This was really good to read! Too sadyou hadn't the opportunity to add to it.

11/3/24
Fantastic story line, liked it better than the original. Here is hoping for more.

Too bad this fic is abandoned Its started out pretty good!

Great story, I will look forward to future chapters! PSchlegs.

Your need for dramatically stalling giving information has me absolutely hating your story. Both Harry’s are fucking idiots. Harry should have started telling hermione immediately after getting away from hogwarts. The reasons for the several delays were retarded and pointless. Hermione should have started attacking Harry for being kidnapped right out of school when he refused to explain immediately.
Second, following canon is stupid. It’s impossible so forcing canon to be pretty much the same is retarded. You cannot keep the timeline the same. It is IMPOSSIBLE.

I think you were wrong and illogical and cruel to show and allow Snape to kill that innocent family and children. And to show Amelia Bones stupid enough to transfer that tracking charm on another person instead of an object or an animal. That would not risk the safety of that person and his family by Dumbledore and his minions. Besides in order to be subtle there should have been direct order from Dumbledore to Snape that he is to harm no other person. Or in exchange for Snape being safe Ministry or someone honest responsible in Ministry magically monitors Snape so he doesn't physically, fatally, magically harm another person. That's why Snape takes out his frustrations more in the way he does. Verbally and also manipulation etc, not physically harming anyone directly. If you ever decide to continue this story, I hope you rewrite it and cut out that horrible scene.

Fantastic and exciting start. Young Harry was admirably circumspect in his approach, as advised by his older version. Ron and Dumbledore totally tried my patience though. I was so hoping that Harry, along with Hermione and Sirius, would get to a point where they could retaliate/kickoff a revolution/etc. Thanks!

Add Moron to the needs his ass kicked list

Both Snape and Dumbles need to suffer

Set back Dumbles and time will free up.

The time soon to put Ron is his place

I appreciate the narrator’s honesty with Harry

But it’s so depressing

Excellent

Though I imagine you can call sponsorship a rape list

Excellent mixture of magic and practicality

Lovely set up

Now let’s kick some ass

love the story sad it wasn't finished.