Reviews for The Untouchable
lizzie chapter 1 . 4/14/2012
make another chapter plz
lizzie chapter 1 . 4/14/2012
this is...amazing. made me think holy crap i am a shit book writer. so thank you for giving me a is one of my favorite black blood brothers character in fact he is my 2nd.
Captain Grin chapter 1 . 7/22/2011
This was so good!
princessbb chapter 1 . 7/1/2010
this was really good please make some more
kariki13 chapter 1 . 3/9/2010
you should make more!

i like both zelman and yafuri. so i made it so i could have both..sorta.

zelman:by making me her elder brother.

me: im just stuck with yafuri...

zelman: your akward for a sister.

me: your protective.

zelman: child

me: evil baby sitter.


me: my work here is done!

Larkfall chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
This is really good for your first Black Blood Brothers fanfic. The story is well written and you do a very good job of keeping Yafuri in character. I hope you keep up the good work, this anime and Yafuri don't seem to get much attention here on Fanfiction.