|Reviews for Logia Luffy: Yami edition|
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/7
| Guest chapter 7 . 2/6
| Guest chapter 2 . 2/5
| RenTap chapter 4 . 1/6
You know Luffy ability with the Yami Yami no Mi to absorb and release things remind me of the bad guy from X-men first class you know the one where he can absorb any attack and damage done to him and release it back with twice the power of the original attack
| Pokekid84 chapter 4 . 12/11/2013
Little shop of horrors.
Ingenious. Now i have a new nightmare
| soarath chapter 3 . 12/6/2013
you do know that the yami yami no mi fruit is a lougia type fruit correct? he could just let shit phase through him
| Zaralann chapter 8 . 10/18/2013
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/26/2013
Could do with a bit of spell check, e.g. where you put 'mai', which means dance, you should have put in 'mi' means fruit, and 'gomu' is rubber whereas 'gumo' is spider. Add that to the other spelling mistakes, and you get a bit of a deterrent for potential readers.
The story itself seems great, just please do a bit more proofreading next time.
| The Vale chapter 7 . 8/26/2013
the idea that luffy hits harder when he is heavier and weaker when faster - makes little sense. Because force is calculated as mass * acceleration, if his mass (or i guess relative gravity in this case) is halved and in theory his speed is doubled (or close to it) then the force generated is the same. He'd hit just as hard but twice as fast.
it's the reason for that old saying "in a fight, speed wins" - you get the benefits of power while getting in more hits and getting hit less.
| doubledamn chapter 9 . 8/24/2013
God damn it! Why can't these people leave us alone? Why do they want to cull unrealised creativity? Those bastards get me madder than seeing a Celestial Dragon.
| Lover's Red Rose chapter 1 . 8/21/2013
| The Epic Legion chapter 1 . 8/12/2013
Pretty cool! Continue this!
| Pterodactyl chapter 9 . 8/11/2013
Eh, at this point I think that this story probably has no chance of being updated. I still like it and was looking forward to seeing just where you were going to actually be taking it in the future. I thought that it was going to get a little farther along than this though. Ah well. Just so you know I am really enjoying the story.
You really need to work on your homonym distinctions. there, their, and they're are three different words. the first is locational the second is possessive and the third is a contraction of the words they are. You have some other word mixups but the three theres is the biggest bone pick for me.
Other than that I hope that college is going well. and that you can pick up this later.
| nathanexplosion7294 chapter 4 . 8/8/2013
Your theory for Luffy being able to eat that much doesn't make much sense, seeing as ace garp and teach all eat just as much
| uchiha isuke chapter 1 . 8/1/2013
Just wanted to say its good to see someone giving luffy a different fruit so thanks and if you know any good fanfics please tell me if they are not in your favourites which I plan to look through.