Reviews for That Night in Altimira
Light Laharl chapter 2 . 5/29/2010
pretty good please continue.
TheForsakenAngelZelosWilder chapter 3 . 5/8/2010
I think they should keep the baby. considering the amount of gald they get fighting monsters, they'd have more than enough to support a kid...though there's always the possibility of irresponsibility. Hm. I don't honestly know, but i do know one thing:

You should update soon w
Spector29 chapter 5 . 5/6/2010
...I curbed my rick-roll reflex for you, thats how much I want you to continue.
Pro-life.No wait.Choice.GAA chapter 3 . 5/6/2010
I think a miscarrage would be very dramitic, but that'd be a huge kick in the balls.

Keep it.
InsaneMexican chapter 1 . 4/15/2010
AntiSora chapter 5 . 4/1/2010
...That was cruel. I approve, but it was still cruel. XD

AbaloneTimebomb chapter 1 . 2/6/2010
oh god yes, continue! not only is this totally smexy, I wanna know what their kids are like.
L'Archel-Hotishi chapter 4 . 1/28/2010
Aw...yes, I'm satisfied too. That was really sweet...I'm glad you carried it out this far. Thank you...I loved it so much!
L'Archel-Hotishi chapter 2 . 1/27/2010
(Reads second chapter) an ending! This chapter was great! I'm actually going to read the other two now.
Kalana Fox chapter 4 . 1/24/2010

You totally read that topic, didn't you?


Decent story though, I'll give you that. And like I said in the last review, you use too much dialouge and not enough description between the dialouge.


AS chapter 4 . 1/24/2010
Much better on description, nice final chapter. :3
Kalana Fox chapter 1 . 1/24/2010

Ok, at least I now know I wasn't the only person who thought that...

But...please tell me you didn't read a certain topic on the official Tales forums...because I plan to write a fic kinda like this too...except with Ratatosk ...and without the acual event happening...

Btw, nice job with this, there were only a few problems:

- You had too much dialouge and not enough description (even in 1st person there's always a balance of dialouge and description)

- In several places throughout you missed some words in some sentences...


- I'm decently sure that girls don't actually bleed when their virginity barrier is broken. It hurts, yes, but they don't bleed from it. They only bleed if they're being raped...
Loser chapter 3 . 1/24/2010
Oh Emil, don't be retarded. Pulling out before you cum does not mean she can't get pregnant. Learn a little about the subject before you go accusing people of things, kid.
BigBossofMoss chapter 4 . 1/23/2010
This was good. However, I have one request.

I know you said u didn't want Emil telling Lloyd about Kratos.

But...could you do an epilouge chapter where Yuan comes to see the boys and tells Emil and Marta a very detailed retelling of Kratos, the Kharlan War, Martel, Anna, and the previous adventure(ToS 1)

I wanted that to happen as I played through the entire game but no one ever told Emil and Marta what REALLY happened.
KStheD chapter 3 . 1/23/2010
Hee, Emil fainted. Hahahahaha... That made me snicker, LOL.

Ah, but Emil doesn't really strike me as teh type to wanna kill it... I mean, the kid was gonna kill himself to atone for a murder he -didn't- commit, right? So how could be be okay killing a defenseless, helpless, unborn child? -His- child, no matter the fact that Marta kinda forced him into it?
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