|Reviews for Time|
| AnnieNonmouse chapter 1 . 7/17/2010
The only thing with onomatopoeia's is that they sort of sound cheesy in bold or all caps. I've done it before, I actually still have that story up. Still, maybe instead of:
"Tick. Tick. Tick. TICK. TICK. TICKTICKTICKTICKTICK TOO FAST!"
You could use italics or just bold instead of the capitals, because it sort of seems like you're chatting on a forum, messing around, you know?
Then the "WHY? He roared loudly in anguish and fear." threw me off a bit, did he roar the word why? or did he think it and roar? It's a little confusing and again the capitals could be substituted with italics or bold.
Other than that it was a good drabble. :D Very true to the whole essence of Chrono Crusade. Chrono is always taking time from the women he loves :( poor babeh.