|Reviews for Burn|
| pippapear chapter 1 . 2/19/2010
How shockingly bad am I?
I meant to, once our winners were announced, come back and review my fave's from the competition. Of course I haven't done.
I feel EVEN worse, to not review yours when it was my judges choice.. . I hope you can overlook my delay! (I hope that my review on the blog helped a wee bitty!)
Wow. This story.
I think what I loved most about this story, particularly in relation to not only the other entries in the competition but also the subject matter of war, was its subtlety. Yes war is indeed a trifle bowl of subtleties - layer upon layer of emotions and tragedies and personal horrors. (excuse the dessert analogy) but most stories of war, most coverage of war, most footage of war - seem to be brash, over the top, loud, larger than life. Almost an over stimulation for the senses of all involved. But too much exposure to all that seems to lead us to become numb to it, or worn out about it to the point of avoidance or perhaps the opposite end of the scale - to be over excited and entranced by it. So the subtleties of your story were welcome to me.
It stripped the events of WWII back to its human cost, endurance, pain and hope. But it also stripped back the emotions and rituals of love, of trust and communication.
It truly was a delight to read.
So very visual, so very atmospheric.
I loved how you used the narrative. You said so much without them actually saying much. Which is so realistic. After all only 30percent of communication is verbal. Why should the communication of love, of falling in love, the merging of souls, the deciding of destiny. Of wooing. Why should that be any different?
Their love seemed so realistic. Their fusing of souls and futures so right & natural. The setting was perfect.
The gentle expectations warred with the traditions and way of the time created the perfect back drop for this period.
The things that mattered to bella about who Edward was and what he wanted from her were so genuine. Kind eyes, smile, gentleness, to be cherished, cared for, to love all were so genuine.
I fell seriously in love with this story as you can probably tell!
Thank you so so so much.
x x x
| REDBALLON chapter 1 . 2/9/2010
What an awesome awe inspiring story.
| phoebelicious chapter 1 . 2/2/2010
That was breathtakingly beautiful. I didn't want it to end.
| lumierelove chapter 1 . 2/2/2010
The best one-shot for this contest that I have read.
| Cleargirl chapter 1 . 2/2/2010
That was truly beautiful.
| onesweetbell chapter 1 . 1/31/2010
Congrats on the win. I liked your story, it was one I voted for
| readerkitty chapter 1 . 1/30/2010
I loved this gorgeous evocative story. Just Beautiful, thankyou.
| BLilTXgirl chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
You are such an amazing writer and I always enjoy reading what you post.
| kelysuperficial chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
Wow, beautiful. UNexpected and beautiful.
| pixiekat7 chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
This was truly touching, blissful & beautifully written.
Thanks so much for sharing it.
| pilotnana chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
| letmesign chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
I'm so thrilled with this. Just so you know, I'm reviewing as I go, but already, I'm in love.
"It was an unholy contrast, bringing angels to Hell" - just gorgeous, this line.
I adore the scene where he writes the letter. I can picture him scribbling quickly, spilling his guts with paper and pen. It's a lovely image with him spattered in ink, his face hopeful, his heart knowing how much he wants to try to really live again.
There meeting is so shy and sweet, everything it should be. I love that you've written this for the time period it's set in, and not tried to make it porn-ish or anything. It fits with when it's set, and I love that.
As you mentioned in your author's note, I do love that you have chosen to go for third person narrative and limited dialogue. I think it works really well for this story, and I love that you thought this out and didn't just sit down and write like a fiend, which is sometimes tempting (hell, I do it).
Wonderful entry, T. Thank you for sharing.
| Babette12 chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
Oh, Tiff, you know I love everything you do! This is no exception. I'm always amazed at the amount of emotion and heart you are able to convey. The sex is great, but it's the emotion that makes it wonderful.
Good luck with the contest! xoxo!
| shayna.lane chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
| Taz65 chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
Another beautiful story. The characters were so understated but their depth of feeling so powerful. My heart ached for Edward while at war and I felt joy and apprehension when he reached out to Bella not knowing how he would be received but going forward anyway. Bella's cautious acceptance spoke of her understanding the need for propriety but having already learned how short life can be didn't want to miss an opportunity to connect with someone who clearly had been thinking of her. Their bravery to embrace life and its possibilities instead of simply accepting the life they were currently existing in was quietly inspiring.