|Reviews for The girl|
| Sammy's girl helena chapter 1 . 11/15/2011
The words dont make sence in the order that they are put... It needs some more editing and revising also.
| SpyNya-Chan007 chapter 1 . 7/20/2010
Not bad. I liked it. :)
| TheUlitimateGleek chapter 1 . 5/14/2010
? I don't know what to say
| Sallafe K chapter 1 . 4/14/2010
I feel like I'm about to start repeating myself here.
Please reread and think on what you're saying before you post a story. And again-FictionPress calls your name.
| Voler Libre chapter 1 . 3/6/2010
its a good story line but you could improve it by adding more details, maybe naming some people, and describing the surroundings more, but otherwise its a really great story
| WolfRaisins chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
You used "no" instead of "know" and "past" instead of "passed".
Also all of the sentences were about the same length and short so it was annoying to read. You should combine some of them with the word "and".