Ik it’s been years but let me rant plz. Japan? Europe? China? What im the world? The story us super slow. We keep cutting to Akatsuki for no reason at all. I get that you want to focus on natuto’s childhoos but the pacing is horrible. It’s too slow for the story you want to tell. And what is force? Why intorduce a 6th element, when we know that there are ninja who specialize in genjutusu. You made hinita shy but yet confrontational when she first met naruto why she change soo much? The only reason Hisashi treated hinaya like that in the original story was because hinita looked a lot like her mother. Making naruto the class dove makes no sense cause he mainly did that because he wanted attention and love, he has that now, no need for it. And if you really wanted the three to be together, you could do it and no one could really question it. Mangekyuo abilities are UNIQUE. Madara being able to use Amaterasu doesn’t. And according to your own charataization of madara, he would’ve shown himself to naruto by now. So many problems with this story.

I was enjoying thr story till it became too crossover heavy for my taste

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Great chapter thank you for your wonderful work

Bro no hate honestly you could have used a OC senju or tsunade as a plot twist like she was born right now instead of before the 1st ninja war Hinata here doesn’t act like her and her name is also different and her attitude was more like tsunade honestly

pls finish this its so good

Juss got to the part where I think Hinata first meets naruto. (Don’t know if it’s her haven’t read that far yet, saw this part and had to same something) and the forts think I thought when I read this part was “the heck type of hinata is this” her saying “hey” and talking like that caught me off guard. Since I am making a review right now, I might as well say it love the first chapter. Can’t wait to keep reading this.

I have to wonder is there a fic where the third doesn't completely fail to protect Naruto or even just ensure he gets the bare minimum of care and not constant abuse?

So uh, Naruto doesn't take place in Japan and China doesn't exist. This is established by the time you started writing this story. Add in the fact that we're 7 chapters in and he's still in the academy with Madara sealed inside of him and he knows basically nothing after years of dealing with that and being essentially a prodigy and it's just not connecting. It's a massive waste of time that you cut away to the Akatsuski, most of which doesn't make sense in the first place. Kimimaro was already under Orochimaru by this point in the series, you bring in an OC that is stronger than the Raikage, give the Rinnegan to someone who never would have been able to handle it because they're transplants and not naturally awoken, Hinata being essentially an OC just breaks the story and making her a Senju injects yet another set of OCs for her parents and nullifies the reason Tsunade left the village in the first place and relegated a freaking Senju to being an orphan.

The story isn't horrible, but I haven't got far into it and I never will. This is where I'm closing this story due to the nonsensical choices, the heavy OC presence and dozens upon dozens of plot holes.

pls I need the update Im in terrible suspense here

Lol you uchiha ain't same chakra reserved as uzumaki

This fic is a masterpiece. Read through the whole thing in a few days and it's one of the best I've read on this site. Hopefully one day you'll return to give the story an ending it deserves but if not thanks for the awesome fic. Hope you're doing well!

Okay, so I know you said not to review about the rinnegan, but I'm only asking a question. I'm confused on how yahiko could live with the rinnegan. The only reason nagato was able to live was because of his uzumaki life force. I mean I get it's cool for someone else to have it, but said person doesn't have the Chakra or life force to handle the powers of the rinnegan

glad to see you back

am really sick of these cuts from the main story to introduce akatsuki members.
its just a watse of tim to come up with how each akatski member landed into the akatsuki,and i find it a bigger waste of time to read it.
lots of people read this story to see how naruto gets stronger with the help of madara and his sharingan.
so far all you've basically been writing about is naruto and hinata sneaking out. how many times naruto would embarrass himself for a girl. side characters and oc's no one cares about getting backstories.
Naruto has FREAKING MADARA INSIDE HIM.
SPEAKING TO HIM
but by the time he is genin he only knows like TWO JUTSU.
madara has basically full acces to naruto but has actualy DONE anything about that.
Am done with this story
ill just find another one