|Reviews for Nate's AU Blessing|
| suspensegirl chapter 1 . 2/17/2010
OMG. HATE IT. I am sorry. *sighs & shakes head* Prepare yourself for some serious constructive criticism. *shudders* Ok, so I don't absolutely kill you, here's one positive note: nice idea. everyone probably wanted the happy ending this soon, love confessions, etc. *clears throat* #1-Don't EVER put an author's note in the middle of your fic. Ask people beforehand or rewatch the scene if you're not sure of something. Or, if you really can't figure something out, just mention it in one of your author's notes before or after the fic - NOT IN THE MIDDLE, it's SO unprofessional and it just SHOUTS "bad writer!" #2-SO OOC, not even funny. I mean, sometimes things are a little unrealistic, but with how intense their emotions were and with how big of a deal things had become, there is no way POSSIBLE that Nate would suddenly understand and Chuck would apologize so quickly, let alone Chuck tell Blair he loved her. And Blair? She was convinced everything was fine and probably never really realized she was in love with Chuck till the end of the season. So, uh, kissing and declaring her love in return? Um, not so much. *sighs & shakes head* Idk. I think you could have turned this type of thing into a multi-chaptered fic or made it an INSANELY LONG oneshot, but this all happened WAY too quickly and was so...*sighs* you did have more details though, so that was definitely an improvement from your other fic. But for the thoughts you want to emphasize of your characters? I suggest italicizing them, not putting them in quotes or what not. It just looks...better, more professional.
That is my review. lol. I'm sorry if you're like majorly insulted, I know I definitely would be, but...*sigh* it is for your own good. I'm just trying to help. And once again, the idea was very creative. You've got a great imagination, you just need to learn you to tone and organize it properly. ;p
| mmstheactress chapter 1 . 1/9/2010
this wz pretty good! keep writing stuff like this!
| smartin555 chapter 1 . 1/9/2010
this was really good! I loved it!