|Reviews for Crossroads of Desperation|
| Brisalad chapter 4 . 11/18
oh my gosh this is so beautiful! how come I've never seen it before? You deserve tons of reviews for this lovely piece of work, I loved how you went through each character's point of view at this depressing time and I think you've done a great job of it. Don't worry Toph was completely spot on in her character from what I believe, because I agree of what you wrote about him being her first true friend and how special he is to her yet also being annoyed at him for not protecting himself properly, it's just a Toph thing to do! Sokka was equally as accurate on in his perspective of his relationship with Aang and his idea of failing to protect. Zuko was absolutely beautiful, using that quote from Aang and letting Zuko remember it, totally broke me, really well done. I must say that Katara is the only one I'm disappointed in, because despite knowing she's compassionate, I think she'd have a bit better grip with her emotion, like when she thought Aang died for those few seconds she just whimpered and although totally broken she kept her composure, so I think you needed to portray her as more in control and more blaming herself for Aang's near death. other than that though, everything is marvellous, totally enjoyed it and you have a real talent in writing, so keep on doing what you're doing!
| Guest chapter 4 . 5/23/2016
Bravo, I really enjoyed reading this sweet story, could you please do a continuation of what happens when Aang wakes up? like the reactions of the gang in your own interpretation? that would be great.
| Guest chapter 2 . 5/23/2016
You definitely pulled it off, this is even better than Katara's one :)
| Guest chapter 4 . 4/9/2015
Somehow it had never even occurred to me to think about how the others would have taken this kind of thing, for Aang to have been out for so long-especially Zuko, not being a part of the Gaang yet.
Your last apparent activity was some four years ago, but on the off-chance that you do see this anyway, please know that this was really, really enjoyable and well-written. The one complaint is that the promised fifth chapter is absent, taking with it Aang's viewpoint (presumably after he wakes up and realizes what his friends went through?).
Even so, it doesn't feel incomplete, so excellent work.
| RollingStars chapter 2 . 12/23/2011
You did very well capturing Toph's character! I enjoyed every moment of it. Keep up the great work!
| Sokka'sFirstFangirl chapter 1 . 11/6/2010
So sweet! Kataang rules
Zutara makes no sense.
| Rast chapter 4 . 10/2/2010
I love all of these, but Zuko's is hands-down my favorite. I really hated him for a while after S2, and I never even tried to get into his head and figure him out there and now I'm disappointed in myself for that because you've done a really fantastic job here making him less of a bastard and more of a real person. Awesome writing.
The whole thing definitely clinches on the quote at the end and I have to say that I was blinking back tears at that point. Mostly because I love Aang so much, and his line about being friends in that episode always gets me, but in light of Zuko's thought process through this whole thing, it adds weight.
The *real* beginning of Zuko finally starting to grow up. Awesomely done. I really wish something like this had been included in the series, I think this goes a long way toward showing Zuko's motivations in S3.
I'm envious. You make me want to write a better/deeper Zuko ;)
| SydneyRichelle chapter 4 . 9/3/2010
very well done. I enjoyed it a lot, although there is that missing final chapter I was rather anticipating...and judging from last update date I will never get it.. oh well tragedy is good for the soul right.
| dcp1992 chapter 3 . 8/30/2010
Those are really good, when are you going to do Aang?
| carebear2010 chapter 4 . 8/24/2010
I really like your writing style. I agree with your profile about the saying "I love you" and then everything is perfect. being married for over 12 years, I know that doesn't happen. I really liked how realistic with Toph your were, I can see her reacting like that and thought that you kept her IC very well. Thanks for writing this, and I hoope you continue this one and write others.
| arizony chapter 4 . 8/21/2010
Jonathan, I think you have, once again, captured the essence of the character. So many authors portray Zuko, and the rest of the Gaang, as very one dimensional. You have always gone far, far beyond that single dimension, though. You have captured Zuko and who and what he is in this (again) wonderful one-shot. I am looking forward to your next update of Aang's pov. BTW, if you haven't read it yet, I would suggest you take a look at "The Price of Falling" by Rast. Her story is a much more in depth portrayal of Katara's pov. Like you, she is an excellent author, and (again, like you) deserves that title in every sense of the word.
| Glon Morski chapter 4 . 5/23/2010
That was a touching story... well, ok, touching one-shots since, no offense, they hardly seem to be related to one another, except for the fact that all monilogues have even started because of Aangs coma.
Anyway, you really pulled Toph and Sokka off and I congratulate you on that. And Zuko's thoughts, those deep, philosophical monologue that only brought him to saying 'I know that I know nothing at all' (well, he didn't really say it, but he might as well have 'cause that's the truth: he doen't know anything anymore) were really mazing.
But, i think you overdid Katara there a little. I mean, I can see where she's coming from and I understand why she's suffering so much, but if you look at her in the series, even when she's crying, she either stays more or less calm or is completely mad. But she never breaks down like you made her do. in my opinion, that made her OOC. Her thoughts were really fitting, I could well imagine her thinking all that, but the crying to the point that she couldn't stand upright anymore just seems too... I don't know... girly? I mean, Katara isn't some weak, dependant girl. She has coirage, and temper and she knows well how to fight. She hates being underestimated. And while she truly was affected by Aangs injury, I don't think she would act like she couldn't live without Aang.
Other than that, I loved it. Hope to see another good 'one-shot' here soon, ne :3
| Animus of Masada chapter 4 . 3/12/2010
Awesome chapter! I liked this one the best out of all of them (Zuko is my favorite character, afterall, and this is one of the big reasons why).
| one from Denmark chapter 1 . 3/11/2010
it was a relly great story. you are rihgt about katanng and what you said about zutara.
| I-love-random-internet-stories chapter 4 . 3/11/2010
Fantastic! A really great ending (because I think you've now done all the characters you were planning one, or am I wrong?) to a really good series. I loved how you captured Zuko's confusion and already the seeds of regret, of wondering about the Fire Nation and who he is, about his uncle and the Avatar and the victims of the war. And also his pain at being hated even when he had tried to do good, and his realisation that he isn't the prince he was once, he's been a beggar and a theif and a fugitive and a lot else besides. So really well done on a complex character.
Only 2 critiques
1) "Caused this mitosis in me" is a bit odd. Mitosis is how cells reproduce to produce two identical daughetr cells from one cell. There should be no change at all, unless something's gone wrong. Therefore, calling Zuko's change a "mitosis" makes no sense. Perhaps you mean metamorphasis?
2) Although I liked how you fitted in the quote from "The Blue Spirit", Zuko is already doubting that Aang is dead by the first chapter of book three, because he know about Katara's Spirit Water. Therefore, although I think he would regret what happened to Aang and might believe him dead, I am not entirely sure that he would have so little hope as to his survival. It was partly his belief in Aang's survival that led to his anger and confusion anyway.
Otherwise very good. Sorry about rambling for so long.