|Reviews for Cheers|
| booping the snoot chapter 5 . 9/27/2015
| booping the snoot chapter 2 . 9/27/2015
WHAT NO THEY NO WHAAAAAT!? NOOOO NO NO NO NO NO NOMK NO O NOOOOOOOO
| RandomButLoved chapter 7 . 1/11/2015
Incredible! How have I not read this before! I will come back to this story a lot in the future! ;3
| Caltrop chapter 7 . 2/3/2013
Too good. Just, too good. Finally got to finishing this. Glad I did.
I know I have so much more to say about this, but I can't think of anything right now, so I might review other previous chapters in the future, should I remember something of noteworthy importance.
But for now: did you ever explain how the teleporters were jammed? And why did Crazy only want a fraction of the Smashers dead, rather than all?
| Caltrop chapter 2 . 12/27/2012
Oh. I sort of understand this now. So the list at the bottom somewhat serves as a countdown. So I'm guessing one of the listed characters must be the killer, since they're the only characters currently in the story. So then disregard my whole previous "Snake" statement...
As for the plot, I feel like no one truly acknowledged the fact that someone just died. I mean, Luigi's all scared, sipping his tea and whatever, but at this point I'd be building myself a fort, using barbed wire and bricks as a barricade. I guess it'd be a good idea to retain one's composure but it's basically survival right now.
| Caltrop chapter 1 . 12/26/2012
Sheesh. I don't know how one person is able to cram so much game knowledge and references into their mind – and from so many games as well! I'd have to stay up all night researching and researching, especially since I don't even know what games half the characters in Brawl even come from.
...Anyway, out of all the characters in Brawl, I would never expect Lucario to go first. That just doesn't even seem slightly plausible to me; he's too agilic and wary. But I guess it's kind of hard not to get shot by a gun.
As for the murderer, it's Jigglypuff. Case closed.
On a more serious note: I don't know what that final list of characters was, whether the murderer was one of them, but I don't really see Princess Toadstool as one to haul a rifle, so I'm going to base my hypothesis off previous events in the chapter. Snake made an appearance in the beginning, albeit a short cameo. Maybe, Snake was sore from his loss (wouldn't that make him go after Meta Knight though?). Therefore he decided to kill everyone. I don't have much to back up my hypothesis, however Snake is the kind of person to have control over bombs and guns. Plus, his name's Snake; he's a snaky fellow.
| GoldFountain chapter 7 . 8/21/2012
What an incredible read; I had my eyes glued to the screen for a couple of hours. Your description is off the charts, as I could visualize every scene, especially the ending, which is haunting, to say the least. I loved how subtle your clues were, and how you made those little details resurface. The motive works in a multi-universe setting such as this, and I can't think of any other motives unless you set this in an AU. Incredible, and wonderfully well-polished.
I can't say I haven't got any criticisms, though, but this is a small criticism to make: your dialogue tags seem a bit too varied. Instead of drawing the reader's attention to said dialogue tags such as murmured, whispered, cried, etc., 'Said' works perfectly well for most cases and is pretty much invisible, forcing the reader's attention onto the dialogue. I have to say I fall into this habit as well, as when I read over my stories I cringe at seeing how many times 'said' is repeated, but once I read it aloud I find that it's not too bad after all. That, and my over usage adverbs. I really need to stop using flowery, fluffy adverbs. But I digress...
Thank you for composing such a wonderful piece!
| Fleet of the Wind chapter 7 . 5/14/2012
Congratulations. You have just made my day. :)
Thank you for this very, very enjoyable story-it's hard to find a story as well written and well thought out in a fanfiction category like this. The characters were so well developed and expanded from their 2D selves on the video-screen that it was hard to believe Brawl wasn't a novel in the first place. I can only imagine how much time it took to write and develop and plan each and every one of these chapters and... argh. I could go on about how much I enjoyed this story, but I'll just head straight to the real review. :)
While I found a few slipping (though very few and far between) spelling and grammatical issues- such as fragments- none of it deterred from the storyline and the dark plot you have managed to spin to life. I really enjoyed your intense imagery and detail about the more gruesome parts of the story, for example-upon Lucario's death, most people wouldn't have thought of, or left out, the discoloration of his face due to the blood loss. It's the minor dark details (and excellent use of tying all them up together for the finale) that really make your writing unique and worthwhile.
The only thing I didn't like about your story was the fact that it ended. I mean that both in, , and in the way of a resolution. Though the final words of this story were truly quite... epic, I almost wish to see the reactions on the other side of the portal (though I can understand why you left that out).
Other than that, you really have created a fanfiction masterpiece that I'll be sure to be reading again and again over the next few weeks. I've had a look at your other pieces as well, and I'm really hooked. Thank you for publishing your works here on FanFiction, they really do liven up the darker corners of the place. :)
| The-mighty-rhodes chapter 7 . 7/4/2011
This story is amazing, I'm sorry that I didn't read it until after you finished. I found the last chapter very moving at times and despite the fact that Falco had killed several characters you still created pity for him. You're writing is incredible, I honestly thought it was Fox, but my reasoning could have applied to Falco, so anyways this rocks and I'm now going to read some more of your stuff.
| Skynote chapter 7 . 3/11/2011
Interesting ending and I sure didn't see it coming!
Aw, but it's sad that no one lives, but you can't always have a happy ending.
Good story :)
| Skynote chapter 6 . 3/11/2011
Oh the intense-ness!
Ok Ima read the last chappie...
| Skynote chapter 5 . 3/11/2011
Eeek another way I wouldn't want to die.
Almost finished... 3 people left...
| Skynote chapter 4 . 3/11/2011
What a horrible way to die! 0
Four people left...
| Skynote chapter 3 . 3/11/2011
Oooh the ending of this chapter was intense. Heh, reading on...
| Skynote chapter 2 . 3/10/2011
Haha I could easily picture Fox gripping his head for some reason XD