|Reviews for For the love of my sister|
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/18
this is kind of racist. Europeans brought tea to the American continents. and Native Americans had currency, usually shells or beads instead of paper and metal.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/23/2014
What the fuck did I just read?
| kris chapter 7 . 5/11/2014
| Reven207 chapter 7 . 11/30/2011
Nice to see this story continue. But I think that at some point you should fast forward the story a bit and see a bigger pack.
| Just a Crazy-Man chapter 7 . 11/23/2011
Love it. :) Happy Fan. :)
| Just a Crazy-Man chapter 6 . 11/22/2011
Nice. :) Love it. :)
| reven207yahoo.com chapter 6 . 10/17/2011
Is there going to be an update anytime soon?
| Rainea91 chapter 6 . 9/18/2011
WOW what a comeback that was strangely erotic and yet so wrong at the same time anyways great story update soon...man I'm still speechless... Always a faithful reader Rainea91 333
| Octoberskys chapter 4 . 9/1/2011
This chapter and well as the other two small ones before it are missing the depth of the characters you first achieved in the first excellent chapter. This one read more like porn.
Really the second they walk in she brands them and sleeps with B? Wanted to hear how first how happy they were she was alive, and now back home. "Our home". What did the brand look like? Another place to add ore detail. There was no mention of how B felt which I knew every step of the way in the first chapter. Also another opportunity for Ginger to express how intensely she loved B after either receiving the mark of making love. (On here I can't used the F word) "Dang it, you scared the hell out of me B." Hugging her tightly, "Don't do that again!" Biting her shoulder hard enough to almost draw blood, "I mean it B. Never again. I need you too you know."
Just some thoughts. It will make the story more believable unless you are going right for the throat and making it near porn. But it's your story - you can do what you like.
I thought the first chapter was very well done; including the rough treatment to keep her pack in line. You have a talent. It would a shame to loose such a good story for only cheap thrills.
That's my 2 cents...
If I haven't pee'd you off and would like some more advice.. I am willing to offer it.
| Octoberskys chapter 1 . 9/1/2011
I thought this story was pretty good. If anyone want to complain about the grammer - really you should read some other stuff out there. A missing period or the first word of a sentance not being capitolized is FAR better than a lot of crap out there. At least I can follow this story without guessing.. ok who said that? No wait, who picked up the tomahawk? These are issues one can live with.
I also loved your comments below. I am a female salior.. I loved all the F words; being my favorite word. I liked when Ginger went off on Crazy Moose about killing the oracle. I totally would have something EXACTLY like that...
The story has good flow, good action, good direction and dialog. I'd say this was a double thumbs up. I look forward to reading more. I 'was' just popping in this subject for a brief moment, now I have found I have to read the whole thing. Oh darn what a shame, NOT!
Thanks for taking the time and posting for all the world to see. Good stuff.
| Rainea91 chapter 5 . 8/13/2011
This story is funny I admit Brigitte seems to be the a super submissive character you made her in this story anyways love it and please update soon! Always a faithful reader Rainea91
| Lavendersalamander chapter 4 . 7/5/2011
I wish I had found this gem of a story earlier! Everything in it is so beautifully descriptive and well written! The characters are spot on and the OCs are so unique! I will be looking forwards to another chapter! :D
| spiderqween1 chapter 4 . 6/9/2011
Love it, cant wait for the next update.:D
| Rainea91 chapter 4 . 6/9/2011
I'm glad you were given the right push to write more of this you and this story rock! Update soon 3 Rainea91
| Rainea91 chapter 2 . 5/24/2011
I love this story and if you are still willing to update for little old me it would make you my hero... seriously though great story please please update soon! 3 Rainea91