Reviews for Stories of the Lone Traveler |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Yikes! Remo and Chiun in Naruto? Chaos. Pranks. Stupid people dying... yup, this verse just got turned up to 11. |
![]() ![]() Really? Are there complaints? If the form demands it, I criticise, though I do try and stay constructive. For bad spelling/homophones/punctuation/formatting. But for wish fulfilment? That's what fanfiction is there for, isn't it? And the episodes are too short for much character development. Apart from crossovers into territory I'm not familiar with, the story/stories has/have a central theme, and sometimes it just needs only a small nudge. I think it's entirely okay the way it is. |
![]() ![]() Nice to see that there's one fanfic author who sees what Snape did to magical Britain. He had one and a half decades to make sure that only students hand-picked by him were able to acquire a potions NEWT. Imagine the only force trained in magical combat under Riddle's command the moment he reveals himself. Imagine death eater healers culling any undesirables at the same moment and never again treating anyone else but death eaters. That's what Snape facilitated. And Dumbledore MUST have known that. It's impossible that he could not see that the number of potions NEWTs went down considerably as soon as Snape took over and that those who got them were from pureblood/death eater families. |
![]() ![]() Unless Snape has ALREADY played with the Hogwarts defences they can be breached by just walking through the gate/door, depending if you want to get into the castle or just the grounds. A dark lords has done so in canon, several times. The darkest of dark artefacts. Illegal animagi galore. Even more death eaters. Polyjuiced people. Possessed people. Thousands of class XXXXX creatures: dragons, a manticore for Hagrid's illegal cross-breeding, and acromantula (well, at least two were brought in, but now they're thousands). A feral full giant (Hagrid came out of the forest for WEEKS with fresh injuries, Grawp was NOT tame at first). Poisons can be brought in. Portkeys can get out, and I'm not sure about in, Dumbledore's did, but perhaps because he was the headmaster. Brooms can easily get in. And, well, except muggles everyone can just stroll through the gate/door. Which is the reason why I think that Draco is an inbred pathetic loser. Why try and repair that cabinet for all of a school year, instead of just have the death eaters walk in on the first of September during the feast? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope you come back to this chapter's spinoff, Results of a Proper Introduction, story; it was getting really good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just a small niggle, Sparhawk's wife's name is Ehlana. Elenia is the name of the country of which she is queen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Historias cortas pero maravillosas. Alegran bastante. ️ |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know this is late, but in response to the question at the bottom: Apharel. Sorry if I spelled the name wrong, I haven't read the Sparhawk books in ~2 years. |
![]() ![]() ![]() so glad Ariana was saved! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Really enjoyed this chapter. Gotta appreciate when good things happen for Luna |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() Prune juice, a warriors drink. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have always enjoyed and loved the stories of the Lone Traveler. I also want to thank you for writing them. This in all likely hood has been said but You should go over the last dozen chapters looking for errors in spelling/work placement. Like you referenced H. Granger as a he instead of a she. Stuff like that. I wish you would write more or at flush out more of the stories here. 5 or 6 chapters each makes great reading and brings joy and laughter to the soul. thank you for being such a good writer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You did it! No, WE DID IT! ... No... Brakir did it. |