|Reviews for Dreamcatcher|
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/24
Please finish the story
| Amethyst Asheryn chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
I adore the dynamic between Eight and Lucie, always have. It's too bad stories about the pair of them are so rare.
This is pretty good. Very very cute, in a platonic way. It's sort of sad that the Big Finish dramas never went into more detail regarding the feelings of the two of them (the Morbius arc was probably the deepest they went, that I can remember). So reading this was fun. I enjoyed that there was only a couple of lines of dialogue in the whole thing and it was mostly a series of quick shots, if you will.
Although like you said, there's probably room for expansion. Like if you put in a few of their talks during nights when she couldn't sleep.
One little typo:
"She would've to hated it."-Extra "to."
Also, in places this writing gets a little choppy or weird-sounding and I think you could change spots. For instance:
"The next night the same thing happened, and the Doctor would stay next to her." Instead of "would stay," you might change it to "stayed," to better fit with the rest of this sentence.
I think you could have done a little more show, not tell work throughout this entire piece, to give us even better images of what's going on. For a small example, you simply state that she "sounded very upset" once early in the piece. You might change that to, for example, "If it hadn't been for the quaver of held-back tears, her voice would have been angry." That would make it an even more enjoyable read.
Oh, and having read through this a second time, I have to say I especially loved this line:
"She would've to hated it. And he would've pretended to hate it too." This just seems perfectly in character for Eight, hiding his true feelings like that. Somehow that just made it sweeter.
Thanks for writing!
| phoebs chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
I think it's really good. It would be cool if you could evolve it into a story or make it longer.
P.S: The first time I read this I just though, "Aww.. that's nice."
Is that the desired effect?
| Garden Gnomie chapter 1 . 3/31/2010
i love Lucie miller
| Derek Metaltron chapter 1 . 2/28/2010
Good work! I don't confess to have heard this story of Big Finish's yet but it didn't matter as they were night on any spoilers. I'm quite fond of the Eighth Doctor (and stories with Classic Doctors in general - I do love Ten but having a zillion Ten/Rose fics on the site can detract a bit, well maybe it's cause I'm a bloke, who knows) and anything good with him in is always a joy to read. Lucie is a great companion - I've only heard her exploits in Season One so far and whilst I still prefer Charley Pollard as Eight's greatest companion she's not too far behind.
Anyway, I love the Protective side of the Doctor here - Eight is definitely one of the most caring incarnations and so you captured him perfectly. So well done again!