|Reviews for The 2nd Hunger Games|
| Xxx from czech chapter 5 . 1/4/2016
You have all my thumps up. This story and your writimg is realy good. I like it ;)
| Guest chapter 21 . 8/17/2015
I READ YOUR STORY BEGINNING OF THE HUNGER GAMES AND I LOVED IT. I'M GETTING READY TO READ THIS ONE AND I KNOW I'LL ENJOY IT TOO.
THANKS SO MUCH,
| Lottie chapter 15 . 7/20/2014
Wow! This is great I dont know how u come up with these ideas! Im a fan... But I'm still getting over BANE!
| Lottie chapter 13 . 7/20/2014
Noooooooo! Not BANE! Omfg I loved him he was my fave :(
But good twist
| Lottie chapter 12 . 7/20/2014
The music things interesting but I guess it could be fun!
| Lottie101 chapter 5 . 7/20/2014
why do u keep writing songs we should listen to?!
| Guest chapter 5 . 3/25/2014
I am really enjoying reading this. It comes from a good perspective.
| spyjay3491 chapter 5 . 7/28/2013
I really like the story so far
| LunaStorm chapter 9 . 1/20/2013
This story is quite good and rather well written.
I do have a major critique, however.
It is set far too soon. For these to be just the 2nd HG... well, everything is far too well established already.
The most glaring thing is the obvious and repeated contradiction between this supposedly being the first time D1,2,4 train their Tributes and the frequent references to the protagonist's mentor having gone through the same experience, down to the 'pack'-style alliance. A scenario that besides being incongrous in itself, does not respect canon much: if these are the 2nd HG then the war has been over for barely two years; it is more logical to think that the Capitol is still struggling to impose its system, the Districts quite likely aren't as well organized and adjusted to their subjugation yet - more like cowed and terrified and beyond exhausted by the war effort they sustained and the likely hardships of post-war reconstruction as well as the impotent anger and depression of defeat, of which there is, disappointingly, no hint in your fic. I doubt the acceptance level for the HG you display could have come so soon, but rather after a few years of deaths, as coping mechanism. At this point, numbing resignation and stunned fear and grief are more believable reactions in my opinion.
Furthermore, I don't believe the HG have stayed the same for 75 years, in fact, the idea is quite ludicrous. Later on, yes, when they have been established for so long that they've become a tradition and the public expects certain things...but that would take years. In the first editions traditions are far from settled, ideas are being tried and tested, there would likely be pressure for novelties and changes to keep things interesting...certainly things would not run so smooth, the Capitol would still be working organizational details out and most importantly, the Tributes could not possibly know what to expect, not if there has been only one edition before. They would probably guess and wonder if it would be like the year before or not...and anyway, the first few editions would necessary see the greatest differences from year to year, as elements of the show and even more, of the backstage (so to speak) get discarded or worked out and a routine of sorts is slowly constructed. No, I think such an early edition could only have the bare bones in common with the 74th...
Plus, there are no reference points for some of the comments you throw in, like the stylist saying that the Bloodbath can last over an hour, for instance: for an event to be talked of in those terms, it must have happened more or less similarly for several times. The same for the comment over sponsors and their ways.
Also, mentors. If this is the 2nd time they're thrust into the Arena, there is only one Victor - not one per District, one in total! - so the entire concept of mentors is ridiculous at this point. I think it would most likely be a much later addition to the HG, once a fair few Victors have accumulated and once the Capitol has realized that their people love to have their darling celebrities around for longer than the final interview...
In short, I think your story would gain much from being set a dozen years later: it would be much more believable all in all.
I do commend hou, however, for creating interesting, well-rounded characters and for keeping my attention by revealing their layers a little at a time, with excellent timing (especially in Tzarro's case, but not only).
Oh, and good job in creating an Arena both original and very in tune with the canon ones!
| L'Amour veritable chapter 17 . 12/18/2012
| TheTrackerJacker chapter 21 . 11/7/2010
This was such a great story. Really. I was so sad at the whole Tzarro/Tellee part though. But anyway was an OMGasp moment. I liked how you expressed Ariella's feelings so well. And the last scene of the story was truly epic.
You did a great job with the characters. I found myself rooting for some, and wishing death upon others throughout the entire course of the series.
| Kabby-Bellarke-Life chapter 5 . 10/6/2010
This is a great story
| Hahukum Konn chapter 21 . 9/20/2010
And Ariella discovers the down side of winning. I wonder what her life will be like for the next seventy years or so. Provided she doesn't end up arranging an "accident" for herself :O
| Hahukum Konn chapter 20 . 9/20/2010
Maaan. Ariella's going to be one smart mentor come the third games. How many people in District four are going to be terrified of her when she comes home, I wonder?
| Hahukum Konn chapter 19 . 9/20/2010
Alas. :( Poor Tzarro.
That kind of sucks that Ariella threw up; she'll have lost all the food she ate to stay alive, which could affect how alert and energetic she feels when she goes into the final battle.