Reviews for Dead Heart
xBitterSweetDreamsx chapter 2 . 1/25/2015
Again, great chapter
xBitterSweetDreamsx chapter 1 . 1/25/2015
I like your writing style and that you put a lot of detail into it but Im gonna point out a few mistakes. Please take it as constructive critism. First, your past tense needs a little work. For examplel; you steal my cigarette is suppose to be you 'stole'. Make sure to use the proper 'is' or 'are' in a sentence and make sure to always use capital letters after a full stop. Other than that, great job
javii-izu chapter 2 . 8/2/2012
Follow the story please
utsukushii04 chapter 2 . 4/7/2010
Wow, en realidad mato a los O.o. Per fue chistoso cuando el viejito lo enganaron! Por favor sigue, aunque no soy una gran fanatica de lemons...Bye!
utsukushii04 chapter 1 . 4/7/2010 muy interesante. Pero como siempre no me fijo en el rating, pero ahorame gusta entoces voy a leer! Sinceramente, cuando me voy a fijar? Oh bueno, ya no me importa! Al siguiente! Oh y eso fue tan chistoso lo que dijiste de los flamers, yo tambien quisiera tener mas reviews aunque sean malos! _
lanski12 chapter 2 . 2/23/2010
man i cant believe Zoe's parents died that is so... cool cant wait for the next chapter
lanski12 chapter 1 . 2/23/2010
this story is good but when takuya said lets kill your parents i was like whoa
hEaRtBrEaKeR19 chapter 2 . 2/10/2010
OOh... Even it's short, I like it!

Good chap, even there are a lot of crime or whatever they do...

Anyways, hope you update soon... and finish The AntiChristmas Tale... It's February now...

dingcs chapter 2 . 2/9/2010
OMG! Oh my god, they actually did it! They killed Mr. and Mrs. Orimoto! Wow, now that's what I call meaning what you say. Zoe's one crazy daughter. lol, the parents are also on the weird side... o_o freaky.

Great chapter, it was pretty sick but whatever it was still good. I'm sensing something naughty in the next chapter.

Takuya: Hell yeah!*looks at Zoe*

Zoe: Please don't look at me like that.

Takuya: Right, sorry. *takes out a picture of Zoe and stares at it*

Me: ...

Update soon! Though I'm not a fan of lemon :\
blackandblood chapter 2 . 2/9/2010
Damn, I am really liking this story so much _ You updated fucking fast, dude. Anyway, they killed her parents! Yay! And then stole an old guy's car and went to a motel. Not bad for a few hours' work. And I thought it was funny when that guy got hit in the head with the brick xD Anyway, I can't wait for the lemonish scene coming up so I'll be waiting like the weirdo that I am. And here is something else *gives you hug* Said you needed one, so there ya go _ Laterz
dingcs chapter 1 . 2/9/2010
Haha, I love how you label flamers as trolls. "Dammit, this is fake and gay!" That's what trolls most likely say 99.9 percent of the time. xD

Anyway, this was an interesting way to start off your new story. I really like it. In a way, I could relate to Zoe in this one. Like in my elementary school, I wasn't so much of a social butterfly so my early years were boring as hell and I did have annoying parents that bug me about every single small thing. Well my mom did, my dad is pretty chill. lol my life now is alot better because i learned to ignore my mom, cuz i'm so much smarter than her. _

Zoe is also making a point about how parents want their kid to be like every good kid. And that's just stupid, in my opinion. Be yourself! And I'm guessing that the brunette is Takuya but then again it could be JP or Tommy. lol

Are you serious? They're going to kill Zoe's parents? I gotta read the next chapter.
hEaRtBrEaKeR19 chapter 1 . 2/9/2010
Wow... nice... it's cool though... But it's short... Nabitin ako... hehe...

I like the start...

I hope you can update soon... can't wait for the next one...
blackandblood chapter 1 . 2/9/2010
Oh, I love how this is turning out so far _ Hell yeah, Zoe! Kill 'em!

Kouji: Don't encourage her!

me: Shut up, emo. Anyway, Zoe's life does sound pretty damn boring...kinda like mine but in a different way. I can't wait to see if she goes through with the plan. Hope you can update soon and're working on like 5 stories _ I could never do that, I'd have a breakdown with all that. So good for you with being able to deal with it without a problem. Well, I'll see you later. Byez