Reviews for Assembly Required
notactiveonff chapter 1 . 3/20/2011
So, I was reading fanfiction today. Somehow through links of favs, I landed on this, AND I read the reviews. AND AND AND I swore I reviewed this. WHY ISN'T IT THERE? :'( I guess, my memory fails me, and I'd better get on that nonexistent review now, huh?

Well, you know I love Darry, and I think you did an awesome job characterizing him. I especially enjoyed him contrasting his glory days to his present. I always thought he'd have a hard time coping with going from the golden boy to guardian overnight. I mean, he seems to cope with it okay on the exterior, but like you've shown, there's a lot of internal stuff getting to him. I can't say I blame him. That's a LOT of stress for anyone to deal with, but the poor guy's only twenty!

And it's so tragic that he won't ease up on himself. Sure, he makes mistakes, but he does an awesome job, considering everything on his plate. I guess, that's probably the ironic part of everything, though; he does a good job BECAUSE he is hard on himself. I'm not sure someone with Two-Bit's laidback attitude could've done all Darry has.

Slightly random and unrelated, but I always chuckle at the end of this. Not that I find Darry's suffering amusing, but the oneshot ends on such a somber note, and then you break in with, "So whatcha think? Please review if you can!" For some reason I imagine you saying that in such a pleasant tone, and the contrast from the emotional weight of the ending makes me giggle. Maybe I'm just weird. :P

In all seriousness, though, I really enjoy this oneshot of yours. Might be my favorite thing on your profile. This, your Cherry oneshot or Sandy! I can't decide.
Hawaiichick chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
Great story! You don't really realize how much stress Darry has on his shoulders as the guardian of Soda and Pony. What a wonderful way to show a "day in the life" of Darry. I really liked how you mentioned that now it was Darry's job to worry if Pony was too skinny...if he was healthy. So much responsibility for a 20 year old. This story really makes you think about another aspect of things in the book. Awesome story!
PrincessSkywalkerOrgana chapter 1 . 3/26/2010
:-(. poor darry. i look forward to reading sinkers and suds
JamieDidn'tDieInCulloden chapter 1 . 3/25/2010
A great story. Very well written.
White Lion 18 chapter 1 . 2/25/2010
I like this, you write really good.
kelly the fanfiction addict chapter 1 . 2/25/2010
aww poor darry! not enough money for groceries. that sucks. poor poor darry :( but awesome story!

Mopiece chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
This was really good. You should really write Darry more often. You really caught that all of what he'd be going through after his parents died.

Simba11 chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
Aw, Darry needs a hug.
NittanyLizard chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
Loved it! You write a good Darry.

"I felt like I was twelve all over again, walking into things at the sight of curves." Lol, great line. There were a lot of great lines. I thought you did a really good job bringing out the person in Darry and giving him depth.

starryeyedwr1ter chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
aww poor Darry. I've read a few one shots about how troubled Darry is but this one stands out for two reasons.

1) He is usually painted as this weary angry young man but here you make him sound like a regular kid without having to say it. He's relatable, he doesnt seem that different from Soda or Pony.

2) This is an every day situation for him, it's realistic. He isnt thinking about some girl hes infatuated with or praying someone won't die, it's just a regular day for him but every moment shows what a struggle that is.

I particuarly liked the scene in the store where he keeps gettin distracted but moves on auto pilot anyway, it shows what life has become for him.

Good Work! ;)
pretentious kneecap chapter 1 . 2/24/2010
"Milk, eggs, and bread. That's what I need. And dinner. I needed dinner, too. I sighed, stopping to look around. What did I need? Right."

- LOL, isn't that the exact thought process you have when you're shopping?
Scare4irony chapter 1 . 2/23/2010
Poor Darry! You write wonderfully, especially getting the hurt across :D

JD chapter 1 . 2/23/2010
I really enjoyed reading this. Great job capturing Darry's feelings.
calla lilly rose chapter 1 . 2/23/2010
Excellent, as usual. Can't wait for any other updates you may have... hint hint! Calla
bassline overdose chapter 1 . 2/23/2010
I really enjoyed this. It's strange comparing things from Darry's point of view to Pony's perspective. I thought you captured Darry's character extremely well. You showed the side that we don't see in the book-the side that shows he is still a kid, from the way he checks out the girls to the way he curses a lot. I also really liked the repetition in the beginning; it got me interested.

Great one-shot!

LLS :)
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