Hmmm. I'm not sure how I feel about this fic. On some points is well written but at some parts it definitely feels amateurish. Which is odd, because I've read some of your other stuff, and those stories felt more in keeping with the Haruhi Suzumiya series. Then I look at how old this story is and I realize how long ago you wrote this. Obviously people improve in writing at time goes on. This story isn't bad, and has some interesting ideas, but I'd be lying if I didn't say I was skimming at some parts. It's hard to explain the things that threw me off, but still though, interesting read nonetheless.

First person narratives are bomb! Especially when there is a sarcastic narrator like KYON!

As usual
Blasting past and beyond my expectations is the average for you sir
Your art will live on here Mr. Brian 'Durandal'

This is one of my favorite Haruhi Suzumiya fics, and one of the first of Durandall's stories I read back in January.
Tanabata is today. Normally, on this day, he would post a one-shot. In honor of this, I am posting a review of this story.

Happy Tanabata, Durandall.
I wish you were still alive to enjoy it.

honestly this is completely brilliant.
the interpretation of the characters, how its solved all of it

Really nice. I liked how you took the plot device of "it was all a dream" and applied it to fool Haruhi to restore everything to normal. I loved it!

It seems that you are ahead of your times, the ending was more of inception than the movie was (and written before it came out).

Brilliant work, sseriously. bravo.

Pretty awesome fic, as I've come to expect from you. Kyon's ending like was pretty cool.

awesome just awesome

A totally awesome story, well-thought-out and with not a single plothole I noticed; you really have a penchant for writing original and interesting Haruhi fanfiction. Captivating storytelling, especially in the later chapters; even though there are no physical signs of the end of the world it is felt; the atmoshere is tense, which makes the story fast-paced and makes the reader unable to stop reading.

The characters act like they should. Specifically liked Kyon-Koizumi interactions - entertating and appropriate considering their situation and interests.

The solution to the problem was pure genius and Kyon's performance flawless. A magnificent liar indeed. And the ending scene at the train station was simply the best.

Now, there's just one thing that jarred me in the course of the story was Yuki. Your portrayal of her anyway. On the technical side of the plot she was okay, doing her magical thing as usual, so it didn't affect the story much. She was just too human. It was unreasonable making her suddenly become so... so un-Nagato-like just for the hell of it if it didn't make much sense in the story. Too sudden.

And the other point is the honorifics. Suddenly having every person use it for no conceivable explanation or reason. This part was OOC. Kyon just starts calling Nagato 'Yuki-chan', but then Haruhi does that too, but it's not all because even -Koizumi- calls her 'Yuki-chan' once. And then there is Nagato calling Kyon with '-kun', which is a part of the previous problem. There are other instances too, but I'm lazy to look for them.

Cool story.

Just a quick catch: Yuki referred to Kyon by his nickname on the roof. Watch out for that. :)

And the Nagato-fanboys are not dissapointed D

Quote: "In essence, each change, like a ripple of water across a pool, will refract and create that many more waves when they rebound. As you should know, opposing waves do not cancel one another out when they meet; they combine into larger waves." EndQuote.

Are you sure about that? If two wavefronts of equal magnitude - one going left, the other moving right - collide with each other, won't they be neutralized? And if they did combine, wouldn't the magnified wave be limited to the point of intersection, after which the waves separate, proceeding along their original vectors?

I need to dig out my old physics notes ...

*smirks*

Okay, the epilogue was a bit fluffy but that aside it was a nice story.

It felt more true to the original than 'Error in Calculation' but only slightly. The writing was solid and at few points made me chuckle which is nice.

Hrm, nothing more I can really say, though.

ed

PS: In chapter 4 at the beginning somewhere there is a typo, "bur" instead of "but"

Pardon the expression, but WOW! That was F-King INCREDIBLE. That will be all.