|Reviews for Clouds on the Horizon|
| Tswayonyu chapter 77 . 5/11/2014
An excellent story. Well detailed. You've captured the characters perfectly, and stayed true to the movie, (and the original avatar script). One small detail is that I believe it was implied that the supply chain of ships from earth arrived in three month intervals. Not a big deal though.
| Malphys chapter 74 . 2/26/2014
Wow... Norm is apparently fine with just murdering someone, taking her out of somewhere she was perfectly safe to test her and if she fails kill her. And these are the "good" guys. Gotta wonder how exactly Eywa is influencing those Avatar brains, to start thinking everyone on Earth is insane...
| Malphys chapter 27 . 2/25/2014
So, Eywa is a deity that can trivially genetically engineer a body and has the knowledge of a 22nd century PhD biologist... So where is the challenge for the Navi? At this point they could sit back and Eywa could do pretty much anything. The humans pose no threat on land anymore, Eywa could just zerg rush them with genetically engineered super fauna.
They should however worry about humans using weapons from orbit, but not even their god seems to have realized this threat. The "unarmed" ISVs by themselves are a devastating weapon, their engines have a power output on par with a multi-megaton nuke going off every second... That'll make you rethink telling the pilots to go home.
| Malphys chapter 5 . 2/25/2014
It's always frustrating when the author gets the science of a story wrong, especially when the source material did so well getting it right.
In Avatar unobtainium isn't a fuel, its a very high temperature superconductor, it doesn't get used up by spaceships, instead it can be used in their construction. From what I understand the ISVs used in Avatar are accelerated away from earth using solar sails then decelerate at the other end using matter-antimatter engines. For the return journey they do the opposite, Antimatter engines accelerate and the solar sail decelerates.
Unobtainium would be used on Earth to manufacture very high efficiency power generators, transportation systems and power distribution systems.
That said, I like the story so far.
| Guest chapter 28 . 6/8/2013
This section is beautiful.
| BunnyBear27 chapter 2 . 6/3/2013
LOVE THIS STORY CAN'T WAIT TO READ WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!
| Guest chapter 34 . 11/9/2012
Jake assumes that the RDA would conduct offensive operations, I hardly see why. Staying put in a fortified position and burning the jungle for several kilometres around the base would ensure they're functionally untouchable. Nevermind the fact that they can play the waiting game. With more ships coming time is on their side.
| Guest chapter 31 . 11/9/2012
Absolute shit characterization. The RDA CEO came off as a mustache twirling villain devoid of basic logic. An ISV isn't going to be able to turn a planet to "rubble" and even if it did shatter a planet that would only make mining the unobtanium easier. At least try not to have such a blatant black and white morality bias.
| Guest chapter 27 . 11/9/2012
This was an unusually poor chapter. The reappearance of grace was really odd, please keep in mind that eywa is a planet wide neural network, not an actual deity capable of influencing individual cellular function. Jake also reacted like an idiot, assuming the kid would be harmful. Finally, please don't use all caps in dialogue, it just looks childish. Use descriptive writing to get your point across, not large font.
| Wicked Lovely 17 chapter 77 . 3/26/2012
loved it. :D
| Casey Redbird chapter 39 . 1/25/2012
Amazing story. So beautiful!
| Tankred chapter 77 . 5/13/2011
Little na'vi children huh, must be cute
| Bigoldfrog chapter 77 . 5/12/2011
The liberties you've taken feel both at home in a science fiction story, and more importantly, the Avatar universe.
A lot of interesting ideas in this chapter especially.
| Gyre chapter 77 . 5/12/2011
A touching scene.
| Bigoldfrog chapter 76 . 5/10/2011
Even when considering the level of emotion surrounding birth, these past two chapters have been quite the ride. After reading them I can't help but wonder if the writer is a parent with some experience in the matter.