Reviews for Ulsium
WargishBoromirFan chapter 2 . 4/4/2010
You have the basics of spelling, grammar, and research pretty well. Your OCs have the potential to be interesting characters, for as far as I can tell.

You just seem to be having some trouble maintaining the readers' interest, and with OCs making up the whole cast so far, it's important to maintain reader interest, because I'm afraid that Mary Sues in the fandom have turned away a lot of readers from OCs and they won't get much of a chance from the audience. Your readers will be asking "So what?" fairly often throughout this fic. Make sure you can follow through on your plot and not get mired in subplots that appear forgotten by the next paragraph, put the background information in where it makes sense and not dumped in randomly so that it kills the momentum, and you'll have your answer. Good luck!