Reviews for Raising Harry
Guest chapter 19 . 5/27
Such a wonderful story, please find the time to update and complete this fine story soon.
Have a great week.
Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 12 . 4/16
Hogwarts is not an island.
And Harry is not stupid and naive to be unaware of his powers.

ONE word to Ritak Skeeter about dumbledore imperio-ing a student, and the masses would be screaming for blood. (Or Azkaban.)

All harry has to do to win in court is to swear an unbreakable oath that what he said was true. Unortodox, and no one can demand him doing it, be he could if he wanted too.

Not that it is necessary. People believe Rita. They don't care abput the truth. And Rita already has it out for dumbledore.

On top of that, the only thing people love more than seeing heroes rise up is to see them fall.

THIS is why "evil dumbledore" or using obvious force just wouldn't work.

It's not Harry vs dumbledore, each backed by a small faction of peoplenloyal to them.

This is two celebreties locked in battle on the political stage.

Imagine if a presidental candidate did this. What would happen?

Imagine if a celebrety did this. What would happen?

You must have read newspapers, magazines, watched tv, or even heard gossip about what hapoens when a celebrity does something remotly bad.

Not to mention how they treat Harry in canon.

Remember that dumbledore have many powerful enemies who longs for a chance to take away his power.

And Harry KNOWS it.

He also knows that what dumbledore did is a crime.
And even if he hadn't known this, his family would.

Amelia Bones would be downright rabid.

dumbledore would be either arrested or forced to flee vefore the day is out.

He's a fool to begin with to even try. Only a moron wouod do what he does in your story.

And as much as I dislike the man, he is not THAT stupid. If he was, he'd never be able to hold a single political position.

I love your story idea, but there are fairytales for children that are more realistic than this story.

And it's mainly because of dumbledore.

I will, however give praise where praise is deserved. So kudos for actually having some consequences for dumbledore's idiotcy.

Considering Bones was there, I expect he will be put on trial and thrown into Azkaban -or be forced to flee.

Not even the queen herself would escape jail if she did something that the law considers a worse crime than murder. (It IS called an UNforgivable for a reason.)

Your main problem is dumbledore acting like a witless, idiotic villain from a 1920s cartoon.

You are doing a much better job with everything else.
Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 9 . 4/15
Is dumbledore posessed by a demon, or secretly Grindewald in disguise?

He acts and thinks nothing at all like albus dumbledore at least.

I may not like the quixotic old fool, but he genuinly means well, he genuinely cares about Harry, and he genuinly is a nice guy who's caught between a rock and a hard place as he makes the tough decition to sacrifice a child to save the woder population. One life for one to ten thousand lives.

His biggest flaw is not cruelty, but kindness.

Ghandi would be a lousy war general, who would get everyone killed. The only reason his method worked was because the British people had their hands tied and couldn't outright kill him, because of politics and world opinions.

Voldemort have no qualms with killing pacefists.
And Death Eats WILL resurect any unconcious friends, making the no-killing rule a serious disability.

Trying to shield Harry and let him stay a child by not telling him anything and leaving him unprepared is an equally idiotic move.

It'd be kinder to train him as a soldier from day one.
Easier too.

Hus manipulation steams from a rectulence to yse force, not from any selfish plots.

Your dumbledore is just...SO out of character.

He's also an idiot with zero skills in manipulation.
Which I assume steams from you not beimg a manipulative person.

(If you were, you'd known this too.)

Forcing Harry into a different house would only breed resentment. Against said house. And the ones who put him there. Which in turn would have pushed him towards Voldemort and his promises.

The SMART thing to do when your plans fail is to create a new plan, more syitable for the situation.

So Harry is a Slytherin. Thus he must be apeoached as such.

He can't be turned to serving the world for the greater good, but he CAN be tempted with promise of fame, power, money, self-preservation. or just a desire to be the greatest hero ever. (The exact details of what to tempt him with will vary from person to person, and you need to carefully suss them out, little by little, as you gain your victim's tryst.)

If he MUST use force, then a full brainwash, or erasing every memory since he was placed with the dursley's and then retrain him, would be needed.

Time and effort would be required for both, and there is always a chance of him back-sliding. Force is the enemy of manipulation.

The old goat had the deck stacked against him from the very get-go.

And manipulation is like fine nerve surgery. You cannot do brain-surgery with a sledgehammer. You need a fine and sharp scalpel, and delicate, careful movements.

If you want to learn the art, feel free to ask and I will point you towarda a few books. And feel free to ask me for tips too.

The protagonist is always as good as the Antagonist. If the Villain sucks, so will the hero.

Your Addams are a bit hit-and-miss.

By and large you write them well (especially the adults), but Wedensday looses her sociopathic cool a bit often. Which she never, ever does.

And she is more likely to try and kill the one she loves than protect him. If he can't defend himself, he clearly isn't worth her time. (Tho she have better aim than Pugsley, and would be more likely to torture him than kill him I suppose. We never did see how her first boyfriend ended up. We just know he vanished from the picture.)

You write a good story tho. So while it has a few things you could improve upon, you are a pretty decent writer.
Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 7 . 4/15
Chap. 8:

Your Slytherins is as sly as a sledgehammer.

Codes like that which exists in Slytherin would NEVER be written down and spelled out as if they were brash Gryffindors.

(Snape may have spelled out for them the "Outside we show a unified front", but that is it.)

Socials codes are, as a rule, never written down, or even mentioned. You have to learn as you fo along.

Both social games and politics is like a gigantic game of Mao; You don't know the rules, you don't know who the players are, and moat od the time you don't even know you're playing it. Until you break a rule and experience the pubishment that is.

The smart and cunning fess up fast and learn the rules. (Mostly through trial and error or watching other players).

The slow, stupid, ignorant and stubborn is labeled outsiders, and eother bullied into submission, or pushed so far out of the group that they'll never get back in.

Some players choose to be putcasts and outaiders, others form their own social "clique", that comes with it'snown rules.

And not ONE person is handed a handbook.

The closest thing you have is YouTube videos who assume you already know the basics.

Ehy do you think autistic and antisocial people struggle so much? They never learned the basics by watching, and it isn't taught in any book.

It also suprise me that Snape actually keeps the dorms warm. And that people share a dorm.

Living in a cold ass dungeon is a good incentive to learn the warming charm and practise magic all day long.

And sharing a room is a disaster waiting to happen in a potentially cut-throat enviorment, when ambition trunphs friendship.

Not to mention the rich and spoiled snotty kids like Draco would whine endlessly to their parents over it.

Mind you, it could also be extra incentive to learn warding spells, but it would be impossible to keep secrets or have privacy. You are not necessarily wrong, but I still find it unlikely.

Far more likely is they all got a cell not unlike that of a monk's. No locks, nothing but the bare basics.

Kids like Draco would use his father's position and exchange future favors to get his room expanded and filled with comfort.

People like Tom Riddle would have to work his ass off and learn how to do it himself.

THAT would be an enviorment great for ambition.

(Hufflepuff, on the other hand, likely DO share room -but just two and two. It allows for closer friendships, and thus feeds loyalty.

Gryffindor's brave and warrior-like nature means 5 to a room is well suited. A bit like in a military camp. Which could have been intentional.

Ravenclaw I would bet have solitary rooms that are soundproof and ample shelf-space for books. Which makes for the best study enviorment.)

Those are my theories anyway.

I will conceed that we know nothing about the sleeping arrangements for any house but gryffindor in Canon.

(Unless it is written in the second generation books. Which I have not read.)

That said, I do like this fanfic. _
Dark-Prince-of-Clowns chapter 6 . 4/15
Small tip: People don't use doubble-names like that. People rarely use them in the mosern muggle world, and hardly ever in the wizarding world.
(Plus, it sounds really, REALLY stupid.)

If you want to add their pre-marrige family, use "Narcissa Malfoy, nee Black".
(The "nee" indicates she was born a black, but is now a Malfoy. Normally through marrige.)

The Addams family tend to make every member an Addams. (Morticia even said she took her husband's blood/dna at one point. Or it sounded that way at least.)

When they adopted Harry he'd either be "Harry (James) Addams" or "Harry (James) Addams nee Potter".
(Tho I do not think the "nee" is normally used in adoptions, but in his case it may be important enough to comit that minor faux pas.)

It's also somewhat political.
"Harry Addams" is leaning towards an affiliation with the Dark families, while "Harry Potter" is the wizarding world's little hero.
It's a social politics nuance, but worth noting.

dumbledore and his ilk is likely to try and call him Harry Potter, while the Dark faction will keep with Harry Addams. (Unless they peg him for an enemy or believe he is with the light faction.)

That said, social politics may not matter so much in your story, and maybe the wizarding world is not as Victorian as they seem... it's not REALLY important.
But it DO sound better to not overkill on the names. Especially in everyday use.

(When was the last time you read dumbledore refered to as "Albus Percival Wolfic dumbledore", fo example. Or litterally ANY witch or wizard having more than a single last name?)

Snape would likely introduce himself as "Severus Snape", because he has no claim to the Prince name as a halfblood. But everyone would KNOW he is a Prince, and that would come out in undertones and degrees of politeness.

Prince is a name that hails back to one royal family or other, so it's very prestigious. Albeith the connection is very far back, so I can't say if he is the 250th heir to the current throne, or if his family belonged to the pre-Windsor one.

But it is still prestigious.

Why would Olivander report to dumbledore btw?
I have never seen him be anything but 100% Neutral, until he was attacked by Voldemort -which has not happened yet.

Even when he talked about Voldemort, he claimed he was great. The while "terrible, but great" part was tacked on in a way that sounded like he was obligated to denounce Voldemort for social convention, more than meaning it.

(Not that Olivander necessarily agreed with Voldemort or his ideas.
I personally suspect that he doesn't give a rats ass about anything but wands. Including light or dark, or who kills how many humans.

I would have sworn he was fae, if such a thing existed in the Potter universe.
His strangeness and lack of human morals, as I see it, paired with his skills in wandmaking could hint at it.
He does appear to be the ONLY wandmaker, not only in brittain, but in all of northern europe.

With only Gregowitch mentioned for anywhere else.
Why is it such a rare skill, I wonder...?)

I find it intresting that Harry's wand is unlike anything Olivander ever makes.
(He stated to never use any other cores than Phoenix feather, dragon heartstring, or phoenix feather.
Many woods, but only those cores.)

But the fact that is IS mentioned as something unusual and serendipitous actually allows for this unusual incident to make sense. So kudos for that. _

Nitpicking aside, the story itself is great.
Guest chapter 19 . 3/18
I do hope you will find the time to update and in time complete this story.
Guest chapter 19 . 1/25
Please update and complete this wonderful story.
Guest chapter 19 . 12/5/2023
Hope to see updates very soon, please complete this story.
Jane S. Streeter chapter 18 . 12/2/2023
Well, yeah. Got power over the dead, doesn't he?
Guest chapter 19 . 11/16/2023
Will at least update this story before the end of this year!
Guest chapter 19 . 10/13/2023
Please update and complete this story soon.
Love to see where it goes next.
Wolvie26 chapter 19 . 7/10/2023
Love it! Can't wait to see what happens next! Hope you update soon!
apshep10 chapter 19 . 5/22/2023
I've quite enjoyed your story... Would you be so kind to at least finish it...? A lot of cliffhangers like the Weasley twins for instance
Guest chapter 19 . 5/16/2023
Great story so far, please continue to post new chapters soon.
Love to see this story progress to completion.
FeralSins chapter 13 . 2/28/2023
ok so re-reading this, and the pairings I'm seeing are as follows

Wednesday and Malfoy
Harry and Hermione

meaning that Morticia has taken a liking to Hermione cause of her helping Harry after Dumbledore attempted to Impero him AND due to the dark magic she sensed in her.

ALSO might I say that Gomez, Wednesday, Pugsley and Morticia absolutely seem 10000% in-character here IMO :D
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