|Reviews for Shrouded Innocence|
| Lucas fan 101 chapter 5 . 8/12/2010
so she connfessed so she can get him and daniel to make amends?
sneaky and smart
| Lucas fan 101 chapter 4 . 8/11/2010
poor clara thats all i can sat oh that and i wish she could knock him one in the eye
| Lucas fan 101 chapter 2 . 8/11/2010
i have only 2 things to say: 1. WAY TO GOO CLARA! 2. poor clara shes probaly losing the only friend shes ever had
| Lucas fan 101 chapter 1 . 8/11/2010
i hated this part mostly because of the way neri beat daniel and stole his key. btw awsome detail im just amazed on how much detail u can get with a blind girl without messing up
| Lucas fan 101 chapter 3 . 8/11/2010
oh i read this book from beggining to end and i must say amazing job.
| finishedd chapter 5 . 2/7/2010
well this is strange, I could've sworn that I read this chapter and reviewed it already? haha but then I saw five reviews and six chapters and I'm like...wait. sorry about that! anyway, great chapter! ah I love how you made clara's need for human contact so understandable even though she may or may not love adrian. very amazingly written! "For the first time, I realized that I had turned Adrian Neri into a lover of soul and not just of body, and that he had chosen my soul to embrace with his heart. He really did love me." so beautiful! :) haha this is weird, you're gonna get a review for your latest chapter before this one. anyway, loved it!
| finishedd chapter 6 . 2/7/2010
good chapter! I enjoy how you've made clara convince herself to love adrian but at the same time always have daniel on her mind. such indecision! hahaha anyway, I really liked this chapter. but you're writing this in first person, yet clara can sense things such as people narrowing their eyes and such. I understand when people are blind their other senses are heightened, I just don't know. I could be wrong but I don't feel as if she can sense that. whatever. despite that, it was a great chapter and I can't wait for more! :D
| finishedd chapter 4 . 1/25/2010
awesome, AWESOME chapter! oh my god you're so amazing. the reasctions you gave to everyone were so relistic and I loved it. I like the realization at the end and the conversation between clara and her uncle - awesome! and now I totally feel bad for adrian. the things your amazing writing does to me! haha okay so: “You’re blind, Clara.”
I swallowed hard, knowing he didn’t mean in the literal sense.
so, so amazing. also: I knew he thought I was just a little vain, just a little bit a teenager in a woman’s body, just a little overwhelmed by what I felt by Daniel and Neri, and how much they felt for me, and what I was to do with it.
very amazing. makes so much sense.
| finishedd chapter 3 . 1/18/2010
oh my gosh, SUCH a great chapter! it's written so well and it's just amazing. whew! I love how you write clara, you make it very easy to like her and understand her. and I almost felt bad for adrian. almost! hahaha and I feel that if anyone else wrote him I would hate him forever but you write this so well that you evoke the reader to feel sympathy for an unlikeable character. really great job! favorite line: "I wanted to yell at him, to tell him that it was not good enough, that he wasn’t supposed to come until Wednesday, and even then I probably would have made him leave. Of course, all of these potential sources of power would’ve been easier to tap into had there been other people in the vicinity." my gosh, completely perfect. so beautifully written. this made me laugh:
"I sighed to myself, recognizing how more-than-friends I was with the cocky rich boy I had kicked out of the house twice in one week." hahaha! I don't know if you intend to make these things funny, but I feel like it comes out anyway because of your humor. oh, and: "You know I can’t have you around me when you hate the boy I never can.” amazing! okay, I'm done :D
| finishedd chapter 2 . 1/13/2010
another great chapter! although nothing really happened, it was so interesting to read clara's emotions. "There was a possibility Neri would apologize, but my instinct showed me that he would just move past it as though the only thing that had happened this night was our first throes of passion amidst a pounding thunderstorm, the rain dancing with musical notes all around us, just like in our lessons." so beautifully written! my gosh, you're amazing! :D
| finishedd chapter 1 . 1/12/2010
this is so well-written! I know nothing of this book, but I'm 100% sure you've done it justice for sure! I love how perceptive you've made clara despite her blindness, and the way she interprets things through what she feels the person projecting. very nice job! "Neri was everything and nothing to me." I loved that for some odd reason :D it's so simple yet it means so much and spans so many feelings. this was so great, I'm excited for the next part of it!