Reviews for Sinister Chakra
Dhaem17 chapter 6 . 5/16/2010
Overall: good writing, good dialogue, as always, but...

... how you handled Hinata making her a very different character from canon was one of the most interesting points that made me read this fic. To turn hern in a copycat from the canon version... no, just no, please. For that we already have the manga or the other million fanfics with a shy normal Hyuuga Hinata.

Aside from that, keep up the good work ;)
Commedia chapter 6 . 5/16/2010
you do realize your naruto will unleash blazing death upon the hyuuga clan when he realizes what has been done to hinata? how bad is that confrontation going to be? madara could take advantage of his vulnerable state and...black fire everywhere...ow. will naruto be forced out of konoha? would he go to yahiko? i can actually see the two getting along. naruto would like a world with justice and peace for the weak who can't defend themselves, and yahiko would be touched by naruto's devotion and ideals. am i on track? or not? great chapter overall, but seemed to lack major interplay. you're building up to something and i can't wait.
tedlay chapter 5 . 5/4/2010
awesome story please udapte asap please
Guest chapter 4 . 5/3/2010
I've read both this story and The Second Born and I think this story is the better one. The Second Born kinda drags on a bit and the chapters get so long sometime it gets hard to read. don't get me wrong i like long chapters but it has 15 chapters and like 3160 thousand words.
naruhinarox chapter 3 . 5/2/2010
i have been reading new chance and an idea on how mizuki dies THE WEDGIE OF DEATH
BloodFox64 chapter 5 . 4/28/2010
Good story, and from what I can see it has a LOT of potential to be a long and well made story. But how will it work out with the team that Naruto wants? And I may not have written any storys but I can see if a story can be a good story and I think that this will be if done right and not like what Kishimoto has done to Naruto.

Hope to see a new chapter soon!
RinnaS chapter 5 . 4/27/2010
Your story is really great!
I don't like Hinata, but I suppose she is OK in your fic.
naruhina chick 87 chapter 5 . 4/27/2010
I really love the story but i'm wondering about the uchia clans murder will it steal happen. what about jiraya and tsunade. will narto find out about mandara at the same time as kyuubi. enough questions. can we have a hinata playing a prank on sasuke that would be funny. Maybe hinata playing a prank on her father.[he does deserve it] so will hinata ever get the bakugan.
EDelta88 chapter 5 . 4/20/2010
Fugaku nodded, though a little slowly. A grin began to creep on his face…perhaps he would support Naruto's relationship with Hinata…the benefits seemed far too tempting…the look on Hiashi's face if Hinata married an Uchiha…-there are no words to describe how satisfying that would be

lol Sasuke-chan is jealous! He doesn't like someone else hogging Naruto XD

Sigh, silly Madara, there are lots of ways to destroy something. For example, Konoha is broken, a "diseased tree." Should the diseased limbs be burnt away the Konoha from before would no longer exist, thus "Konoha" was destroyed
EDelta88 chapter 4 . 4/20/2010
I like your Fugaku

You know, if Hiashi wants Hinata as an ally later he is doing a REALLY bad job of swaying her to his side. Seriously, the way he's treating her is bordering on illegal... you know if that were to come to the attention of the Police (coughUchihacough) there would be a strong argument to have Hinata removed from the Hyuuga's care

that was epic
EDelta88 chapter 3 . 4/20/2010
jesus, should the Hokage have someone watching Hinata if she's so important? With the way Hiashi's treating her it would be better to give her to her enemies. I mean the Uchiha aren't great but at least they aren't abusive

lol Naruto and Hinata the two that will end the age old family feud

well you certainly didn't make it hard to despise Hiashi

"I escaped from my Clan for the day!"-very appropriate wording

"That's…interesting," Itachi noted to Shisui, whose mouth had dropped open.-it would seem that Itachi has a talent for understatement

and Madara can take control, now that IS interesting
EDelta88 chapter 2 . 4/20/2010
Hinata Senju? well that's an interesting twist

Hm? Fugaku letting the Hyuuga have Hinata? VERY interesting. Although I'd like to point out that Tsunade would be the clan head of the Senju since she IS one

Um in cannon Nagato was the one with Rinnegan not Yahiko
EDelta88 chapter 1 . 4/20/2010
well this is new
Kel Tenrou Rikudou chapter 5 . 4/18/2010
awesome story! if I didn't review the last chapter (which i thought I did) I'm sorry. Keep 'em up and I'll keep reading!

Ps I NOW PREMOTE YOU TO MCaweSOME GOD-KING OF UBERaweSOMENESS!
ArmouredxSaint chapter 5 . 4/17/2010
Great story I can't wait to find out what happens in later chapters. Update soon!
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