|Reviews for Game Not Over|
| buttercuprocks101 chapter 1 . 7/26
i love it
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/4/2014
wat I hate cliffhangers
| MidnightAngel1095 chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
makakakilig naman! add to faves! _
| StereotypicallyAsian chapter 1 . 6/18/2010
"You were seducing me!"
"..The hell? I was playing a zombie-related game, you sicko!"
XDD this was super cute! Keep it up 8D
| ace de luca chapter 1 . 5/27/2010
super cute :)
| Apricot chapter 1 . 1/27/2010
Aww! The story made my heart writh and stuff...
1. “Gabby broke up with me” he said in a monotone.
2. He rolled his eyes, “the bubbly one…no thanks”
1. "Gabby broke up with me," he said in a monotone.
- Always, there is either a comma, exclamation mark or question mark before the quotation mark when it comes to a speech from someone.
2. He rolled his eyes, "The bubbly one... No thanks."
- Capitalization after an opening quoting speech is important as it gives a 'feel-good' effect to readers.
Keep writing~ I loved this one!
| xxxGravestonexxx chapter 1 . 1/17/2010
That was a good uld you wright the same story but way longer?By the way...I LOVED YOUR STORY!
| zenonaa chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
I read this in the morning and didn't review. OTL Sorry. D:
I liked reading this. When I get a boyfriend I'll try that when we play Super Smash Brothers. ;)
| Nekomimi chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
LOL THIS WAS CUTE ANF FUNNY AND GOOD!2 thumbs up dude!
| Hasten chapter 1 . 1/16/2010
GAH! I'm getting so lazy! I almost went on my merry little way without leaving a review! But, as you can see, I didn't. I stayed. I'm learning to appreciate such simplistic style more and more everyday (especially with greens one-shots, since those are mainly what I'm seeing written simplistically nowadays, which isn't to say that I'm not pleased and/or entertained). I loved that you made Butch and Buttercup out as friends and rivals, which is what I most easily envision them as, and that you put them in such a picture-perfect setting. An arcade, isn't it? Nice.
My one piece of advice is that you specify who Butch was conversing with in that last scene, although you did manage to imply that it was either Boomer or Brick or both. The laughing one, my guess is, was Boomer.
I'd totally read another greens whatever that you wrote. (: