Reviews for Surface Story
Sonikku0691 chapter 1 . 3/24/2010
This is very good. I can't wait what happens next.
Sanvein chapter 1 . 3/13/2010
Hmm, where to start. This is only Feedback, not really a review.

Tis a bit short, needs fleshing out.

Chapter one is good though.

Put each chapter in a separate doc (Or something like that) and add each chapter through Fanfic.

If it was meant to be a short story, and you want to keep it that way remove the Chapters and get it to flow.

Im guessing it's not finished yet, but keep it up, I think you'll write some good story's.