Reviews for Tales of the Abyss Conflict of Fonons
creativesm75 chapter 12 . 5/14/2013
TsundereNoOtaku6615 chapter 12 . 5/13/2013
Kyaaa! I love the couples that you did. But why didn't you add PeonyxNephry? Still, it was good on overall, considering that it only took me 20 minutes to finish this today. I also liked the fluff between Giselle and Jade. More power!
FreireLover chapter 12 . 5/13/2013
The story was very rare: the people was dead are alive now, Efreet, Sync-Arietta... but It is very interesting. I see one problem with your story: the chapters are very short when the story has a lot of things you can write about. If you put this problem apart, this fanfic is a good work. The best (in my opinion) is the Asch-Noir relationship (I hate Natalia LOL). Sorry for my language and greeting from Spain!
RKF22 chapter 12 . 5/12/2013
nice work wonderful job
RKF22 chapter 11 . 5/12/2013
wow awesome work well done cant wait for the epilogue
RKF22 chapter 10 . 5/8/2013
nice work cant wait for the big fight
creativesm75 chapter 10 . 4/30/2013
interesting events
Guest chapter 9 . 4/13/2013
RKF22 chapter 9 . 4/6/2013
Nice work love the cliffhangers keep up the great work
creativesm75 chapter 9 . 4/5/2013
Guest chapter 1 . 3/19/2013
What's the point of putting Tales of the Abyss in the title? :/ We know what fandom we're reading from. It would sound better just as Conflict of Fonons
creativesm75 chapter 8 . 1/24/2013
interesting fanfic
IHaveNoIdea8 chapter 7 . 1/24/2013
Sorry to say, but this isn't very good.
I'll admit that I haven't really read all of it, but from what I HAVE read, I noticed pretty obvious spelling mistakes and grammar issues, and they appear way too often for me to just shrug them off as the occasional typo.
You have some issues with keeping the characters in character, (Asch would never use the word 'cause instead of because, for one) and so far everything seems really fast-paced and confusing to keep up with. I would suggest adding a LOT of description about what's going on instead of relying too heavily on dialogue to tell the story. When all of your paragraphs are only one line long, it doesn't look good at a first glance.
Not only does the added description make things easier to follow for the reader, it makes the chapters look better just by first appearances on the screen. This chapter was way too short, mostly because of the lack of description.

The idea for the story is interesting, but your writing style isn't really carrying it, it'll take a lot of re-working before this fic can meet it's real potential, I think.
RKF22 chapter 8 . 1/24/2013
YOUR BCK GLOURIOUS ...just kidding awsome update well done glad your back cant wait for more
Guest chapter 7 . 1/4/2013
aww...i can't wait for chapter 8
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