect another medical misdemenour to be made, I will warn you.
Thanks for your understanding, and I hope you continue to enjoy this fic of mine.
Ruin Takada XXX
| Guest chapter 2 . 9/3/2012
Interesting idea for a x-over, but you might want to look up some of the medical things you've included. The biggest mistake I noticed in this chapter is that most people in the US haven't had T.B. vaccinations, and House would know that.
| Adala chapter 3 . 8/18/2012
"he scrambled for his cane as the young man put his hands as her shoulders now."
This was probably supposed to mean "on her shoulders"?
I came here vie TV tropes and I am excited how this story will unfold. What I found a little odd is that apparently Kira already appeared this universe, as mentioned by House and Wilson? I will find out reading on, I suppose.
| The 14th Undertaker chapter 1 . 7/20/2012
That would be really random if that happened. Because, I mean, what if a well-known student starts choking a teacher then has a seizure not 2 minutes later? You be confused, that's what. But I like the story.
| KARASU25 chapter 10 . 7/5/2012
Love the story! Its really interesting seeing their interactions with light :D cant wait for the 12th chapter !
| Morpheus2000 chapter 3 . 6/29/2012
What a nice feeling of intensity, I dont speak japanese so i cant really comment on that.. your potato chip reference sent me some giggles, but I dont remember reading about them in the manga...
| Morpheus2000 chapter 2 . 6/29/2012
Cute, but It seems lacking in sense, if its 2006, why does it say Kira killing stopped a year ago?
| Morpheus2000 chapter 1 . 6/29/2012
Good, not a whole page of describing the room, the nice twist at the end.. It a real House episode :3 i never read the first fic, but im sure this one lives up to the expectation :)
| hetalian-system chapter 11 . 5/28/2012
Loving this story so far. Very unique stand point and great charqcter depiction of Light in this AU. Hope to see more of your creative work!
| ZeroPanda chapter 11 . 4/25/2012
Fantasticccc Ruru! I loved it as much as you said I would. You deserve to be proud. The ear munching scene was well done, you described it perfectly, if I hadn't known before hand I probably would have been like "noooo way, no way! Not what I think he did, right?" Which is excellent.
Can't wait for the next one to be done!
| Starbug 22 chapter 3 . 4/24/2012
I really enjoyed this chapter because I like how you described each as the old couple and the Asian in a rather strange way I like the potatoes crisps as they were more significant then I expected.I also liked the lines "I-is this a good time to mention I'm a fan of your work?"
and "He whispered, like the scene was The Matrix, Fast and Furious and a Bond film all rolled into one.".I liked the first line because I found this quite funny.I found this funny because the previous lines are very I have never seen house I believe your writing really creates the character Dr House in my immagination.I also like the second line because it describes 3 of the biggest action films would be one hell of film to watch and I can really get a feel of how epic of a scene that would be to done Ruin you have done it again.I believe this chapter is excellent but in my opinion I preferred chapter though a good chapter and I have really got into the story.
Well done Ruin!
| Omen chapter 2 . 4/24/2012
I think this chapter is good as it does have some humour like the "old perverted men at an anime convention" and how he takes the potato snacks.
| Omen chapter 1 . 4/24/2012
I like how you have increased the tension by repeating things like the coughing and flickering light. Its also good how the bad guy personalty changes from the invigilator to the description is also good. However i believe instead of using the word devil twice you could use something like demon but overall its a good chapter and the intresting twist works well.
| Starbug 22 chapter 2 . 4/24/2012
I believe your wrong about this chapter not being I was reading the chapter I really liked the personality of Doctor House.I like his don't give a damn I think this chapter is very funny.I really liked the mention of an anime interesting story and I like how Kira became done and keep it really enjoying this story.
Well Done Ruin Takada