|Reviews for CUBE: The Return|
| BladedMako chapter 2 . 3/23/2011
I have some advice for you. First off, you need to describe the room itself a little bit better than you did. Talk about the color, the light that comes from nowhere, the strange patterns on the walls, how claustrophobia inducing the space is. The next tip I have is when you are writing in first person, you ARE the character. This story lacks emotion. you need to write down the thoughts and feelings of the char. Also, a little dialouge with the other guy would have helped.
Major thing is you need more detail and use more adjectives and adverbs.
| AngelEyes87 chapter 2 . 6/2/2010
The chapters are way too short - I think you should expand on this.
| Recursive Sweatpants chapter 2 . 1/13/2010
I'm glad to see that there are still Cube fans out there. Your story is interesting, but your chapters are horribly short. I'd recommend writing at least around five hundred characters per chapter. Other than that, however, your story is looking alright.