|Reviews for Unusual Workings: Destiny|
| Ebony Scales chapter 1 . 1/17
A note about Taisho vs. Tashio.
Taisho is from the 'name' of their father: Inu no Taisho. Taisho, or more 'correctly' written in romaji, Taishou (or taisyou, if going by the way of typing the individual Hiragana used), means 'General', giving their father the name of The Dog General.
Tashio technically has a few meanings depending on the kanji used, but none of them make all that much sense.
| braden.rucinski chapter 1 . 7/17/2012
Hi Valleygoat! D my critique might seem odd, but here it is-
1) Nicely done! I could visualize it! I loved this show and you really kept the characters in character :D
2) Uh, those chunky block paragraphs...are killer. As in, killing my eyes D: Maybe you set it up this way so you could fit everything on the page. If that's the case, continue with a new chapter! lol. But it totally doesn't do justice to your writing. I would suggest that you make a habit of making a new paragraph (most of the time) after dialogue, or when it begins.
3) "Kuabara has on a pair of dark blue almost black jeans, a blue t-shirt and a white over shirt unbuttoned over that; his carrot colored hair in the same unusual 'Elvis' style" AWESOMENESS!
4) "I had a visitor, a short old geezer; kind of reminded me a bit of a toad to come to think about it." -great dialogue
Summing things up-stick to your strengths. Like dialogue and description. Why don't you throw some fighting or action in there, since you are so good with description? i think you should. lol. nice first chapter
| Orchamus chapter 7 . 6/6/2010
Huh...still confused as all hell lol. But hey, heck of a chapter, though I wonder at Genkai's power, considering she gave most of her's to Yusuke.
| merlyn1382 chapter 6 . 5/10/2010
and that is were she is proven wrong the girl may have left by the time she starts her search
| loretta537 chapter 6 . 5/4/2010
this is an interesting story
| M3rky15 chapter 6 . 5/2/2010
I love Sess...And Genkai too. I wonder whats up with this girl...hm...Well, can't wait for the update :)
| RaiKage14 chapter 6 . 5/2/2010
(narrows eyes) why do i have this bad feelin about fluff-but? o.O lol anyways love the chappiee. why do i get a feelin all dis has somethin 2 do wit kaggie.. i mean, like if she died or summin... o nvm ill just keep mah lil idears 2 myselfses so it dont spoil anythin unintentionaly if on the slim chance i Might be right o.O. ima gogogo nowsiee (groans unhappily) stupid mom makin me take a stupid 1 hour long run... evill... o srry o.O bye bye!
| bulletproof trucker hats chapter 6 . 5/2/2010
And the plot thickens... This is getting so interesting! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| Silver chapter 6 . 5/2/2010
OK, I'm a bit confused by this chapter. Does this have anything to do with cannon IY or should I stop trying to fit them together? Good story though.
| Orchamus chapter 6 . 5/2/2010
Huh, I'm confused.
| Sable Scribe chapter 6 . 5/1/2010
Who is the girl and how does Sesshouarmau want to use her?
I'm terribly curious.
| merlyn1382 chapter 5 . 4/27/2010
so who is the lucky or in this case unlucky student
| SweetSnow01 chapter 5 . 4/22/2010
YAY! Loving it! I hope its a Sess/Kag pairing. Dont see many of those in xovers. Plz update soon.
| M3rky15 chapter 5 . 4/21/2010
o...I wonder who the student will be? Update soon :D
| tinabug chapter 5 . 4/20/2010
love the update. finally some action