Reviews for The Third's Fourth Pupil
seastar529 chapter 12 . 3/8
Hi, I really love this story. It's been three years but . . . is there still hope to continue? This has been an amazing ride so far.
ViciousFitz chapter 12 . 3/1
Guest chapter 11 . 1/16
Good so far. Not to sound like a jerk but this story is about the thirds 4th student and just hinatas problems right?! Focus on that not this!
corbinskydragon1 chapter 12 . 11/15/2014
This is awesome you've got to continue this story! It's great. Can't wait to read what happens next.
Jameslw chapter 12 . 10/18/2014
great please continue
Alternateapocalypse chapter 12 . 7/28/2014
I enjoy your story very much, but while I was reading I felt as if I had read it before (which is not entirely impossible, I read copious amount of fictional works).
While I understand that some concepts of shinobi life are required and are greatly skimmed over in the canon (much to my disappointment), perhaps you could delve further into the creative use of ninjutsu as you have mentioned before?
Some other writers have mentioned the intention of creative jutsu use, but sadly have not developed as I hope you were already planning to.
(I might just be impatient as always.)
And your cliffhanger was mean, as all cliffhangers are, though they are extremely fun to write. You know what's going to happen.
(I think it may be confusing, sorry).
Hey chapter 1 . 1/5/2014
hazzman chapter 12 . 11/16/2013
Hey man,
Awesome story. I really like the route you are taking. Sticking to the real manga with certain twists... and dropping subtle links to the real manga. I also really like the way you are developing naruto and hinatas relationship. You are keeping them in character, which a lot of people forget to do. I thought this chapter was really cool too. Nice to see naruto meet lion, owl and stuff again. Will another chapter be coming? I cant seem to find when this chapter was posted, so i cant tell if its like 5 years old. Do you have any idea when the next chapter is out?

All in all 4/5
Skooglie chapter 12 . 11/12/2013
What's happened to Haku? Is there still plans for him or is that the end of Haku and Zabuza?
kage kitsune 14 chapter 12 . 11/10/2013
Update soon, please.
Lord Mortensen chapter 12 . 9/16/2013
Awesome! update soon!
alusandrea chapter 4 . 6/23/2013
I really hope Naruto is just pretending to be stupid enough to fall for Mizuki's scheme. I mean he would have to be an idiot to believe that Iruka would ever say that about him, especially when he already has stated Iruka is one of his only friends and Naruto believes the best of his friends even after they try to kill him.
Guest chapter 7 . 4/11/2013
You do not know how to write fucking story
ImanArchAngel chapter 3 . 4/11/2013
Gaki means brat in Japanese. Just a warning for the future. :)
Ayody16 chapter 1 . 3/19/2013
Am trying to write a story bt i dnt knw where 2 go...Plz help me out...Where do i go to 2 post a story
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