|Reviews for On Your Knees|
| hotxhotguy chapter 1 . 12/13/2015
First of all, very good story. Ciel is as asshole as ever. XD but my reply is not to you, but to one of your reviewer.
To Beckitt Lewis,
1. The story was very easy to follow along. Her setting was very elaborate, and she explained the plot very well.
2. I think you are the one who need to do more research. Because I bet you have no idea what Kuroshitsuji anime is about. It is possible to have anal sex without any lubrication. That is how gay rape happens. The penis leaks precum which adds to lubrication. And also, Sebastian is not a human, he is a demon; so the writer can write about him however the fuck he wants with him. Maybe Demon has lubricated anus just like a vagina, so who knows.
3. Her grammars were good, and her spelling was perfect. In other word, GTFO, and GFY.
| CRea chapter 1 . 2/12/2014
Your story was quite hardcore, and very interesting. It had me on my knees.
| Lord Death chapter 1 . 1/9/2013
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/5/2012
Hot! Dominant Ciel is my favorite.
| Mafia Boss chapter 1 . 4/16/2011
| Cris chapter 1 . 6/19/2010
i liked this alot! the exchange between then was spot on. in all the other stories ive read Sebastian always seems lovesick and willing. if ciel actually had time to grow up, i wouldnt doubt that this would actually happen (if it were an Xrated anime anyway lol) and you have a lovely, flowing writing style! 10 outta 10! ;D haha
| livin-la-vida-loki-d chapter 1 . 6/8/2010
Nice. Pretty OOC, and the italicization was a little annoying but other than that it was enjoyable.
| TheHatterMaddox chapter 1 . 4/30/2010
LOVED it. perfectly perfect and sexy in every possible way. This is dark and twisted and utterly befitting of Ciel and Sebastian. Loved it!
| XxXneonluvXxX chapter 1 . 2/27/2010
oh wow brill its amways sebby on top but ciels his master so hehe he should be on top:D great fic!
| RedMoonLight009 chapter 1 . 2/18/2010
EEK! Nice Fiction! I always had that in the back of my own mind. Why he didn't just order Sebastian to do as he wanted, be it for the picture taking or getting down on his knees. Now I found a fiction that did that for me! Thank you! I loved it! And of course pain would make Sebastian cum lol.
| Beckitt Lewis chapter 1 . 2/14/2010
Alright. This story has potential. But there are a few things I would like to point out in order to improve your writing.
1) It is very hard to follow along. You should elaborate more on your setting, what your characters are feeling and what is happening.
2) Please research more. It is physically impossible for a man to simply go in. The anus will not just open up, anal is a lengthy and complicated process, that needs to be researched or experienced in order to properly write about.
3)Check your spelling and grammar. Some of your sentence structures did not make sense, there were also a few spelling errors. Make sure to read your stories out loud, and send them to a few friends or a Beta before you publish so that your work can be properly edited.
| Vampire Winged Rose chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
I loved it very much. The characters where in character and their actions where spot on. I always wondered what Ciel would be like when he grows up...if the manga will let him grow up with all the crap they put him though will he reach 18? lol great job _
| EchizenRyomaLover chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
THIS WAS SHEER SADISTIC GENIUS! YOU ARE AWESOME! I MUST WRITE THIS IN ALL CAPS! I LOVED THE IDEA, DIALOG, EVERYTHING!
I SHALL CALL YOU "THE MISTRESS OF SEBASTIANXCIEL YAOI!"