|Reviews for 69|
| yaoiprincess101 chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
Tenebrae's too perverted...Colette's either dense or just genuinely doesn't understand.
| L'arc Shadobright chapter 1 . 12/12/2012
ok this was pretty funny
| ChidoriTachibana chapter 1 . 7/20/2011
Aw man! This is some good crack. I slapped my forehead when Tenebrae explained the reason why he liked the number 69. The perverted old Centurion. I guess that's what happens when you get to know a few... disturbing things in life. Keep writing on!
| Fenrisa chapter 1 . 8/15/2010
XD That's great! I can also see everybody being clueless, except Zelos, of course! Well, maybe lloyd too! Oh I'd love to see his reaction when colette asks him. XDDD
| videogamer93 chapter 1 . 7/21/2010
| RandomAbadon chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
No, wait...I don't get it? O_o? hmm.. Oh well..
| AntiSora chapter 1 . 2/17/2010
Very amusing. I can see Tenebie doing that, it really would be just like him. XD And Colette really would be that oblivious. Which is cute.
Poor Emil and Marta, though. XD Be better if they didn't get it. Ha... This was cute! ..
| Crow T R0bot chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
Before I have anything good to say, I feel obliged to point out that whenever dialogue occurs, you have to start a new paragraph when a different character speaks than the one who previously said something. For example...
“Sixty nine,” the Centurion said bluntly, chuckling after he answered. Marta saw him laugh and started to wonder what was up. She pushed past the Chosen and Knight and kneeled down to meet Tenebrae’s eyes. “What…why sixty nine?” Tenebrae held back another snicker and turned away from Lualdi, masking his face with a paw. “It’s-It‘s nothing at a-all…nothing…pft….hahaha!” Now it had evolved into a hysterical laugh.
Should actually be...
“Sixty nine,” the Centurion said bluntly, chuckling after he answered.
Marta saw him laugh and started to wonder what was up. She pushed past the Chosen and Knight and kneeled down to meet Tenebrae’s eyes. “What…why sixty nine?”
Tenebrae held back another snicker and turned away from Lualdi, masking his face with a paw. “It’s-It‘s nothing at a-all…nothing…pft….hahaha!” Now it had evolved into a hysterical laugh.
Note how when it was Marta's turn to talk, she got her own paragraph, while Tenebrae got a second one when he spoke again.
Gee, 18 is your favorite number? Is it because your body's last owner might have been that age? :P
And Tenebrae...it figures *you* would be a perv, if only to get everyone's goat. I already knew the term, "69" and was initially surprised that this fic got a T-rating, though your approach was obviously cleaner than the title implied. Nonetheless, it was still funny as the summary implied it would be. XD
That said, one thing bugged me. Unless you're implying that Emil and Marta figured out the definition on their own after Tenebrae gave us that..."interesting" mental image, how come they know what he's talking about while Colette is oblivious? Oh well, at least it allowed her to end it on a hilarious line. Maybe you *should* ask Lloyd, Colette. XD
Speaking of fics with pervy setups, I just posted an Emil/Marta one-shot titled "Lather, Rinse, Hello" the other day. Read and review if you're interested. :P