|Reviews for Backache|
| GoldstarXD chapter 1 . 4/17
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
| adelineadrenaline chapter 1 . 7/4/2011
| Fernsfairie chapter 1 . 7/29/2010
"Iz my turn," he says, his accent thicker than peanut butter because of his lustiness.
THICKER THAN PEANUT BUTTER? IN THE MIDDLE OF A SEX SCENE? ! That wins the award for the most random comparison in a S/C fic (with smut) ever.
| Yukimura Hina chapter 1 . 5/21/2010
(and by the way, the Russian accent was really good!)
Thanks for writing.
| januaryfreeze92 chapter 1 . 3/14/2010
Ah! That was one of the sexiest stories ever :D
| superhappyfunshine chapter 1 . 2/13/2010
So cute I can't stand it!
| rawrr.imma.dinosaur chapter 1 . 2/1/2010
It was great!
I thought the Russian was great by the way!
| Lyricoloratura chapter 1 . 1/29/2010
Well, I'll say you're braver than I am - I've never quite worked up the nerve to do M-rated stuff - but you've done a nice job with this.
The premise of the story itself is quite good, and I can easily imagine Pavel & Hikaru getting into it because Hikaru bottles things up, etc. I liked the resolution - and the sex was definitely interesting.
A tiny thing - which I only mention because someone once did the same for me and I appreciated it - is a bit of verb tense stuff. During the sex scene, you go back & forth between past and present tense - which isn't a big deal at all, but the inconsistency is just a little distracting.
Really enjoyed this piece a LOT, and look forward to reading more of your work!