I'm very glad to see some backstory appearing in this, even if it means leaving the present-day events on pause for the moment. This chapter was choppy in spots, with the omniscient POV turning out a little confusing, but it still left me as hungry to know more about what was going on as what is going on, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

His lady is a Master Weaver, and he dose have journeyman knot of the Fishcraft. Sll the Wyers Of Pern. Dolphineer Readis has he own hall, the Tillek, came south to teach him, Dolphins of Pern.

Over all well written, good inaction, and good background.

Hi just read your story it's good and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Love your story - one of the closest fan fic's in style and spirit to AM that I've read. Please keep going with it!

I like this story. It's easy to understand, well written, and is exploring things that sometimes people don't feel comfortable exploring.

I can see what you're doing on POV, with the third person omniscient, but at times it gets disjointed and a little confusing. Not fully, and you are doing it well - I think it's one of the pitfalls of this type of POV. It's also probably because no one seems to write in that POV any longer - it's been all first person, or third limited.

A question I have is about Sannel and her deafness. You have teased/hinted that she used to be able to hear, but no longer can. At some point you may want to explain how she lost her hearing. I also do not understand deafness, but if she used to be able to speak, wouldn't she still be able to speak? I'm actually thinking of that deaf actress - Marlee Martin, I think? She can speak, even though it's kind of weird. But, as I said, I don't know deaf or disabilities, so I have nothing to compare it to.

...and it would serve D'rin right if R'nik and San became good friends! (I'd like to know exactly what went on in that conversation!)

Oh, and good on you, blue Impressing the Headwoman! Just because a woman Impresses blue doesn't mean anything about her sexual orientation!

A deaf rider who can speak to any dragon and a photosensitive dragon? It definitely offers interesting plot opportunities.

Your first chapter made it clear that Sannel values her brother's love. Here's hoping that he gets over himself soon.

I look forward to the next installment.

I loved the idea of the headwoman impressing, though I'm still slightly confused on what was driving the drudge to behave as he was doing.

My only issue about a thirty-seven year-old adopting is that it will eventually shorten the lifespan of the dragon. Then again, the bond may extend Palma's life.

I enjoyed how you brought the two ladies, young and old, together as partners in adversity.

I like the disjointed feeling you convey after the hatching started. I also felt that you did an excellent job of suggesting the hearing problem without coming out and declaring it until the end.

Actually, having a deaf girl impress makes perfect sense to me. It's akin to a blind person and a seeing-eye dog.

Did you also imply that she could hear other dragons, or was I misinterpreting?

I can understand, well written, good inaction, and good background.

cant get enough of this story!its really good!wonder why her brother was so upset that she impressed? and what he said to her on the hatching grounds

Very well done . Great job, to bad they can't find a way to make sunglasses for a dragon. Can they? Keep up the good work.

I'm really enjoying your story so far :) Your writing style is very much like AM's own and just lures me in! Good work!

This is a really interesting story you have going on here. You tricked me with the blue, I thought for sure it was going to impress the drudge not the headwoman :) And I'm curious to see how things with R'nik and D'rin will turn out.

A really well written story so far ...I particularly like your harper tunes !

well done