Short but good.

SCREAM

Wow. "My Lady". Those two words tore my heart out! Well done!

"We'll miss you, My Lady." Ach. That hurts. On both sides.
I must say I like your take on this. It makes sense and I can see where she's going with the coming-of-age-type of angle, even if she is struggling. Very nicely done.

Ariel_of_Narnia

i dunno why but this story is very touching.

everyone i have met sees susan in a dark light but you have shown her as a good and mature character and that is really sweet.

IT'S SO SAD.

*sniffles*

It's almost bittersweet. (I do love bittersweet.) The way Susan is twisted because she doesn't want to leave Narnia and how nobody quite understands her.

Another point- The story wasn't so long, and she wasn't going pathetic-agnst the whole story, but you got the message across anyway.

I also love the Susan/Edmund sibling fluff. I always thought they must be close as Peter and Lucy are.