Whoever is reading this, GET OUT NOW
Dont you know better than to waste your time reading reviews on the internet? Comment/review forums are the hellhole of the internet. As soon as youre finished reading mine, go do something else. (my reviews are something of an exception.) btw dont bother responding to this the chances of my checking the reviews again are pretty low.
so, the storyline sure got a lot darker in this chapter. i actually considered not continuing with the fanfic because of how messed up it (draco malfoy) is unexpectedly getting but i can actually feel it making me smarter so for the time being ill keep reading. Thanks Eliezer!
also, that some people actually had the chutzpah to critisize the creator in their reviews kind of shocked me. he is literally doing community service! volunteer work for YOU! you dont have to like it, but if you want to critisize do it with your friends NOT on the comments forum on the website he created for the story he created for you and everyone else to enjoy
Good day!
and whats your opinion on the israeli-palestinian conflict?

Having 11yos talk about raping someone is just horrifying. There’s some funny bits in this story but that was honestly really disappointing to read especially with the fact it’s then mostly ignored. This story had a lot of potential but that pretty much ruined it for me.

im really enjoying the games taking place in this chapter and the last. i have to go to work now but... i just want to read one more chapter...

thank you

I thought we would have a chill Draco until he casually talked about rape, definitely going to require 40 chapters to get it out of his mind that just because he can get out of trouble doesn't mean he should do it

Sinceramente, fue horrible leer a unos niños de solo 11 años hablando sobre cómo se vengarían de una niña hasta el punto de llegar a la violación y fue completamente horrible ver que lo tenían normalizado. Harry es un niño genio, sí, pero sigue siendo un niño y no hay nada de malo en eso. Esto se siente como si simplemente ignorara la actitud que tendría un niño en esa etapa y lo adelante muchos años. Seguiré leyendo, pero hacer mención de algo tan delicado como es el abuso sexual siendo normalizado es repugnante. Quien haya leído esa escena y no se sintiera incomod en lo absoluto, tiene que replantearse un poco las cosas.

Jijesu este capitulo tocó una fibra sensible en mí, pero creo que es un tipo de conversación que se debe de tener antes (consentimiento) de que se vuelva un problema en sociedad y no sólo de los padres que le deben educar

... Is Peter dead? wtf happened? How's that gonna affect Sirius arc? and why Ron has Hedwig, of all pets? ;n;
I thought an owl was a great pet, Hedwig knew to take care of herself and it's great to have an owl when you have big ambitions, sending your personal owl can be seen as showing your respect/appreciation, plus they show a glimpse of the person behind, like the Weasley's old owl, it was almost dying and they kept sending it bc they didn't have another one, clear proof of them lacking money. Original Harry doesn't have many friends and Hedwig helped with the loneliness, being both trapped, I would have liked to read Hedwig travelling to other places, helping Harry make connections and having more freedom. Too bad I guess.

I knew Ron wouldn't be Harry's best friend here, their personalities don't match, but I hope he wont dislike Harry, Ron had a lot of defects, but he was a good person still.

Harry not liking the idea of Quidditch makes a lot of sense haha, I've thought about it too but my final decision wasn't to erase it from the game, Wizards obviously like not knowing when the match is gonna end and the snitch has historical meaning, seekers also are a good distraction to the teams and some strategies can be made taking them into account, what I think is the best solution taking all that into account is to reduce the points you get when you catch it, maybe just 30-50 points? The seeker would need to decide if it's better to stop the other seeker from getting the snitch or to try to catch it as soon as possible depending on how their teams are playing, I'd add that the seekers start playing after 5 mins or so, so the match doesn't end in a minute.

Draco is... scary, but the rape thing? I think that's too much for an 11 y/o boy, why was he exposed to that kind of thing as a normal threat? He's even thinking about being "old enough" for that, wut?

I like how much Harry shows traits of different houses, he's impulsive and gets angry easily like Gryffindors, works hard like Hufflepuffs, is cunning and ambitious like Slytherins... but knowledge is his priority, he's ready to "optimize" the world just to increase the knowledge, he's creative and thinks out of the box, he's SO Ravenclaw and yes, I say that as a Ravenclaw too.

Where those at the end... the twins?

I want to read him meeting Hermione!

Wow. This chapter took a really deep dive.

Was enjoying this story up until this chapter, not going to lie, I dislike Ron Weasley most of the time but I love Hedwig as she is a staple of the Harry Potter series that deserves more spotlight and notoriety as HARRY'S familiar as well as his faithful companion and seeing her with Ron Weasley of all people feels so wrong. I did enjoy the the banter and joking in the previous chapters but also included in this chapter you had a 11-year-old make a disgusting statement regardless if it is fiction about an even younger girl, that's just not done. I'm not bashing this story just criticizing it, it has been otherwise great story.

I’m been enjoying reading this fanfic so far and seeing how Draco and Harry interact— but why on earth is an eleven year-old thinking about how to carry out such atrocious acts!?

You just sneak these ABSOLUTE BANGERS! of wisdom into fanfic...(the inappropriate, sotto-voce cursing on this side of the screen...)

How dare you raise the bar?! Thank goodness there are like a hundred chapters left. Beautiful writing, Less Wrong.

Dumbledore tries to redeem people, but by giving them more chances.

That is NOT the way to go.

You have to start early, possibly while they are toddlers just learning to talk.

Snapes last chance is when Harry meets him at Hogwarts.

Dumbledore lost his chance when he left Harry at the Dursleys.

Read

ROUNDABOUT DESTINY

you know that one song that goes like I believe I believe I believe I believe I believe I feel like that was going through Harry's head as he ran through the brick wall

I'm sad that there's no Hedwig in this book, but in my mind, it would almost be strange to resurrect her despite my love for her. Also on the note of Aunt Petunia, she's always been a terrible character in my opinion, however, I still kind of loved her. It does confund my mind (if you take my meaning) that she treats Harry like she treated Dudley in the original books. She's a toxically sweet character in this book, but in the originals, she's more all-around toxic. I'm still not sure what to think of her.
I love the Harry-Draco friendship very much and I am curious as to how Draco is going to use it to his advantage. I was sad seeing Ron leave Harry like that, but mostly because I was worried it would make it so that there weren't many of the twins. I already have an amazing feeling about this "Order of Chaos." I think that might be my Slytherin side bubbling to the surface though.
Harry can try to convince himself he's undoubtedly Ravenclaw, and that's what I thought at first, but now I'm not sure. Every minute I read he because more and more Slytherin, at this time he seems a perfect mix not much unlike myself. However, he is fluctuating more on the side of Tom Riddle.
Overall, still love this fanfic more than I thought I would based on my friend's description. I've been sharing this with everyone I think would be interested.
I hope this goes through his full 6 years (min) at Hogwarts and I can't wait to see how the story resolves. Still anxious about the sorting hat.
Sorry about this long comment, there's just so much happening that I can't help but dote upon this masterpiece you've created. It has suspense, it has magic, it has Fred, and it is soon to have Hogwarts. This is the perfect spin on the Harry Potter story.

Enjoying your work so far, but not Draco’s comment that he would rape Luna. It may be something someone in character would say if they were older and perhaps had experience in getting away with such things, but no child (regardless of who their father was) would think like that. Eleven is very young to even have any sexual urges let alone thoughts of raping a 10 year old as revenge. Even if his father was inclined to such behaviour and he saw evidence of it, it would be unlikely as a child that he would understand it in such a way that he goes around saying that he wants to ‘rape’ for revenge. It was off-putting, unrealistic and unnecessary for any of the character development. The darkness of the Malfoy family and the corrupted nature of the wizarding world could have been demonstrated in a better way than an eleven year old taking seriously about raping a ten year old and how he’d get away with it.

Cool way of describing science and always fun to see feudalism nightmare fuel treatment it deserves

why?

What a genuinely beautiful chapter!

This got dark fast.

Again, this is such a good fic. Also a great way to learn manipulation, but I'm sure you already knew that.

:)

This book is to smart for me I'm so confused

I'm starting to believe that the author of HP&MR has PHDs in Science, Math, and Phycology, and is trying to break the Wizarding World in a hillariously fantastical way.

TEACH ME YOUR SECRETS-

HOW DID YOU GET DRACO TO SAY HE WANTED TO GO TO GRYFFINDOR?

Huh.

I don’t suppose you give out recommendations? Literature wise, that is. I cannot put into words how much this story has amazed me. English isn’t my first language and just the amount of words added to my vocabulary by simply reading this work, has me stunned when looking back on it. I really do contemplate getting the book mentioned in this chapter (Influence: Science and Practice) since you mentioning it in such a charming manner indicates it’s most likely well worth the read.
Either way, you seem very keen on people acquiring knowledge to utilise to the best of their ability to benefit themselves and others, so I do hope you might have a few book recommendations one can look into, that you’d be willing to share. Rest assured I am only asking because I’m deeply intrigued and would appreciate a means to widen my mental horizons. If you’d rather not share, or can’t be bothered I understand that completely and appreciate the time it took you to read this review.
I suppose I do not need to tell you that I think, you did an amazing work with this story, but I’ll do it either way, since I believe in vocalising one’s appreciation once in a while. (I especially like the number of details you put into this! I was honestly amazed to see you use a metaphor [I’m struggling a bit with the terminology here. I’m not sure which stylistic device you actually used, since I never studied the finer parts of the English language and am only aware of the terms in my own native one. I apologise for that] using the magical scourge ‘nundu’ in such a casual way, that is seemed [and *is*] appropriate and befitting to the situation! Especially since the beast in question isn’t mentioned in the original books but can only be found in the ‘Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them special. Hope to see more of that as the story goes on )

Seeing as we've skipped a bit I'm very curious were Harry ended up. Also damn Draco is more intelligent than i gave him credit for.

damn why did I not read this before ITS SO COMPELLING. I guess I was kinda worried with the name harry potter and the methods of rationality, itd end up being some 14 year old atheist's attempt at being smart by putting down things he doesnt understand to make himself feel smarter. but instead it seems to be an actual scientific minded harry potter thats not some pompus ass, and admits the truth about science that 99 out of 100 times youre gonna be wrong when figuring something out. its frankly a breath of fresh air for a more scientifically minded agnostic like myself.

Not that I wish my Dad was a flawless instrument of death like Lucius,

LMAOOOOO omg Harry and draco take over the world hahahahaha this is hilarious

Ron Weasley can’t begin to keep up with Harry

Are we just gonna ignore he said he was gonna rape that girl and Harry said basically nothing besides brooding over how “the world is horrible and I’m gonna be the change” and all that shit

Here's to hoping that Harry, Draco, and Hermione team up.

Wow! I have been really enjoying this so far! I just wanted to add before I continue on that I really love the prose of this story. It is evident you have dedicated time and effort into this story and I can't wait to read more!
~Me

Yeah this story fucking blows I can’t get passed this chapter because everyone is so ooc that it is painful to read. Guess every reviewer that praised this fic are just bunch of 10year olds because this is fucking dog water

Bwahahah! Oh lord I'm gonna love this.

Wow. No words... You are an absolutely amazing author... Chills...the casual way Draco Harry conversation went dark just gave me goosebumps...
That was so horrible, all that he has been trained to think.
I hope Harry is able to affect change in Draco.
And Harry and McGonagall's interactions were beyond imagination.
You are superbly talented and know such much about different branches of science and also human psychology...
I suspect the part where Harry's blood gets cold and also the way he says Lucius instead of Malfoy is indicative of the part of Voldemort inside him partially rearing up in that moment...
We'll have to wait and see..

Wow, what a compelling introduction to what is going to be a great read!

Quidditch sucks.

I like science.

I LOVED IT. I think that Ron is getting bashed a little, which is disappointing a s Ron is my favorite character. Other than that, the writing is superb! The relationship with Harry and Draco is well developed, and I am excited to read about the Order of Chaos.

okay, what is wrong with you

Draco throwing that letter into the fire was so satisfying that its going to hurt for a while. im going to reminisce on this, and then im going to forget where i read it and drive myself mad

Harry potter being actually smarter than hermione granger...*le sigh*
she's gonna kill him

This is an important moment: seeing the person Harry could have been, with a few minor tweaks (other than the ones that would produce Canon!Harry). Is it worth following this path to its conclusion if it means he turns into Draco somewhere along the way? Answer: yes, duh, but he's gotta be careful. And he's not very good at careful.

Wow, okay, a. I am not used to relating to fanfiction characters, so thanks for stabbing me in my bookish heart, and b. I was actually starting to like Draco until he wanted t someone. W T F. Still an interesting story but like. Draco. Mate. Not cool.

Yup this story is trash lol first 7 chapters have been terrible

hi! I just discovered your fic and I already love it! I just have one questionis Harry wearing a sweatband a reference to starkid?

How can I have been so foolish as to not realize the existence of something to utterly valuable and amazing beforehand? I should have at least assumed there would be something utterly different and worthwhile among the vast collection of Harry Potter fanfiction. After all, the series is large and filled with opportunity and possibility.

This chapter was definitely a window providing a glimpse into the future of this one Harry Potter and I can't wait to unravel the mysteries. The ending, the aftermath, I think I'd much like to see an interaction between Lucius and Harry just to experience their conversation.

How wrong lucius is.. but that's not really a surprise is it?

I never thought draco was pure evil, but rather as one story called him, a snob. He's product of his environment and really the worse thing harry andhermione could have done was make a weasley an intimate friend, since it probably set draco off like nothing else.

Tell me he’s not about to be friends with a rapist. He should simply commit murder Immediately
Way to ruin a character by making him fantasize about rape and getting away with it

really, you started like that. damn i dont even know what to actually do with myself rn draco said he was gonna do that to luna...

So, I just had to pop down here after Harry met the Weasley's to say I am really hoping that Harry bonds with Fred and George more than Ron. After all, they do experiments to develop their products. It seems like a match made in hell (for the professors).

I like this draco, can't wait to see were you take him

Did he really just talk about raping a girl, and then ask if Harry’s parents told him it was wrong, then act like nothing was wrong?

Wonderful!
Beyond perfection.
I can smell this has got a perfect plot twist

I just realised that your Harry Potter wasn't sceptical enough to understand that wands most likely weren't necessary and that since magical people somehow differ from muggles. Which could lead to the hypothesis that wizards must have some sort of energy or energy manipulating property tied to their bodies and that the first person to use magic couldn't have had a fully functioning wand, together with all the necessary wand movements and incantations.

GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!
How come did I waste the 25 years of my life not reading this story?! Why there was no recommendation for it neither in the lectures on statistics nor in the social psychology guidebooks? I just can't!
You REALLY made my day. I would like to devour the whole thing now, but I'm afraid it'll end too soon...

Why is it that it never occurred to me that the wizards have no idea about humanity's trip to the moon? Huh

I .just say, I thought the EXACT thing about quiddich! The seeker has way too much power and watching him or her look for a snitch can't be all that exciting. I could totally see a Kong's idiot son being assigned the task. Reminds me the role Daniel Radcliff plays in Miracle Workers Dark Ages where he is indeed a complete dolt!

Your ending is perfect... again

byyy order of chaos... sounds like the weasley twins but also imagine a whole death eater like thing but its all just stupid idiots who do stupid things like wear winter clothes in the middle of summer without a cooling charm.

whoever said that this story gets its legs at 5 was sorta wrong sorta right, I legit thought this was chapter 3 only because I made a conscious decision to move to the next chapter and I'm loving every second of this story so far

I was kinda hoping to see Ron and Draco friends. That would be hilarious!

Possibly funnier: the future Mrs. Luna Potter.

I love this story.

Brilliant chapter. i had always wondered about the reciprocity principle

The Quibbler’s headlines made me laugh so much I have tears in my eyes. I hope I could review every chapter at least one. But I still deciding whether to keep reading or not after your warning at first chapter. Curious...

Why does it seem like Harry doesn't like Lily?

yea im not so sure about including rape in this so early. i get your trying to be as realistic as possible in a way, but id rather that Luna, or any other person doesnt get raped by Draco

WTF just happened

I’m sorry. I tried, really I did but I just can’t stand your Harry. He’s obnoxious, Arrogant and just plain condescending. I always said Harry should be smarter but I think there’s a limit. On the other hand the writing is great and it’s a better read than a lot that you find. Keep doing what you’re doing.

I only want power so I can get books. I want the t shirt!

Other than the preposterous idea of the Weasley's being almost an hour early for the train, it was quite a fun opening scene.
"Boy-Who-Lived gets Draco Malfoy pregnant." *winces* ... re-reads ... *chokes on nothing and forgets how to breathe*
"Outright panic is a sign of a truly important scientific problem."
*nods sagely* yes... of course. *closes eyes and begins counting to pi*
That answer... just, wow.
I have rarely been this entertained, amused and impressed. Thank you for sharing your time and your talent.

Personally I find Ron annoying and less than intelligent at times, but for the life of me I cannot understand why you would write Harry Potter as wanting Draco as a friend over Ron. So what if Ron isn't as intelligent, what Draco said was abhorent. Though, of course no one should get to decide who Harry's friends are, that was what Draco's character did on the train OTL.

Damn. I really really loved Draco and Harry’s mad, mad friendship right up until the point where Draco said he would rape Luna. Nope. Nada. Not liking that.

“All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of nothing, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him.”
This line did make me smile, though.

How did it get so dark so suddenly? But I like it, it keeps the story interesting. And if I would have had to keep laughing, I would had goten myself a muscle distortion to soon.

I want those tutors,

The force is not present, period, love Ron, but I’m a dog person so I value mindless loyalty. Want to really tempt someone? Leave them no choice. Plata o plomo: silver or lead. What are you wizards? Cowering rats locked in a beautiful ghetto maze of your own design, too afraid to move since 1692. And we are hawks, even when we couldn’t nuke you or destroy your economy. Think Voldy is the worst you’ve seen? Think again. Will give you one chance to join the winning team... Don’t take too long to decide, the offer expires at midnight... I really, really love your Harry... Is it too much to ask from the gods I don’t believe in that he refuses to be sorted into any house? Conscientious objector past considered? Can’t wait to see what you did with Albus... Oh goosebumps...

this chapter (especially the draco part) was absolutely great! I literally lack the words to show my appreaciation...
ps. cant wait for draco( and maybe other wizards) to find out about hiroshima and nagasaki...

Good job

Thanks for the chapter and hard work

I'm only seven chapters in and ready dying with laughter. HOW DO YOU THINK I'M GOING TO SURVIVE ONE HUNDRED TWENTY TWO CHAPTERS OF THIS?

Fuck all of you, this is the best fic on the website just from the counter-flattery joke at Malkin's and the passionate ode to Science in this chapter.

Please tell me I misread the rape thing because that was all kinds of messed up and I’m not sure if I can let that go. It made me spit out my drink.

More broadly, I don't think that the wizarding world has been stuck in a pre-enlightenment era -from that point of view, I would say that essentially everyone from the four houses operates under the same moral framework, which in turn is the same as the one used in the muggle world-. A possible difference would be in the treatment of house elves, though even among muggle born students, apparently Hermione is the only one that takes issue with it. This, of course, doesn't mean that bigotry doesn't exist (but that is true even in the modern muggle world), just that it doesn't appear that the muggle world is morally more evolved because they have been the only ones affected by the ideas of the enlightenment -this could mean that it has reached the wizarding world as well, though we don't actually know much of anything about their history-.

In any case, there are interactions between the two world, for example interactions between the ministers, or wizards contacting muggle families to get their children to Hogwards, or the very fact that muggleborns go to the school, bringing their ideas along, so I don't think that the wizarding world would be as culturally isolated as to develop in such a way. For example, I don't think that they have slavery in the wizarding world, and I would say that in the muggle world it was abolished in part due to the Enlightenment's influence. Again, there is the corner case of the house elves that I have already mentioned above, but even among people with a muggle born upbringing it seems that Hermione's take is unique (we don't see Harry react the same way, for example, though interestingly we see Regulus relate to his house elf much like he would a human). So there could be isolated cultural differences in that way, but the general feel is that overall they operate in the same framework -this is not the moral equivalent of a modern person and someone from the middle ages reacting to witchcraft or supposed witchcraft-.

Well, that turned south pretty fast. For all his faults, I don't think that Draco was a rapist in canon. In the end it turned out that he wasn't able to kill people, either. He was prejudiced due to his upbringing, but I would seriously question what that would entail exactly. I don't think that this line of thinking about rape would be included. If a fourth of the school held such opinions, I think that school life would have been much different than it was. From what we see in canon, hew was the typical bigoted bully, not too dissimilar to the Madauders had they been sorted on the other side, in fact, with the difference that the dynamic was three-vs-three rather than ganging up on one person, and he didn't even come close to killing anyone (in that respect, the only example that come to mind that could come close to Sirius' actions would be Tom Riddle's, though in his case he used a basilisk rather than a werewolf). For that matter, we don't see this development even *after* the school has been taken over by Deatheaters.

So... Draco's rape comment kind of ruined this chapter for me, although I know (hope) that its overarching purpose was so that Harry could get a better sense of the flawed justice system in the wizarding world. But for what it's worth, I'm really enjoying this story so far and look forward to reading the rest of it (minus that one comment)

Eee, I've read Ciadini's "Influence"! I never expected to see it referenced in a fic though. Come to think of it, I think I actually read it for a story. ;-)

Reciprocation pressure. I'm totally laughing, in an enjoying it way, here.

The two figures are George and Fred, yes?

And Ron's rat, Peter Pettigrew, is dead in this story? Huh, I wonder what else will be different.

And, shoot, look at the time. If I don't get off this story, I'll be up all night reading and I have to work tomorrow. ;-(

I feel like I read this years ago but was so confused I left it till now

PLEASE tell me you've written the story in which Darth Vader adops Harry and becomes a doting father to him! XD

So far, enjoying this entirely too much.

A quick observation. I'm not a huge fan of the Big Bang Theory show...I've really only seen parts of a few episodes. So everything I know about the characters is drawn from that tiny glimpse into the show(s).

But this version of Harry Potter strikes me as what it might have been like to live around Sheldon, as a child. Exhausting, sometimes frustrating, almost always confusing...and occasionally hilarious.

OMG. Is that an AVPS reference? I love you.

"Hey, Draco, you know what I bet is even better for becoming friends than exchanging secrets? Committing murder." - had me cackling so hard!
I really wanted Draco and Harry to be friends, hope that happens

God damn, this got dark and borderline philosophical. What a delightfully sub-evil Harry we have here.

Maybe I am dumb but this chapter was so hard to follow, especially towards the end.

sweet fucking jesus. rons voice in the fucking podcast makes me laugh so fucking hard. its so fucking laughable.
ITS SO FUCKING STUPID. JESUS CHRIST I CANT EVEN

...Wow.

Bash away! Bash away! BASH AWAY NOW! I, personally, can't stand Albus (Failbus) Dumbledore (Dumblefuckup) and Ron "Jealous and Envious Open-Mouth Chewer" Weasley. Can't stand them. At all. Ever.

Onward!

(*Psst* Rape isn't a suitable topic for farce...)

Mister Spoo - Mister Bronze
an Icecream loving Draco
Him on the moon waving his wand.
I like those very much.
Are the becoming best friends forever?
I'm delighted to find it out.
What's about Hermy?
I see the couple ...

Thank you so much

Framing the "price" of learning to use the power of science in terms that Draco could understand, to a point, is utterly brilliant.
I hope to pay the highest compliment possible: quoting this passage in one of my own works, in service to the story. Always a delight to read this saga!

Intriguing...

holy fuck, I love this

Snitch is unfair.
A little change produce biggest changes

Interesting take on draco.

Well this was good but I must ask a few questions
1 how did Harry know about the snitch if it wasn't talked about (much like how Harry somehow knew Lucius name)
2 did you have the rat die to avoid spoilers for the book(specifically the third book)
3 wow that's so many plot hole talked about in universe

I can't stop laughing as I read this story. I've never read a fanfic that was as funny and logical as this one. I'm going to have fun reading the rest of this masterpiece.

Oh god, the twins are getting involved

Draco proclaiming he wanted to rape Luna was a step too far. The guy is 11. It’s all getting a little too dark. I will continue myself but will not be able to recommend it to anyone until I get to the end.

I haven't finished the first scene and I'm already freaking out. A sweatband? DID YOU PULL A MOVE FROM AVPS?! If so, alllllll the YES!

okay, now that I've read the whole chapter I'm... intrigued. At first this story felt like a light heart rope, almost crack-fic, with a flair of scientific ramblings. Now, though... I'm starting to see that there's more depth, like looking past the waves into a deep-green sea. (weirdly poetic, but I actually pictured that)

"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -" this reference was AMAZING xD

*Puts on nerd glasses* Actually, it is more than possible for professional teams to win without catching the snitch. Krum caught the snitch too early when the other team had already made more than 150 points, thus causing his team to lose.

Ok, that last bit went past me a bit, but I loved all of it!

I feel like the sweatband idea was taken from avpm/avps

That was honestly very confusing, probably because there was so much information. It took a while for me to see the point of it all, but there was a point, which is great. I'm excited to see how this story plays out.

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WHAT THE HECK
Boy-Who-Lived got Draco Malfyo pregnant?
SERIOUSLY?
REALLY?
ARE YOU KIDDING ME?
and how the stinking heck.
how on earth.
I mean uhm I just don't understnad
but I DID laugh hard hard hard harder than i have yet.
I laughed for minutes straight.
other times I mighta giggles a few times, but this! oh!
OH! you
yyour a a master of comedy! just going on, normal story-
BAAM
funnyest thing in the world

okay this chapter was... what's the word... shocking for lack of better term. i thought Draco was going to say he was kidding, and then there's the debate between Harry and Draco...i don't know how to describe what I'm feeling right now

wait... did i just read that Draco reached into his robes and scratched himself? WTF?! LMFAO!

If magic is like casting Imperio on someone to make them do what you want, then science is like knowing them so well that you can convince them it was their own idea all along. It's a lot more difficult than waving a wand, but it works when wands fail, just like if the Imperius failed you could still try persuading a person.

I love this so, so much. (I have been thoroughly enjoying the story so far - I have been meaning to watch the rest of this episode of Miss Fisher and keep not - and keep cracking up with laughter, but this is what made me want to comment.)

I saw something somewhere that argued you might as well have a team of seekers (although it might be worth while to have at least ONE defensive player)

Hmm, this is what I wished Draco would find...his own answers.

I love this story! I keep rereading every year and it's still just as good as the first time! It's like rereading a favorite book. :) thanks for writing it!

Just a quick note to say: I don't think it counts as bashing when the perception of Ron is coming from Harry's POV. It's 100% in character with your Harry; of *course* an extremely (and unusually) intelligent 11-year old would regard most of the kids around him as insufferably dull, in several senses of the word.
Finally started reading this after having it bookmarked for years. This is without a doubt the best HP fanfic I have ever read and I'm only on chapter 8. Chapter 5 had me and stitches and so did this chapter, until Harry and I were walloped by dread at the same time, ooof what a turn.
Absolutely fantastic and that is a VAST understatement.

Wow! I don't even know what to say. There was so much going on here and it was brilliant. I can't wait to see how this all plays out.

""You had to be there. Anyway, I'm glad to hear all that. The way Lucius was looking at you, I thought he was going to c-crucify you""
Why the stutter?

"And Harry couldn't help but notice how clumsy, awkward, graceless his attempt at resisting manipulation / saving face / showing off had appeared compared to Draco. I need those tutors."
Clumsy, awkward, and graceless
It's a list.

Draco! Wow! I love how well you've balanced the whole baby!Death Eater and interesting/cute character thing. Truly chilling. Also, I hope you go more in depth into Lisa's character motivations (way later on) whenever she's introduced. (If you've written that far.)

I love how a chapter or two ago, Harry is joking about taking over the world. Only a little later, it's not a joke, he's coming to the entirely rational conclusion that he will need to overthrow magical Britain in the name of human rights.

Well, this is gonna end well.

this entire book, the entire chapter, is incredibly interesting. What stuck out in my mind:

the bloodchilling-ness of this line: As soon as I'm old enough I'm going to rape her."
A child speaking of a child's word (as soon as I'm old enough) with an adult's dark intent.

the entire section of Draco and Harry's exchange, particular the ending of this chapter as we reflect on how Harry's really caught Draco into playing his game. Also like the fact that both of them /know/ the other is trying to manipulate each other. Also the Draco-Lucius father and son relation. I like how you made their relationship more... humane?

well, lastly, i don't really understand the significance of Lucius's reply, but i guess i'll find out in the future chaps.

Order... of Chaos? Whaaaaaaaaa...?

The newspaper headline was soup-spittingly amusing.

A very different, very interesting Harry/Draco non-slash relationship at play.

why don't people get that wizard know all about muggle there many muggle born and half blood every year hell snape half blood this whole wizard don't know about muggle is just stupid.

next again if magic is real, muggle sci is wrong, and so is there history.

I can't get enough of this version of hp, I read books all the time and get bored easily as the writing and stories start to get too familiar but this is truly refreshing.

I think this fanfic is my new favorite.
It's well written, so funny it's almost unbelievable, and I love the premise(And I am only on chapter 7).
Thanks for writing and have an awesome day!

WOW! :) This is awesome!

OH MY GOD omg omg omg omg. i LOVE this. bloody hell. ive never read such a magnificent story. when i read the malfoy scene i screamed and screamed and omg i love this

Hey, you took the LUGGAGE from Terry Prattchett into this story! Grat stuff! ;D
I like the way Harry escapes from having to explain to his parents what he did to Mc Gonnagal -it's fun. And Peter Pettigrew is dead? Poor Ron, but I agree that Scientiffic!Hary will probably go along better with Draco than with im.A great friendship in potential destroyed by Quidditch ignoranced. Oh dear...
I also liked Draco learning about Muggles having reached the moon. Nicely done!

I enjoy this immensely. Thank you for writing and sharing!

I'd never make my way to Hogwards. I'd have missed that train, stuck forever at the barrier, experimenting. It can find out whether I _believe_ that I'll pass through it. This world contains things that can _read my mind_. This clearly needs more investigation. If one of my enemies can read my mind, I'm doomed. Whatever I can plan against him, he'll know it before I do it. He gets the entire power of my intelligence, leaving me with literally nothing. Maybe this thing can read only some kind of thoughts? Maybe there's a technique to prevent it from reading thoughts? Maybe I just have to think in a new manner, like, instead of imagining the future events, imagine myself imagining future events? And if I just leave the barrier behind and go to the train, I'll miss such an easy way to oppose such a dangerous enemy... (Well, the way is 'easy' here because missing an easy way is actually more pessimistic scenario than missing a hard one, so I guess I'm doing it right.)

ah, you made a mistake with the chapter I'm currently reading! The Weasleys would never EVER, be an hour early!

Holy shit excellent and so fucking funny

I'm seven chapters in, its 3 in the morning, I have work tomorrow, and it's the third time I've said "one more chapter." Do you have any idea how much this makes me feel like a kid again? Back to when I had the excitement and focus on reading more than a few paragraphs at a time? Thank you, very much. You've brought the light of nostalgia to my life, and on Christmas, no less.

Thank you. 3

So many great points raised in this chapter! Since I loath Quidditch I'll put Harry's take down as my favorite, although the entire pregnant Draco story was a close second.

Oh, I can't wait. Really. I need to know everything that happens in this story yesterday.

Well, i do not undertand all the words, but the story is still amazing. As well as harry's reasoning. :D I love Harry-Draco friendships, and I suppose in this tory the friendship would happen easily and what is more important for me: I will be able to believe that is happens. It would seem logical, understandable and totally natural. I already love this story, and this little game of the boys... hahahahaaa. :D
oh, and I think harry met with the twins:D

You know, my biggest problem with Harry Potter au fics is usually the OOCness of the characters, mostly The Weasley's. And yet in this chapter, from Draco to Ron and even the twins, I only found one thing out of character: that Molly would blurt out Harry's name. Even then it could've been an accident born out of surprise. So congratulations for that..

Dear lord I laughed so hard that I cried during this chapter. This fanfic isn't for people who aren't familiar with science, but goddamn is it a good read.

okay, I will just say that I'm a trash for Drarry (Bottom!Draco) and you made my day (It's 2:26 Am, anyway), you just won my attention and I'm impressed, thank you.

1. I love how Harry doubts that he's Harry Potter. It's hints like these, man.
2. Well now I want to know what happened at the potions shop. Plus, the line "If I lied the first time..." is awesome. I definitely remember that from the 1st time around. If it's a Less Wrong original, or even if it isn't, well done.
3. Didn't notice that Draco had cast the quieting charm in the first read, either. But wait... so I'm guessing he has some sort of magical device, because wordless and potentially wandless magic at the age of 10 is, as the chapter describes, not plausible.
4. Oh, the foreshadowing. So great, so often. And I didn't realize how much of a serious conversation/persuasion this chapter held PRIOR to the space mission scene until just now, or how much it influenced Harry's goals with Draco.
5. "Magic is the only hint we have as to how the universe must really work." I hope that's a metaphor.
6. Never heard of Burundi before. One obscure country down, many more to go.
7. The science!Draco scene is still as awesome as ever, though now I just realized something I hadn't before: Harry's blood was cold during the conversation, and I'm guessing it started sometime after THE picture. I guess it also explains why he does what he does to Neville.
8. I guess Harry turns the Ravenclaw Patil into that "certain type of person" that can be convinced with the old Slytherin fallback. Neat.

I wonder if Snape was the man in the potions shop, I kinda doubt it.

Hey. I just finished chapter 7. Just want you to know that I've repeatedly laughed my ass off. Great fic.

O_O !

Dang! This is probably the freakiest chapter I've read in fanfiction in a long time!
It manages to go from heartwarming, to hilarious, to HORRIFYING, to heroic (at least on Harry's part, sort of). Geez! This is the first time ever that I've been terrified of friggin' Draco Malfoy! That kid is messed up!
PROTECT LUNA LOVEGOOD AT ALL COSTS!

GOD Bless, keep up the GOOD WORK, and Keep Moving Forward. Amen. :)

Your work is absolutely delightful. Harry Potter for thinking grown-ups.

Wow. Just, wow. I love this chapter. Harry's world domination plan and tempting Draco and showing him the rocket and moon pictures and all the logical reasoning ... it's brilliant. And Harry's slightly ruthlessness is also interesting ... and he's quite Slytherin even if he's even more Ravenclaw.

Lucius's reply is golden. I laughed so hard, it's BRILLIANT.

Wonderful chapter.

Really enjoyed Harry and Draco's interaction in this chapter, as well as the letter Draco wrote to his Father.

I have read this before, but every time I read about Harry and his father's book hunt I get a little teary :)

Buy...a...clock. Well nah. Luna and Xeno are already causing chaosn and she isn't even at Hogwarts yet. Wait, this was around when he went cuckoo after his wife died. Does that explain it?

Damn, it really just got to me here how damn real it got.

Damn, now I feel bad for laughing about rape xD

Hello! I just got through seven chapters tonight, and I have to say your characters are thrilling.
The subtle and nuanced battle of wits between two genius eleven-year olds is riveting. (To say the least!)

I'm finding myself more and more aware of the process of Getting What You Want from the world as well as the importance of objective problem solving.

I'm currently contemplating whether my previous model of reality needs some updating. Prior to reading these first seven chapters, I was under the impression that to get the most out of life and be free of negativity or stress, I simply have to accept reality as it is. However, now I wonder if it is feasible to apply the actions of Harry to my own life, engaging the world around me as a series of puzzles, all but begging to be solved.

But I'm rambling. Can't wait to keep reading!

Another thing I wanted to say a few chapters ago was that I think it's interesting that you've already mentioned so many of the later plot things in this fic, which is primarily following the Sorcerer's Stone timeline. Like, Sirius Black escaping from Azkaban and Voldemort coming back (books three and four). I'm interested to see how all that will play out, and to see if Quirrell is evil in this fic.

Also I like to read reviews that other people leave on fics, and I really hope that McGonagall turns out to have a magnificent relationship with Harry, as she does in canon. A caring respect.

Okay, I have been reading. A masterpiece. While you didn't get each character right(specially Ron's and Draco Malfoy), while some of Harry's logic was flawed and not pointed out with morals and experience enough and while Draco's and his father relationship is not shows as in the books- it has other mindblowing things about them, great story-telling, great comedy and the knowledge displayed is actually interesting!

I never thought I would ever enjoy Slytherin Harry AU! I never saw how that could work out and now here I am eager for new chapter and how the plot will develop.

This was a pretty good chapter

I just found this story, it's great! I'm studying science myself, so I really appreciate all the things Harry says, it's just amazing! Thank you so much for coming up with the idea!

Was...was that a Reservoir Dogs reference?

Wait, WHAT? Why would Luna and Xeno believe that tosh?

I am now quite sure that I love you. Why are you not in my daily life? You need one more person waiting with baited breath to see what you say next... Thoroughly enjoying your applied genius (and lots of book-learning to boot), humor, and all other forms

Lovvvvvvved it

I would say Draco is also starting to think like Harry.

i really, really hope Harry can fix Draco's fucked up view. Its way too simple and needs more detailed work.

Very clever story

Oh, boy. I wonder what this means for Draco's future. Also, that bit about The Quibbler: totally hilarious. I nearly spit out my own chocolate milk.

The expectation that a man can get away with rape is definitely not confined to "those places which didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment." RAINN estimates that in the US, 98% of rapists will never go to prison or jail. (Source: /statistics) Meanwhile, in the UK, "Conviction rates for rape are far lower than other crimes, with only 5.7% of reported rape cases ending in a conviction for the perpetrator. (Kelly, Lovett and Regan, A gap or a chasm? Attrition in reported rape cases, 2005. Quoted from . ) That was some weirdly out of character Western exceptionalism from an author who claims to value reason above all else.

Best quote in the history of fanfiction. I posted it on Facebook. I get called out for being this "obnoxious"

"What happened to me personally is only anecdotal evidence," Harry explained. "It doesn't carry the same weight as a replicated, peer-reviewed journal article about a controlled study with random assignment, many subjects, large effect sizes and strong statistical significance."

This was in chapter 6, but it would only let me review once per chapter. You seriously are now my favorite author.

Oh the politics of this fic! Oh Draco. Politically somewhat savvy but completely inferior to Harry in every way. :)
Also, Happy Pi day and anniversary of this fic :)

This was the first fanfic i ever read, and with no doubt the best story i have ever read.
I would probably sacrifice a couple of my toes to have this made into an anime which follows the story to the letter. DAMN that would be epic! Especially chapter 74, holy shitballs what a moment!

omg draco needs to give harry a wedgie, he's such a dork

所以我会尽量从这篇文里学会理性思考

In which Harry turns Rowling's world on his head (something I imagine he'll be doing quite a lot of) and attempts to convert Draco from Pureblood Wizard into Human.

(Especially Darkandus on Viridian Dreams, for the surprisingly inspiring comment "Lungs and tea are not meant to interact".

There should be a ")"

(In the name of my OCD)

I really hope Harry will be able to convert Draco into one of the good guys...he's like a nightmare right now...clever and without remorse...

ah this is great! "magic runs in families and he couldn't even walk". laughed more while reading the first 6 chapters than the whole week before!

Loved the bit about books! You did catch me with the rape bit mind...but then, that's Dark wizard element and true to the really dark aspects of Draco.

The game of subtleties...Damn

I choose answer c: they are simply ignoring all the rules

Draco is fascinating; I love the contrast between his cold-blooded arrogance and intelligence and the way he can't ignore Harry's offer despite seeing it as a trap. He's admittedly creepy, as no 11-year-old should talk about rape so casually, but he's an interesting character.

A fantastic. Books, books, books, and more books. I love it. The wizarding world is in for such a shock. Thank you for writing!

This seems to be setting up a friendly rivalry between Draco and Harry, as oppose to enemies like in canon. Introducing him to the achievements of science was a brilliant scene, and this chapter had great humor overall. Thanks to the change in Harry though, I'm guessing him and Ron won't be friends. Can't say I'm surprised; Ron is by no means stupid, but his personality would probably annoy this version of Harry. Now I want Harry to meet Luna though... Interesting that Ron's "rat" is dead though. That'll certainly change some things.

I'm tempted to quit this story after hearing Malfoy saying he's going to rape Luna. Potter didn't even defend her and why in the HELL are 11 YEAR OLDS talking about RAPE?! :[

So Pettigrew is dead? Does that mean you're not gonna do the Prisoner of Azkaban arc? I'm not sure how happy I am with that idea

This story is very interesting. I like how Harry wants to explain everything and tries to dominate everything, but he has weakness in that he has an almost Sheldon- level desire to control. The premise is cool to see: "What if we mixed science and magic? Why hasn't anyone figured out how to break everything with magic?" Harry does seem a bit overpowered, but he is going to poke around in things he can't understand, and that's going to hurt him.

A side thing: I don't really believe that science always waxes stronger. There have been multiple times that knowledge has backtracked. I heard somewhere that the ancient Greeks at the height of their advancement had the knowledge of math that Western society didn't regain until 1920 (sorry for no source.) Another thing we can look at is the ancient monuments: We don't have the technology today to rebuild the pyramids of Egypt and South America. We still don't know how they were built and we couldn't do it today.
Anyway, looking forward to more HP snarkiness!

Harry Potter in this fic equals brain freeze.

You perfectly described the wizardry from Diane Duane's Young Wizards series.

Dai stihó, cousin.

what is life
i just...
what
how
shit this is good...

Order of Chaos. Ain't that contradictory.

Very interesting...

I think I've fallen in love with your story

Good.

Wow, this was well done, had me on the edge of my seat, and I was cheering when Harry explained about people having gone to the moon. I am also worried that Harry really will try to rule the world. Also, can you explain why you hate Ron so much? One of my email addresses is

Poor Draco, life altering paradigm shifts and he hadn't even boarded the train yet! What a day! And the twins! Lmao!

It's c. It's so, so c.

Okay I've just started reading this and... well, frankly, it is AMAZING.
But I must go to bed now, and I shall read a few chapters every day hopefully until I finish this. I just want to say this is simply amazing so far and so, so different from anything else I've read, and I love it already and thank you so so much for writing it and - I have feelings and I can't explain them.
Thank you for the feelings.

Shit got real deep, real fast, and I can't help but feel very motivated. Harry's speech was a mic drop and he blew the hell out of Draco's mind. Too bad Draco's got his own plans, though I'm having a hard time believing that eleven year olds have such big plans for world domination. Maybe Malfoy, but it wouldn't be his own, which it doesn't entirely appear to be, but yet it sort of does.

This is absolutely brilliant.

The lack of Hedwig makes me sad but the story is so funny I can't remember she's not there.

I like this Harry. He is...interesting.

Loving this.

- Manny (You can find me on tumblr at asexualtomriddle.)

This is so unbelievably good.
Im neither joking nor exaggerating.

Okay so now about a hundred pages in. The Inception reference from either Fred/George at Kings Cross. Brilliant.

Hi.
Ok, so i really liked this chapter too :)
Canon really does focus too much on the magical world for my taste, and it's quite possible that human genetics could be the solution to more magical babies in the future. Guess Tom Riddle never thought about that because he hated his muggle father with all his guts :p
Keep up the good work :)

hakon2feb.

OMG You are killing me! Harry Potter is really planning on "world optimisation", isn't he? :D Poor Draco, he really shouldn't have had that conversation. I think it broke his mind. Wonderful chapter, by the way!

I can't believe after cooling MY blood with the discussion of how science has altered humankind, you would end with THAT hammer - especially given that if Severus Snape heard that comparison at this point in canon...what am I saying, you know how dismissive he would have been about it, right from the get-go.

I wonder how your version of Severus will react to your version of Harry. Ever so curious.

Well, that was an interesting chapter. And that's all I have to say for it, moving on.

6 good chapter but this is a litter of trash, That he meet Ron was bad but really friend with Draco. This is really starting to go down and fast.

hi,
Wizards(in JKR's HP series) studied astronomy in depth. So going to the Moon would probably not be that big a deal for them.

LOVELOVELOVE the letter exchange between Draco and his father!
Well Done!

I believe in one of re-edits you missed a piece beacuase the
"All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of nothing, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him."

Makes little sense to me as Harry haven't drank it yet.

I thought this fic would be intelligent and it is at parts, but its filled with the same old prejudices of always so I can say it failed in that regard.

It's always a matter of chosing Gryffindors vs Slytherins. I think only that fic with Harry and his brother Connor actually made it balanced. It's like liking the Marauders and Snape at the same time. Impossible.

Wow... Your story is absolutely brilliant and I'm only sorry it took me this long to come across it. It definitely deserves to have each of its chapter reviewed separately but that seems a bit excessive with over a 100 chapters. Also I think it would be impossible for me to stop reading it long enough to come up with the couple of lines needed to write a review. :D I really hope you decide to begin another story soon or I'm going to go into withdrawal when I finish this one. Anyway thank you for creating this wonderful work and I hope you always find the time to keep writing.

Wow. You're a very good writer. I have no idea how old this whole thing is, and it's possible you've moved on and will never read this, but I stumbled on it by accident and am now hooked. I've never read the Potter books. I know the story as well as anyone who's vaguely culturally aware. But this isn't really fan-fiction, by which I mean it has innate appeal apart from its connection to the source material. I'm really enjoying this.

My one comment, which I offer in the knowledge that you needn't care a whit about my one comment, is that you overuse italics. I imagine the cadence of the speaker in my head when I read dialogue, as I imagine everyone does, and the occasional italic punctuation adds flavour to the speech. But too much of it, and it starts to get distracting, because it feels unnatural.

Anyway, it doesn't really matter. If you ever read this, know that I have a great deal of admiration both for your talent as a writer and for your outlook on life. The world needs more people like you.

I was right.

El Dorado.

Did I tell you that I love that story?

Very complex. I'm glad that even though Harry knows he has a lot to learn, his "outsider's perspective" is allowing him to make connections on information on how things work (and how people interact) in the Wizarding World.

I don't mind OOC, but come on, don't be ridiculous about it: the Weasleys an hour early? I'm not sure they have an idea that there is a five minute warning whistle...

;-)

Harry gave Draco a lot to think about... sly...

-his

I think I know what that means, but I'm not sure... Great chapter! XD

An interesting concept. Pull the magic world to pieces and try and put it back to egtehr scientifically. If it works then great, If it doesn't then magic does not work...

This is my understanding of what Harry is doing.

Now, any sign of Hermione Granger yet? I dont see mention of her on the train yet...

I started out writing a list of all the things in this chapter that made me laugh out loud. When I discovered I was writing down every second or third line, I stopped writing.

Addendum to Chapter 6 review:
Arrrrgh Fanfiction deleted my cents sign. A copper piece is worth about 10 *cents* in today's dollars presuming a constant price of wheat. Sigh.

Chapter 7:

* "Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk."

What? Oh. A pun. Either a very poor one, or I missed part of it.

* "Harry opened his eyes and stumbled to a halt, feeling vaguely dirtied by having made a deliberate effort to believe something."

Heh.

* ""If you can't criticise, you can't optimise."

That's a good one. I'll have to remember that.

* "Harry gave Draco a puzzled look. "If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice.""

You are now on notice: I am going to call you/Harry a bullshitter if I find even one single instance of him kidding someone and then admitting it when called on it. This logic is crap; people kid all the time. What's more, yes, many people find it easier to tell a casual lie than to hold to it when challenged. And even if they do, their intonation and body language might give them away.

So while I agree that it would be more efficient if people would stop asking "Did you *really*?", they're not going to, nor should they.

* "Knowing that Draco's hopeful face had probably been drilled into him by months of practice did not make it any less effective, Harry observed. Actually it did make it less effective, but unfortunately not ineffective."

Thank you so much for this exact wording. I've seen that 'no less effective' language misused so often.

* "he had once read that outright panic was the sign of a truly important scientific problem."

Where, dammit?

* "That was the sad and awful part, knowing human psychology well enough to know
wasn't a monster."

So only psychopaths are monsters? Much more damage has been done by True Believers—who presumably can be charming, happy, and generous with their friends—than by psychopaths.

* "No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil
mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. To Draco, his enemies weren't people."

Do you have some evidence that this is the default if nothing else intervenes? I don't know that this is true. I suppose you're referring to studies about the Other. Yeah, okay, probably.

* "And in the slowed time of this slowed country, here and now as in the darkness-before-dawn prior to the Age of Reason, the son of a sufficiently powerful noble would simply take for granted that he was above the law, at least when it came to some peasant girl. There were places in Muggle-land where it was still the same way, countries where that sort of nobility still existed and still thought like that, or even grimmer lands where it wasn't just the nobility. It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment. A line of descent, it seemed, which didn't quite include magical Britain, for all that there had been cross-cultural contamination of things like ring-pull drinks cans."

Long passage quoted for context and my future reference; here's the relevant bit: "It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment."

Really? Wow. That's a fascinating thought.

* "Harry took back the book, flipped the pages until he found what he saw."

Um…huh? Did you mean "sought"?

* "And when they arrived, they left a plaque that said, 'We came in peace, for all mankind.' Though you're not yet ready to hear those words, Draco Malfoy..."

Does it matter that these words are more-or-less an outright lie? "We came to beat the Russians so America could win a Cold War battle" is far closer to the truth.

* "Science…works by knowing how the universe works on such a deep level that you know exactly what to do in order to make the universe do what you want."

That sentence needs to be kept in a box and brought out on special occasions so that we never forget. I feel that even many scientists do not truly understand this.

* ""But make no mistake, Draco, true science really isn't like magic, you can't just do it and walk away unchanged like learning how to say the words of a new spell. The power comes with a cost, a cost so high that most people refuse to pay it."
Draco nodded at this as though, finally, he'd heard something he could understand. "And that cost?"

"Learning to admit you're wrong.""

OMFG yes. And those least willing to admit that they might be wrong proclaim *your* supposed refusal to admit you're wrong the loudest.

* "The sounds of the train platform changed from blurs into murmurs as Draco wandered off."

Oh, had Draco cast Quietus? I thought that the sound had changed because the train was boarding.

* "the watch on his wrist, a simple mechanical model that his father had bought him in hope it would work in magic's presence"

Why wouldn't it? Is this some bit of canon I'm supposed to remember? It really is irritating that you assume that people have read Rowling recently.

* "It didn't take long after that for the family owl to bring the reply.

My beloved son:

I would say that you had been so fortunate as to meet someone who enjoys the intimate confidence of our friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape."

I notice I am confused. What does that mean? I've read up to ch. 100, and still don't know. But I haven't read it *lately,* so I assume there's something I've forgotten.

When I read the headline, I literally could not breathe for 10 seconds, I was laughing so hard. I mean, I was expecting something crazy, just not... That! Siriusly you should put some kind of warning: Beware! If crazy things make you laugh easily, read this chapter slowly, and by yourself if you do not want anybody to think that you re insane. Especially if you ARE insane, in a good, Verres type of way. Shhh, gotta keep that secret.

Great chapter.

Chills.

THE-BOY-WHO-LIVED-GETS-DRACO-MALFOY-PREGNANT OMGOMGOMG I CHOKED AND DIED OF LAUGHTER

How could wizards not know how advanced Muggles are? Diagon Alley is in London, meaning that for over two centuries the trading centre of Magical Britain was in the middle of the most advanced city on the planet.
And today, there is no way they could be ing orang of muggle technology or there would be no way to keep the secret of magic from them.
In fact, if they continue to be this ignorant, the Muggles will catch on so fast to there being a problem that the wizards will be completely unprepared.
As many others have pointed out, at this stage of muggle tech, the resulting war would be a stalemate with the wizards eventually winning through attrition (they can just target every officer and politician until they give up). Before it gets to that point however, nukes will start to come into play.
Basicly, Harry has to make the Wizarding world accept the Muggle one and the scientific method to help prevent world war three.
Cool.

Was the AVPM reference an accident or on purpose?(the sweat band.)

I agree, you can never have enough books.

"Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing." Absolutely fantastic and true line, its the reason I always skipped through quidditch paragraphs in the books. Actually, on second thought, it could probably be Dumbeldores motto for dealing with people, though shiny thing might have to be replaced by powerful, mysterious thing in that case, but it's just semantics. Still, after that the chapter just got better and better, I love the relationship between Harry and Draco, the way both know what the other one is doing, yet neither can resist it, it is absolutely fantastic. I'm really enjoying this story. Thank you.

wow my mind was trying to understand all this its hard

Wow... Wizards have never made it to the moon. That's sad, really.

Thoughts: I was saddened and a bit irritated by Harry referring to Lily as "your sister" when reassuring Petunia. Lily did not "let" magic get between them, Petunia pushed her away due th ejealousy she herself addressed earlier. I just found myself taking offense to not that scene, but rather the words you used. Petunia and Michael have an amusing relationship with our protagonist. I understood what you meant by anvils when you nixed Ron as a main character. I laughed, then frowned, then was upset/horrified/furious, then was mollified, then was fascinated by Draco's nonchalant rape suggestion and the deductions that followed. Mad giggles escaped me when I read your Darth Vader reference. Every event that resulted from drinking the Comed-tea had me, at the very least, looking like the Chesire Cat, except for the "Orde rof Chaos" one, which I'm sad to say I didn't understand. Lastly, the game of psychological manipulations between the two boys was absolutely fantastic and extremely fun to read.
Suggestions: More of a hope than a suggestion at this point, but wishing for certain characters in canon to not be vilified, patronized, ignored and/or bashed. I do realize you're going for a logical Harry, and the content thus far has been great, but if I had to complain about anything, it would be the deletion of much loved characters from the main storyline, or at least the definite decrease in importance. I hope Lily, James, Sirius, Remus, Luna, Hagrid, and the Weasleys are not bashed any more, or, if at all possible, at all. Hedwig...well, she's a bit of a lost cause now, isn't she? Even moreso than Ronnykins.

XD so... harry's a genius? I like this type of fic! And I love the writing style, too!3333

Oh Lucius..
I hope Draco & Harry still become BFFs.
...Draco? Pregnant? And HARRY'S THE FATHER?!

O_O...

This story does it a lot to me.

Since when have the Weasleys had a white owl? Is Peter Pettigrew dead? Then how is Sirius going to be exonerated? There is a story that goes with this, and I really wish Draco had made Ron tell it.
The rest of that was brilliant. I'm really starting to like Draco, even if he is an arrogant git who would not care if a ton of people died, so long as they weren't his sort. Harry's going to fix him. I love your aftermaths so far - they seem to be pretty much about how people have no idea what to think of Harry after meeting him, because they have way too much to think about.

Oh wow, that Greatest Secondhand Bookshop Raid Ever sounds like something fantastic to have been a part of.
Very odd, thinking of luggage even having the capacity for belief.

bstring theory

Just finished chapter 5. DYING LAUGHING!

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harry's commentary on ron and quidditch are spot on and very funny, its going to be interesting to see what he thinks of the sorting hat and boat ride

its good to see that harry doesnt buy into draco's propaganda, Lawful Evil is the most disturbing of alignments: at least chaos is mindless. but Harry's return arguments briliantly portray the badassitude of us muggles. theres a reason that the wizarding world has to hide in the shadows of mortal society

the Guest below me:
We must have not read the same chapter. There was nothing in there "making light" of rape.
Draco has some very violent and dark views on the subject, and the protagonist was (rightly so) disgusted by it.

this is ridiculous and youve made light of rape of a young girl. as a parent, and as a survivor, i must say, i was disgusted, and will not be continuing, despite my liking of your story previous to the talk about luna.

Regarding the Aftermath:

What.

How...I'm not sure which direction to take that response. Subtlety, eh?

Wow. That's powerful. I would never expect a child to brazenly say they could rape someone and mean it. It cut through all through everything.
This Harry brilliant.

The second first chapter I think brain-damaged me, the third and fourth and this... I am going to have to learn how to read again... Anyways thanks for this mind ( literally) blowing book! And it was just seven chapters!
Me-

Oh My. God.

*bows down*
This story is AMAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAZING.

Harrys character is starting to come out right (of course he is not much alike the original Potter, but close enough) and the story is fun and thrilling. But I think Draco is a bit too intellectual in his thinking. More bold moves and emotional reasoning is his style. How will you make all the characters more personal?

Is the pairing Harry/Draco or Hermione/Harry?

I apologize in advance, this isn't really a review.
Thank you for bringing this immensely amazing world to life. The ideas for the world may not be entirely you. But, I find your Harry Potter refreshing and fantastic.

you're great, this is great, thank you 3

I was introduced to this amazing story at work today. In at chapter 8, and I must tell you that I understand why you told anyone who didn't grasp the story to just quit reading. I am so appreciative of the incorporation of different theories and experiments that have formed us as the human race. I do a private Irish jig when I take apart the brilliant arguments you present through Harry. I am concerned with his ominous nature, though. I wish he were more light-hearted and positive, but he is a realist and that has been well-established. The personalities of the characters are perfect! Ron is truly dim-witted in the books (although he means well), Draco is ambitious, cunning, smart, and manipulative; these traits are brought to life in this story, and I couldn't be more pleased. This is the parallel universe to the original Harry Potter series, and I cannot wait to see what happens!

Hello,

So, I haven't actually reviewed a story in probably somewhere close to a year. That being said, this chapter honestly came close to making me cry. The absolute love and understanding of why science is so fantastic made me giddy with happiness. I loved the imagery of being shocked at the astounding fact that humans made it to the moon, and showing how prejudiced could be seen not only on the level of blood and where you come from, but also from an intellectual level, "But how could Muggles achieve all this?" because they have fantastic minds that though rooted in the realities of science, also can dare and dream and do amazing things.

Also the line that you have to know that you will be wrong, made me choke up as well. Yes you will try, and yes you will fail, that is inevitable but you have to get up and try again. If someone points out how you are wrong, don't get angry and deny their facts, learn from it, use it to become stronger, better, wiser!

Honestly I loved that whole section of this chapter and I felt that you deserved to know that,

Thank you so much for writing this story,

Sincerely,
Jenn

Enjoy how science & logic are used to come together

Interesting idea for the quidditch. Another way to reform might be to use the snitch factor as an additional deciding factor to the result of the game in addition to the score. So if team a wins the score and the snitch they win. If team b loses the score and the snitch they lose.
If team a wins the score but loses the snitch they draw. If team b loses the score and wins the snitch they draw. If team a and b are level in score the team that wins the snitch wins. That could lead to intriguing in game scenarios of what to do based on the situation.

This is completely unlike the book and it's driving me mad.

But you're also very intriguing. I think I'm hooked.

Freaking awesome. Seeker really is the stupidest position ever, isn't it? It ruins the game completely. Why did I never realize this before?

Also, "You can never have enough books." Agreed.

Love your comparison of science and magic. Interesting story.

Oh My God
That last couple of sentences... I LITERALLY reread it at least three times, because my brain couldn't process what it actually meant.
If I read that correctly, it means that Lucius thought whomever Draco was talking about got that information from Snape... But since Harry obviously has had no connection with Snape yet, it would mean he realized Lucius' weak point on his own... Which is a quite scary and sobering fact... MAN UR SUCH A GENIUS!
Anyways, I'm kinda regretting saying that I'll finish this as soon as possible... That was BEFORE I realized that this story is over 500k words long! But I started reading it knowing that, so I'm definitely going to try to finish it... I finished a 700k word fanfic once... I can do it again...

I have been totally flabbergasted twice today.
I first read Harry Potter and the Natural 20.
Then proceed to start reading this thing.
I am pleased to say, I am amazed.
This is indeed the bees knees
The veritable cats pajamas.
Nothing short of awesome.
The text is syncing up.
That is also awesome.
Even for an accident.

This chapter was delicious- I ate it like a slice of cake.

My life has finally met the very definition of insane sanity! This had me cackling in laughter since I went to bed around an hour ago (Danish time) and resulted in my mother threatening to gag me if I didn't shut up! You. Are. Brilliant!

Chapter 1-6 we're knock outs! Harry is intelligent which makes me laugh! Also in this chapter, Harry and Draco seem to have become very acquainted with each other. Looks like Ron is not going to be friends with Harry, which is fine because I think Ron isn't good enough for this Harry. It will also be easier to defeat Voldemort because he is different. McGonagall is also very amusing. I like Harry's and McGonagalls talk throughout Diagon Alley. Review in later chapters!

-Saturn

This story took a mild turn for the weird, but I'm allowing for flawed perspectives...

You honestly know how to write intelligent characters. That really takes some doing, not to mention some personal insights (ergo intelligence)

When I first read about the headline in this chapter, I thought it was super funny and that your assurances that this would not be HPDM mpreg were silly and unnecessary. After this fic started my spiral into fanfic addiction (aided by the fact that I'm a yaoi fangirl), I just look back and think how wrong I was.
*Sigh* well, re-reading this after going through multiple other HP fanfics is going to be quite an experience.

And so a Pureblood discovers that muggles DO have power, muahaha! Very nicely written chapter x3

...I love you.

Don't tell my fiancee I told you that, but I love you.

Vamp

You had a really good point about the Quiddich, actually. Never really considered it since every player was compared to other players based on their skill level rather than their position.

I.e Oliver Wood was more highly regarded than Harry

And Harry's counter to Malfoy's spiel was brilliant! Well done!

This is a very dangerous game indeed.

Very good!

This is reminding me a lot of Pinky and the Brain

If Harry Potter were Ender Wigan...

Mad, Insane, Epicly awesome?

OK, "as soon as I'm old enough, I'm going to rape her!", is just so deliciously WRONG (!) . (sick bastard! they are eleven!)

I gotta go and try to sleep, now. Good thing I had just peed BEFORE I read that... really... I was crying and (attempting) to not laugh out loud for, like, a minute.
_

Is the hot girl in the add for the bridal dresses, next to this box, SUPPOSED to look like Hermione?! (if that was intentional... Well done!)

Ah, yes, Quidditsh.
A mix between a ball-hop-game of a carnival-fair, rugby, cricket and crocket with all thot on flying brooms, y'know, fantasy.

If just the rational!Harry/Slytherin!Draco would stay so (funny) forever.
An insane pair of knuts.

OK. That was 2 parts communism, 1 part Weasley bashing, 1 part really freaky Draco, 3 parts Hakuna Matata, and 5 parts 'Harry-is-going-to-end-up-trying-to-take-over-the-world'.

Roll it all together, and it proves it to be one of the weirdest chapters of a novel. Ever.

:S

I would like to take this opportunity to say that I HAVE to check out that site when I'm finished. The topics being touched upon are making so much sense that I wouldn't forgive myself if I didn't.

I see what you did there with the Mister Black international man of mystery thing!

The idea of "committing murder as a bonding method" certainly brings Dostoevsky's "Demons" to memory (where it certainly fails, and does it brilliantly); it would be interesting to know, whether it could actually work...

Is it only me, but children used to be more innocent at age 11? Hard to picture Harry and Draco without white beards; I don't suscpect Dumbledore to be young and cheerfull - not so far yet. Still, very amusing.

Damn this is good.

Oooh... It's getting interesting...

Well I guess Harry could have done the gold exchange thing to pay off Lucius Malfoy, but I guess he hasn't considered it for a while. It's not important to the plot right now, but may be when he wants to start taking over the world.

oh god. please PLEASE tell me the sweatband is an AVPM reference.

"If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice."

-best line ever and so true

Waiit...I don't get the last bit. Severus Snape? But that's not Draco's father, and if he was in this story, then Draco's relationship with Lucius would have changed. Hmm...I think I'll hopefully find out next chapter, and I love all the manipulation going on. Surprisingly I can understand it.

The whole Corned Tea aspect was harilious, and I loved how it worked! Though perhaps it works on the premise that the drinker subconsciously expects the tea to work, even though they consciously don't, so they are waiting for something to happen which they will tag as humorous and laugh about it, so basically it works because they believe it. How about giving the tea to someone who isn't aware of it's properties, and telling them it's normal tea? I'd love to see that experimented by Harry and his friends.

It just occurred to me that rape would be far less serious in the wizarding world because they can magic away the consequences with an Obliviate.

cool

Has anyone watched a very potter musical? It's a really funny parody play that's on YouTube. In the second one, a ver potter sequel, harry shows up to kings cross with a sweatband to cover up his scar. I don't know who copied who, or if its just a coincidence, but I thought you should know

Ok, now I understand that your making Harry sound too intelligent wasn't done accidently. But honestly he is scary and I guess it tells us something about your McGonagall that she already realized this during their first meeting.
Also the serious part of the story starts, now after we got to know Harry a bit. Your Draco is creepy, too, I love what you did with him and am really nervous to find out what you have planned for Hermione's character considering that McGonagall, who somewhat understands Harry, mentioned her to him...

I...extremely dislike your Harry.

Is that a good response or bad response, Draco?

Your chapters really took off in terms of length.

Hello Draco,

I was wondering if you could, ever so kindly, spell fucked?

Best wishes,
-kheelwithit-

Lovely Martin Luther reference, it made me laugh...

As a big science nerd, I LOVE THIS STORY. I was physically quaking in my chair when Harry was explaining science to Malfoy. I would sometimes keep myself up at night thinking what would happen if we put science in Harry Potter? And I've gotten it in this story. Thank you so much for writing. Now then, on to the next chapter...

Bye, bye, Ron! God, that guy annoys the hell outta me. I'm so glad he's going.

I like your Draco. I like the book Draco as well. But most fanfiction make him pretty stupid when he's mostly just lazy. If he put his mind to it, I think he'd be rather clever. I like how you're trying to redeem him.

dreaming x

ahh...Luna and Harry, this should provide some fun!

Also, what if Luna became pregent from the rape? surely the purebloods have a spell or potion, to prevent line theft?

This story has a lot of reviews. It's statistically likely that, since I don't plan to spend time formulating this review, any comments I make on the story itself you've already read in a multitude of forms. For this reason, I'm not going to say anything else. It's my rather cumbersome way of letting ink drop.

the Weasley Twins Harry Potter-evans-Verres SWEET MERCY MY GOD HELP US ALL

This is interesting, you've done an outstanding job of making Harry both annoyingly smart and still childlike in his own way as shown by his flippant statement to get the healing kit and his later thoughts on creating an order to fight Voldemort, he's smart as hell but is still a child and doesn't have the people skills or life experiences to temper his own knowledge... I do hope he grows less obnoxious as the story goes on though, smart ass is fine but there should be a limit on it

Ditching Ron was funny and your not wrong about him but his purpose was to be the 'ordinary' person that served as a foil to the exceptions that were Harry and Hermione in the books, still it's not like the story doesn't work without him, especially if it's well written and while he had a few good moments he also had alot of terrible one as well so it's not that bad

The introduction of Draco was great, you did a good job with his character making him smarter, crueler, and more likeable than he originally was... Personally I have no qualms about killing, some people are better of dead and it can be a simpler solution to simply eliminate someone than to find a work around but I hate the idea of rape, despite my own questionable (to most people) morals I can't abide that so it was nice to see Harry step in and try to prevent that.. and your not wrong about people, as awful as Draco seems it isn't something unique in human history, and I would imagine that most people, if raised in Draco's place, would have the same mannerisms and thoughts

Anyways like I said at the top this is pretty interesting so far and I'm looking forward to reading it. Out of curiosity could you let me know what year the story is currently in? I doubt you've written 500k on the first year and am curious to see how far along you actually are

Oh and if you want to see another story where a small change is made that has resonating consequences through out the story, much like your own, then look up Better Left Unsaid by Kenchi618 it's easily the best Naruto fic I've ever read

"Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco.

"Pretty much."

And out of the story he goes!

This is the best story I have read in a LONG time.

Huh?

This chapter was cool, but confuzzleing

It's heart warming seeing two little shits bonding. Think of how snotty and superior to everyone they can feel.

Another amazing chapter

Another wow chapter! The only part that I honestly didn't like was Draco, at eleven, saying that he would rape Luna in response to the Quibbler article. I understand that rape is sometimes more about power and control than sexual release, but...he's eleven. It threw me for a bit of a loop. Besides that, I REALLY love how this is developing! 4:35am, going strong.

I was puzzled at first when Harry attributed the "women are more than just cattle" innovation to the Enlightenment, given that at least one prominent Enlightenment thinker was a disgusting pig in his personal life (with apologies to actual pigs for the comparison), but then it seems that Harry is somewhat ignorant of history. Given that as a character trait, there's no reason for Harry to know that the status of women-as-people in Western Civ is actually a development whose cultural evolution can be traced back to ancient Judaism - and was spread through Europe by Christianity, where it became more and more refined over generations of cultural development. I just thought it was kind of odd for a kid genius to make such a glaring error at first, but then, if he's not interested in history, there's no reason for him to have questioned the "received knowledge" he has, especially when it conforms to his belief that Science Good. It's kind of cute, for him to mess up, when he's so proud of his knowledge! LOL

Another amazing chapter. That liquid part of the story made me REALLY laugh. Heck, many places did as well. Well written, and I love the new pretty manipulative and scientific Harry Potter, wish these were the movies!

Here I was, innocently reading this story, think "Oh! Draco must actually be a nice guy for once, how nice :)"
AND THEN BAM!
Let's rape Luna :D

OH GOD! THE HORROR!

But poor Ron :( I now get what you meant about the bashing. I kinda get what you were saying, but it doesn't feel right to me (yet) that Harry will be without Ron :( :( :(

is there really such drink?

This was a really well written chapter, loved it on so many levels. Don't know how to react to Ron now being sort of sidelined in this story but hey, should be interesting. Loved Harry's determination to reformulate Quidditch and Ron's reaction priceless. Also that line about "As soon as I'm old enough, I'm going to rape her" even though I know its a terrible line (hey rape jokes aren't funny) I just could not stop laughing. I know, I'm such a terrible person, but imagining 11 year old Draco saying that is very hilarious.
Fave Quote: "All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of nothing, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him."

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At first I was laughing really, really hard at the shenanigans in the chapter, and then the bit where Draco said he'd rape Luna hit and I just stopped. And kept going after a moment to see what would happen next. The last section with Harry trying to get Draco to really THINK about what he was saying-that was powerful writing. It came out of nowhere and that's what made it effective.

Surprisingly I have managed to keep up with all you have said though it really only takes someone with a relatively good brain to keep up.

ok, wow. Harry is awesome, but I still like JKR's better. and Malfoy, well I like yours better then Jk's. i'm curious, do you write any of your own novels? if so please put a notice. however sense I don't have any other means, I would like to receive your reply through a fan fic review. please specify the fanfic.

That was so sweet on the train station, when H tells Petunia not to worry, that he'll never let magic come between them. Awwww! So good to hear him say that!
Man, this Harry/Draco relationship is NUTS! I really enjoyed reading their conversation, it was sooo interesting.
Lucius' response to Draco's letter is three thousand miles past intriguing... *reads on*

Loved the chapter, especially the Harry Draco interactions

I think this is my favorite chapter, thus far, for several reasons:
1. I always disliked Ron Weasley on the grounds that his poverty made him an insufferable, jealous git and that he's a soulless ginger (no offence to ginger's seeing as I am one myself and can attest to my lack of said soul)
2. Draco is quickly becoming Harry's friend, with room for Harry to improve on his character. Though I wanted to punch him for the rape comment, I couldn't help but be amused by Harry's recommendation to bond over murder. Did I mention how much I enjoy the Addams Family?
3. Harry's "Science is awesome" speech.
4. I was coincidentally drinking a fizzy neon green drink while reading this chapter with similar results and further gave evidence to support or refute whatever hypothesis Harry is going for.

Too bad there's no Pulitzer for fanfiction. You and Chris Dee's Cat-Tales would be neck to neck.

I loved that line, "I'm so sane it burns like ice." Also, I'd wondered how blood purists would react if faced with science and examples of muggle intelligence. Draco is disturbing, and not just for a child.

Harry really does enjoy smashing everyone's views of reality to pieces, doesn't he? I'm going to go and continue reading this :)

Don't you just love the manipulation in life. This is AMAZING!

That sucks. . . Dx

This might not sound like a compliment but I swear it really is meant as one. Your writing is good enough that it is keeping me reading a story I otherwise would have walked away from the moment after Harry and Ron's interaction. In fact, I nearly did. I am something of a Potter purist when it comes to the relationships between the trio and H/G and R/H. I have always felt that JKR did a good job on building those relationships and so I have stuck to them, but like I said your writing is good and kept me reading.

The one critique I have with this chapter (beyond the above which is more of just a personal preference thing) is that it reads almost like a sounding board for all of the critique's people have against the way JKR wrote the book (you hit all of the classics; the snitch, moon landing as an example of the decay of magical intellectualism vs muggles, Ron being nothing but a dumb side-kick add-on (though that one I never got), etc). I get that some people have major critique's (some very valid) about how some of the books were written; however, I really am hoping this story isn't just going to be a sounding board for a grudge against how JKR wrote the books because it really does seem like a story that has potential and I would hate for that to be lost. Going to give it another chapter or two, but not sure how much longer even your good writing can keep me hooked.

Woooooah. So Harry throws off Ron and gets Draco instead. And plans marrying Luna Lovegood.
Great! :D
I hoped that we'll see the Sorting...but there were many, many other things which made it up :D
Order of Chaos. Gred and Forge. No one else could do that XD
And I'm starting to love Draco more and more. Same with Lucius ;)
...you just planted an idea into my head - how would /normal/ HP Draco react to Muggles on the Moon? :D
...
I hope that Harry will at least befriend he twins :)
And I can't wait for Hermione to appear! They will be fantastic duo... xD
Ah, the NEXT button is too tempting to resist.

hervissa :)

I love the line, 'Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk.'
Great stuff.

Honestly, I think this fic is amazing, and I have enjoyed it as much as the canon series (if not more). It has even given me more of an interest in science! It's funny, it's original, and I'm always looking forward to updates.
That being said, I do have a few issues with it. First of all, during Harry's conversation with Draco, he basically implied that "every time and place that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment" was completely barbaric. I was astounded by the political incorrectness. I think that paragraph could be removed with no real harm to the story. The same could be said of the rape joke in Chapter 11. Also, the anti-religion tracts seem gratuitous.
Besides those issues, I think this is a great fic and I hope you are having as much fun writing it as we are reading it!

This story continues to progress so well that it borders on perfection, but I know better. Perfect means there's nowhere left to go, and I can tell that this one's already gone much, much farther.

Oh my goodness. Now I want Harry and Draco to take over the world. I am enjoying Harry's understanding of science to try and understand magic. And I like how ignorant of "muggle" things Draco is. I always found it odd that there are few all wizard towns and yet wizards have trouble interacting with muggles.

nice going. Could be too clever by half; we will see. . . .and the Weasleys in scarves, a nice and very fitting touch . . . .

you must like white blonde hair. And complications. But you are moving very fast and you have six books to mirror. . . .

Good chapter. I loved the conversation between Harry and Draco.
And Lucius' reply letter is priceless. He has no idea what's going on.

Very well done. The new conversation between Harry and Draco is a lot more natural sounding, and Draco's attitude towards those of lower station comes across way more clearly.

Wow. Just wow. Draco is much more.. efficient and cunning than in canon and I totally love it.
Although an eleven years old boy talking about rape made me uncomfortable. Even if he's above the law doesn't mean he hasn't common morals and principles.

Wait - was Harry's trunk the Luggage from Discworld? No, wait, it doesn't bite. Maybe a distant cousin... The Luggage has been known to reproduce. I have no reason to discount that hypothesis.

Also: Holy cr*p.

This Story so far as made my day. I love the humour.

Glad to see someone agrees with me about quiditich.

Huzzah for "the Greatest Secondhand Bookshop Raid Ever, which had covered four cities and produced thirty boxes of science books now sitting in the cavern level of Harry's trunk." ** "Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?" Actually, now that Harry thought about it, that seemed like a surprisingly good hypothesis. Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing..." Lovely theory. ** "Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience." ** Heaven have mercy, Draco is so ignorant of Muggle accomplishments that he didn't know Mankind has set foot upon the moon?

I just finished reading the first 7 chapters... and I've got to say:
You, sir, are an amazing author!

O.o This is getting more complicated by the chapter isn't it? The cogs are spinning

Harry telling Draco about science, and showing him the lunar landing, is possibly the single most brilliant thing I have yet read here. I don't know who you are or what you do, but you need to write professionally, if you don't already. You're amazing.

When reading in the beginning of the chapter "I feel the need to disclaim that certain parts of this chapter are not meant as "bashing"", I immediately thought "Ron!" XD

Now that things seems to have settled into a rhythm and character of its own... I think I like this.

Blood of atlantis huh? There's two small problems with Draco's theory though; first is the very existance of Muggleborns. if the power of magic wanes with every generation then what is the origin of Muggleborn wizzards? is that not an indication that magic is, if not self sustaining, trying to grow? Second, Harry and Voldimort themselves. Harry's mother was a muggle born and his father was a merely avarage wizzard from a long line of 'waining purebloods'. Then comes along Harry and BOOM, powerful enough to generate a Patronus that scatters half the demetors of Azkaban in determined persuit of a favored prisoner when many of the best can only keep 3 or 4 at bay WHEN HE"S BLOODY 13 YEARS OLD! And that's the least of his accomplishments. Voldimort himself came from the end of the Gaunt line, One of the reportedly most powerful lines in the known world that had breed themselves into being little better than squibs, then old Voldies mommy outsources one generation to a MUGGLE of all things and BOOM! "Greatest Dark Lord In A Century." Both kids are practically dripping in power, the only difference between them, and the source of harry's largely lacluster performance, is his dursley stunted mind.

"To Draco, his enemies weren't people." A fine sentence that completely describes Draco's ramblings about rape and murder. And Harry, as intelligent as he is, still needs a lot of growing up to do. A lot.

Harry needs to ask Draco re raping Luna with the aid of a memory charm, "How do you know that hasn't already happened to you? Is there some Slytherin family friend who seems happy to see you when your Dad isn't around?"
Let Draco look at it from both sides.

Enter the twins it seems. Also i liked the Malfoy scene at the end. Normally i hate Malfoy but you portrayed him in a way that at least made him interesting, even if he did have no morals.

Ahem... let me clear my throat before i say this. Now, 1...2...3
WHY IN THE HELL IS HARRY GETTING TO BEST MATES WITH DRACO MALFOY?! IT'S PERFECTLY FINE IF HE GOT SORTED IN RAVENCLAW, IT'S PERFECTLY FINE IF HE DIDN'T LIKE RON AS MUCH AS HE DID IN THE ORIGINALS BUT WHY DOES DRACO ACTUALLY SEEMS LIKE A HALF DECENT PERSON? I DO NOT HATE DRACO, I LOOOOAAAAATTTTHHHHHH HIM! OH FOR THE SAKE OF GOD THIS IS ABSOLUTELY－ NO, MOM DON'T TELL ME STAY AWAY FOR THE COMPUTER, AND YES I WILL BE CUSSING A LOT LATER SO... HEY STOP THAT! THAT WAS MY FOOT!

Fantastic chapter! Having an eleven-year old boy casually discussing raping a child was horrifying. I'm not sure if the fact that at such a young age Draco was mostly parroting what he had been taught made it more disgusting or less.

I've wondered what wizards would think if they new Muggles had been to the moon. I think your explanation of it is spot on.

Wow! This is a real find. I've read this far since last night (even printed parts out in tiny print and read on the bus. With a flashlight.) and am stopping only to express my admiration before I go on to lose the better part of a night's sleep reading your story! It's not often I get THIS high on a book. Thank you for that.
You must know the absolute KICKS that vaguely Ravenclaw-ish persons get out of a main character that thinks (and boy, does he think!). I'll confess part of me still grumbles that this text is less literature than intellectual construction, an overextended commentary on the wizarding world from a position so outrageously (simplicistically? outdatedly?) rationalistic that I do not feel it as my own (as how many people do?). But, somewhat like poor Draco at this point, being conscious of these things does not change how utterly hooked I am - on the humour, the style, and, yes, the intellectual commentary. My brain feels so alive reading this, victims of the modern culture (get off my twenty-odd-year-old self's lawn!) would probably coin a term like braingasm to describe the chuckles, short-circuits and blank stares of awed realization that happen on every page.
No, forget what my snob part said. This is brilliant in its own way, which is the only way in which one has the right to expect anything to be brilliant. I'll be back with more rambles later. - LunaSakne

"That's not interactive, there's no back-and-forth with the other player and how much fun is it to watch someone incredibly good at moving their eyes? And then whichever Seeker gets lucky swoops in and grabs the Snitch and makes everyone else's work moot. It's like someone took a real game and grafted on this pointless extra position so that you could be the Most Important Player without needing to really get involved or learn the rest of it. Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?"

And this is why the snitch catch in real life quidditch is only worth 30 points. So quaffle play is more important.

Awesome Chapter!

Personally I preferred Hermione Granger gets Draco Malfoy pregnant.

I wonder what Snape will say to Harry

Whaaaooo. That was intense.

Harry explaining to Malloy about landing on the moon reminded me of "I can't GO to Pigfarts, Potter. It's on MARS! You need a ROCKETSHIP." from A Very Potter Musical.

"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -" adorable xD
"Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience." I love Harry's humor)))

"Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk."
That phrase made me extremely happy. Well done!

Your portrayal of Draco was fascinating. Harry's realization that Draco wasn't joking about murder and rape and his reaction to this made for a riveting chapter.

(I don't understand Lucius response to Draco at the end of the chapter but I presume that I'll learn more at some point.)

I just want to say that I'm loving this story so far.
The first few chapters were hilarious. And now a plot, or at least a mystery, is starting to develop: little differences from canon that (apparently) have nothing to do with Harry.

I'm having fun predicting how the stories would go with a Harry Potter who behaves sensibly instead of acting on impulsive, who will go to an adult when there's trouble instead of having a "saving-people thing," who surrounds himself with Ravenclaws instead of Weasleys (or will McGonagall, Hermione and the chaos twins tempt him to Gryffindor after all?)

Your characterization of Harry Potter reminds me a lot of Miles Vorkosigan.

Apparently this fic doesnt go into the 2nd year or later, which is sad because Luna was awesome.

When Harry started buying up Come-Tea to perform experiments I started smiling harder than I have in months. Thank you for that.

It makes me very happy that Harry knows Draco is probably just a product of his environment rather than an irredeemable Evil Dark Wizard.

But, the best part was when Harry blew Draco's mind with science.

Horrorstruck and moving on.

I didn't expect Ron to stick around on the train xD

"You can never have enough books". Gah, I wish -I- had a family motto like that. Also, I just got into this fanfic today and frankly, so far, it is not at all what I expected a HP fanfic to be. Which is to say, it's downright terrific.

I am loving this. You are an amazing writer. THANK-YOU!

Could you expand on Godric's writings at some point, perhaps even post the actual in-universe text in an interlude or omake? I can't remember the exact chapter where it was mentioned, but when I think about this fic it keeps coming up in my head.

Hmm... So confusing. Brilliant... Okay. Okay. *Is hopelessly enthralled*

Good so far, but one question- how does Harry know what the Imperio curse is already?

So the reason for Muggle-born hatred is because "dirty blood" is assumed to taint magical blood...it makes the Malfoys seem slightly less sinister, even though they're still quite dark...as for Harry, it takes a lot to make science look better than magic. It was sort of a relief when he explained the Muggle world to Draco, as it was something I wish had happened somewhere in the books. Muggles are often depicted as inferior when they aren't; they just have different abilities. And now that I know Harry is planning to dominate both science and magic...well...it's kind of fear-provoking, really.

go harry! convert draco to science! it must work, that would be so freaking awesome!

Woah, Harry's turning evil.

I believe I'm up to date on this whole story, but there are mentions of the "Incident at the Potions Shop," in the aftermath of which Harry took aside another customer and asked him about Lucius Malfoy. The Aftermath section of Chapter 7 strongly implies that the customer he pulled aside was Severus Snape, which seems a highly plausible place to encounter him outside of school anyway. What I'm trying to figure out, though, is what was the "Incident at the Potions Shop?" Does it come up ever again, and I missed it? Anyway, fun chapter

Firstly, I wish to submit one heartfelt AAAAAAAAAGHH about the person whispering Hermione's name at the end of last chapter. What the frak.

I think you might want to make the play on words clearer in the sentence "Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk." Took me three puzzled rereadings the first time to get that - illusion of transparency, y'know.

This might be the only story I've read with Ron-is-stupid character bashing that actually works. He's not *that* stupid, certainly not as much as most bashers portray, but he's just so very far out of MOR-Harry's league that he doesn't fit any more. So, um, props for what should be a serious fault and actually isn't.

I find it odd that perpetually curious Harry has managed to not inquire after "*the best pet story ever*" in seventy-eight chapters. Plot reasons, I'm guessing, possibly relating to "the best way to escape Azkaban is not to be there," but it's rather interesting.

Harry thinking that Lucius was going to "c-crucify" Draco is an oddly specific idea of punishment. (The stuttering is odd, unless he's LastSecondWordSwap-ing something I don't get.)

I'm one of those people who actually understand what you were going for with the rape thing. There's really no better way to convey "vastly different value system where this kid is *not* a psychopath" - witness the varied attempts of the current Reddit thread. I get why people ragequit over this, but it makes narrative sense to me.

I know I'm supposed to be finding the bad parts here, but I've got to compliment the Muggles-on-the-moon scene. *Awesome*.

Harry arrives early at Kings Cross which is in character with him but so do the Weasleys which _isn't_ for them. But I guess I can excuse this.

"Harry had only lightly skimmed his schoolbooks (though that skim was quite bizarre enough) in a very quick effort to determine what sort of science books to buy over the next 48 hours." - that is _so not_ in character. I mean, he would have _tried_ to just skim but no way he didn't end up spending hours and hours completely immersed in them. He doesn't have that kind of willpower, or else he wouldn't fail miserably at reading only the titles on the spines of all library books in a later chapter.

"And whatever you do, don't think of an elephant." - pretty much sums up the whole business with the barrier. I enjoyed this bit and it is in character for Frorge to say.

And I can't tell you how happy I am that someone finally put the stupidity of the existence of a Quidditch Seeker as a game decider into proper words. "Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing..." keeps making my day every time I read this chapter.

It is completely in character for HPEV not to get along very well with the (pretty much canon) Ron. I don't mind this one bit. Adding Draco to that conversation made for a lot of fun reading. One thing of note however: Harry is already aware of an "evil" wizard named "Sirius Black" from the previous chapter. While it is plausible that he didn't make that connection when Ron objects to his choice of cover name "Mr Black", I find it improbable that he forgot who betrayed his parents.

The rest of the Harry/Draco interaction is a work of art.

Harry and Draco plotting world domination is a very, very scary thing indeed.

Harry had said to his father that he would pay him back as soon as he figured out how to convert wizarding gold into Muggle money, and his father had told him to go jump in a lake.

"Er," Ron said. He closed his mouth, which had been open.

Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.

About the rest of that chapter, all I can say is...wow. And I'm silently cheering Harry on.

I have very recently started reading your most wonderful work and am enjoying it immensely. Aside from this enjoyment, I have also learned a great deal (mostly new words, but I anticipate learning some new science at some point). Point being, I tried looking up what a "nundu" and found a creature called a "nunda" (or "mngwa") that would certainly be capable - and likely to - rampage. It is a lion-like creature found in Tanzania. The Wikipedia article is highly lacking, but here it is for your own interest (assuming you didn't already know): wiki/Mngwa . As such, I was wondering if it was possible to know if this is creature that you had intended when mentioning the nundu or am I off completely?

Thanks again for writing such a wonderful piece. I look forward to many hours with it.

The horror of the world of children - it's been long since I thought upon it. Casual talk of rape and murder is a cold reality that children must include in sense-making, and it hurts to recall the context around such chatter.

Now, on to the criticism: thank you, author, for taking the time in this long conversation to inject me, your reader, with this barium of cold reality so I may watch the screen as it courses through my circulatory system and highlights the cancerous cells that remain, undiagnosed and untreated, from my mid-childhood. I would curse you for requiring such introspection within mere fan-fic, but that's the nature of cruel writing, isn't it? I wander in seeking entertainment and find a mirror that reveals not only physical maladies but social and psychological issues I have yet to settle with parents, siblings and a 'friend' or two. Again, thanks.

There was a lad mag recently who 'joked' that because most rapes aren't reported, it looks like good odds.

What Draco said was upsetting because it's true - but he forgets the extra-legal-options. It's starting to happen in China - when enough people have lost complete faith in their local justice system - they take it into their own hands and start killing the corrupted officials, only happened a handful of times (or what was reported), but it smells like the lead up to the French Revolution.

I'm very glad that the slithering trunk has made another cameo appearance in this chapter. For some reason depicting it in my head makes me crack up in peals of laughter upon reading.

Oh, and Harry's sense of humor is even better than his intelligence. The Death Eater Eaters? Seriously good stuff. I hope you keep it up!

there's so much going on, that i know i'm just failing to actually get everything! the letter at the end from mr. malfoy? for sure i'm missing the lightbulb moment of what that was actually telling draco. bit frustrating, not quite smart enough for this story sometimes:) it's kinda like watching the big bang theory, but with magic. they talk about stuff you sometimes know about, and sometimes don't, but it's always pretty funny. i also just had to comment on the ridiculously crazy amount of reviews, i don't think i've ever seen a story with soo many!

Wonderful. I love the comed-tea. I can't understand why people miss the point about Draco's attitude toward rape. Non-canonical magical Britain (and to a large degree, canonical magical Britain) has some very ugly and outdated attitudes. Was Rowling being simplistic by portraying blood-purism as the main conscious dispute between the "good guys" and the "bad guys"? Were all those sinister bits of canonical magical Britain that pass unremarked just there for atmosphere, or was the reader supposed to notice them and take pause at some point?

Hm. I like this anomalous friendship Harry and Draco have going on. The two have much more stable personalities than in the books, I think...Harry isn't just the hero and Draco isn't just the callous villain. And yes, now that it's been brought up, Ron is relatively pointless. He was supposed to be the comic relief, I guess...but even that served little purpose...

Wow. This chapter was epic. It was long, too, so excuse me for not having any immediate examples to quote from.

This is starting to sound more like one of those epic science fiction stories with power struggles and crazy Batman level plans. In which main characters are manipulative and epic intelligent. But it's even better than that, because in addition to the awesomeness, you have great humor.

Scientific Method (Simplified)

Observe

Ask questions

Answer the questions

Question the answers

Repeat

Use math

"It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment. A line of descent, it seemed, which didn't quite include magical Britain, for all that there had been cross-cultural contamination of things like pop-top soda cans."

So institutionalized rape exists in every non-Enlightenment culture, and its existence in a culture strongly implies that that culture is not descended from the Enlightenment?

This belief is ignorant and appalling. Your main character is a bigot.

So I haven't actually read this chapter, I had been meaning to review since halfway through the first one but couldn't drag myself away from your enticing story. Luckily for both of us I remembered. I loved the refreshing way you bring the character to life and altering the Harry Potter of J.K Rollings Books to your Harry Evens-Verres, with drive and passion in his thoughts. Thank you so much for being creative.

"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -""

I LOVE the Martin Luther reference.

I just realized you setup chapter 80 since chapter 7!

I don't think I have a solution (yet) but has anyone considered:

A) Discrediting the Malfoys as a blood traitors

B) Blaming Quirrell.

Now, I don't think this are True Solutions. But they might help someone.

I am so incredibly interested in knowing where Draco and Potter's friendship is going to go. Strange how you even change his friendships, but I'm not going to argue. This shit is great! More reading...

Question,

Because Harry has remarked that the wizardry world is basically in the dark ages

And the age of exploration is a result of the age of enlightenment

does anyone in Wizard!Iberia,France,and Britain know anything about the two continents on the other side of the Atlantic?

Or Austrailia?

I love Science. This is great stuff.

My twenty year-old son recommended this to me. I was enjoying it hugely, laughing my ass off during Chapter 7, until the part about raping Luna Lovegood, who is surely the Mockingbird of Rowling's story. While there was a point to be made, it was painfully cavalier too long for this reader. I was going to post a link on Facebook and now I will read longer before pledging my support for this story. Rape is far too common among young readers to make light of.

I'm finding the interactions of Harry with Draco very interesting, I have to admit having had a very painful experience with being manipulated I have a great dislike for people who use other people (I have a dislike for Draco based on this, but realize that it an almost pathological reaction to having it done to me at one time.) I hope that Harry's morals are a bit more grounded it right than they are in wrong. Not that a dark Harry is necessarily bad but I find a more traditional light or even gray Harry more interesting. It's easy to be bad, it takes character to be good. And it makes for a better story in my opinion.

so draco is a jerk, and he a jerk in yoru story, so ron has reason to not like the guy, and what reason does harry for not likeing ron, he talk to him for a hour, ron was not stupid, very brave, he could a someone that could help you or hurt a lot, hope harry remembers this, and relize that he made the wrong chooice.

this was so utterly fucking awesome ! too bad i have exams going on

Potions shop. Snape. Right, yes, I feel like that should have occurred to me right away, but even after reading Lucius's response, it took a minute for that to sink in.

This chapter was fascinating and absolutely mind bending, and perhaps a little bit disturbing in parts, but so are most stories I find fascinating.

For some reason, I've always enjoyed stories where Harry and Draco aren't enemies, but Draco remains fundamentally the same person. It's one thing to change his character to make him Harry's friend, and another entirely to make them friends without changing who he is.

Okay, friends might not be the right word in this case, and Harry is definitely very different, but still, I like where this is going.

Mmm, a thousand pounds' worth of science books. *drools*

I really do wonder how the Muggleborns are supposed to get to the platform their first time. Bloody wizards.

I also wonder what the Incident with the Science Fair Project was. I'm picturing something along the lines of David Hahn. Could we hear about that in a future chapter, please?

The twins are awesome even when they only have two lines.

Haha, luggage that believes in the platform. Harry, if you think that's disturbing, wait'll you see the hat.

Quidditch, the utterly illogical game! I can actually see how that alone would keep this Harry'n'Ron apart, even if subsequent occurrences hadn't helped that.

I didn't notice before that the metals they name are of their future houses, including Harry's bronze. Neat!

Scabbers. Yet further backstory oddity, and we've just barely got started with this tale. *narrow-eyed glare*

I love the Malfoy family dynamic. Two screwed-up Slytherin-to-the-core guys that genuinely love each other. That anecdote Draco shares is both completely in-character (and would be even for their canon counterparts) and adorable. But don't tell either of them I said that...

Comed-Tea! And the Quibbler! And completely left-field Values Dissonance! "I am going to tear apart your pathetic little magical remnant of the Dark Ages into pieces smaller than its constituent atoms." Allow me to cheer you on in that endeavour, Harry.

Yep, humans can go to the moon. And I don't know why that brings a sappy grin to my face, but it does. Humans are awesome.

Huh, Lucius' rejoinder at the very end is odd. Not "further fuel for my paranoia" odd, just odd.

I have always seen this fan fiction everywhere in HP communities and for some unknown reason, I have never clicked on it. I have learned that I am an idiot for not doing so.

You story is mind blowing. I, a 14 year old girl who has not really ever interested in science, but still had some kind of passion for it, am now obsessed with just the thought of everything.

The second chapter was what got me hooked. When McGonagall turned into a cat, Harry's reaction was perfect in its own way. Not only did his mind come up for a scientific way of how that is possible, but he wanted to know more about magic. He could have walked away from the magical world and stay with the world he knew (science), but he went anyway, to learn more! He had no reason to, but he did, proving that, sometimes, 'curiosity kills that cat.'- in other words- he would not have learned about what really happened to his parents. Now, is this a sign of fate, or was this some type of science?

If I am over doing this, sorry. But I think you have an AMAZING understanding of how the world works.

Anyway, in chapter 3-6 (I think,) You talk about how Harry is never really understood by anyone, how he is isolated and adults think that they should be Superior. I agree wholeheartedly with Harry's point. If you are smarter and better then this does not apply. I love how you're adding real life advice in you story.

Another example of what I really love is how Harry thinks about the future. Is it actually good to be that prepared? I often think about this when going to bed. Say one day a man comes into my house and tries to kill my parents. Should I have been thanking god that I bought a first aid kit a month ago, or was it just a coincidence that I had it. Maybe it was just a mathematical luck that I bought it? Who knows. So, should I always expect the worse or should I just let fate, god whatever do its thing?

Another thing I like was when Harry started talking about muggles going to the moon, (chapter 7) It is another example of how people really are- single minded. There could be a whole different universe thinking a different way then you right now and we would have no idea.

In other words, your story is FREAKIN' AMAZING! Everything you said is what I lay in bed a thinking about every night. Thank you for making such and incredible story! Well done!

Once again you leave me breathless. Breathless with suspense and laughter (how can a story be so serious, yet so funny at the same time?) and utter admiration.

I've got nothing to add except that I love the interactions between your Harry and the other characters. Even with topics that are completely ... missing a word here ... out there... somehow, the conversations flow naturally. Well done, indeed.

I made it as far as the end of this chapter when I decided I'd stick around, leading me to leave this review. I've never actually looked into the website you based your name from, or really any other collaborations of works centered on rationality, but I've always identified with something similar. Never formally identified, but I've always strived to think about how I think. This being said, I also enjoyed Harry Potter, to an extent. I never could compare it to my preferred classics or science fiction. At least, I enjoyed it enough to be poking around in FanFiction when I was introduced to it. And now, after so luckily (although it really isn't luck-just a certain outlook and perspective) stumbling upon your piece, I must say I really am enjoying this. Your characters, while bearing a certain resemblance to Rowling's, are much more preferable. Harry is so logical, so frank, that the other characters seem to be at a loss, which really says something about what is considered to be normal. Your exploration of the magical world mirrors my questioning of it. I never could understand the variation of the value of money in the wizarding world. The acceptance of magic while blatantly disregarding all of science-that is to say, all of our observations of the behavior of the world-greatly frustrated me in Rowling's work. I'm looking forward to reading on to see Harry's discoveries, and where his union of magic and science will take him. And, hoping that reviews do help you as an author, I'll leave some more as I progress.

You write with such enviable clarity!

Reading Harry's thoughts and words about and to Draco was actually kind of inspiring (whether that's indicative of me reading too many simple, gratuitous adventures or of me degrading mentally...I'm not going to analyze), and that you managed to convey these ideas without being verbose or convoluted is quite awesome.

Thanks again for taking the time to write,

Cheers

Apparently, Quidditch and fantastic racism stand no chance against Science. I'd say this, not the 5th, is the chapter where the story gets in full swing: not only we get another lession on rational thinking and well-crafted characters, but also the hero begins his quest for World Optimalization.

"As soon as I'm old enough I'm going to rape her."

This new Draco I'm seeing is even scarier than the last...

Why are two eleven year olds joking about raping a ten year old to prove scientific inaccuracies in a work of fiction?

Every time I read this story, it's an emotional response.

HARRY IS LIKE SNAPE? Oh my god brilliant!

Quidditch:

Originally I hadn't thought it odd. It was just a game in the Harry Potter Universe. Then you mentioned it's absurdity and the basic highlighting of a single character became obvious. Months later I thought perhaps it isn't the game itself which has anything wrong with it, but the way people play it.

That it isn't basketball with hide and seek, but hide and seek with basketball. (Two thirds for the first and One third of the other.)

For example, if you realize the true focus of the game is the snitch, why don't you attack the Seeker to remove them from the game and prevent the other team from winning? (Brutal Version.)

If not allowed to do that, why not have most of the team searching for the snitch? Because if everyone on one team was looking for it while ignoring their own goalposts, the other team would probably be able to go far over 150 points in...30 seconds.

No, seriously. Five points a goal, two people tossing the quaffle back and forth between them at a rate of one goal a second means 50 points in 10 seconds and 150 in 30.

This means having to put most of your focus on finding the snitch, but still defending your goal enough to prevent losing that way.

Add to that constantly harassing the Seeker who should not be left alone.

How would you play a game with two objectives?

In the end, even if the Seeker is the only one who is allowed by the rules to touch the snitch, instead of someone like the Chasers being able to grab it and take it to them... You know, if it wasn't for the heavy amounts of luck involved I might say get rid of the Seeker position. It's really just a glorified Chaser.

Recon/Convoy defense/Base defense.

No, never mind. The real answer is that the way to keep the game as close as possible to it's original design is to not have the snitch end the game. Buy a clock and make grabbing the thing much harder.

Heh. If the original version was the brutal one, perhaps Quidditch used to be a punishment. The Seeker was the one being punished and everyone would beat the snot out of them until the snitch was found.

WOW Harry is very rational and quite devious. His interaction with Draco is the most surprising. I cant wait to see his impact on the wizarding community.

The conversation about Luna disturbed me more than I care to admit. But that was very effective! This is a brilliant story.

By far, this chapter has been the most piercingly interesting so far. So brilliant to offer Draco the tantalizing view of Earth from the Moon and thus introduce him to the cult, the game-changing, brain expanding reality that is science. And, the concept of mastering both worlds. This is delicious.

This is amazing.

I cannot believe you have made me write three reviews for one story, because half the time I don't review and if I do it's always at the last completed chapter, so I hope this flatters you somewhat.

But holy crap, this is awesome. When authors give more depth to side characters we don't really learn about much cannonically, it usually ends badly because the author will make them out of character. But what you've written is astounding because you have captured exactly who Draco Malfoy is - Not leather pantsy, but a bit more than just your average school bully.

Good show, sir. Good show.

"Our powers have been growing weaker, generation by generation, as the mudblood taint grows."

No... I'm pretty sure that's the inbreeding.

In "Chapter 7, Reciprocation," you showed something which could be useful. And if it is useful, I'm betting Mad Eye Moody is using something similar.

I missed it the first two times around, but Comed-Tea might be useful as an early warning system. If you're moving through dangerous territory (Mad Eye Moody: His living room counts as one, but then most places do.) and you suddenly feel thirsty...

Especially if they can be fine tuned for different situations.

It isn't perfect. Having your head a'sploded because of a sniper probably isn't very surprising. I mean, how would you notice it afterwards?

But if it's allowed by our DM I'm going to make something similar.

Hmm... Deep philosophical discussion between brilliant peers, mixed with the absurdity of a secret society of scarf-wearers and the over-the-top absurdity of reality-warping lime soda? YES MORE PLEASE!

I don't normally (meaning don't at all) read fanfictions for Harry Potter but when I accidentally stumbled upon the summary for your story I couldn't help but find myself intrigued. And I have to say that I'm real glad that I decided to at least try it, because this, my dear friend, is plain brilliant.

It's funny, it's smart and really catching. And the geek in me absolutely adore that you write the way you do and have made science an irreplaceable part of this story!

Highest score possibly for you and this fic~!

-bursts out laughing- This fic is so much better than my Psych textbook! I should print it out and stick it in the textbook for the next person who gets it...

The Tom Leher song quote is just hilarious, and of course makes me wonder just how prepared for such a contingency this Harry is even if that’s all of the snippet he knows. Maybe his father will play him the whole thing in third year or so instead of having the talk along with handing him a biology text.

the sweatband thing just makes me flashback to A very potter Sequel

This is not a review of this particular chapter, but of the whole story so far. I just wanted to say that this is the best fan fiction I have ever read. Absolute genius: incredibly intellectual, but hysterically funny at the same time. It's hard to find stories as witty as this.

Thanks for writing it!

To preface: I know I'm not the best writer, and I know I'm not the most rational scientist in the world. I wanted to get that out of the way because of what I am about to say.

The way Harry is portrayed in this story is really upsetting. I use that word because I don't quite know how to verbalize my feelings on the matter without sounding completely uncivilized. I must admit that I thought "Ender's Game" was a mediocre book at best for the same reasons. Yes, there are likely incredibly smart children like this out there, but I cannot believe an eleven-year-old would be this rational OR that an university professor at Oxford would home school their child to the detriment to said child's social skills and quality of life.

I'll admit I'm not that intelligent, but I only started reading science for fun when I was in late middle school. You have Harry coming off as the holder of a physics or philosophy BA at the very least. Rationality and belief in the scientific method is one thing, but having an eleven-year-old (whose parents should clearly know better than to raise their child as they have) act and speak like those two things are the end-all, be-all to existence pains me.

You're clearly a good writer, and you've a large fanbase, but I question the plausibility of your premise on account of the premise itself. A rational, intelligent adult of means with a gifted child would do their best to make sure said child got the best education and the best quality of life. Petunia and her husband as you present them clearly fall into that category of adult. A professor would know that home-schooling this child would not be the best way to let the child grow. Letting the child have a *childhood* as well as a good education would.

In any case, I question the rationality of skewing Harry's personality as you have. Had you made him simply rational instead of a semi-functioning savant, then I would not have had these objections. However, you took a good concept and pushed it too far. I feel no emotions when I read your story, and the best writing in the world wouldn't convince me to continue reading something so barren. If I wanted to read a love letter to science, I go upstairs right now and read Nature. I'd read about how people actually make the world better instead of a dry corruption of the fantastic.

I love science, science fiction, and fantasy as much as the next person, and mixing them together in writing for work or play is one of the greatest pleasures in this world. That said, when you go too far, you go too far. I unfortunately think you have indeed gone too far and mixed too much rationality into what should be a work of escapism. Dramatic irony and humor are some of the greatest weapons in a writer's arsenal, but this story has used them for ill and not good. In sum, I can only say that I think you have taken a good premise and a good strategy for its execution and perverted the good by pushing those conceits too far.

I am aware my review is somewhat scathing, and receiving negative feedback always hurts, but take solace in the fact that 15,000 reviews to the contrary implies I'm likely wrong. That, or your story simply pushes the buttons that cause me personally to feel depressed without the catharsis characteristic of depressing literature.

Regardless, I wish you all the best and hope you continue to enjoy writing this magnum opus.

Sincerely,

seirios aster

This chapter is incredibly important in laying the foundation of the setting and the characters of Harry and Draco, establishing just how twisted and antiquated the magical world is, and Harry's own conviction to change it. It uses shocking concepts and shocking language, and quite brilliantly sublimates a lot of the emotional impact through invoking the comic image of the spit take by way of Comed-Tea. But this isn't what I think when I actually sit down and read it.

Every time I try to do /that/, I inevitably end up at the line:

Moving? Oh. "Muggles can do moving pictures but they need a bigger box to show it, they can't fit them onto single book pages yet."

Then I spend the next five minutes imagining MoR's Draco Malfoy watching early nineties television. World news? No. Shuttle launches? Nuh-uh. Carl Sagan? Hah, he should be so lucky.

Maybe it's just the fever talking, but I picture him watching Pee-Wee's Playhouse, Quantum Leap, Michael Jackson's Smooth Criminal music video, or something similarly surreal, and try to imagine his response. My mind spins and spins and comes up with nothing but frenzied giggles. "Pansy, are you okay? Pansy, are you okay? Are you okay, Pansy? You've been kissed by, you've been kissed by, a smooth thaumaturge... "

Brilliant story. I cant stop reading. Looking forward to catching up and seeing where this story leads!

Wow. Ummmm... I... Well this isn't important to the story, but does Ron become the new nemisis. Like it says on your profiel, "The hero can not become more powerful then his nemesis," which would be completely true if he HAD no nemesis... other then voldemort

Okay, that was just awesome.

Wow, I don't even have words for what I have just read. You have somehow put into print everything that has ever danced across the edge of my mind, but has been too...complex or better yet abstract and undefinable to string into coherant thought. All I can say is thank you.

This is as far as I've read into this story. I usually wait until finishing the entire completed portion of a posted fic before leaving a review, much less favoriting said story, but I had to stop right here and say that this is a wonderful, smart, magnificently written piece of work, and I absolutely adore it. I can't wait to continue to see where you'll take it, and I hope you keep updating regularly. In the meanwhile I'm going to try to read as slowly as possible, to keep from running out of chapters any time in the near future. Thank you for writing this! Favorited.

Just read my comment and noted that the first paragraph sounded wrong. I do not think this fiction has too long descriptions, I just meant that I dislike them in general. Yours, obviously has none.

Sorry for the errors, actually I know how to spell but I am to clumsy to type (and too lazy to check).

Hey! I just came across your story and it's really good! I like the points you made about Quidditch - I never thought about it that way before, but it definitely makes sense.

Why does every year at Hogwarts begin on Sept. 1?

(wow, it's nice seeing how many reviews get added in the space of a couple of hours. I wonder what it would take to make this truly go viral, though?)

"Apparently, for magical purposes, his luggage had also managed to believe with sufficient strength to pass through the barrier. "

hee D

""Er, what, mate?"

Not headed for Ravenclaw, I take it. "Yes, I'm Harry Potter.""

...yeah, that exchange was a bit mean to Ron.

""So let me get this straight," Harry said as it seemed that Ron's explanation (with associated hand gestures) was winding down. "Catching the Snitch is worth one hundred and fifty points?"""

You do not understand how much I love you for addressing one of my biggest pet peeves. The absolute absurdity of Quidditch is something that has always driven me bonkers.

(Although, while Harry's idea is to get rid of the snitch, I wonder if it might not be interesting to keep the snitch as a game-ender, just without any point value. That automatically makes strategy a bit complicated, since you now want to catch the snitch at the exact right moment while preventing the other team from catching it at any of the wrong ones... I mean, you might have to redesign the snitch to be something other than a tiny fast gold ball, but still...

and without the weirdness of the snitch Quidditch /does/ end up being basketball on broomsticks.)

The facedown between Ron and Draco ends radically differently from the books (duh). I personally am completely willing to buy this. In the book, Draco is the one who says he won't hang out with people who talk to Weasleys. In the fic, Ron says he won't hang out with people who talk to Malfoys. I see both as perfectly reasonable, coming from the characters, and it just so happened that in your fic Ron got the chance to put his foot in his mouth first.

I do wish you'd been a bit kinder to him, though. I didn't really like Ron that much in the books but you could have painted a slightly more nuanced picture of him than "utter idiot".

""I just, just..." Harry searched for words.

"Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco."

...of course this presumably is your exact line of thought while removing him from the story.

(The truth of the matter is, in a sense I'm inclined to agree. Draco serves a function as a foil, and a challenge, yadda yadda. In addition to being a friend. Ron, in the books, was just there to be a friend and occasionally to angst about not being special. Still, sometimes a friend is just a friend...))

"People will judge you by who they see you with, and you don't want to be seen with the likes of Ron Weasley."

Harry nodded again. "

See, again, a bit harsh on the Ron here. There's no reason for Harry to nod instead of thinking "woah, woah".

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"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."

whee, another one of the lines from this fic that I quote like crazy.

the dialogue between Harry and Draco about fathers and manipulation and such is lovely (and, well, the sort of conversation Ron and Harry would never have... I had a whole rant analyzing why your Draco-Harry arrangement allows for more complex contrasting, but whatever)

Comed Tea is hilarious. HILARIOUS. Some of the times, the reader is less shocked than Harry is (like when Dumbledore says the magic words of power, since we know Dumbledore already, whereas Harry doesn't), but I can promise you, had I been drinking soda, I, too, would have sprayed it all over my keyboard at the Quibbler headline.

"BOY-WHO-LIVED GETS

DRACO MALFOY PREGNANT

Harry's lips opened and said, "buh-bluh-buh-buh..."

Too many competing objections, that was the problem. Every time Harry tried to say "But we're only eleven!" the objection "But men can't get pregnant!" demanded first priority and was then run over by "But there's nothing between us, really!"""

You know this is even funnier when I remember the omake D

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alright, now here we get to the sensitive part.

I know you already heard a lot about this section.

So.

I definitely appreciate what you did hear in terms of how very many fics about Malfoy end up being him being snarky and snobby and cool and not really evil at all. Which is a total cop-out.

It is true that there is something positively bizarre about this conversation coming from the mouths of /eleven-year-old boys/, though.

Mostly, I'm able to accept this conversation because I'm under the impression that Draco hasn't the slightest clue what rape actually means, just that it's something he's heard other people say they're going to do.

It is also a bit weird that Harry continues calmly talking after being this horrified.

You have to love how the branchpoints keep splitting - McGonagall comes to get Harry instead of Hagrid doing it, so Hagrid recedes into the background for the whole year so far ... and that causes Harry to meet Hermione on the train instead of later, and is partly responsible for him having an ENTIRELY different interaction with Draco in Madame Malkin's store, leading to this chapter, and the start of the B.C. (and the start of Neville's extremely odd awesomeness, still unfolding).

Isa - "if they were still in the train station during the afternoon, how did Harry point to the moon?" ...I'm not sure what you're getting at here. The moon is visible during parts of the daytime for nearly all of each month; the only time it's NOT is right at full moon, when it's furthest away from the Sun in the sky.

Right now (July 11th) it's ... quick google ... close to full, about 3 days away from it, so it's rising a couple hours before sunset and setting a couple hours before sunrise. It would be fairly easy to see the moon in the afternoon sky around waxing half-moon, when it's halfway across the upper sky from the sun.

Conscientiousness...

you use so many big words and I have to look them all up because I'm German!

I know them in German but not in English...

I won't bother looking for a translated version though, I want the raw original

the story's still a lot of fun though

The moment with Petunia (that he'd use magic for her or not use it at all) was really sweet. I am sad that he didn't get Hedwig though :( omg Harry's interpretation of Quidditch was HILARIOUS. I also loved the line about Lucius having a photo of Fudge haha.

I think that you characterized Draco very well in that he still seems to have that kind of dark side to him. I also enjoyed the science! Since it does seem like the Magical World kind of ignores all of the amazing things that Muggles can do. Although I don't get how Harry knew what the Imperius curse was already, did he just really study in the two days after getting his school supplies? I also think social science (which Harry doesn't seem as familiar with) like psychology or sociology involves knowing someone well enough to make them think it was their idea all along, etc. Not sure if you were thinking of that, since Harry is portrayed (from my pov) as more hard science-oriented and in my experience, most hard scientists often do not give much credit to social sciences.

Also one thing that seemed weird- if they were still in the train station during the afternoon, how did Harry point to the moon?

Awesome chapter overall though! :3

Marry me?

(I thought there was an error at one point - 'Has Harry actually heard of/does he know what the Imperius curse is, before he uses it in his example to illustrate to Draco what science is/does? But, then, I do believe he's heard of it; it was mentioned in reference to Lucius, saying his allegiance to Voldemort was due to having been cursed. Carry on, and jolly well done!

Oh, and you needn't marry me - I'm not in immanent peril of being raped by a Malfoy, to the best of my knowledge - but that *would* help explain to everyone around me while I was reading the first several chapters just why I was laughing out loud with such irregularity. And squirming, too, actually.)

Thanks much for this wonderful story - and the LessWrong site, too, if you're more than passingly affiliated with it,

~k

The rapey bit was unsettling, but otherwise a very interesting chapter.

When I grow up, I'm going to be a SCIENTIST! yaaah!

...scratch that, I'll become a scientist right now! YAAAAAAAAAH! I didn't know they rocked just so much!

First, I liked the reference to Atlantis. Props. Also I liked that Harry showed Draco Muggle's potential to achieve with the rocket.

You made Draco into a real piece of snot. I mean he's eleven! I feel like 11-year-olds don't sit around fantasizing about the nut jobs they're going to rape. That's so sick.

Third, I am excited for Harry to meet Hermione because of their affinity for books. Perhaps they will become more than friends?

You did a good job with this chapter. I like how you are handling Draco's characterization.

"Me", one possible reason - I don't know whether it's the one Eliezer had in mind, nor whether he had any in mind - is that Harry is living in the UK, where traditionally "billion" has meant "million million" but (at the time of the story) the meaning "thousand million" is beginning to take over (being the dominant meaning just about everywhere else), and he prefers not to risk being misunderstood. For what it's worth, I live in the UK and generally avoided the word "billion" around the time when the story was set. (Nowadays the "million million" meaning is almost completely dead, and I use "billion" again.)

I was just wondering... If Harry is as awesome and science-y person as he appears, why does he use phrases like "thousand million"?

Billion is so much more precise. It always bugs me when people extend such clunkiness to things like sextillion, saying "million million million", and I'm afraid Harry will descend into such madness. There are numbers bigger than one million.

The section with the drink (forgot the name) was really amusing and I liked how you changed the topic into the bid discussion about muggle and magic between Harry and Draco. Draco's obliviousness to the achievements of muggle's was quite amusing. I like the fact you made Harry's Manipulative side shine through and it was very clever of you to skip the sorting and talk in Draco's POV!

I have to read the next chapter to find out what house harry was put in!

As always fantastic work!

P.S I also liked your description of muggle science and how it can be used to save wizards and even if magic did die out it wouldn't be the end of humanity like the wizarding world seems to think. Its is probably one of the best descriptions I have found that describe this because is shows the strengths of both the muggle and wizarding world, most fan fictions I read with this sort of genre (excluding the super smart Harry twist) are biased to one side of the world, they are either completely against the wizarding world or the muggle one.

Kudos to you! (I have always wanted to say that and its probably not even in the right context :L)

I dont think lucius woud have missed the word "student" thus his response doesnt make sense

SNAPE! Excellent! I just had to look at the beginning of this again... and I am STILL stunned!

Forever Signed in Blood,

Slayer End

OK First, Have you ever Read the Manga LostBrain? I have a sure, 99.999% chance that you would fall in love with it after the first chapter. Unless... Have you already read it?

Second. I seriously hope you are a woman, because I have fallen in love with you're work.

Everything you've stated is practically the exact same things that have come to my head when I think of Harry Potter.

Brava!

I love this story so much I cannot put it in words.

This is brilliant.

This is just brilliant.

I love how Harry and Minerva interact with each other. I also love how Harry's parents react to how he distracted her.

Harry's shaky alliance with Draco proves interesting. The way Draco wants Harry for power, but Harry wants Draco to be a good person and is using power as a motivator... Harry's right, this game is huge and this is only one square.

I hesitate to think how Ron will turn out without Harry. Ron is really quite smart, and he's brave too. If Harry tries to take over the world with Draco at his side, I can imagine Ron becoming a formidable opponent.

This story has me at the edge of my seat.

Mr. Spoo! Mr. Spoo! Mr. Spoooooooo! lmaosmmsfoaidmt! (Laughing My Arse Off So Hard My Sumbraro Fell Off And I Dropped My Taco) MR. SPOOOOO! Enough said.

Hey :) I have to words to describe this. Maybe after I have read a bit more :P:P

wow draco really had reality thrown at him to a certain extent, now the real question is whether he will go along with harry or not? i think yes, yes he will

You know, looking back at this chapter in the context of the much later SPHEW arc... surely, if British magical society is as relatively gender-equal as that arc suggests, Draco wouldn't be making such a casual remark about rape? Because if heroing really is about the only area where witches suffer any prejudice, I just can't reconcile that with the sort of pervasive misogyny it would take to think of rape as such a horribly normal thing to do to a girl who annoyed you. It doesn't even seem to enter Draco's head that Harry might not agree :(

This is just the right sort of mad brilliance and personality to endear me to this story greatly...and its only chapter 7...of 71! You actually had me completely by chapter 4 but I didn't want to stop reading quite yet to review. The amazing detail into Harry's thought process makes it interesting and his personality is scarily similar to my own at his age-without the prodigy level repository of information and mental speed of course. I just have been talking about "I could do that better/ there is a simple solution for all their problems but only I can see it apparently/ I should be the dictator of the world, is be good at it and I could give my Mom Australia." Type of stuff since before I could remember (my Mom has the stories to prove it) and if that weren't enough to make this story amusing, what I call "positive pessimism" which is always expecting the worst outcomes in any situation and always end up being pleasantly surprised, is my motto. It again, sounds a lot like your version of Harry Potter. In short: I absolutely love this story and I'm going to go back to reading it now...and he hasn't even gotten to hogwarts yet!

And we're back to brilliance. I have many favorite lines and sections from this chapter, but to be concise, I shall just pick the first one I liked.

"Okay, so either (a) I just teleported somewhere else entirely (b) they can fold space like no one's business or (c) they are simply ignoring the rules."

Thank you again. I continuously find myself smiling while reading this story. :)

Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.

Haven't we all felt like this? No question but the MofM needs some SERIOUS reforming!

Enjoying the story so far. I an especially enjoying the reversal of Harry's personality (in the books, he's kind of the dumb jock instead of this brilliant borderline-psychopath). However, I do have to object to one of Harry's comment about science. Lots of Roman-age technology is either lost, or merely not replicated. The massive acqueducts stretching hundred of miles that still work? The pyramids? And I believe we've lost the recipe to Greek Fire at some point. True, the post-Enlightenment science is merely on the shoulder of giants, but tech has been lost to the ages and we either haven't been able to recreate it, or (in the case of Greek Fire) surpassed it so far it's not worth going back.

I think that there is something severely wrong with me. This hypothesis is based on the fact that I found a conversation about rape versus murder amusing. In the extreme.

If this is not my fault, then I blame Society.

~Mademise Morte

I love how the luggage resembles the Luggage from Terry Pratchett's Discworld series. Aww!

"...there's lots of rumors..." should be "there're lots of rumors" ("there is" for singular, "there are" for plural).

*giggles* Draco and Harry. Not in any, ahh, slashy way, but quickly becoming one of my favorite parts of a great read. I love their exchanges, absolutely love them. Poor Ron... ahh well.

And the Order of the Chaos. Oh heavens :D

Yea, when he quite calmly seriously stated that he was going to rape her, that's when my eyebrows climbed up my forehead. At least Harry was suitably horrified. And he used smartness to combat it; I was getting out my theology notes and channeling my priest. But it probably wouldn't have been effective.

Olá novamente, Primeiramente devo dizer que apesar de ter lido os outros capítulos, eu decidi que não vou comentar todos eles, porque eu demoro tempo demais para escrever tudo o que eu quero...

Primeiramente, devo dizer que fico feliz por você ter seguido a minha sugestão e colocado Pai e Mãe no lugar de papai e mamãe. Novamente elogio a inciativa. Eu sinto muito que os meus comentários se resumam a apontar erros de tradução e passagens que não estão realmente erradas, mas poderiam ser melhoradas. Observe que com o passar do tempo os comentários ficaram mais curtos, isso porque já é tarde, tenho prova amanhã e eu ainda tenho que estudar algumas coisas...mas vamos aos comentários de tradução.

"Harry figurou que seu pai deve ter gasto..." esse figurou ficou muito estranho, a tradução literal não preserva o sentido, algo do tipo "Harry tinha quase certeza que ..." ou "Harry tinha plena convicção de que seu pai havia gastado "

"Foi uma muito, muito, muito boa tentativa." O sentido ficou o mesmo, mas a ordem ficou estranha... melhor colocar "Foi uma tentativa muito, muito, muito boa".

"metade tão ruim" também é uma expressão estranha, mas eu não sei como traduzir melhor isso...

"(b) eles podem manipular espaço como nenhuma outra coisa" também me soa estranho, talvez colocar uma analogia fique melhor, sai um pouco do original, uma espécie de licença de tradutor "eles podem dobrar o espaço como se fosse papel de origami"

"Não encabeçado para Corvinal, eu vejo" essa frase ficou esquisitíssima, "headed" se traduz melhor como "em direção a" e o "eu vejo" no final ficou parecendo Yoda falando... melhor seria algo como: "Vejo que esse aí não vai para Ravenclaw"

"A coruja deu a Harry uma esquisita mesura e um cortês piado" a tradução aqui está de fato errada, o "oddly measured" é adjetivo do "hoot", então o correto seria algo do tipo: "A coruja deu a Harry um piado estranhamente calculado e cortês"

Aqui uma pequena dúvida... Eu não sei se na versão em português o nome do time de Ron muda a forma de se escrever, de Chudley Cannons para Cudley Canons.

Outra dúvida de tradução oficial é a coisa da família Black, eu não me lembro muito bem, mas eu acho que o correto era "A Mui Antiga e Nobre Casa dos Black".

"Isso basta" também ficou estranho, acho que ficaria melhor com "já chega"

"esse é o certo" é outra parte que ficou estranha "É isso mesmo" mantém o sentido sem ficar muito esquisito...

" um velho hábito deixado pela idade de cinco quando sua mãe tinha primeiro introduzido-o a ele" outro lugar em que a tradução ficou errada, o hábito foi adquirido quando ele tinha 5 anos, sem contar que a forma com que você escreveu ficou estranha... então acho que seria mais correto algo como: "Um velho hábito, que lhe fora ensinado por sua mãe quando tinha cinco anos"

"A face de Ron ficou branca com surpresa" esta parecendo que Ron ficou muito pálido, e eu só consegui enxergar o outro sentido da frase (o sentido original) porque eu li a frase em inglês. Não consigo pensar em uma boa tradução, talvez porque eu ache difícil de imaginar a cena. Para mim, a expressão facial no rosto de Ron seria uma de choque.

"Pai me comprou tutores" essa é outra frase estranha... parte do motivo é a falta do pronome, e a outra parte... é melhor substituir comprou por trouxe, ou então escrever: Meu pai providenciou tutores

"Não, ela não diria nada para mim sobre" a conjugação aqui ficou estranha... acho que você não traduziu certo. Talvez ficasse melhor "Não", ela não quis me dizer nada sobre..."

"Você está indo totalmente para Sonserina." ficou estranho, é melhor trocar o totalmente e indo de lugar: "Vocês está totalmente indo para Slytherin"

"em retorno... e a coisa era, Harry se sentiu pressionado" coloca no lugar de "coisa" a palavra questão... fica menos esquisito

"fosse um instrumento infalível da morte" novamente, um caso de tradução literal..."fosse uma infalível instrumento de morte". Note que tirei o artigo "a" em "da".

"em uma voz neutra" tira o "uma"... fica mais conciso: "disse em voz neutra"

" pedaços menores que eles constituem átomos" "pedaços menores que os átomos que o constituem"

"dez mil sociedades"eu sei que essa é a tradução correta, mas não se fala isso em português. Seria melhor colocar "milhares de sociedades"

"países onde aquela sorte de nobreza " sorte ficou estranho... melhor colocar "aquele tipo de nobreza"

"Aquele aparentava ser o argumento inteiro tão longe quanto Draco era concernido." tradução literal, em português não se escreve assim...seria melhor algo como: "Aparentemente, do ponto de vista de Draco, todo o argumento se resumia a isso".

"Burundi. "Tudo certo. Checagem rápida..." substitui o tudo certo por "pois bem" ou Ok ou "muito bem" ou no mínimo tira o "tudo" da frente.

"herdado a mágica-noturna habilidade" WTF? parece que você não leu o que você copiou do google... isso não faz sentido... "herdou a habilidade praticamente supernatural dos Verres"

"Nós seremos hábeis a olhar" "Nós seremos capases" ou "Nós conseguiremos"

"Em alguma extensão," "Em parte" ou "Uma parte"

"Mas não faça engano" "Mas não se iluda"

"Ao tentar figurar como" "Ao tentar compreender como"

"jogo que Potter mesmo em sua totalidade não entendia" "jogo que mesmo Potter não o entendia em sua totalidade"

"Draco não podia se afasta" "Draco não podia recusar"

"Potter, em sua correria louca, tinha confiado uma chave para a alma de Draco" "tinha adivinhado a chave"

"realmente o tinha roído no caso todo" "realmente o remoeu durante todo o caso"

"tinha sido tão afortunado a conhecer" "você foi afortunado em conhecer"

Oh god. By the time I read that "Can we interest you in joining the Order of Chaos?" line, my throat was so hoarse from the previous bouts of humor that it actually hurt to laugh.

I worry you may have written this too well.

I'm absolutely loving this so far, about to check out your blog now and then spread the word about this. In a lot of ways your Harry thinks how I aspire to! Anyway, great work and I hope you continue to write, whether in this form or any other.

These children terrify me. Best fanfic ever!

Pretty interest stuff, canit wait to see what happens.

The order of chaos...REALLY? lmao

Whoa! Holy unexpected deepness, Batman!

*Right. Because he seemed like such a normal kid. And he is a normal kid, he is just what you'd expect a baseline male child to be like if he were raised by the Dark Lord's most fearsome servant and/or doting father.*

I admire your characterisation of Draco; not a psychopath, but not "good" either. And the way that both he and Harry dance around each other, knowing that they are dancing around each other. And the way that Harry feels compassion towards Draco, and wants to give him a paradigm shift rather than scorn.

Hi, I don't normally review stories that I read, but this is simply one of the best stories I've ever encountered, not to mention very amusing. I was hooked after the first two chapters, and I really can't wait to see where the story leads!

Thank you for doing such a wonderful job on this story, and I love the humor that Harry displays. Unfortunately, that wise suggestion another reader made about tea and lungs not playing well together was just too little, too late for me and my poor lungs. I hope you keep up the hilarity!

J.K. Rowling and her magic boy

would be good if they weren't so coy.

Since just "snogging" is measly,

it's less wrong without Weasley.

Harry Potter slash Draco Malfoy!

comed-tea is a little weird. I like the rest though.

I absolutely love the phrase: "Harry opened his eyes and stumbled to a halt, feeling vaguely dirtied by having made a deliberate effort to believe something."

Also, the phrase: "No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said." makes a nice statement. Er, well, maybe not nice. Maybe profound? It definitely makes a statement.

Woah, Harry's speech about science was actually really inspiring.

Hey, Draco, you know what I bet is even better for becoming friends than exchanging secrets? Committing murder."

"I have a tutor who says that

What tutor? And can I hire them?

Tashie xo

I've read to about chapter 20 and decided to read it all again as i logged on and there were over 60 chapters, i am loving seeing all the humour again, especially the robe shop, but i only just noticed that last time i missed that when you talk about the Incident at the potions shop you spell "incident" with a capital "I" as though it is a major event, which cracked me up when i read it, the subtle humour is great, and the in your face humour even better, love your story.

Harry...and...Snape? Friends? Oh, that is too much.

"I can't do that, it makes me feel stupid." That's not just a feeling.

Then what is it? I understand that Harry Potter shouldn't call himself , similarly to Bellatrix Black, but what's wrong with ? Seriusly?

If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice.

A human is irrational; and if the lie isn't necessary, then asking twice might actually make him reply truthfully. But in case of a rational human...who isn't really a human then

Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.

Waiting for it! If the note to self is still here after all the many events.

Help would be helpful.

Self-evident.

Who/what is (rampaging) nundu?

And why Harry is not already part of Malfoys' circle of acquaintances if both Draco and Lucius have already met him (robs fitting scene)?

Malfoys' friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape. So what side is Severus Snape on? Both Dumbledore and Lucius Malfoy consider him to be an ally.

The intuitive mind is a sacred gift and the rational mind is a faithful servant. We have created a society that honors the servant and has forgotten the gift. — Albert Einstein

...Heh. This is either completely genius or completely insane. I'm still not sure which. There's so much psychology in here it could pass for meta, but luckily it isn't, because -and I've been enough of a creep to google you- you're fresh to fanon, yes? I would have thought you were an AP Psych student or something. With all those Zimbardo references and experiment whatnots. Well. It's damn original, for one thing. Writing a little cluttered for fanfic, but I bet your novels sell pretty well anyway. Characterization of everyone seemingly accurate (except for well...you know, but that's a given because of the nurture thing). It horrifies me in some way, seeing Potter in this new light, but I'm compelled to read more of it. Your mannerisms in writing *slightly* resemble David Foster Wallace, and I hope you take that as a compliment and not a curse.

Thanks...for sharing?

Sorry for the completely confusing comment. Suffice to say I'm just a little perplexed.

-ezyl

As horrible as the subject of rape is, I couldn't help laughing when Draco first brought it up just for the absurdity of those words coming out of the mouth of an eleven-year-old boy. (Kind of like the absurdity of a lot of the stuff baby Stewie says from Family Guy)

But now that I think about it... How would Draco even know what rape is in the first place? The only way I can imagine is that his father must have taught him, and, judging by the way Draco talks about it, Lucius must have said something like, "it's a great way to punish and humiliate your enemies." I find the idea that an adult would teach such things to his child even more disturbing than anything else Draco said. : *shudder*

Anyway, this is a brilliant chapter that sets up what's sure to be a really interesting power struggle between Draco and Harry as they each try to use and manipulate each other.

Dear Less Wrong:

Your writing is amazing. lm marveling at your metaphors and explanations of science. i must say I have read more than my fair share of fan fictions, but yours outwits all that l have read. Its no wonder why youre an author of one story if youre put so much work on to these story. You should beg J. K. Rowling for copyrights and then get this publish this.

Book Luver25

I loved the insertion of the Medieval mind set. Its an interesting take on the subject, as a Medievalist, it made me smile to see it.

Also, Fold Space? yes please.

Can I expect more references to great sci-fi?

I promised a review for every chapter, but only made it thru ch 6. Here's the next round.

Not much to say about this one. A good, solid chapter. Love the Comed-Tea and the things you do with it in the coming chapters.

""I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books.""

*stares at it*

its...so alike my own catch phrase..."I'm going to take over the world, so I can read in peace."

Considering HE want to take over teh world -metaphiracal, I guess, but still- I'm SO like this fic!

Very interesting story.

Harry is way too knowledgable for an 11 year old, but his opinion of the Wizarding World and all the experiences he wants to do... Well, it makes my inner scientist happy

On a more random note, Harry with a sweatband on his forehead made me think of A Very Potter Sequel, it made me laugh

Thank you for your love letter to science.

-K

Awesome.

Although Harry can be as creepy as Draco (mass murder instead of Luna Lovegood wasn't my first thought)

Love the chapter and writing, just had a quick content comment (ch. 5). It seems to me that it would occur to Harry to buy several (perhaps cheaper) bags of holding and put the others inside the first one for virtually unlimited space.

That's all for now, I look forward to reading the rest of this!

so does that mean lucius is saying snape told harry and thats how he knows or that harry should be held in as high regard as snape? is lucius trying to allude to dumbles or voldy but doesnt actually know that its really harry? i dont get the reply.

I can't wait for him to meet Hermione.

I always love the aftermaths.

"Harry stared down at the can in his hand, the coldness settling into his blood. Charming, happy, generous with his favors to his friends, Draco wasn't a psychopath. That was the sad and awful part, knowing human psychology well enough to know that Draco wasn't a monster. There had been ten thousand societies over the history of the world where this conversation could have happened. No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. To Draco, his enemies weren't people."

A brilliant, even stirring, observation on Harry's part, and it took me totally by surprise. Perhaps he's not a robot after all. But it seems out of character, quite honestly, given what's come before.

The 'reason' is that human morality is not rooted in reason, or at least not solely in reason. It's rooted in what David Hume called 'sentiment,' or what Richard Rorty called an irreducible belief that 'cruelty is a bad thing.' You cannot arrive at morality through science alone. To be clear, I'm not invoking religion here - quite the opposite. I'm suggesting that no amount of scientific reasoning can result in empathy, the first precondition for the existence of morality.

And empathy, until this moment, is something that was totally lacking in Harry's character. He viewed the world as data to be investigated, and people as sets of data to be manipulated for his own ends. In other words, he treated people as B. F. Skinner might - not as thinking beings, but as discrete collections of behaviors ripe for manipulation.

I'm running off at the mouth here, and I apologize. But so far this story has engaged my critical instincts far more than any other Harry Potter fanfiction - I mean that both as the highest praise and as criticism.

Harry is growing on me, and I hope that what you're doing is giving us a well-rounded, flawed human being as the protagonist (i.e., that Harry eventually sees how limited and, frankly, dehumanizing some of his own views are). If that's the case, then my only criticism of the story is that the authorial voice of the opening chapters compels us to sympathize with Harry and Harry alone, masking his flaws by inviting us to laugh at the 'absurdity' of the other characters.

Sorry if this is not the kind of criticism you usually get - I can't help it. Keep up the good work :)

I don't have much to say about chapter 7. The comed tea is genius, of course.

The mention of the mechanical watch does make me surprised that Harry hasn't, throughout the fic, looked further at this thing about electronic devices not working in the presence of magic (or Hogwarts, whichever it is). I'd be worried about the sort of dangerous magnetic fields or radiation, etc, that might disrupt electrical things. It also sounds like a Clue about the nature of magic, and by the time he's capable of transfiguring devices, he really should be exploring this limitation.

oh gods harry is teentch!

~ja ne

Harry's right.

Boy, I do hope that Harry and Snape find each other. Truly. Ah. It would make me so very happy.

Oh Draco, Draco... I've read a few takes on Harry and Draco being friends (/lovers), and I love what you have done with Draco here. He's both terrifying, and yet almost likeable...

I forgot to mention - I also recollected Petunia as fat and I thought that way was better in chapter 1. And who is to say that Petunia wasn't fat pre-canon-HP too? :)

Good things:

Running makeup with trembling hand - moving.

Ran... walk - funny.

I bought you enough books.

Go jump in a lake - moving too. Very nice description of harry's relations with his parents. Shouldn't they get worried over Quirrell during the Christmas break?

A very good suggestion... worse.

Science Fair Project - funny. And _very_ good you don't reveal anything more.

Elephant.

Death to air quality.

Luggage.

Ron-Harry interaction, including Quidditch.

"(now containing his useless headband, though it didn't really belong there)" this feels superfluous.

Draco-Harry. Really, altogether this chapter is excellent too.

Comed-tea.

Murder conversation. (b) BTW is something he should realize when laughing with Quirrell too.

Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.

No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. Yes. Kudos for putting this here too. It'd be in character if Harry thought about Hume too.

Aren't we a clever little serpent. Eleven years old and already coaxing your prey from hiding. Shouldn't he think about the irony of Quirrell being a serpent Animagus.

Harry had inherited the nigh-magical Verres ability to remember where all his books were, even after seeing them just once ... connection. So nice.

If only one picture were to survive.

Severus Snape? Still don't get this answer, even after 42 more chapters :)

Great chapter

This is the second mention of that Incident at the Potions Shop. We haven't seen anything further about this. Maybe this is a particularly potent Checkov's Gun? This is the intro to the Quibbler. Enquiring Minds want to know.

Wahaha, comed-tea? that's brilliant! and the Quibbler's headline was soo funny. Harry showing draco muggle's achievement is pure original. also, when harry suggesting to eliminate seeker position, I was like 'Wow, why nobody didnt think bout that before'. All in all this is pure awesomeness, :D

Excellent! The comed-tea is just hilarious! oh, and the Quibbler's headline too. and ,

I love how you've made Draco (and others) so much more competent. Not only mentioning that he received lessons on how to manipulate people, but actually showing him doing a good job at it.

Indeed, seeing so many different types of skill and wisdom and intellect in your cast of characters is a joy, doubly so because you do it while keeping them all true to their portrayal in the original novels. (Quirrel is the only exception, but he had so little face time in the original novel that it's easy to ignore my preconceived mental picture of him.)

Excellent chapter. Finally, someone points out the idiocy of the seeker and snitch!

Comed-Tea...Brilliant. Wonderful chapter!

''Draco sniggered. Then his eyes lit on the white owl on Ron's shoulder. "Oh, what's this?" Draco said in a drawl rich with malice. "Where is the famous Weasley family rat?"

"Buried in the backyard," Ron said coldly.''

This means that peter pettigrew is dead?

It's just plain brilliant. A bit hard to read in some places, but hilarious

"Harry had said to his father that he would pay him back as soon as he figured out how to convert wizarding gold into Muggle money, and his father had told him to go jump in a lake." - Awww. I do love this adopted family you've created for Harry.

*sniggers* Michael thinking that Harry caused so much trouble that he got in the newspapers. Now that would be a LOT of trouble.

Got to love George and Fred. Thinking of elephants. Yes, Gred and Forge, do tell us why he would think of elephants. XD

ROTFLMAO! I have to agree with Harry there. Ron feeling stupid is not just a feeling. That scene was absolutely hilarious. Yes, people won't stare at you now, Harry, when you have a scarf over your head.

"Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?" - *snnnnrks*

*wide grin* Did you really killed off Pettigrew? Somehow that strikes me as funny. don't mind me. ;)

Of course, you had to put up with my babbling reviews, so ... sorry about that. ;)

""Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco.

"Pretty much."" - ROTFLMAO! I've said this before, but I have to say this again: I really do love your sense of humor.

"BOY-WHO-LIVED GETS

DRACO MALFOY PREGNANT" - Buahahahahaha!

"It's a Muggle thing, in Muggle Britain there's a hell of a political difference between getting away with murder and getting away with raping a little girl." - Mmm, I completely agree with this, since we do have a bunch of censors against rape, sex, and so on, but none on torture, violence, murders, and so on. What a weird society we live in.

Ohhh, I do like how he's manipulating Draco to see things his way. However, I still doubt he doesn't want to take over the world, though he's wording it differently.

~Serp

"Okay, Mister Spoo -" Ron stopped. "I can't do that, it makes me feel stupid."

That's not just a feeling. "Okay. You pick a name." - Funny. Oh, and I like the weird friendship between Draco and Harry. They always have the most strangest ones.

I wish there were Comed-tin drinks here.

There was a slithering sound behind him, and Harry turned to confirm that his trunk had indeed followed him on its small clawed tentacles. Apparently, for magical purposes, his luggage had also managed to believe with sufficient strength to pass through the barrier. Actually that was quite disturbing when Harry started thinking about it.

Quite likely the funniest thing i've read all week! I stumbled upon this story and all I can say is I'm having so much fun, I think my wife is getting jealous.

Whoa.

That chapter was deep. o.o

When Harry explained science to Draco...

IT MAKES ME FEEL SO HAPPY.

And proud, and like swearing at a wizard. It is... cathartic, at the last. In the book, the best example we have of Muggle-born-and-raised is Hermione.

It's not as awesome as this.

At last! someone who agrees with me about the Quidditch scoring system!

Really enjoyed Draco being honest about what he could do and how he would get away with it, and that Harry still tried to work with him.

KEEP IT UP!

...I honestly don't know what to say. This has got to be the most unique story I have yet to come by on this site; in a good way though. I have only read a few chapters, but I indefinitely hooked on this story. I find myself almost laughing so hard that I almost fall out of my chair at the utter brilliance of it. I can't, even if I tried, stop smiling as I read on. I love Harry's character and thoughts banter with the other characters.

Well, I'm going to stop myself before I am unable to. I can not wait to read more of the story and I do hope that you continue until it is complete because I would love to see an end to it. Very good job dear author.

"As soon as I'm old enough to get an erection I'm going to rape that bitch."

I think I just died.

Good one.

Harry should have at least suspected Blaise's true motives after Quirrel mentioned the quadruple agent.

Fred & George. No one else would wrap their head and call themselves 'Order of Chaos'.

...Order of Chaos.

I think Harry just discovered the name of his 'organization to fight Voldemort'.

I do not even know where to begin.

This is the best fan-fict I have ever read? - (though I read little)

How about just a hearty thanks - a thoroughly enjoyable read, I love most the Bayesian comments.

cheers,

Wow I read some philosophy of science and I'm a big fan of anti-positivism like the Pepper School.

This chapter is so, so, so great..

And it turns out to be a nice, complex story with manipulation and mind games.

Definitely hooked. Thanks so much for writing this.

So, I didn't really understand what his father replied to him, at the very end. Please explain it?

RTam

He's not saying that only brown people are rapists; that's objectively and demonstratively false. He's saying that places like the Congo and Saudi Arabia are the only places were it's not frowned upon, and people could causually discuss their plans to do so in public places in the manner Draco is doing without fear of reprecussion.

Wow. Racism, misogyny and nice-guyism all tied up in a nice pretentious package. Lovely.

Cool

"Trying to figure out how something works on that deep level, the first ninety-nine explanations you come up with are wrong. The hundredth is right. So you have to learn how to admit you're wrong, over and over and over again. It doesn't sound like much, but it's so hard that most people can't do true science. Always questioning yourself, always taking another look at things you've always taken for granted,"

Loved that. As a fifth year neuropharmacology grad student, I appreciated that.

Also love this story! It's an interesting twist on cannon and appeals to my inner nerd.

Ah, Snape is joining the bunch! I've been waiting for this :-)

im only a few lines into chap. 7 (well the bit where he has gone through the platform wall)

and i think i spotted a terry pratchett reference

also your harry reminds me a little of artemis fowl which is a good thing

O.O

Harry's real father...is LELOUCH

Oh my god. i have to go to sleep. this is...thank you for existing.

~TankerMDK

This Chapter was...simply brilliant.

Im almost at a loss for words, the combination of serious matters (welle xecuted) and brilliantly done humor is among the best Ive yet read.

Very well done, and consider me officially "taken" by your story now.

OMG this is such a good story!

better than the original for sure. funny, characters. love malfoy. found it a little smug (hp as ey's alter ego - SO sure he's so much better than everyone else... not sure someone like him would so effectively and efficiently "win" in real life. also not so sure that he's all that likable, although he'd certainly be really *interesting* to spend time with).

the only part that really rings false is "i only want power so i can get books". giant bullshit alarm. surely he has enough money to get all the books he wants, both in the real world and in magicworld.

let's say "books" is actually shorthand for knowledge, or understanding the way things work (this seems likely). that seems a little more likely, since power might give you access to knowledge that would otherwise be kept from you by those in power.

even so, it doens't strike me that tha'ts really what HP is after, based on his other behavior. he doens't *just* want to understand how shit works, he relaly wants to DO somehting significant, important, worthwhile.

so saying he just wants books is a dishonest, disingenuous disclaimer.

anyway, fun read. great for procrastinating.

Wow! That really was a masterful bunch of clever brush strokes on canvas. I am impressed not only by your command of prose, but by the subtlety of your understanding and your grasp of human nature and philosophy. Are you human? I must keep reading.

Draco seems like a great friend, his way of looking at people gives me warm feeling inside, and he's funny to boot, i wonder why people seem to dislike him.

At first I was not going to review, I only tend to review when I truly do enjoy the story. Yours was simply a good story until I got to the bit about the snitch. Now all I have to say is thank you.

So, um, thanks for reminding us that Draco is a horrible person AND that extreme culture differences exist in the same so-awful-it's-funny moment. (I can accept that Draco is not more monstrous than the culture that spawned him, but he's still pretty monstrous by muggle standards. It's like dealing with slave-holders in history. You can accept that it was a standard practice of the time, etc, so Thomas Jefferson might have been an okay guy; but you also have a lot more respect for the people who acknowledged what a terrible practice it was before the rest of society caught up.)

Also, Comed tea is dangerous.

Your characterization is so spot on. Character complexity is really your forte. One of many, actually.

I think I'm starting to run out of words to praise this story by.

I could turn to Roget for help, but that would seem a little less spur of the moment.

It was a brilliant and unexpected chapter, I wasn't expecting any of this. I thought briefly this might be a 'Harry and Hermione wax on about books' sort of thing. But proven wrong I was, fantastically, brilliantly wrong. Just an amazingly detailed and fascinating chapter.

This is effin hilarious man

"Draco giggled."

Okay, I wasn't going to review on this chapter, but then I saw this sentence. THAT'S JUST WRONG.

I Love this story. It's so funny and love the way Harry is so rational about everything. What a original story! More chapters please!

Just to be clear, the "as soon as I'm old enough to get an erection" thing is a bit of ignorance on Draco's part, not yours, right? There's no age limit (at least no -lower- limit).

oh! Is Harry's luggage going to be like Rincewind's luggage from Diskworld?

hmm. ". It's like someone took a real game and grafted on this pointless extra position just so that you could be the Most Important Player without needing to really get involved or learn the rest of it." Or maybe so your hero could be a sports star in school too, and you wouldn't have to deal with writing it? Very nice!

sweet take on Luna and the Quibbler, too!

Just wanted to say, you speak of Science and Logic beautifully. I personally, have always despised Science, or rather the views of the ones that taught it to me, for it seemed to be full of contempt and concretes. In retrospect, I suppose it was because I terribly disliked the power adults held over me and thus their ignorance of my thoughts and reasonings- similar to your Harry. Even in the "Gifted" classes I was set in based on IQ, it always irked me to no end the way all my teachers commanded compliance but not understanding of their teachings; science, especially. I guess what I'm trying to say is, I understand science is supposed to based on the "Rat is always Right." sentiment. But commonly, those who study the sciences fail to allow this concept to sink through all and instead stubbornly call, "Mistake!" on rats that don't follow the regular pattern. It makes me happy that instead of condemning the magical world as impossible and trickery for all it's eccentricities, Scientist!Harry is looking at the illogical logically.

P.S. And the whole "Science is to Muggles what Magic is to Wizards, but all can use Science" was Genius.

Little dark for me, but great chapter.

Draco should read a sci-fy book. :D

And so we say 'like father like son'.

~B

I wish you'd stop indulging your rape fetish in your writing. Thanks to chapter 7, I can't show this fic to anyone.

Actually, I'd recommend keeping the Snitch but modifying the game through reducing the amount of points provided to, say, twenty or fifty. Then it would be reasonably acceptable to fanatics, the traditional game ending would still apply, and the Seeker would still have a significant but non-superhero role in the game.

Very good chapter.

Gunny

your mind is so horofaing, awsome, insane, exsquisit, imaginetive, expanded, worded, expresionet, amasing, gob smaking fabulas i dont rightly know what to think or call this storry. But i know one thing for sore I"M HANGING ON YOUR EVERY WORD! God, Merlin and Morgana your amasing. please never stop.

I absolutely agree about the Quidditch bashing.

Better and better. Now I just can't wait for Potter-Snape confrontation :)

well written.

Excellent yet again!

**Stunned silence slowly gives way to clapping, then thunderous applause.**

Wow! This story is fabulous! All it was touted to be through Reddit, I will share it with FB friends to enjoy.

I must say, I want 2 shirts. One saying "If you can't criticize, you can't optimize." and one saying "I only want power so I can get books.". TRUTH!

Wow, my head was spinning on a few points there, I need to learn this stuff! If you wrote the book in a format like this story, you' have millions of Junior High kids learning not only the Scientific Method, but Rational Thought - we could take over the WORLD! LOL!

Thank you for writing and sharing this story, it is worth the read!

There were, and are, a great many things in this and the preceding chapter that I had wanted to comment on and compliment. Sadly they seem to all have been pushed from my head by desire to go on to the next chapter.

Well, it's obvious this story is an addicting jewel.

Thank you very much for it.

However, I don't understand Lucius's answer to Draco's letter and it's really starting to bug me.

What did he say?

What a lovely finish. :3

But me thinks Draco is too smart. dun dun dun.

But still! I'm so excited! Me wanna see Granger.

XD

All Hail Less W.

The power, the mad, mad power!

When I saw Feynmann in the story summary I knew this story was going to be awesome! Great job-I love the science/math/econ/real-life references!

Brilliantly painted characterizations of Draco and his father, and a fascinating version of Harry. This is proving to be an engaging, complex and beautifully crafted AU story.

'The First Law of Fanfiction states that every change which strengthens the protagonists over canon must be matched by an equal or greater increase in their difficulties.'

That rule only fits DBZ anime and the like where they insure that both sides keep getting stronger and stronger until everything devolves into mindless crap.

Harry was overmatched from the beggining on the series to a ridiculous degree and only the author's power kept things going, while making plot holes all over the scenery.

As has often been mentioned, anyone with a pieces of string, a stuffed animal, and a lick of sense could take over the wizarding world. Does that mean if Harry has common sense Voldemort gets a nuke?

It doesn't matter who has more power unless they are in a straight slugfest and I seriesly doubt you'll let this devolve into that.

Sorry, but my two biggest pet peeves are making changes and yet keeping the series of events exactly the same and giving a boost to the bad guy just because the hero got one.

The hero starts off in the minus column to begin with while the villain gets 1k plus points to start, I don't think Harry getting a hundred points means we have to give Voldy

any more to keep the story entertaining.

'"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."'

Hermione is going to jump him before he reaches puberty with an attitude like that!

The scene with Draco and Harry talking gave me goosebumps!

lol draco's rug has been torn from under him ohohohohoho

do it to voldy next

Harry's speech on science and magic made me cry. It's just what I've always said.

The strange thing about canon is that the people who really belong in Slytherin are precisely the ones with the nous to know to ask for Gryfindor...

Draco mentioned Oblivation and Penseives to erase and store memories as a way to fake court testimony, which freaked Harry out. Finding how a Penseive operates is more difficult than simply buying one because craftsmen want to protect their trade secrets, but Harry would see it as a justifiable expense if it meant protect his memories from being wiped by Oblivators.

Penseives seem to have elements in common with quantum superposition as it shows memories in detail far beyond what the human mind can process and retain when seen from a third-person point of view, as well as an analogue of brain-machine interface, optical fiber, liquid crystal display, and wireless energy transfer.

Harry might question the conductor on how the Hogwarts Express operates and what happens to the train when not ferrying students.

A normal train couldn't have gone from London to northern Scotland without refueling for water or coal, implying that either (A)boiler temperature is magically sustained; and/or (B)the effectiveness of pressurized steam to turn pistons have been magically enhanced; and/or (C)water is conjured like with the "Aguamenti" spell albeit in larger quantities, and/or (D)animation charms reduce the amount of kinetic energy needed to move the train.

Unlike electricity, most energy in thermal, kinetic, and chemical form function normally in a high-magic environment like Hogwarts unless deliberately influenced by a spell or potion. Charles Babbage's analytical engine, the predecessor of the computer, would work as intended.

Because objects can be shrunken down, a large analytical engine could be carried around like a laptap computer to store and process Harry's findings. However, I assume that preventing the device from re-enlarging requires periodically "recharging" the spells that keep it in miniature size. In most cases, enchanted objects and clothing gradually wear off, like with the Victor Krumm action figure or the Irish necklace that shouted out the name of players.

After showing Draco that picture of the NASA astronauts, the young Malfoy could dream of becoming the first wizard in space. For an aristocrat who has everything, finding out that something is beyond your grasp just makes you want it even more. Quote: "Hope and greed are two sides of the same emotion. To have one without acknowledging the other is self-destructive." (Tzintchi, 'the Open Door' by Academia Nut)

In the long-term, the most practical solution would be to launch a small space station equipped with the equivalent of a portkey beacon or Floo fireplace onboard to “beam up” wizards from Earth’s surface, and then use it as a layover and construction platform for further exploration. Canon!Hermione was skilled in "water-proof fire" in Book1, so have a Floo fire submerged in liquid would take care of the dangers of having a flame in an exclosed oxygenated environment.

In the early 90s, companies paid NASA an average of $50million to put a satellite into orbit. On the other hand, the Soviet USSR was collapsing in ’91 and a few Confundus charms could persuade the Russians into selling one of their Soyuz manned rockets or maybe even the MIR space station. On today’s market, the Soyuz goes for $14.5million (fuel, crew, and launch facilities not included), while historians estimate that MIR cost $3billion. In comparison, NASA's Skylab1 cost $7billion.

How did Ron get Hedwig? Owls of that quality are expensive.

Its bad financial management that keeps the Weasleys poor. Arthur must make a semi-decent amount of money if he can afford to feed and cloth a family of nine, yet they blew the entire seven-hundred galleon prize from the Daily Prophet Grand Prize Galleon Draw on a trip to Egypt. They should have saved a little for a rainy day as their vault in Gringott’s only has a few sickles in it. Hogwarts doesn’t teach how live on a balanced budget, personal finance, or life management, and most graduates have few vocational skills.

Also, a used Ford Anglia in good condition can cost up to six-hundred pounds, or one-hundred and twenty galleons. The ‘Reparo’ spell isn’t as effective on complicated machinery, so it must have been in reasonable shape before Arthur purchased it.

Or think about how Arthur somehow got premier tickets to the Quidditch World Cup and sat in the top box with the Minister of Magic. He claimed that he got the tickets from Ludo Bagman, but just one ticket ought to have cost a small fortune and Bagman was heavily in debt with the Goblins due to a gambling addiction. Alas, more plotholes left by J.K.R.'s incontinuity.

Ch 7 Review:

Heavy. Disturbing. cold. And depressing to think that there might be some 11 yr olds who might actually think like that.

Harry is being too mature here. I am not sure about that. He has done better than psychologists with years of experience.

Aftermath :

Draco's struggle - his father's game or his own is ironical in that he is walking his father's line.

And Lucius' reply is even better.

Fascinating stuff... my brother pointed me to this story, saying that it was one of the few stories that could make him laugh uproariously when he wasn't expecting it. Me, I'll admit that there are parts when I laugh, but a great number of parts where it's more uncomfortable than amusing, like Draco's gleeful description of what he could get away with with Luna. It's... very well done. Good art amuses, but it also disturbs. You've got a subscribed reader here who's also favorited the story. _ Good work. I would close this with my usual "looking forward to you writing more" but I see there's another part that got added between me starting this review and clicking the submit button so instead I'll just say that I'm reading avidly even as I post.

Wow. What a good chapter! What a good story! I rarely read HP anymore, but this totally sucked me in. It is simply great. Harry maybe is a bit too smart to be totally believable, but not really. And I think that half-hearted critique might be the only one I an think of... great job, hope you keep up the good work. I have a long patience, so no rush. Though sooner is usually better, ne? ;P

Very interesting story. I am sure I have never seen this plot before, but I am now looking forward to seeing how reason can be used in the world of wizards. Keep up the good work.

OK, this I have to comment on before even reading the chapter, because after the delight of earlier it made me quail: "I am well aware of the First Law of Fanfiction stating that every change which strengthens the protagonists over canon must be matched by an equal or greater increase in their difficulties."

99% of the time, when I see people quote something like this, they unbalance it in the entire opposite direction. Some people do love angst, but some people delight in fanfics that start out like this one has because it promises a *better* outcome than canon. What's the point if it all comes out the same, or even worse?

All the same, I *have* loved it so far, so I follow onward, though much more cautiously than before...

"I only want power so I can get books."

My kind of guy."

"And if he blurted the whole thing out, it would become his father's."

He went for it.

"I would say that you had been so fortunate as to meet someone who enjoys the intimate confidence of our friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape."

He thinks Snape's smooth? lmao He just lost Draco.

can't wait to read more

My Lord (swear, not address) I cannot express the beauty of your creation in the limited terms allowed us. This story... it is the purest work I've ever seen. I cannot stand canon Harry Potter - just reading it makes me feel like I'm becoming less and less logical/rational. Which is why I tapped into fanfiction - where people make better rules, improve on the idea, and bring it out as a complete product. This is why I love this work.

Enough with praise (flattery?). I don't think it's possible to comment on every single detail of the story, so I'll try to focus on a few things I feel are important:

Harry - Draco: The simple brilliance of this is amazing. Rowling seemed to think that SlytherinEvilStupid, but wrote that 'Slytherins are cunning'. You take the cunning part, and admit it may have connotations to evil - but it also means smart, quick, intelligent. The budding relationship between Harry and Draco is perfectly written. They understand each other quite well, each has his own goals - but they are willing to work together, each believing he has much to gain from this relationship. I am certain theirs will be a complex relationship, full of many revelations, arguments, pitfalls and problems – but not only will the end result be worth it, the path to it will be as well. Draco's evil (?) will need to be addressed of course, and I hope to see that – especially next year, when he might actually meet Luna.

Just a short note on that subject: I personally think Luna is far wiser than she pretends to be. She is a Ravenclaw, after all, and says some very true things when she wants to. I've always felt that the 'Loony' persona was at least partly a disguise. There is a Luna behind the disguise, who knows how bad a shape the world is in, and because she can't fix it, escapes into different worlds, but still tries to warn the others in her own way (with Luna, the entire Ministry comes off evil - Fudge eats goblins in pie, Scrimegour is a vampire, there's a rotfang conspiracy, Fudge has a secret army). Of course, no one listens and everybody mocks her, which only drives her deeper inside - a vicious circle. That's my view at least, and I personally feel that in your story, they could get along rather well – if Luna doesn't drive Harry insane first with inane sayings.

Harry – Minerva: I don't have much to say, simply that I much admire Harry's beliefs and skills, and that I hope this will be enough to change Minerva from her 'children can't possibly know anything/be right about anything' attitude in the books.

Harry and Belief: The last issue I will address. If Harry will study the magic system as propagated by Rowling, he will quickly realize that it can be easily improved on. If a wand has no innate power, it is only a tool for focusing and enhancing; ergo, it can be disposed of, or refined. If magic does not require words, it should not require gestures either; these are obviously only more focusing/enhancing techniques. My belief regarding magic in Harry Potter is simple: Magic comes from within, and with enough concentration, could be cast simply by the power of thinking it so. All other enhancements simply aid your training, and should be disposed of as soon as possible – you don't want your kid riding a bicycle with training wheels forever. I hope that in your story, at least some of this will be realized by Harry. I'm certainly not saying that you should adopt my beliefs into your story; simply that logic (as far as I see it) dictates the existence of at least some of the rules I've just mentioned.

Which leads to the more complex problem: It would seem that much of magic is based on belief. I do not believe that if a wizard would 'swish-and-flick' while saying wingardium leviosa and thinking about eating porridge, something would happen. In fact, in book four, Hermione seems to stress this point – Harry can't manage the Summoning Charm because he's not focusing. This implies the importance of belief and focus in magic. Harry will need to change his stance on 'not believing in anything' (at least, that was how I understood his internal debate regarding the platform). Personally I do not see how it would be a problem for him: existence of a higher power can be proved by simple logic combined with science. I feel no need for this, personally; I'm religious because I want to; after all the definition of faith is usually belief without proof. But just to explain my claims regarding Harry's paradigm shift, I'll write what my Rabbi told me: "There is no single person in this world who does not believe in a Creator. All scientists must believe in it – the Big Bang theory, generally accepted as the most correct one, cannot and does not provide any explanation for initial conditions. Yet it is one of the fundamental laws of the universe that matter does not come from nothing. Something must have created that matter, and moreover, caused it to 'move' in such a way that the Big Bang happened. That is the Creator.

Again, I haven't written this to argue theology or prove the existence of God – I'm simply writing this to explain why Harry could (and should?) have a paradigm shift as I am suggesting, simply to improve (as I see it) on the story.

Oh, I also enjoyed Harry's thoughts the economy. I never understood how it survived either – here's how I put it: It is impossible that a GOLD galleon, the size of a HUBCAP (Muggles in book 4, at the World Cup), is only worth five pounds. Either the goblins are under pricing their gold to make the Wizarding World more accessible to muggle-borns (yeah, right!), or they're not using real gold. Otherwise some smart muggle-born would have converted all his wealth to Galleons, sold the gold in the muggle world (for comparison - as of a few weeks ago, the price of a troy ounce of gold [1 troy ounce 31.1034768 grams] is 1107 USD, or 816.85 Euros), and made a fortune by doing this over and over! I hope Harry does do something about it.

Thank you so much for giving me such pleasure and stimulation, until the next chapter, Meneldur.

Those whose lives are totally devoted to the church of Reason, tend to live lives either meaningless, amoral or both - if one will forgive the generality. I sincerely hope that your HP will find room in his life for matters of Faith - the unproveable, the uknowable, the unseen.

J Michael Straczynski (I hope I spelled that correctly) said it best in the final episode of Season 4 of Babylon 5: "Faith and Reason are the shoes on your feet - you can travel much further with both than with only one."

That said, I laughed so hard my ribs hurt during the Diagon Alley trip. You have entertained me and intrigued me, and I certainly look forward to reading more.

Oh! What a wonder-us story of greatness. If You haven't already accepted one of your marriage proposals please think on this one.

Oh amazingly dazzling and brightly intelligent logic minded Author my love for this story and you is ever growing if only you would in all your power 'even' so much as design to think of accepting this proposal of my hand in marriage I would be absolutely ever so delighted! Yours for all eternity with all the love that my large and non-proportional metaphoric heart can give...

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Oh my sweet Jesus...I just realized what sort of shit Harry will flip when he gets his hands on a Time Turner...Oh sweet god.

to see such writings makes my mind calm. I say kudos to you Less Wong. If i were to see your work published, well your talent would be spoken in reverence

awesome dude! I'm waiting for more. *demented laughter*