|Reviews for Rough Around the Edges|
| Lady Faucheur chapter 18 . 3/19/2010
Awesome! I can't wait for an update! Please continue!
| Pigeon Toes chapter 18 . 3/18/2010
Haha! Very subtle Udrau.
| Wombat Pestilence chapter 18 . 3/17/2010
Please do not view this as an attempt on my part to tell you what to do with your own story, I just see this particular story having the potential to move in a certain direction. Please correct me if I am mistaken, but I sense a pairing between Mosyk and Endyna. Based on this observation, I'm assuming there is going to be something to bring this together besides just there friendship. I don't know how much you like scientific stuff or how much you know, but you are presented with an interesting and unique opportunity in this story to make Mosyk more attractive to Ednyna (and possibly other females in the clan, so as to cause some drama). You could talk about Mosyk's small stature being due to his unique genetic makeup (he is a quarter human) and since he is fairly young (13-14 I believe you said?), you could have Mosyk go through the Na'vi equivalent of puberty and talk about how it is his Na'vi genes kicking in. His growth in heigth and (possibly) muscle mass would probably endear him more to Endyna. Even though I'm sure she likes him just fine they way he is, it couldn't hurt to put a physical attraction spin to their relationship that would not only strengthen it but also make Mosyk more confident in his succession of his father's role as clan leader, in mind and body. I really do love this story, its a little more playful than Avatar and has some really good "coming-of-age" elements to it, which I really enjoy. Like I said before, don't take this as an attempt to tell you what to do with your own story. I just see this story having some good potential, and I was wondering if i could provide any ideas. I hope I've helped some or left a decent review, just let me know if you have any questions
| Ladygreysun chapter 18 . 3/17/2010
A fascinating story so far...I really like Mosyk and your way of describing Na'vi life... Endyna and Mosyk are so cute. And Jake and Neytiri are cool...wish I had parents like that lol. Udrau seemed noce at the end of this chapter, I hope they'll be friends after...Keep up the good work!
| 1Timberwolf chapter 18 . 3/16/2010
LOL. I got a huge kick out of that last part.
| AngelBornOfHell chapter 18 . 3/16/2010
udrau seems to be more mature...if a little more...blunt XD
| mysteryinitself chapter 18 . 3/16/2010
haha love the last bit, very funny! definetly needed to be said and a nice change in atmosphere from all the danger thats suddenly appearing.
though it might not be for a while i can see them being good friends.
| Spottedfang chapter 18 . 3/15/2010
Oh, god... XD That last line killed me. lol *laughing cough*
| Stevenm64 chapter 17 . 3/12/2010
an good new set of chapters, this new creature is interesting.
| 1Timberwolf chapter 17 . 3/12/2010
O, great job. Can't wait to see what this thing is.
| Djinn17 chapter 17 . 3/11/2010
Nice Chapter. The plot thickens so to speak...
| Kap487 chapter 17 . 3/11/2010
Na'ring Ska'ayu sounds eerily similar to one of the RDA's robotic bulldozers.
| StarMimi chapter 16 . 3/11/2010
I really like this!
| Little Juniper aint signing in chapter 16 . 3/11/2010
YESS! I WILL CHERISH THIS MOMENT!
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