|Reviews for Of Roses and Desire|
| KitsuneMomo chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
i love this pairing so much
| Shadow of Intent chapter 1 . 6/10/2010
awesome yo xD
| Violet's Veil chapter 1 . 3/20/2010
At first...I thought I would like this story more than I did. True I don't like lemon but your first paragraphs made me feel like you would handle it tastefully. You sorta didn't. Near the end it's like it became a porno with the characters losing their entire personalities and just behaving like two porn stars.
"Fuck me raw"?
That blew my mind. I burst out laughing when I read it. That's not a good thing.
Just because two characters are in bed with each other (which is clearly the purpose of your story) doesn't mean they have to lose the essence of their characters.
Before I come off sounding mean..I do want to give some advice. When your characters speak, dialogue is supposed to be set off in separate paragraphs. You had huge blocks of text at a time that were hard to swallow (no pun intended).
Now yes one could argue that this is just trashy lemony fanfiction and so there is no need for those sorts of rules but hey...I like giving advice to everybody that needs it.
I think you're a decent writer but...I didn't really like this story as much as I thought I would.