|Reviews for Connecting the Dots|
| Aronim chapter 29 . 3/7
Better. This better illustrates why Luthor being in control is absolutely terrible.
| Aronim chapter 28 . 3/6
Still a great story.
I think, even if the summary is correct according to canon, writing the equation as an actual equation of these elements looks dreadfully silly. It completely undermines the dread built up at the end of the previous chapter. I would recommend removing the spelled out equation and changing it so the short parts in the beginning of this chapter was just the elements, in other words, single words that fit the characters, so it would go
Particularly, after the awesome mind screw and the biblical style ranting of Hinata and Raven, the Anti-Life Equation falls completely flat the way it goes here. Not the effect, not the buildup, but the equation itself should have been kept as a mystery, if nothing else, then to imply that it was something transcendent, something at once so abstract and fundamental that only intellects like Darkseid and Luthor could even come close (or in this case, actually complete it).
Also, I think you should have worked more on making some hints of Darkseid in Luthor. The torture he inflicts on Clark is good, particularly because it reminds the viewer that this "god" is clearly evil after the deceptively pleasant, not even thoughtless, world he has apparently created right at the beginning, with everyone being united, with no real reason to dislike what Luthor had done except for the general principle.
The weird bit here is that I found myself thinking "wait, why is this bad, other than Clark?" and thinking Luthor was not talking complete crap. Until the bit with Lois and then we were back on track. If that was on purpose, then good job. Also a good bit of Nietzsche and I really hope to see some dramatic irony in Luthor praising the will of humanity only to be stopped by it. It does strike me as a little odd that Clark insists on being Superman other than as a setup for Luthor to rant.
Hope this all made sense.
| Guest chapter 21 . 3/2
Love the references to Terry Pratchett's Discworld.
| Blackmane chapter 4 . 3/1
First you shut down a Raging Jinchuriiki with plot-weapons.
Now you give Duck-butt the ability to gather and use Nature energy... that's seriously fucked, you know that right? At no point, other than borrowing the NE has he used it.
Talk about bullshit powerups.
| zomgonozdinosaurs chapter 33 . 2/15
This was absolutely brilliant! I love(d) it! -
You are awesome and so is your story (Honestly don't think this one review conveys how excited I am, nor the extent of how much I love this)!
I was kind of shocked Tenten and Neji ended up together, and let down that Lee did not go for the green lantern gig. I also think it's great how you didn't have Naruto be completely stupid, it's sad when people make it to where it's as if he had no intelligence... at all -_-"
I would have posted smaller reveiws after each chapter but honestly when it comes to a great story like this sometimes I can't help but finish it all and then geek out after. XD lol
Oh, by the by, thank you SO much for making Shikamaru as awesome as I know him to be! :3
Flash was highly amusing, as usual, ha :)
| KoreanGal5 chapter 33 . 2/1
So I just spent two days of free time (in between school, homework, etc.) reading this.
I love it.
What else can I say?
It's so crazy.
Oh, and I'm sleepy.
Good night and thank you for writing this.
| Mystery Melmoth chapter 28 . 1/25
It's so awesome to see a Shikamaru like that. Good Job SIr.
| Aronim chapter 26 . 12/30/2013
"Me am not sent to help you". Did you make a mistake in Bizarro's opposite speak or is he there to help them? The knuckle-cracking seems to indicate that he is there to fight him, but shouldn't he then say "Me am not here to stop you" or something like that?
| Aronim chapter 25 . 12/30/2013
Ugh, now I feel embarrassed about my knee-jerk reaction to the xkcd thing. Oh, well, great chapter here.
Ugh, now all trust will fall apart. Great.
And I just though "Crisis on Infinite Earths" through the whole multiverse talk.
| Aronim chapter 24 . 12/30/2013
He, fun chapter. Ha, Sasha Nein. Brilliant.
That xkcd, while funny, annoys me slightly. Those mathematicians are being smug, not correct. Math is the language of the discussion, not the subject.
You probably already have some, but if not, you can add a reader from Denmark to that tally.
| Aronim chapter 21 . 12/29/2013
I love this chapter, the interactions between the Ninja's and the DC people are hilarious.
And you manage to give me slight sympathy for Sasuke, mostly because he is the spitting image of Zuko fro Avatar in this chapter. And because I always enjoy seeing the haughty broken.
Really liked seeing Rancid earlier too.
| Anarade Relle chapter 33 . 12/27/2013
Geeze! I had my doubts that a *Naruto* and a Justice League Crossover could do justice (See what I did?) to both universes. I was very pleased see that the answer was, in fact, that somebody could and you did. I liked the mentality clashes between the Leaguers and the Nin, well done... Well done all-together. I'll be re-reading this a few times since I had to speed read some parts to get to the end in my haste.
| Aronim chapter 13 . 12/17/2013
Ha, "streets paved with time". Sounds like you've read Sandman, unless I'm ignorant of an older source of that. Awesome.
You write some really good mindscrew here in the end.
| Aronim chapter 8 . 12/17/2013
This story is very impressive. All the leaguers seem spot-on and, though I can't really speak for the ninjas because of my relative ignorance of that manga (except for the broad strokes), this still works, so you also write them as their own, distinct characters, who work even for the relatively uninitiated.
What I really find interesting is how you, while presumably keeping the ninjas in character, also showcase how different and frankly, messed up these teenagers are seen from a modern viewpoint. They are violent, paranoid and frankly, quite unpleasant. Naruto's attitude during the fight, his uncaring and joking thoughts about the maiming and potential killing of the leaguers really shows him as someone who, despite being a practical messiah in his world, seems mildly psychopathic in the DC world. Also, I know his complete apparent disregard for the damage he is going to inflict with his major attacks is kinda disconcerting, considering that earlier he seems aware of the fact that there are thousands around him. If he is supposed to have noticed that the people have been evacuated, you don't quite get that across in the text.
And Sakura and a couple of the others' constant derision of the leaguers' "gibberish" and the "it almost sounds like they are trying to speak"-comments makes them sound really racist or at least ignorant, kinda like the stereotypical white man going "oh, look the black man almost sounds like he is actually speaking". Which I guess is fitting for someone who is more in the mindset of a pretty isolationist and medieval-seeming society. All in all, I think the ninjas come across as quite unlikable a lot of the time, which I don't necessarily mind, because it shows how alien they are to most of the DC Earth.
| MBScavenger1498 chapter 32 . 12/1/2013
Hm... Do I detect some echoes of Owlman in that last scene? Amazing fic. I know I already said it, but I think it bears saying again. You, my friend, have made something special here. On to the last chapter I guess.