Reviews for More Than A Feeling
Guest chapter 33 . 2/4
The story don't make sense at all with the mistake on both spelling and grammar, not to mention the plot as well. Like how naruku's son turn into naruku later on and the sudden disappearance after kagome been kidnapped by him. The kikyo and inuyasha plot at the beginning as well on when inuyasha first got hurt by kikyo, he know kikyo is working with naraku then why the hell he go back with her after the injury and attack kagome later on in the village near the well.
There also a repeat chapter 18 posted as well, so I think you seriously need to rewrite the whole story so that it make sense and also add in the missing plot to link the event together. Right now the story look like a random draft you make on an sudden inspiration or thought.
shikilove chapter 16 . 2/29/2016
Its a great fan fiction! and I really like the story. Chapter 14 needs some editing though.
Undertheskys chapter 6 . 10/30/2015
The story has a simple and boring storyline. Try expanding on your dialogs because you can only take so much of "okya", it starts becoming boring to read. The dialog is also important, having simple conversation where characters just ask a question and get anwser right away doesn't really get you anywhere because then its just a unless conversation from the beginning. YOUR STORY IS TOO PASSIVE! Make arguments, make them aggressive, PUT SOME DRAMA INTO THE STORY. Having the characters agreeing to everything isn't intriguing. You need to develop the story some more and leave out unnecessary dialogs and changing clothes scenes, unless its something you HAVE to write about them changing, we really dont need to read that every single time she goes to take a bath and changes her clothes. You need to work on many things in you story. I'm NOT sorry about all criticism because you REALLY need it. Hopefully you get this and read it.
Undertheskys chapter 5 . 10/30/2015
Half bread... really? CHECK YOUR STORY BEFORE YOU POST
Undertheskys chapter 4 . 10/30/2015
You grammar and punctuation needs more work. Many words spelt incorrectly. Sentences make no sense, missing words is the problem. CHECK BEFORE YOU POST
Undertheskys chapter 3 . 10/30/2015
Can believe he killed Shippo. He's such a good kid
Undertheskys chapter 2 . 10/30/2015
Haha it would be funny if Kagome said "Go puppy, attack him" to Sesshomaru
Kakashi911 chapter 5 . 3/9/2015
OK, so you apparently had a beta. Get a new one, they suck. You really need to rewrite this. It'd be more enjoyable if it was proper.
Kakashi911 chapter 4 . 3/9/2015
This is a good story and all, but the quality is horrid. You constantly using the present tense makes it look retarded, and you incorrectly mix the past and present tense together incorrectly. You're not using enough commas either. I suggest for future stories, you get a beta.
kagomehigurashi500 chapter 1 . 10/15/2014
This story was awesome XD
Sessomarufan chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
lol 'the cold (but hot)' couldn't describe Sesshomaru better u
christonni chapter 2 . 9/9/2013
how in the hell can kikiyo have a baby, she is dead !
Guest chapter 2 . 8/22/2013
u just said in tge prologue that she loved inu til this day *confused*
GoddessOfInuYokai chapter 33 . 7/1/2013
Wow nice :3
This GoddessOfInuyokai is amused :1
Soul Miko chapter 25 . 6/21/2013
There are lots of words that are spelled wrong in lots of the chapters, in this one too.
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