Reviews for What Happens After the Race
MsCardinal chapter 2 . 1/23/2010
OK. This was so much better than the first chapter! Why must the Kabras always be horrible, though? ARGH! I agree with music4eveh. STOP IT IAN! OK. Now I'm done venting. You did a good job writing this. UPDATE! P.S. I'm at the library. My dad says that fanfiction could be gving us a virus. :-( DARN because I finished the Thriller story, and it is awesome! Oh well. He'll let me get on.
aMedleyOfRedandGreen chapter 2 . 1/22/2010
hey nice job and too bad i wasn't able to review the last chapter but i only saw this now. i have some things in mind right now:

1. Alistair won? wow, shocker...

2. at least he is nice to them right? at least he isn't bad now

3. (to Alistair) Dude! what were you thinking about rock and roll?

4. cookies...

5. stop ruining everything Cobras!

6. CAKE AND COOKIES! 8D

Keep up the good work! Update soon puh-leaze. Here is a chocolate chip cookie with marshmallows and ice cream for a job well done! Peace out yo!

-Audrey w/o Kat:)

PS. want another cookie? then update fast!:)) ah...joy the power of cokies...
music4evah chapter 2 . 1/22/2010
YES! IT WAS LONGER! YES!

Anyways.

Yes, Alistair, you shouldn't have taken up rock music. I told you it was OOC.

A few typos, but overall, good grammar/spelling, besides Alistair's name. (I didn't know there was another 'i' in there either, until...well, I can't really remember.)

Ian, STOP BEING A JERK! Natalie, go die in a hole.

And would Alistair REALLY call his invention an 'ultimate, portable, amazing, super weapon'? Seems more Dan-ish.

Sorry I'm being so critical...But I do like this story. :)
music4evah chapter 1 . 1/22/2010
...Alistair won? ... Haven't seen that one before.

This was way to short. Please make your future chapters longer.

And he took up electric guitar? And GREW OUT HIS HAIR? Terribly OOC.
1101.jade chapter 2 . 1/22/2010
Interesting!
Marie Elaine Cullen chapter 2 . 1/21/2010
:) Parts of this made me laugh. I wouldn't have reviewed except for the 'portable ultra super weapon' part. :) An amazing line. Update soon!
DyingOfBoredominNYC chapter 2 . 1/21/2010
1. Alistair is spelled Alistair not Alistar.

2. I don't think that Dan would automatically say Chuck Norris in a situation like this.

3. Alistair is extremely OOC
Yeobo chapter 2 . 1/21/2010
That is awesome! Please continue this story! I LOVE your idea!
Vulpeculis chapter 2 . 1/21/2010
ooh! cobra attack! update soon!
Luver.of.Pie chapter 2 . 1/20/2010
No.

Alistair Oh is FORBIDDEN from playing Owl City! OWL CITY IS ONLY ADAM YOUNG! FOREVER AND ALWAYS! FOREVER!

I have been with Adam ever since I first saw/heard him... - sigh -

You would not believe your eyes, if ten million fireflies, lit up the world as I fell asleep...

Anyways, update soon!

4Eva
amfabulous chapter 2 . 1/20/2010
ah! whoa! is this an amian story! PLEASE say it is!

anyway i like how you included owl city :)

great job!
psychoticbookgirl chapter 1 . 1/20/2010
Alistair... rock/alternative... I'll ponder that...

Way short.
1101.jade chapter 1 . 1/20/2010
Who was shot? This was to short!
Luver.of.Pie chapter 1 . 1/20/2010
Um, really short, but I suppose that if it's a prologue it's all right :)

(It's gonna be all right... It's gonna be OK... It's gonna be all right, hey yeah... It's gonna be OK...) Sorry, that song is stuck in my head. All Right by Superchic[k]!

Update soon; You got me stuck!

4Eva
MsCardinal chapter 1 . 1/20/2010
Hm... This is interesting. What a surprise that Alistar plays the same kind of music as you! Oh well. I'll be looking forward to the update. Also, Alistar should actually blow an amp in a future chapter. Cool! Please update soon!
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