Reviews for Jessy Graves and the Olympians
FanfictionVillainess chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
Okay, this is all dialogue. Can you try to capitalize the beginning of the sentence? Never say no flamers because it's like holding up a neon sign that says "FLAME ME!". Seriously, this is honestly...terrible. And confusing...
Emmafer chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
Yeah, I could only read one sentence and that was it. Fix your grammar, seriously.

~E
Lonely Traveler chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
well... I won't be as blunt as the other reviewer ( I don't believe in saying, "YOU'RE STORY STINKS! JUST STOP WRITING PLEASE!) because it sounds unbelievably childish. But, you could work on your grammatical errors and punctuation. You could try to have your chapters contain a bit more than dialogue. It's sounding pretty good, though.
Editor Called Antrevine chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
THIS IS TERRIBLE! First, you NEVER put NO FLAMES in a review! It is a giant neon 'flame here' sign.

DELETE THIS GARBAGE! You have NO talent and pbviously don't know how to write.

1) CAPITALIZE THE BEGINNING OF A SENTENCE!

2) Why do I think you are a fan of Miley Cyrus?

3) PUNCTUATION! !&&$!) *($&*&... ,

JUST DELETE AND NEVER TRY AGAIN!