|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Methods of Rationality|
| Mr Foreman chapter 7 . 12/6
Well this was good but I must ask a few questions
1 how did Harry know about the snitch if it wasn't talked about (much like how Harry somehow knew Lucius name)
2 did you have the rat die to avoid spoilers for the book(specifically the third book)
3 wow that's so many plot hole talked about in universe
| Belletristik Aura chapter 7 . 11/15
I can't stop laughing as I read this story. I've never read a fanfic that was as funny and logical as this one. I'm going to have fun reading the rest of this masterpiece.
| Fiction is the Truth chapter 7 . 11/13
Oh god, the twins are getting involved
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/17
Draco proclaiming he wanted to rape Luna was a step too far. The guy is 11. It’s all getting a little too dark. I will continue myself but will not be able to recommend it to anyone until I get to the end.
| WhiteDragonWarrior chapter 7 . 9/19
I haven't finished the first scene and I'm already freaking out. A sweatband? DID YOU PULL A MOVE FROM AVPS?! If so, alllllll the YES!
okay, now that I've read the whole chapter I'm... intrigued. At first this story felt like a light heart rope, almost crack-fic, with a flair of scientific ramblings. Now, though... I'm starting to see that there's more depth, like looking past the waves into a deep-green sea. (weirdly poetic, but I actually pictured that)
| Beyond Hope chapter 7 . 9/16
"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -" this reference was AMAZING xD
| Guy-In-The-Hoodie chapter 7 . 9/14
*Puts on nerd glasses* Actually, it is more than possible for professional teams to win without catching the snitch. Krum caught the snitch too early when the other team had already made more than 150 points, thus causing his team to lose.
| GreenThumbTarasova chapter 7 . 8/24
Ok, that last bit went past me a bit, but I loved all of it!
| wowo-trash chapter 7 . 7/28
I feel like the sweatband idea was taken from avpm/avps
| Kimmytrainer chapter 7 . 7/23
That was honestly very confusing, probably because there was so much information. It took a while for me to see the point of it all, but there was a point, which is great. I'm excited to see how this story plays out.
| Tiffany Smithi chapter 7 . 7/17
uhm err err uhhh
WHAT THE HECK
Boy-Who-Lived got Draco Malfyo pregnant?
ARE YOU KIDDING ME?
and how the stinking heck.
how on earth.
I mean uhm I just don't understnad
but I DID laugh hard hard hard harder than i have yet.
I laughed for minutes straight.
other times I mighta giggles a few times, but this! oh!
yyour a a master of comedy! just going on, normal story-
funnyest thing in the world
| animemangaobsessed chapter 7 . 7/12
okay this chapter was... what's the word... shocking for lack of better term. i thought Draco was going to say he was kidding, and then there's the debate between Harry and Draco...i don't know how to describe what I'm feeling right now
| animemangaobsessed chapter 7 . 7/12
wait... did i just read that Draco reached into his robes and scratched himself? WTF?! LMFAO!
| hansfish chapter 7 . 6/27
If magic is like casting Imperio on someone to make them do what you want, then science is like knowing them so well that you can convince them it was their own idea all along. It's a lot more difficult than waving a wand, but it works when wands fail, just like if the Imperius failed you could still try persuading a person.
I love this so, so much. (I have been thoroughly enjoying the story so far - I have been meaning to watch the rest of this episode of Miss Fisher and keep not - and keep cracking up with laughter, but this is what made me want to comment.)
| Emily chapter 7 . 6/12
I saw something somewhere that argued you might as well have a team of seekers (although it might be worth while to have at least ONE defensive player)
| walkingspring chapter 7 . 6/1
Hmm, this is what I wished Draco would find...his own answers.
| Keera-chan chapter 7 . 5/29
I love this story! I keep rereading every year and it's still just as good as the first time! It's like rereading a favorite book. :) thanks for writing it!
| SapphireOcean chapter 7 . 5/26
Just a quick note to say: I don't think it counts as bashing when the perception of Ron is coming from Harry's POV. It's 100% in character with your Harry; of *course* an extremely (and unusually) intelligent 11-year old would regard most of the kids around him as insufferably dull, in several senses of the word.
Finally started reading this after having it bookmarked for years. This is without a doubt the best HP fanfic I have ever read and I'm only on chapter 8. Chapter 5 had me and stitches and so did this chapter, until Harry and I were walloped by dread at the same time, ooof what a turn.
Absolutely fantastic and that is a VAST understatement.
| Jhuffy chapter 7 . 5/19
Wow! I don't even know what to say. There was so much going on here and it was brilliant. I can't wait to see how this all plays out.
| Guest chapter 7 . 4/25
""You had to be there. Anyway, I'm glad to hear all that. The way Lucius was looking at you, I thought he was going to c-crucify you""
Why the stutter?
"And Harry couldn't help but notice how clumsy, awkward, graceless his attempt at resisting manipulation / saving face / showing off had appeared compared to Draco. I need those tutors."
Clumsy, awkward, and graceless
It's a list.
Draco! Wow! I love how well you've balanced the whole baby!Death Eater and interesting/cute character thing. Truly chilling. Also, I hope you go more in depth into Lisa's character motivations (way later on) whenever she's introduced. (If you've written that far.)
| Windwalker57 chapter 7 . 4/17
I love how a chapter or two ago, Harry is joking about taking over the world. Only a little later, it's not a joke, he's coming to the entirely rational conclusion that he will need to overthrow magical Britain in the name of human rights.
| ack1308 chapter 7 . 4/6
Well, this is gonna end well.
| BeyondMyReach chapter 7 . 4/3
this entire book, the entire chapter, is incredibly interesting. What stuck out in my mind:
the bloodchilling-ness of this line: As soon as I'm old enough I'm going to rape her."
A child speaking of a child's word (as soon as I'm old enough) with an adult's dark intent.
the entire section of Draco and Harry's exchange, particular the ending of this chapter as we reflect on how Harry's really caught Draco into playing his game. Also like the fact that both of them /know/ the other is trying to manipulate each other. Also the Draco-Lucius father and son relation. I like how you made their relationship more... humane?
well, lastly, i don't really understand the significance of Lucius's reply, but i guess i'll find out in the future chaps.
| WildRosa13474 chapter 7 . 3/15
Order... of Chaos? Whaaaaaaaaa...?
| SnuggleKitten69 chapter 7 . 3/10
The newspaper headline was soup-spittingly amusing.
A very different, very interesting Harry/Draco non-slash relationship at play.
| Guest chapter 7 . 2/21
why don't people get that wizard know all about muggle there many muggle born and half blood every year hell snape half blood this whole wizard don't know about muggle is just stupid.
next again if magic is real, muggle sci is wrong, and so is there history.
| rumanaakthar28 chapter 7 . 2/20
I can't get enough of this version of hp, I read books all the time and get bored easily as the writing and stories start to get too familiar but this is truly refreshing.
| sondrex76 chapter 7 . 2/7
I think this fanfic is my new favorite.
It's well written, so funny it's almost unbelievable, and I love the premise(And I am only on chapter 7).
Thanks for writing and have an awesome day!
| kronoan chapter 7 . 1/27
WOW! :) This is awesome!
| ar111 chapter 7 . 1/26
OH MY GOD omg omg omg omg. i LOVE this. bloody hell. ive never read such a magnificent story. when i read the malfoy scene i screamed and screamed and omg i love this
| Aislynn Crowdaughter chapter 7 . 1/15
Hey, you took the LUGGAGE from Terry Prattchett into this story! Grat stuff! ;D
I like the way Harry escapes from having to explain to his parents what he did to Mc Gonnagal -it's fun. And Peter Pettigrew is dead? Poor Ron, but I agree that Scientiffic!Hary will probably go along better with Draco than with im.A great friendship in potential destroyed by Quidditch ignoranced. Oh dear...
I also liked Draco learning about Muggles having reached the moon. Nicely done!
I enjoy this immensely. Thank you for writing and sharing!
| Androniq chapter 7 . 1/14
I'd never make my way to Hogwards. I'd have missed that train, stuck forever at the barrier, experimenting. It can find out whether I _believe_ that I'll pass through it. This world contains things that can _read my mind_. This clearly needs more investigation. If one of my enemies can read my mind, I'm doomed. Whatever I can plan against him, he'll know it before I do it. He gets the entire power of my intelligence, leaving me with literally nothing. Maybe this thing can read only some kind of thoughts? Maybe there's a technique to prevent it from reading thoughts? Maybe I just have to think in a new manner, like, instead of imagining the future events, imagine myself imagining future events? And if I just leave the barrier behind and go to the train, I'll miss such an easy way to oppose such a dangerous enemy... (Well, the way is 'easy' here because missing an easy way is actually more pessimistic scenario than missing a hard one, so I guess I'm doing it right.)
| Chicwowwow chapter 7 . 1/9
ah, you made a mistake with the chapter I'm currently reading! The Weasleys would never EVER, be an hour early!
| lilikaco chapter 7 . 12/28/2016
Holy shit excellent and so fucking funny
| Tired Hufflepuff chapter 7 . 12/26/2016
I'm seven chapters in, its 3 in the morning, I have work tomorrow, and it's the third time I've said "one more chapter." Do you have any idea how much this makes me feel like a kid again? Back to when I had the excitement and focus on reading more than a few paragraphs at a time? Thank you, very much. You've brought the light of nostalgia to my life, and on Christmas, no less.
Thank you. 3
| Penguinjava chapter 7 . 12/9/2016
So many great points raised in this chapter! Since I loath Quidditch I'll put Harry's take down as my favorite, although the entire pregnant Draco story was a close second.
| Jatok chapter 7 . 11/13/2016
Oh, I can't wait. Really. I need to know everything that happens in this story yesterday.
| Anatia chapter 7 . 11/4/2016
Well, i do not undertand all the words, but the story is still amazing. As well as harry's reasoning. :D I love Harry-Draco friendships, and I suppose in this tory the friendship would happen easily and what is more important for me: I will be able to believe that is happens. It would seem logical, understandable and totally natural. I already love this story, and this little game of the boys... hahahahaaa. :D
oh, and I think harry met with the twins:D
| Daziy is SoniQ chapter 7 . 10/23/2016
You know, my biggest problem with Harry Potter au fics is usually the OOCness of the characters, mostly The Weasley's. And yet in this chapter, from Draco to Ron and even the twins, I only found one thing out of character: that Molly would blurt out Harry's name. Even then it could've been an accident born out of surprise. So congratulations for that..
| Guy-In-The-Hoodie chapter 7 . 10/15/2016
Dear lord I laughed so hard that I cried during this chapter. This fanfic isn't for people who aren't familiar with science, but goddamn is it a good read.
| me chapter 7 . 9/19/2016
okay, I will just say that I'm a trash for Drarry (Bottom!Draco) and you made my day (It's 2:26 Am, anyway), you just won my attention and I'm impressed, thank you.
| Rambling Drabble chapter 7 . 9/18/2016
1. I love how Harry doubts that he's Harry Potter. It's hints like these, man.
2. Well now I want to know what happened at the potions shop. Plus, the line "If I lied the first time..." is awesome. I definitely remember that from the 1st time around. If it's a Less Wrong original, or even if it isn't, well done.
3. Didn't notice that Draco had cast the quieting charm in the first read, either. But wait... so I'm guessing he has some sort of magical device, because wordless and potentially wandless magic at the age of 10 is, as the chapter describes, not plausible.
4. Oh, the foreshadowing. So great, so often. And I didn't realize how much of a serious conversation/persuasion this chapter held PRIOR to the space mission scene until just now, or how much it influenced Harry's goals with Draco.
5. "Magic is the only hint we have as to how the universe must really work." I hope that's a metaphor.
6. Never heard of Burundi before. One obscure country down, many more to go.
7. The science!Draco scene is still as awesome as ever, though now I just realized something I hadn't before: Harry's blood was cold during the conversation, and I'm guessing it started sometime after THE picture. I guess it also explains why he does what he does to Neville.
8. I guess Harry turns the Ravenclaw Patil into that "certain type of person" that can be convinced with the old Slytherin fallback. Neat.
| blood-doll-aishiteru chapter 7 . 9/15/2016
I wonder if Snape was the man in the potions shop, I kinda doubt it.
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/7/2016
Hey. I just finished chapter 7. Just want you to know that I've repeatedly laughed my ass off. Great fic.
| Denz-El chapter 7 . 9/3/2016
Dang! This is probably the freakiest chapter I've read in fanfiction in a long time!
It manages to go from heartwarming, to hilarious, to HORRIFYING, to heroic (at least on Harry's part, sort of). Geez! This is the first time ever that I've been terrified of friggin' Draco Malfoy! That kid is messed up!
PROTECT LUNA LOVEGOOD AT ALL COSTS!
GOD Bless, keep up the GOOD WORK, and Keep Moving Forward. Amen. :)
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/3/2016
Your work is absolutely delightful. Harry Potter for thinking grown-ups.
| sunset oasis chapter 7 . 9/2/2016
Wow. Just, wow. I love this chapter. Harry's world domination plan and tempting Draco and showing him the rocket and moon pictures and all the logical reasoning ... it's brilliant. And Harry's slightly ruthlessness is also interesting ... and he's quite Slytherin even if he's even more Ravenclaw.
Lucius's reply is golden. I laughed so hard, it's BRILLIANT.
| Lupinefire chapter 7 . 8/28/2016
Really enjoyed Harry and Draco's interaction in this chapter, as well as the letter Draco wrote to his Father.
| Meatball42 chapter 7 . 7/27/2016
I have read this before, but every time I read about Harry and his father's book hunt I get a little teary :)
| Hazel Violet Willow Brown chapter 7 . 7/21/2016
Buy...a...clock. Well nah. Luna and Xeno are already causing chaosn and she isn't even at Hogwarts yet. Wait, this was around when he went cuckoo after his wife died. Does that explain it?
| Squarekiddo chapter 7 . 7/6/2016
Damn, it really just got to me here how damn real it got.
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/3/2016
Damn, now I feel bad for laughing about rape xD
| Max Kim chapter 7 . 7/3/2016
Hello! I just got through seven chapters tonight, and I have to say your characters are thrilling.
The subtle and nuanced battle of wits between two genius eleven-year olds is riveting. (To say the least!)
I'm finding myself more and more aware of the process of Getting What You Want from the world as well as the importance of objective problem solving.
I'm currently contemplating whether my previous model of reality needs some updating. Prior to reading these first seven chapters, I was under the impression that to get the most out of life and be free of negativity or stress, I simply have to accept reality as it is. However, now I wonder if it is feasible to apply the actions of Harry to my own life, engaging the world around me as a series of puzzles, all but begging to be solved.
But I'm rambling. Can't wait to keep reading!
| AbsolutelyAbbie chapter 7 . 7/1/2016
Another thing I wanted to say a few chapters ago was that I think it's interesting that you've already mentioned so many of the later plot things in this fic, which is primarily following the Sorcerer's Stone timeline. Like, Sirius Black escaping from Azkaban and Voldemort coming back (books three and four). I'm interested to see how all that will play out, and to see if Quirrell is evil in this fic.
Also I like to read reviews that other people leave on fics, and I really hope that McGonagall turns out to have a magnificent relationship with Harry, as she does in canon. A caring respect.
| Guest chapter 7 . 6/30/2016
Okay, I have been reading. A masterpiece. While you didn't get each character right(specially Ron's and Draco Malfoy), while some of Harry's logic was flawed and not pointed out with morals and experience enough and while Draco's and his father relationship is not shows as in the books- it has other mindblowing things about them, great story-telling, great comedy and the knowledge displayed is actually interesting!
I never thought I would ever enjoy Slytherin Harry AU! I never saw how that could work out and now here I am eager for new chapter and how the plot will develop.
| myafroatemydog chapter 7 . 6/23/2016
This was a pretty good chapter
| mitchie15432 chapter 7 . 6/19/2016
I just found this story, it's great! I'm studying science myself, so I really appreciate all the things Harry says, it's just amazing! Thank you so much for coming up with the idea!
| Hello chapter 7 . 6/14/2016
Was...was that a Reservoir Dogs reference?
| Hazel Violet Willow Brown chapter 7 . 6/9/2016
Wait, WHAT? Why would Luna and Xeno believe that tosh?
| Happy chapter 7 . 5/21/2016
I am now quite sure that I love you. Why are you not in my daily life? You need one more person waiting with baited breath to see what you say next... Thoroughly enjoying your applied genius (and lots of book-learning to boot), humor, and all other forms
| TheLittleRoguex chapter 7 . 5/14/2016
| gi-freakazoid chapter 7 . 5/1/2016
I would say Draco is also starting to think like Harry.
| Guest chapter 7 . 4/30/2016
i really, really hope Harry can fix Draco's fucked up view. Its way too simple and needs more detailed work.
| Guest chapter 7 . 4/19/2016
Very clever story
| Guestamazing chapter 7 . 4/10/2016
Oh, boy. I wonder what this means for Draco's future. Also, that bit about The Quibbler: totally hilarious. I nearly spit out my own chocolate milk.
| Uh chapter 7 . 4/6/2016
The expectation that a man can get away with rape is definitely not confined to "those places which didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment." RAINN estimates that in the US, 98% of rapists will never go to prison or jail. (Source: /statistics) Meanwhile, in the UK, "Conviction rates for rape are far lower than other crimes, with only 5.7% of reported rape cases ending in a conviction for the perpetrator. (Kelly, Lovett and Regan, A gap or a chasm? Attrition in reported rape cases, 2005. Quoted from . ) That was some weirdly out of character Western exceptionalism from an author who claims to value reason above all else.
| bakesitvegan chapter 7 . 3/20/2016
Best quote in the history of fanfiction. I posted it on Facebook. I get called out for being this "obnoxious"
"What happened to me personally is only anecdotal evidence," Harry explained. "It doesn't carry the same weight as a replicated, peer-reviewed journal article about a controlled study with random assignment, many subjects, large effect sizes and strong statistical significance."
This was in chapter 6, but it would only let me review once per chapter. You seriously are now my favorite author.
| PrinceMittens chapter 7 . 3/14/2016
Oh the politics of this fic! Oh Draco. Politically somewhat savvy but completely inferior to Harry in every way. :)
Also, Happy Pi day and anniversary of this fic :)
| Summit Onion chapter 7 . 3/4/2016
This was the first fanfic i ever read, and with no doubt the best story i have ever read.
I would probably sacrifice a couple of my toes to have this made into an anime which follows the story to the letter. DAMN that would be epic! Especially chapter 74, holy shitballs what a moment!
| Guest chapter 7 . 2/9/2016
omg draco needs to give harry a wedgie, he's such a dork
| mayingying chapter 7 . 2/8/2016
| Guest chapter 7 . 1/29/2016
In which Harry turns Rowling's world on his head (something I imagine he'll be doing quite a lot of) and attempts to convert Draco from Pureblood Wizard into Human.
| Israel Shechter chapter 7 . 1/29/2016
(Especially Darkandus on Viridian Dreams, for the surprisingly inspiring comment "Lungs and tea are not meant to interact".
There should be a ")"
(In the name of my OCD)
| Montara chapter 7 . 1/20/2016
I really hope Harry will be able to convert Draco into one of the good guys...he's like a nightmare right now...clever and without remorse...
| iseretha chapter 7 . 1/19/2016
ah this is great! "magic runs in families and he couldn't even walk". laughed more while reading the first 6 chapters than the whole week before!
| Secre chapter 7 . 1/1/2016
Loved the bit about books! You did catch me with the rape bit mind...but then, that's Dark wizard element and true to the really dark aspects of Draco.
| alfamky chapter 7 . 12/17/2015
The game of subtleties...Damn
| WatchingTheWatchman chapter 7 . 12/4/2015
I choose answer c: they are simply ignoring all the rules
Draco is fascinating; I love the contrast between his cold-blooded arrogance and intelligence and the way he can't ignore Harry's offer despite seeing it as a trap. He's admittedly creepy, as no 11-year-old should talk about rape so casually, but he's an interesting character.
| Xidaer chapter 7 . 12/3/2015
A fantastic. Books, books, books, and more books. I love it. The wizarding world is in for such a shock. Thank you for writing!
| The Anguished One chapter 7 . 11/22/2015
This seems to be setting up a friendly rivalry between Draco and Harry, as oppose to enemies like in canon. Introducing him to the achievements of science was a brilliant scene, and this chapter had great humor overall. Thanks to the change in Harry though, I'm guessing him and Ron won't be friends. Can't say I'm surprised; Ron is by no means stupid, but his personality would probably annoy this version of Harry. Now I want Harry to meet Luna though... Interesting that Ron's "rat" is dead though. That'll certainly change some things.
| Gothic Rain chapter 7 . 11/13/2015
I'm tempted to quit this story after hearing Malfoy saying he's going to rape Luna. Potter didn't even defend her and why in the HELL are 11 YEAR OLDS talking about RAPE?! :[
| iTaleTeller chapter 7 . 11/11/2015
So Pettigrew is dead? Does that mean you're not gonna do the Prisoner of Azkaban arc? I'm not sure how happy I am with that idea
| rioluaura chapter 7 . 11/10/2015
This story is very interesting. I like how Harry wants to explain everything and tries to dominate everything, but he has weakness in that he has an almost Sheldon- level desire to control. The premise is cool to see: "What if we mixed science and magic? Why hasn't anyone figured out how to break everything with magic?" Harry does seem a bit overpowered, but he is going to poke around in things he can't understand, and that's going to hurt him.
A side thing: I don't really believe that science always waxes stronger. There have been multiple times that knowledge has backtracked. I heard somewhere that the ancient Greeks at the height of their advancement had the knowledge of math that Western society didn't regain until 1920 (sorry for no source.) Another thing we can look at is the ancient monuments: We don't have the technology today to rebuild the pyramids of Egypt and South America. We still don't know how they were built and we couldn't do it today.
Anyway, looking forward to more HP snarkiness!
| JumpingToaster chapter 7 . 11/10/2015
Harry Potter in this fic equals brain freeze.
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/5/2015
You perfectly described the wizardry from Diane Duane's Young Wizards series.
Dai stihó, cousin.
| Solangeluna chapter 7 . 11/4/2015
what is life
shit this is good...
| ShadowLDrago chapter 7 . 10/14/2015
Order of Chaos. Ain't that contradictory.
| Gleas chapter 7 . 10/13/2015
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/9/2015
I think I've fallen in love with your story
| Good chapter 7 . 9/28/2015
| P. P. P chapter 7 . 9/12/2015
Wow, this was well done, had me on the edge of my seat, and I was cheering when Harry explained about people having gone to the moon. I am also worried that Harry really will try to rule the world. Also, can you explain why you hate Ron so much? One of my email addresses is
| twztdwildcat chapter 7 . 9/10/2015
Poor Draco, life altering paradigm shifts and he hadn't even boarded the train yet! What a day! And the twins! Lmao!
| SomeoneKnew chapter 7 . 9/5/2015
It's c. It's so, so c.
| bearrain chapter 7 . 8/31/2015
Okay I've just started reading this and... well, frankly, it is AMAZING.
But I must go to bed now, and I shall read a few chapters every day hopefully until I finish this. I just want to say this is simply amazing so far and so, so different from anything else I've read, and I love it already and thank you so so much for writing it and - I have feelings and I can't explain them.
Thank you for the feelings.
| Carly chapter 7 . 8/7/2015
Shit got real deep, real fast, and I can't help but feel very motivated. Harry's speech was a mic drop and he blew the hell out of Draco's mind. Too bad Draco's got his own plans, though I'm having a hard time believing that eleven year olds have such big plans for world domination. Maybe Malfoy, but it wouldn't be his own, which it doesn't entirely appear to be, but yet it sort of does.
| Ria0207 chapter 7 . 8/7/2015
This is absolutely brilliant.
| Smokythebear chapter 7 . 8/2/2015
The lack of Hedwig makes me sad but the story is so funny I can't remember she's not there.
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/22/2015
I like this Harry. He is...interesting.
| 8734287934379342879erw87952587 chapter 7 . 7/12/2015
- Manny (You can find me on tumblr at asexualtomriddle.)
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/11/2015
This is so unbelievably good.
Im neither joking nor exaggerating.
| Miro Azuma Kara chapter 7 . 6/29/2015
Okay so now about a hundred pages in. The Inception reference from either Fred/George at Kings Cross. Brilliant.
| hakon2feb chapter 7 . 6/28/2015
Ok, so i really liked this chapter too :)
Canon really does focus too much on the magical world for my taste, and it's quite possible that human genetics could be the solution to more magical babies in the future. Guess Tom Riddle never thought about that because he hated his muggle father with all his guts :p
Keep up the good work :)
| deathless.smile chapter 7 . 6/14/2015
OMG You are killing me! Harry Potter is really planning on "world optimisation", isn't he? :D Poor Draco, he really shouldn't have had that conversation. I think it broke his mind. Wonderful chapter, by the way!
| Angelfirenze chapter 7 . 5/26/2015
I can't believe after cooling MY blood with the discussion of how science has altered humankind, you would end with THAT hammer - especially given that if Severus Snape heard that comparison at this point in canon...what am I saying, you know how dismissive he would have been about it, right from the get-go.
I wonder how your version of Severus will react to your version of Harry. Ever so curious.
| PA chapter 7 . 5/16/2015
Well, that was an interesting chapter. And that's all I have to say for it, moving on.
| jchangpa chapter 7 . 4/29/2015
6 good chapter but this is a litter of trash, That he meet Ron was bad but really friend with Draco. This is really starting to go down and fast.
| Guest chapter 7 . 4/23/2015
Wizards(in JKR's HP series) studied astronomy in depth. So going to the Moon would probably not be that big a deal for them.
| BarbedCaress chapter 7 . 4/10/2015
LOVELOVELOVE the letter exchange between Draco and his father!
| nobodi12 chapter 7 . 4/8/2015
I believe in one of re-edits you missed a piece beacuase the
"All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of nothing, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him."
Makes little sense to me as Harry haven't drank it yet.
| Your-Room-Is-A-Mess chapter 7 . 4/3/2015
I thought this fic would be intelligent and it is at parts, but its filled with the same old prejudices of always so I can say it failed in that regard.
It's always a matter of chosing Gryffindors vs Slytherins. I think only that fic with Harry and his brother Connor actually made it balanced. It's like liking the Marauders and Snape at the same time. Impossible.
| ThoughtfulMonsters chapter 7 . 3/28/2015
Wow... Your story is absolutely brilliant and I'm only sorry it took me this long to come across it. It definitely deserves to have each of its chapter reviewed separately but that seems a bit excessive with over a 100 chapters. Also I think it would be impossible for me to stop reading it long enough to come up with the couple of lines needed to write a review. :D I really hope you decide to begin another story soon or I'm going to go into withdrawal when I finish this one. Anyway thank you for creating this wonderful work and I hope you always find the time to keep writing.
| two thumbs chapter 7 . 3/26/2015
Wow. You're a very good writer. I have no idea how old this whole thing is, and it's possible you've moved on and will never read this, but I stumbled on it by accident and am now hooked. I've never read the Potter books. I know the story as well as anyone who's vaguely culturally aware. But this isn't really fan-fiction, by which I mean it has innate appeal apart from its connection to the source material. I'm really enjoying this.
My one comment, which I offer in the knowledge that you needn't care a whit about my one comment, is that you overuse italics. I imagine the cadence of the speaker in my head when I read dialogue, as I imagine everyone does, and the occasional italic punctuation adds flavour to the speech. But too much of it, and it starts to get distracting, because it feels unnatural.
Anyway, it doesn't really matter. If you ever read this, know that I have a great deal of admiration both for your talent as a writer and for your outlook on life. The world needs more people like you.
| Concolor44 chapter 7 . 3/25/2015
I was right.
| philippii chapter 7 . 3/23/2015
Did I tell you that I love that story?
| Village-Mystic chapter 7 . 3/21/2015
Very complex. I'm glad that even though Harry knows he has a lot to learn, his "outsider's perspective" is allowing him to make connections on information on how things work (and how people interact) in the Wizarding World.
| Kai chapter 7 . 3/20/2015
I don't mind OOC, but come on, don't be ridiculous about it: the Weasleys an hour early? I'm not sure they have an idea that there is a five minute warning whistle...
| hisnhers chapter 7 . 3/14/2015
Harry gave Draco a lot to think about... sly...
| 4everfictional chapter 7 . 3/12/2015
I think I know what that means, but I'm not sure... Great chapter! XD
| Saissa chapter 7 . 3/12/2015
An interesting concept. Pull the magic world to pieces and try and put it back to egtehr scientifically. If it works then great, If it doesn't then magic does not work...
This is my understanding of what Harry is doing.
Now, any sign of Hermione Granger yet? I dont see mention of her on the train yet...
| mab70 chapter 7 . 3/11/2015
I started out writing a list of all the things in this chapter that made me laugh out loud. When I discovered I was writing down every second or third line, I stopped writing.
| Calorion chapter 7 . 3/5/2015
Addendum to Chapter 6 review:
Arrrrgh Fanfiction deleted my cents sign. A copper piece is worth about 10 *cents* in today's dollars presuming a constant price of wheat. Sigh.
* "Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk."
What? Oh. A pun. Either a very poor one, or I missed part of it.
* "Harry opened his eyes and stumbled to a halt, feeling vaguely dirtied by having made a deliberate effort to believe something."
* ""If you can't criticise, you can't optimise."
That's a good one. I'll have to remember that.
* "Harry gave Draco a puzzled look. "If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice.""
You are now on notice: I am going to call you/Harry a bullshitter if I find even one single instance of him kidding someone and then admitting it when called on it. This logic is crap; people kid all the time. What's more, yes, many people find it easier to tell a casual lie than to hold to it when challenged. And even if they do, their intonation and body language might give them away.
So while I agree that it would be more efficient if people would stop asking "Did you *really*?", they're not going to, nor should they.
* "Knowing that Draco's hopeful face had probably been drilled into him by months of practice did not make it any less effective, Harry observed. Actually it did make it less effective, but unfortunately not ineffective."
Thank you so much for this exact wording. I've seen that 'no less effective' language misused so often.
* "he had once read that outright panic was the sign of a truly important scientific problem."
* "That was the sad and awful part, knowing human psychology well enough to know
wasn't a monster."
So only psychopaths are monsters? Much more damage has been done by True Believers—who presumably can be charming, happy, and generous with their friends—than by psychopaths.
* "No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil
mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. To Draco, his enemies weren't people."
Do you have some evidence that this is the default if nothing else intervenes? I don't know that this is true. I suppose you're referring to studies about the Other. Yeah, okay, probably.
* "And in the slowed time of this slowed country, here and now as in the darkness-before-dawn prior to the Age of Reason, the son of a sufficiently powerful noble would simply take for granted that he was above the law, at least when it came to some peasant girl. There were places in Muggle-land where it was still the same way, countries where that sort of nobility still existed and still thought like that, or even grimmer lands where it wasn't just the nobility. It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment. A line of descent, it seemed, which didn't quite include magical Britain, for all that there had been cross-cultural contamination of things like ring-pull drinks cans."
Long passage quoted for context and my future reference; here's the relevant bit: "It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment."
Really? Wow. That's a fascinating thought.
* "Harry took back the book, flipped the pages until he found what he saw."
Um…huh? Did you mean "sought"?
* "And when they arrived, they left a plaque that said, 'We came in peace, for all mankind.' Though you're not yet ready to hear those words, Draco Malfoy..."
Does it matter that these words are more-or-less an outright lie? "We came to beat the Russians so America could win a Cold War battle" is far closer to the truth.
* "Science…works by knowing how the universe works on such a deep level that you know exactly what to do in order to make the universe do what you want."
That sentence needs to be kept in a box and brought out on special occasions so that we never forget. I feel that even many scientists do not truly understand this.
* ""But make no mistake, Draco, true science really isn't like magic, you can't just do it and walk away unchanged like learning how to say the words of a new spell. The power comes with a cost, a cost so high that most people refuse to pay it."
Draco nodded at this as though, finally, he'd heard something he could understand. "And that cost?"
"Learning to admit you're wrong.""
OMFG yes. And those least willing to admit that they might be wrong proclaim *your* supposed refusal to admit you're wrong the loudest.
* "The sounds of the train platform changed from blurs into murmurs as Draco wandered off."
Oh, had Draco cast Quietus? I thought that the sound had changed because the train was boarding.
* "the watch on his wrist, a simple mechanical model that his father had bought him in hope it would work in magic's presence"
Why wouldn't it? Is this some bit of canon I'm supposed to remember? It really is irritating that you assume that people have read Rowling recently.
* "It didn't take long after that for the family owl to bring the reply.
My beloved son:
I would say that you had been so fortunate as to meet someone who enjoys the intimate confidence of our friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape."
I notice I am confused. What does that mean? I've read up to ch. 100, and still don't know. But I haven't read it *lately,* so I assume there's something I've forgotten.
| Berlin chapter 7 . 3/5/2015
When I read the headline, I literally could not breathe for 10 seconds, I was laughing so hard. I mean, I was expecting something crazy, just not... That! Siriusly you should put some kind of warning: Beware! If crazy things make you laugh easily, read this chapter slowly, and by yourself if you do not want anybody to think that you re insane. Especially if you ARE insane, in a good, Verres type of way. Shhh, gotta keep that secret.
| vampwalker709 chapter 7 . 2/16/2015
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| LauraDragon chapter 7 . 2/1/2015
THE-BOY-WHO-LIVED-GETS-DRACO-MALFOY-PREGNANT OMGOMGOMG I CHOKED AND DIED OF LAUGHTER
| TheButterflyComposer chapter 7 . 12/24/2014
How could wizards not know how advanced Muggles are? Diagon Alley is in London, meaning that for over two centuries the trading centre of Magical Britain was in the middle of the most advanced city on the planet.
And today, there is no way they could be ing orang of muggle technology or there would be no way to keep the secret of magic from them.
In fact, if they continue to be this ignorant, the Muggles will catch on so fast to there being a problem that the wizards will be completely unprepared.
As many others have pointed out, at this stage of muggle tech, the resulting war would be a stalemate with the wizards eventually winning through attrition (they can just target every officer and politician until they give up). Before it gets to that point however, nukes will start to come into play.
Basicly, Harry has to make the Wizarding world accept the Muggle one and the scientific method to help prevent world war three.
| Awakening-The-Wicked chapter 7 . 12/22/2014
Was the AVPM reference an accident or on purpose?(the sweat band.)
| IV Legacy of Poseidon chapter 7 . 12/7/2014
I agree, you can never have enough books.
| RandomLogic13 chapter 7 . 12/6/2014
"Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing." Absolutely fantastic and true line, its the reason I always skipped through quidditch paragraphs in the books. Actually, on second thought, it could probably be Dumbeldores motto for dealing with people, though shiny thing might have to be replaced by powerful, mysterious thing in that case, but it's just semantics. Still, after that the chapter just got better and better, I love the relationship between Harry and Draco, the way both know what the other one is doing, yet neither can resist it, it is absolutely fantastic. I'm really enjoying this story. Thank you.
| camilaus chapter 7 . 11/30/2014
wow my mind was trying to understand all this its hard
| N. E. Person chapter 7 . 11/8/2014
Wow... Wizards have never made it to the moon. That's sad, really.
| kimchi759 chapter 7 . 11/3/2014
Thoughts: I was saddened and a bit irritated by Harry referring to Lily as "your sister" when reassuring Petunia. Lily did not "let" magic get between them, Petunia pushed her away due th ejealousy she herself addressed earlier. I just found myself taking offense to not that scene, but rather the words you used. Petunia and Michael have an amusing relationship with our protagonist. I understood what you meant by anvils when you nixed Ron as a main character. I laughed, then frowned, then was upset/horrified/furious, then was mollified, then was fascinated by Draco's nonchalant rape suggestion and the deductions that followed. Mad giggles escaped me when I read your Darth Vader reference. Every event that resulted from drinking the Comed-tea had me, at the very least, looking like the Chesire Cat, except for the "Orde rof Chaos" one, which I'm sad to say I didn't understand. Lastly, the game of psychological manipulations between the two boys was absolutely fantastic and extremely fun to read.
Suggestions: More of a hope than a suggestion at this point, but wishing for certain characters in canon to not be vilified, patronized, ignored and/or bashed. I do realize you're going for a logical Harry, and the content thus far has been great, but if I had to complain about anything, it would be the deletion of much loved characters from the main storyline, or at least the definite decrease in importance. I hope Lily, James, Sirius, Remus, Luna, Hagrid, and the Weasleys are not bashed any more, or, if at all possible, at all. Hedwig...well, she's a bit of a lost cause now, isn't she? Even moreso than Ronnykins.
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/19/2014
XD so... harry's a genius? I like this type of fic! And I love the writing style, too!3333
| MeiPhantomhive chapter 7 . 9/18/2014
I hope Draco & Harry still become BFFs.
...Draco? Pregnant? And HARRY'S THE FATHER?!
| ArtemisCarolineSnow chapter 7 . 9/12/2014
This story does it a lot to me.
| Sue Clover chapter 7 . 9/3/2014
Since when have the Weasleys had a white owl? Is Peter Pettigrew dead? Then how is Sirius going to be exonerated? There is a story that goes with this, and I really wish Draco had made Ron tell it.
The rest of that was brilliant. I'm really starting to like Draco, even if he is an arrogant git who would not care if a ton of people died, so long as they weren't his sort. Harry's going to fix him. I love your aftermaths so far - they seem to be pretty much about how people have no idea what to think of Harry after meeting him, because they have way too much to think about.
| alix33 chapter 7 . 8/26/2014
Oh wow, that Greatest Secondhand Bookshop Raid Ever sounds like something fantastic to have been a part of.
Very odd, thinking of luggage even having the capacity for belief.
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/15/2014
| Saxophonebookworm chapter 7 . 8/6/2014
Just finished chapter 5. DYING LAUGHING!
| SakuraKoi chapter 7 . 8/1/2014
| thepkrmgc chapter 7 . 7/30/2014
harry's commentary on ron and quidditch are spot on and very funny, its going to be interesting to see what he thinks of the sorting hat and boat ride
its good to see that harry doesnt buy into draco's propaganda, Lawful Evil is the most disturbing of alignments: at least chaos is mindless. but Harry's return arguments briliantly portray the badassitude of us muggles. theres a reason that the wizarding world has to hide in the shadows of mortal society
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/29/2014
the Guest below me:
We must have not read the same chapter. There was nothing in there "making light" of rape.
Draco has some very violent and dark views on the subject, and the protagonist was (rightly so) disgusted by it.
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/25/2014
this is ridiculous and youve made light of rape of a young girl. as a parent, and as a survivor, i must say, i was disgusted, and will not be continuing, despite my liking of your story previous to the talk about luna.
| DamionKenley117 chapter 7 . 7/25/2014
Regarding the Aftermath:
How...I'm not sure which direction to take that response. Subtlety, eh?
| ladydanni chapter 7 . 7/21/2014
Wow. That's powerful. I would never expect a child to brazenly say they could rape someone and mean it. It cut through all through everything.
This Harry brilliant.
| Misfortune31 chapter 7 . 7/17/2014
The second first chapter I think brain-damaged me, the third and fourth and this... I am going to have to learn how to read again... Anyways thanks for this mind ( literally) blowing book! And it was just seven chapters!
| Foxy-Floof chapter 7 . 7/3/2014
Oh My. God.
This story is AMAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAZING.
| Jesper chapter 7 . 7/1/2014
Harrys character is starting to come out right (of course he is not much alike the original Potter, but close enough) and the story is fun and thrilling. But I think Draco is a bit too intellectual in his thinking. More bold moves and emotional reasoning is his style. How will you make all the characters more personal?
| AlyssaIsBeryllium chapter 7 . 6/26/2014
Is the pairing Harry/Draco or Hermione/Harry?
| Taryn chapter 7 . 6/11/2014
I apologize in advance, this isn't really a review.
Thank you for bringing this immensely amazing world to life. The ideas for the world may not be entirely you. But, I find your Harry Potter refreshing and fantastic.
| robert p chapter 7 . 6/5/2014
you're great, this is great, thank you 3
| Fluffy Bunny chapter 7 . 5/29/2014
I was introduced to this amazing story at work today. In at chapter 8, and I must tell you that I understand why you told anyone who didn't grasp the story to just quit reading. I am so appreciative of the incorporation of different theories and experiments that have formed us as the human race. I do a private Irish jig when I take apart the brilliant arguments you present through Harry. I am concerned with his ominous nature, though. I wish he were more light-hearted and positive, but he is a realist and that has been well-established. The personalities of the characters are perfect! Ron is truly dim-witted in the books (although he means well), Draco is ambitious, cunning, smart, and manipulative; these traits are brought to life in this story, and I couldn't be more pleased. This is the parallel universe to the original Harry Potter series, and I cannot wait to see what happens!
| Jennjennr chapter 7 . 5/21/2014
So, I haven't actually reviewed a story in probably somewhere close to a year. That being said, this chapter honestly came close to making me cry. The absolute love and understanding of why science is so fantastic made me giddy with happiness. I loved the imagery of being shocked at the astounding fact that humans made it to the moon, and showing how prejudiced could be seen not only on the level of blood and where you come from, but also from an intellectual level, "But how could Muggles achieve all this?" because they have fantastic minds that though rooted in the realities of science, also can dare and dream and do amazing things.
Also the line that you have to know that you will be wrong, made me choke up as well. Yes you will try, and yes you will fail, that is inevitable but you have to get up and try again. If someone points out how you are wrong, don't get angry and deny their facts, learn from it, use it to become stronger, better, wiser!
Honestly I loved that whole section of this chapter and I felt that you deserved to know that,
Thank you so much for writing this story,
| A chapter 7 . 5/16/2014
Enjoy how science & logic are used to come together
| oca2073 chapter 7 . 4/28/2014
Interesting idea for the quidditch. Another way to reform might be to use the snitch factor as an additional deciding factor to the result of the game in addition to the score. So if team a wins the score and the snitch they win. If team b loses the score and the snitch they lose.
If team a wins the score but loses the snitch they draw. If team b loses the score and wins the snitch they draw. If team a and b are level in score the team that wins the snitch wins. That could lead to intriguing in game scenarios of what to do based on the situation.
| cool bnr chapter 7 . 4/20/2014
This is completely unlike the book and it's driving me mad.
But you're also very intriguing. I think I'm hooked.
| Silverrain chapter 7 . 4/9/2014
Freaking awesome. Seeker really is the stupidest position ever, isn't it? It ruins the game completely. Why did I never realize this before?
Also, "You can never have enough books." Agreed.
| Arabella Lee Smith chapter 7 . 4/8/2014
Love your comparison of science and magic. Interesting story.
| konatachan603 chapter 7 . 4/6/2014
Oh My God
That last couple of sentences... I LITERALLY reread it at least three times, because my brain couldn't process what it actually meant.
If I read that correctly, it means that Lucius thought whomever Draco was talking about got that information from Snape... But since Harry obviously has had no connection with Snape yet, it would mean he realized Lucius' weak point on his own... Which is a quite scary and sobering fact... MAN UR SUCH A GENIUS!
Anyways, I'm kinda regretting saying that I'll finish this as soon as possible... That was BEFORE I realized that this story is over 500k words long! But I started reading it knowing that, so I'm definitely going to try to finish it... I finished a 700k word fanfic once... I can do it again...
| Eric Olsvik chapter 7 . 4/4/2014
I have been totally flabbergasted twice today.
I first read Harry Potter and the Natural 20.
Then proceed to start reading this thing.
I am pleased to say, I am amazed.
This is indeed the bees knees
The veritable cats pajamas.
Nothing short of awesome.
The text is syncing up.
That is also awesome.
Even for an accident.
| Sensei200 chapter 7 . 3/27/2014
This chapter was delicious- I ate it like a slice of cake.
| Nixie the Bloody Pixie chapter 7 . 3/18/2014
My life has finally met the very definition of insane sanity! This had me cackling in laughter since I went to bed around an hour ago (Danish time) and resulted in my mother threatening to gag me if I didn't shut up! You. Are. Brilliant!
| Sailor Saturn fan chapter 7 . 3/3/2014
Chapter 1-6 we're knock outs! Harry is intelligent which makes me laugh! Also in this chapter, Harry and Draco seem to have become very acquainted with each other. Looks like Ron is not going to be friends with Harry, which is fine because I think Ron isn't good enough for this Harry. It will also be easier to defeat Voldemort because he is different. McGonagall is also very amusing. I like Harry's and McGonagalls talk throughout Diagon Alley. Review in later chapters!
| Harlequin de Rustre chapter 7 . 2/22/2014
This story took a mild turn for the weird, but I'm allowing for flawed perspectives...
You honestly know how to write intelligent characters. That really takes some doing, not to mention some personal insights (ergo intelligence)
| Anaelyssa chapter 7 . 2/20/2014
When I first read about the headline in this chapter, I thought it was super funny and that your assurances that this would not be HPDM mpreg were silly and unnecessary. After this fic started my spiral into fanfic addiction (aided by the fact that I'm a yaoi fangirl), I just look back and think how wrong I was.
*Sigh* well, re-reading this after going through multiple other HP fanfics is going to be quite an experience.
| IXAthenaeum chapter 7 . 2/7/2014
And so a Pureblood discovers that muggles DO have power, muahaha! Very nicely written chapter x3
| Vampires2rocks chapter 7 . 2/5/2014
...I love you.
Don't tell my fiancee I told you that, but I love you.
| Talonis Wolf chapter 7 . 1/27/2014
You had a really good point about the Quiddich, actually. Never really considered it since every player was compared to other players based on their skill level rather than their position.
I.e Oliver Wood was more highly regarded than Harry
And Harry's counter to Malfoy's spiel was brilliant! Well done!
| Grizzmon chapter 7 . 1/13/2014
This is a very dangerous game indeed.
| Darth Vader chapter 7 . 1/12/2014
| OzmaofOz chapter 7 . 1/9/2014
This is reminding me a lot of Pinky and the Brain
| WellWhatDoYouKnow chapter 7 . 1/2/2014
If Harry Potter were Ender Wigan...
| mph5mph chapter 7 . 1/1/2014
Mad, Insane, Epicly awesome?
| G Fawkes chapter 7 . 12/31/2013
OK, "as soon as I'm old enough, I'm going to rape her!", is just so deliciously WRONG (!) . (sick bastard! they are eleven!)
I gotta go and try to sleep, now. Good thing I had just peed BEFORE I read that... really... I was crying and (attempting) to not laugh out loud for, like, a minute.
Is the hot girl in the add for the bridal dresses, next to this box, SUPPOSED to look like Hermione?! (if that was intentional... Well done!)
| CMVreud chapter 7 . 12/28/2013
Ah, yes, Quidditsh.
A mix between a ball-hop-game of a carnival-fair, rugby, cricket and crocket with all thot on flying brooms, y'know, fantasy.
If just the rational!Harry/Slytherin!Draco would stay so (funny) forever.
An insane pair of knuts.
| I am freaked out chapter 7 . 12/18/2013
OK. That was 2 parts communism, 1 part Weasley bashing, 1 part really freaky Draco, 3 parts Hakuna Matata, and 5 parts 'Harry-is-going-to-end-up-trying-to-take-over-the-world'.
Roll it all together, and it proves it to be one of the weirdest chapters of a novel. Ever.
| Dawn Darkling chapter 7 . 12/12/2013
I would like to take this opportunity to say that I HAVE to check out that site when I'm finished. The topics being touched upon are making so much sense that I wouldn't forgive myself if I didn't.
| difinityone chapter 7 . 12/10/2013
I see what you did there with the Mister Black international man of mystery thing!
| Epsilon27 chapter 7 . 12/7/2013
The idea of "committing murder as a bonding method" certainly brings Dostoevsky's "Demons" to memory (where it certainly fails, and does it brilliantly); it would be interesting to know, whether it could actually work...
Is it only me, but children used to be more innocent at age 11? Hard to picture Harry and Draco without white beards; I don't suscpect Dumbledore to be young and cheerfull - not so far yet. Still, very amusing.
| onlytoask chapter 7 . 11/28/2013
Damn this is good.
| Dyrssdytshrdsdhttsdh chapter 7 . 11/23/2013
Oooh... It's getting interesting...
| BrainstormSurge chapter 7 . 11/21/2013
Well I guess Harry could have done the gold exchange thing to pay off Lucius Malfoy, but I guess he hasn't considered it for a while. It's not important to the plot right now, but may be when he wants to start taking over the world.
| alli chapter 7 . 11/19/2013
oh god. please PLEASE tell me the sweatband is an AVPM reference.
| 10samantha242 chapter 7 . 11/11/2013
"If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice."
-best line ever and so true
| 567zoock67 chapter 7 . 11/8/2013
Waiit...I don't get the last bit. Severus Snape? But that's not Draco's father, and if he was in this story, then Draco's relationship with Lucius would have changed. Hmm...I think I'll hopefully find out next chapter, and I love all the manipulation going on. Surprisingly I can understand it.
The whole Corned Tea aspect was harilious, and I loved how it worked! Though perhaps it works on the premise that the drinker subconsciously expects the tea to work, even though they consciously don't, so they are waiting for something to happen which they will tag as humorous and laugh about it, so basically it works because they believe it. How about giving the tea to someone who isn't aware of it's properties, and telling them it's normal tea? I'd love to see that experimented by Harry and his friends.
| UNSecur chapter 7 . 10/28/2013
It just occurred to me that rape would be far less serious in the wizarding world because they can magic away the consequences with an Obliviate.
| willam and jack and jake chapter 7 . 10/22/2013
| Potterkid chapter 7 . 10/19/2013
Has anyone watched a very potter musical? It's a really funny parody play that's on YouTube. In the second one, a ver potter sequel, harry shows up to kings cross with a sweatband to cover up his scar. I don't know who copied who, or if its just a coincidence, but I thought you should know
| Neloska chapter 7 . 10/14/2013
Ok, now I understand that your making Harry sound too intelligent wasn't done accidently. But honestly he is scary and I guess it tells us something about your McGonagall that she already realized this during their first meeting.
Also the serious part of the story starts, now after we got to know Harry a bit. Your Draco is creepy, too, I love what you did with him and am really nervous to find out what you have planned for Hermione's character considering that McGonagall, who somewhat understands Harry, mentioned her to him...
| Cynder2013 chapter 7 . 10/13/2013
I...extremely dislike your Harry.
| Iryerris chapter 7 . 10/6/2013
Is that a good response or bad response, Draco?
Your chapters really took off in terms of length.
| kheelwithit chapter 7 . 9/21/2013
I was wondering if you could, ever so kindly, spell fucked?
| Non-Existent Phantom chapter 7 . 9/19/2013
Lovely Martin Luther reference, it made me laugh...
| Rommel1942 chapter 7 . 8/28/2013
As a big science nerd, I LOVE THIS STORY. I was physically quaking in my chair when Harry was explaining science to Malfoy. I would sometimes keep myself up at night thinking what would happen if we put science in Harry Potter? And I've gotten it in this story. Thank you so much for writing. Now then, on to the next chapter...
| goldspears chapter 7 . 8/15/2013
Bye, bye, Ron! God, that guy annoys the hell outta me. I'm so glad he's going.
I like your Draco. I like the book Draco as well. But most fanfiction make him pretty stupid when he's mostly just lazy. If he put his mind to it, I think he'd be rather clever. I like how you're trying to redeem him.
| cross-over-lover232 chapter 7 . 8/15/2013
ahh...Luna and Harry, this should provide some fun!
Also, what if Luna became pregent from the rape? surely the purebloods have a spell or potion, to prevent line theft?
| sibilantspiel chapter 7 . 8/4/2013
This story has a lot of reviews. It's statistically likely that, since I don't plan to spend time formulating this review, any comments I make on the story itself you've already read in a multitude of forms. For this reason, I'm not going to say anything else. It's my rather cumbersome way of letting ink drop.
| Bloody-Asphode11 chapter 7 . 8/3/2013
the Weasley Twins Harry Potter-evans-Verres SWEET MERCY MY GOD HELP US ALL
| Darth Luffy chapter 7 . 7/27/2013
This is interesting, you've done an outstanding job of making Harry both annoyingly smart and still childlike in his own way as shown by his flippant statement to get the healing kit and his later thoughts on creating an order to fight Voldemort, he's smart as hell but is still a child and doesn't have the people skills or life experiences to temper his own knowledge... I do hope he grows less obnoxious as the story goes on though, smart ass is fine but there should be a limit on it
Ditching Ron was funny and your not wrong about him but his purpose was to be the 'ordinary' person that served as a foil to the exceptions that were Harry and Hermione in the books, still it's not like the story doesn't work without him, especially if it's well written and while he had a few good moments he also had alot of terrible one as well so it's not that bad
The introduction of Draco was great, you did a good job with his character making him smarter, crueler, and more likeable than he originally was... Personally I have no qualms about killing, some people are better of dead and it can be a simpler solution to simply eliminate someone than to find a work around but I hate the idea of rape, despite my own questionable (to most people) morals I can't abide that so it was nice to see Harry step in and try to prevent that.. and your not wrong about people, as awful as Draco seems it isn't something unique in human history, and I would imagine that most people, if raised in Draco's place, would have the same mannerisms and thoughts
Anyways like I said at the top this is pretty interesting so far and I'm looking forward to reading it. Out of curiosity could you let me know what year the story is currently in? I doubt you've written 500k on the first year and am curious to see how far along you actually are
Oh and if you want to see another story where a small change is made that has resonating consequences through out the story, much like your own, then look up Better Left Unsaid by Kenchi618 it's easily the best Naruto fic I've ever read
| The One Who Reads Too Much chapter 7 . 7/18/2013
"Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco.
And out of the story he goes!
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/14/2013
This is the best story I have read in a LONG time.
| To the TARDIS chapter 7 . 7/7/2013
This chapter was cool, but confuzzleing
| MariSkep chapter 7 . 7/6/2013
It's heart warming seeing two little shits bonding. Think of how snotty and superior to everyone they can feel.
| Anon chapter 7 . 7/2/2013
Another amazing chapter
| Alissie chapter 7 . 6/30/2013
Another wow chapter! The only part that I honestly didn't like was Draco, at eleven, saying that he would rape Luna in response to the Quibbler article. I understand that rape is sometimes more about power and control than sexual release, but...he's eleven. It threw me for a bit of a loop. Besides that, I REALLY love how this is developing! 4:35am, going strong.
| Silvering chapter 7 . 6/26/2013
I was puzzled at first when Harry attributed the "women are more than just cattle" innovation to the Enlightenment, given that at least one prominent Enlightenment thinker was a disgusting pig in his personal life (with apologies to actual pigs for the comparison), but then it seems that Harry is somewhat ignorant of history. Given that as a character trait, there's no reason for Harry to know that the status of women-as-people in Western Civ is actually a development whose cultural evolution can be traced back to ancient Judaism - and was spread through Europe by Christianity, where it became more and more refined over generations of cultural development. I just thought it was kind of odd for a kid genius to make such a glaring error at first, but then, if he's not interested in history, there's no reason for him to have questioned the "received knowledge" he has, especially when it conforms to his belief that Science Good. It's kind of cute, for him to mess up, when he's so proud of his knowledge! LOL
| Leadx chapter 7 . 6/21/2013
Another amazing chapter. That liquid part of the story made me REALLY laugh. Heck, many places did as well. Well written, and I love the new pretty manipulative and scientific Harry Potter, wish these were the movies!
| lizzywithfire chapter 7 . 6/13/2013
Here I was, innocently reading this story, think "Oh! Draco must actually be a nice guy for once, how nice :)"
AND THEN BAM!
Let's rape Luna :D
OH GOD! THE HORROR!
But poor Ron :( I now get what you meant about the bashing. I kinda get what you were saying, but it doesn't feel right to me (yet) that Harry will be without Ron :( :( :(
| OnLyMinO chapter 7 . 6/9/2013
is there really such drink?
| epsilon-sagittarii chapter 7 . 5/6/2013
This was a really well written chapter, loved it on so many levels. Don't know how to react to Ron now being sort of sidelined in this story but hey, should be interesting. Loved Harry's determination to reformulate Quidditch and Ron's reaction priceless. Also that line about "As soon as I'm old enough, I'm going to rape her" even though I know its a terrible line (hey rape jokes aren't funny) I just could not stop laughing. I know, I'm such a terrible person, but imagining 11 year old Draco saying that is very hilarious.
Fave Quote: "All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of nothing, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him."
| Indiahenna chapter 7 . 5/1/2013
At first I was laughing really, really hard at the shenanigans in the chapter, and then the bit where Draco said he'd rape Luna hit and I just stopped. And kept going after a moment to see what would happen next. The last section with Harry trying to get Draco to really THINK about what he was saying-that was powerful writing. It came out of nowhere and that's what made it effective.
| 21Orphans chapter 7 . 4/28/2013
Surprisingly I have managed to keep up with all you have said though it really only takes someone with a relatively good brain to keep up.
| Shadow Bane chapter 7 . 4/27/2013
ok, wow. Harry is awesome, but I still like JKR's better. and Malfoy, well I like yours better then Jk's. i'm curious, do you write any of your own novels? if so please put a notice. however sense I don't have any other means, I would like to receive your reply through a fan fic review. please specify the fanfic.
| RussianDestruction chapter 7 . 4/18/2013
That was so sweet on the train station, when H tells Petunia not to worry, that he'll never let magic come between them. Awwww! So good to hear him say that!
Man, this Harry/Draco relationship is NUTS! I really enjoyed reading their conversation, it was sooo interesting.
Lucius' response to Draco's letter is three thousand miles past intriguing... *reads on*
| sww11685 chapter 7 . 4/16/2013
Loved the chapter, especially the Harry Draco interactions
| The Three March Hares chapter 7 . 4/9/2013
I think this is my favorite chapter, thus far, for several reasons:
1. I always disliked Ron Weasley on the grounds that his poverty made him an insufferable, jealous git and that he's a soulless ginger (no offence to ginger's seeing as I am one myself and can attest to my lack of said soul)
2. Draco is quickly becoming Harry's friend, with room for Harry to improve on his character. Though I wanted to punch him for the rape comment, I couldn't help but be amused by Harry's recommendation to bond over murder. Did I mention how much I enjoy the Addams Family?
3. Harry's "Science is awesome" speech.
4. I was coincidentally drinking a fizzy neon green drink while reading this chapter with similar results and further gave evidence to support or refute whatever hypothesis Harry is going for.
Too bad there's no Pulitzer for fanfiction. You and Chris Dee's Cat-Tales would be neck to neck.
| Hannah chapter 7 . 4/3/2013
I loved that line, "I'm so sane it burns like ice." Also, I'd wondered how blood purists would react if faced with science and examples of muggle intelligence. Draco is disturbing, and not just for a child.
| Carly Carnations chapter 7 . 3/31/2013
Harry really does enjoy smashing everyone's views of reality to pieces, doesn't he? I'm going to go and continue reading this :)
| Luna Ayla Katniss chapter 7 . 3/7/2013
Don't you just love the manipulation in life. This is AMAZING!
| yoloswagmaster chapter 7 . 2/28/2013
That sucks. . . Dx
| blewis61 chapter 7 . 2/28/2013
This might not sound like a compliment but I swear it really is meant as one. Your writing is good enough that it is keeping me reading a story I otherwise would have walked away from the moment after Harry and Ron's interaction. In fact, I nearly did. I am something of a Potter purist when it comes to the relationships between the trio and H/G and R/H. I have always felt that JKR did a good job on building those relationships and so I have stuck to them, but like I said your writing is good and kept me reading.
The one critique I have with this chapter (beyond the above which is more of just a personal preference thing) is that it reads almost like a sounding board for all of the critique's people have against the way JKR wrote the book (you hit all of the classics; the snitch, moon landing as an example of the decay of magical intellectualism vs muggles, Ron being nothing but a dumb side-kick add-on (though that one I never got), etc). I get that some people have major critique's (some very valid) about how some of the books were written; however, I really am hoping this story isn't just going to be a sounding board for a grudge against how JKR wrote the books because it really does seem like a story that has potential and I would hate for that to be lost. Going to give it another chapter or two, but not sure how much longer even your good writing can keep me hooked.
| hervissa chapter 7 . 2/26/2013
Woooooah. So Harry throws off Ron and gets Draco instead. And plans marrying Luna Lovegood.
I hoped that we'll see the Sorting...but there were many, many other things which made it up :D
Order of Chaos. Gred and Forge. No one else could do that XD
And I'm starting to love Draco more and more. Same with Lucius ;)
...you just planted an idea into my head - how would /normal/ HP Draco react to Muggles on the Moon? :D
I hope that Harry will at least befriend he twins :)
And I can't wait for Hermione to appear! They will be fantastic duo... xD
Ah, the NEXT button is too tempting to resist.
| HarryXmas chapter 7 . 2/24/2013
I love the line, 'Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk.'
| Guest chapter 7 . 2/19/2013
Honestly, I think this fic is amazing, and I have enjoyed it as much as the canon series (if not more). It has even given me more of an interest in science! It's funny, it's original, and I'm always looking forward to updates.
That being said, I do have a few issues with it. First of all, during Harry's conversation with Draco, he basically implied that "every time and place that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment" was completely barbaric. I was astounded by the political incorrectness. I think that paragraph could be removed with no real harm to the story. The same could be said of the rape joke in Chapter 11. Also, the anti-religion tracts seem gratuitous.
Besides those issues, I think this is a great fic and I hope you are having as much fun writing it as we are reading it!
| Enei Emmu chapter 7 . 2/2/2013
This story continues to progress so well that it borders on perfection, but I know better. Perfect means there's nowhere left to go, and I can tell that this one's already gone much, much farther.
| petalene chapter 7 . 1/25/2013
Oh my goodness. Now I want Harry and Draco to take over the world. I am enjoying Harry's understanding of science to try and understand magic. And I like how ignorant of "muggle" things Draco is. I always found it odd that there are few all wizard towns and yet wizards have trouble interacting with muggles.
| malkh chapter 7 . 1/19/2013
nice going. Could be too clever by half; we will see. . . .and the Weasleys in scarves, a nice and very fitting touch . . . .
| ardeth hines chapter 7 . 1/16/2013
you must like white blonde hair. And complications. But you are moving very fast and you have six books to mirror. . . .
| Writing bunny chapter 7 . 1/6/2013
Good chapter. I loved the conversation between Harry and Draco.
And Lucius' reply letter is priceless. He has no idea what's going on.
| Lendary chapter 7 . 1/6/2013
Very well done. The new conversation between Harry and Draco is a lot more natural sounding, and Draco's attitude towards those of lower station comes across way more clearly.
| Biabara chapter 7 . 1/3/2013
Wow. Just wow. Draco is much more.. efficient and cunning than in canon and I totally love it.
Although an eleven years old boy talking about rape made me uncomfortable. Even if he's above the law doesn't mean he hasn't common morals and principles.
| BiblioMatsuri chapter 7 . 1/3/2013
Wait - was Harry's trunk the Luggage from Discworld? No, wait, it doesn't bite. Maybe a distant cousin... The Luggage has been known to reproduce. I have no reason to discount that hypothesis.
Also: Holy cr*p.
| white.angel.rose13 chapter 7 . 12/28/2012
This Story so far as made my day. I love the humour.
| Lightningblade49 chapter 7 . 12/23/2012
Glad to see someone agrees with me about quiditich.
| Susan M. M chapter 7 . 12/19/2012
Huzzah for "the Greatest Secondhand Bookshop Raid Ever, which had covered four cities and produced thirty boxes of science books now sitting in the cavern level of Harry's trunk." ** "Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?" Actually, now that Harry thought about it, that seemed like a surprisingly good hypothesis. Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing..." Lovely theory. ** "Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience." ** Heaven have mercy, Draco is so ignorant of Muggle accomplishments that he didn't know Mankind has set foot upon the moon?
| chain.reader chapter 7 . 12/18/2012
I just finished reading the first 7 chapters... and I've got to say:
You, sir, are an amazing author!
| StrangeoneXD chapter 7 . 12/16/2012
O.o This is getting more complicated by the chapter isn't it? The cogs are spinning
| Honoria Granger chapter 7 . 12/14/2012
Harry telling Draco about science, and showing him the lunar landing, is possibly the single most brilliant thing I have yet read here. I don't know who you are or what you do, but you need to write professionally, if you don't already. You're amazing.
| Dan Riddle chapter 7 . 12/13/2012
When reading in the beginning of the chapter "I feel the need to disclaim that certain parts of this chapter are not meant as "bashing"", I immediately thought "Ron!" XD
| Mr Norrell chapter 7 . 12/13/2012
Now that things seems to have settled into a rhythm and character of its own... I think I like this.
| Byakugan789 chapter 7 . 12/1/2012
Blood of atlantis huh? There's two small problems with Draco's theory though; first is the very existance of Muggleborns. if the power of magic wanes with every generation then what is the origin of Muggleborn wizzards? is that not an indication that magic is, if not self sustaining, trying to grow? Second, Harry and Voldimort themselves. Harry's mother was a muggle born and his father was a merely avarage wizzard from a long line of 'waining purebloods'. Then comes along Harry and BOOM, powerful enough to generate a Patronus that scatters half the demetors of Azkaban in determined persuit of a favored prisoner when many of the best can only keep 3 or 4 at bay WHEN HE"S BLOODY 13 YEARS OLD! And that's the least of his accomplishments. Voldimort himself came from the end of the Gaunt line, One of the reportedly most powerful lines in the known world that had breed themselves into being little better than squibs, then old Voldies mommy outsources one generation to a MUGGLE of all things and BOOM! "Greatest Dark Lord In A Century." Both kids are practically dripping in power, the only difference between them, and the source of harry's largely lacluster performance, is his dursley stunted mind.
| calicar chapter 7 . 11/29/2012
"To Draco, his enemies weren't people." A fine sentence that completely describes Draco's ramblings about rape and murder. And Harry, as intelligent as he is, still needs a lot of growing up to do. A lot.
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/17/2012
Harry needs to ask Draco re raping Luna with the aid of a memory charm, "How do you know that hasn't already happened to you? Is there some Slytherin family friend who seems happy to see you when your Dad isn't around?"
Let Draco look at it from both sides.
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/15/2012
Enter the twins it seems. Also i liked the Malfoy scene at the end. Normally i hate Malfoy but you portrayed him in a way that at least made him interesting, even if he did have no morals.
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/4/2012
Ahem... let me clear my throat before i say this. Now, 1...2...3
WHY IN THE HELL IS HARRY GETTING TO BEST MATES WITH DRACO MALFOY?! IT'S PERFECTLY FINE IF HE GOT SORTED IN RAVENCLAW, IT'S PERFECTLY FINE IF HE DIDN'T LIKE RON AS MUCH AS HE DID IN THE ORIGINALS BUT WHY DOES DRACO ACTUALLY SEEMS LIKE A HALF DECENT PERSON? I DO NOT HATE DRACO, I LOOOOAAAAATTTTHHHHHH HIM! OH FOR THE SAKE OF GOD THIS IS ABSOLUTELY－ NO, MOM DON'T TELL ME STAY AWAY FOR THE COMPUTER, AND YES I WILL BE CUSSING A LOT LATER SO... HEY STOP THAT! THAT WAS MY FOOT!
| Muirgen Monet chapter 7 . 10/26/2012
Fantastic chapter! Having an eleven-year old boy casually discussing raping a child was horrifying. I'm not sure if the fact that at such a young age Draco was mostly parroting what he had been taught made it more disgusting or less.
I've wondered what wizards would think if they new Muggles had been to the moon. I think your explanation of it is spot on.
| LunaSakne chapter 7 . 10/9/2012
Wow! This is a real find. I've read this far since last night (even printed parts out in tiny print and read on the bus. With a flashlight.) and am stopping only to express my admiration before I go on to lose the better part of a night's sleep reading your story! It's not often I get THIS high on a book. Thank you for that.
You must know the absolute KICKS that vaguely Ravenclaw-ish persons get out of a main character that thinks (and boy, does he think!). I'll confess part of me still grumbles that this text is less literature than intellectual construction, an overextended commentary on the wizarding world from a position so outrageously (simplicistically? outdatedly?) rationalistic that I do not feel it as my own (as how many people do?). But, somewhat like poor Draco at this point, being conscious of these things does not change how utterly hooked I am - on the humour, the style, and, yes, the intellectual commentary. My brain feels so alive reading this, victims of the modern culture (get off my twenty-odd-year-old self's lawn!) would probably coin a term like braingasm to describe the chuckles, short-circuits and blank stares of awed realization that happen on every page.
No, forget what my snob part said. This is brilliant in its own way, which is the only way in which one has the right to expect anything to be brilliant. I'll be back with more rambles later. - LunaSakne
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/5/2012
"That's not interactive, there's no back-and-forth with the other player and how much fun is it to watch someone incredibly good at moving their eyes? And then whichever Seeker gets lucky swoops in and grabs the Snitch and makes everyone else's work moot. It's like someone took a real game and grafted on this pointless extra position so that you could be the Most Important Player without needing to really get involved or learn the rest of it. Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?"
And this is why the snitch catch in real life quidditch is only worth 30 points. So quaffle play is more important.
| LordXeenTheGreat chapter 7 . 10/2/2012
| Zephyr chapter 7 . 9/25/2012
Personally I preferred Hermione Granger gets Draco Malfoy pregnant.
| The Potters of the Future chapter 7 . 9/20/2012
I wonder what Snape will say to Harry
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/6/2012
Whaaaooo. That was intense.
| Rumbleroar chapter 7 . 9/3/2012
Harry explaining to Malloy about landing on the moon reminded me of "I can't GO to Pigfarts, Potter. It's on MARS! You need a ROCKETSHIP." from A Very Potter Musical.
| SpesialK1 chapter 7 . 8/31/2012
"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -" adorable xD
"Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience." I love Harry's humor)))
| crystalclear8050 chapter 7 . 8/24/2012
"Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk."
That phrase made me extremely happy. Well done!
| EveBB chapter 7 . 8/17/2012
Your portrayal of Draco was fascinating. Harry's realization that Draco wasn't joking about murder and rape and his reaction to this made for a riveting chapter.
(I don't understand Lucius response to Draco at the end of the chapter but I presume that I'll learn more at some point.)
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/12/2012
I just want to say that I'm loving this story so far.
The first few chapters were hilarious. And now a plot, or at least a mystery, is starting to develop: little differences from canon that (apparently) have nothing to do with Harry.
I'm having fun predicting how the stories would go with a Harry Potter who behaves sensibly instead of acting on impulsive, who will go to an adult when there's trouble instead of having a "saving-people thing," who surrounds himself with Ravenclaws instead of Weasleys (or will McGonagall, Hermione and the chaos twins tempt him to Gryffindor after all?)
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/11/2012
Your characterization of Harry Potter reminds me a lot of Miles Vorkosigan.
| voodooqueen126 chapter 7 . 8/1/2012
Apparently this fic doesnt go into the 2nd year or later, which is sad because Luna was awesome.
| Panruru chapter 7 . 7/30/2012
When Harry started buying up Come-Tea to perform experiments I started smiling harder than I have in months. Thank you for that.
It makes me very happy that Harry knows Draco is probably just a product of his environment rather than an irredeemable Evil Dark Wizard.
But, the best part was when Harry blew Draco's mind with science.
| Assymetric chapter 7 . 7/28/2012
Horrorstruck and moving on.
| AnimationNut chapter 7 . 7/26/2012
I didn't expect Ron to stick around on the train xD
| 110468 chapter 7 . 7/25/2012
"You can never have enough books". Gah, I wish -I- had a family motto like that. Also, I just got into this fanfic today and frankly, so far, it is not at all what I expected a HP fanfic to be. Which is to say, it's downright terrific.
| dana-san chapter 7 . 7/24/2012
I am loving this. You are an amazing writer. THANK-YOU!
| Mr Stereo1 chapter 7 . 7/22/2012
Could you expand on Godric's writings at some point, perhaps even post the actual in-universe text in an interlude or omake? I can't remember the exact chapter where it was mentioned, but when I think about this fic it keeps coming up in my head.
| Garniella chapter 7 . 7/20/2012
Hmm... So confusing. Brilliant... Okay. Okay. *Is hopelessly enthralled*
| Lucien chapter 7 . 7/20/2012
Good so far, but one question- how does Harry know what the Imperio curse is already?
| Satirica chapter 7 . 7/16/2012
So the reason for Muggle-born hatred is because "dirty blood" is assumed to taint magical blood...it makes the Malfoys seem slightly less sinister, even though they're still quite dark...as for Harry, it takes a lot to make science look better than magic. It was sort of a relief when he explained the Muggle world to Draco, as it was something I wish had happened somewhere in the books. Muggles are often depicted as inferior when they aren't; they just have different abilities. And now that I know Harry is planning to dominate both science and magic...well...it's kind of fear-provoking, really.
| Fudgecicles chapter 7 . 7/13/2012
go harry! convert draco to science! it must work, that would be so freaking awesome!
| Jaol chapter 7 . 7/3/2012
Woah, Harry's turning evil.
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/2/2012
I believe I'm up to date on this whole story, but there are mentions of the "Incident at the Potions Shop," in the aftermath of which Harry took aside another customer and asked him about Lucius Malfoy. The Aftermath section of Chapter 7 strongly implies that the customer he pulled aside was Severus Snape, which seems a highly plausible place to encounter him outside of school anyway. What I'm trying to figure out, though, is what was the "Incident at the Potions Shop?" Does it come up ever again, and I missed it? Anyway, fun chapter
| Kendra chapter 7 . 6/7/2012
Firstly, I wish to submit one heartfelt AAAAAAAAAGHH about the person whispering Hermione's name at the end of last chapter. What the frak.
I think you might want to make the play on words clearer in the sentence "Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk." Took me three puzzled rereadings the first time to get that - illusion of transparency, y'know.
This might be the only story I've read with Ron-is-stupid character bashing that actually works. He's not *that* stupid, certainly not as much as most bashers portray, but he's just so very far out of MOR-Harry's league that he doesn't fit any more. So, um, props for what should be a serious fault and actually isn't.
I find it odd that perpetually curious Harry has managed to not inquire after "*the best pet story ever*" in seventy-eight chapters. Plot reasons, I'm guessing, possibly relating to "the best way to escape Azkaban is not to be there," but it's rather interesting.
Harry thinking that Lucius was going to "c-crucify" Draco is an oddly specific idea of punishment. (The stuttering is odd, unless he's LastSecondWordSwap-ing something I don't get.)
I'm one of those people who actually understand what you were going for with the rape thing. There's really no better way to convey "vastly different value system where this kid is *not* a psychopath" - witness the varied attempts of the current Reddit thread. I get why people ragequit over this, but it makes narrative sense to me.
I know I'm supposed to be finding the bad parts here, but I've got to compliment the Muggles-on-the-moon scene. *Awesome*.
| benthor chapter 7 . 6/3/2012
Harry arrives early at Kings Cross which is in character with him but so do the Weasleys which _isn't_ for them. But I guess I can excuse this.
"Harry had only lightly skimmed his schoolbooks (though that skim was quite bizarre enough) in a very quick effort to determine what sort of science books to buy over the next 48 hours." - that is _so not_ in character. I mean, he would have _tried_ to just skim but no way he didn't end up spending hours and hours completely immersed in them. He doesn't have that kind of willpower, or else he wouldn't fail miserably at reading only the titles on the spines of all library books in a later chapter.
"And whatever you do, don't think of an elephant." - pretty much sums up the whole business with the barrier. I enjoyed this bit and it is in character for Frorge to say.
And I can't tell you how happy I am that someone finally put the stupidity of the existence of a Quidditch Seeker as a game decider into proper words. "Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing..." keeps making my day every time I read this chapter.
It is completely in character for HPEV not to get along very well with the (pretty much canon) Ron. I don't mind this one bit. Adding Draco to that conversation made for a lot of fun reading. One thing of note however: Harry is already aware of an "evil" wizard named "Sirius Black" from the previous chapter. While it is plausible that he didn't make that connection when Ron objects to his choice of cover name "Mr Black", I find it improbable that he forgot who betrayed his parents.
The rest of the Harry/Draco interaction is a work of art.
| Stormygio chapter 7 . 5/29/2012
Harry and Draco plotting world domination is a very, very scary thing indeed.
| HerGoldenHair chapter 7 . 5/23/2012
Harry had said to his father that he would pay him back as soon as he figured out how to convert wizarding gold into Muggle money, and his father had told him to go jump in a lake.
"Er," Ron said. He closed his mouth, which had been open.
Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.
About the rest of that chapter, all I can say is...wow. And I'm silently cheering Harry on.
| Bob Chao chapter 7 . 5/9/2012
I have very recently started reading your most wonderful work and am enjoying it immensely. Aside from this enjoyment, I have also learned a great deal (mostly new words, but I anticipate learning some new science at some point). Point being, I tried looking up what a "nundu" and found a creature called a "nunda" (or "mngwa") that would certainly be capable - and likely to - rampage. It is a lion-like creature found in Tanzania. The Wikipedia article is highly lacking, but here it is for your own interest (assuming you didn't already know): wiki/Mngwa . As such, I was wondering if it was possible to know if this is creature that you had intended when mentioning the nundu or am I off completely?
Thanks again for writing such a wonderful piece. I look forward to many hours with it.
| cherapin chapter 7 . 5/4/2012
The horror of the world of children - it's been long since I thought upon it. Casual talk of rape and murder is a cold reality that children must include in sense-making, and it hurts to recall the context around such chatter.
Now, on to the criticism: thank you, author, for taking the time in this long conversation to inject me, your reader, with this barium of cold reality so I may watch the screen as it courses through my circulatory system and highlights the cancerous cells that remain, undiagnosed and untreated, from my mid-childhood. I would curse you for requiring such introspection within mere fan-fic, but that's the nature of cruel writing, isn't it? I wander in seeking entertainment and find a mirror that reveals not only physical maladies but social and psychological issues I have yet to settle with parents, siblings and a 'friend' or two. Again, thanks.
| GSYH chapter 7 . 4/30/2012
There was a lad mag recently who 'joked' that because most rapes aren't reported, it looks like good odds.
What Draco said was upsetting because it's true - but he forgets the extra-legal-options. It's starting to happen in China - when enough people have lost complete faith in their local justice system - they take it into their own hands and start killing the corrupted officials, only happened a handful of times (or what was reported), but it smells like the lead up to the French Revolution.
| Finariona chapter 7 . 4/19/2012
I'm very glad that the slithering trunk has made another cameo appearance in this chapter. For some reason depicting it in my head makes me crack up in peals of laughter upon reading.
Oh, and Harry's sense of humor is even better than his intelligence. The Death Eater Eaters? Seriously good stuff. I hope you keep it up!
| jayley chapter 7 . 4/10/2012
there's so much going on, that i know i'm just failing to actually get everything! the letter at the end from mr. malfoy? for sure i'm missing the lightbulb moment of what that was actually telling draco. bit frustrating, not quite smart enough for this story sometimes:) it's kinda like watching the big bang theory, but with magic. they talk about stuff you sometimes know about, and sometimes don't, but it's always pretty funny. i also just had to comment on the ridiculously crazy amount of reviews, i don't think i've ever seen a story with soo many!
| Pave chapter 7 . 4/9/2012
Wonderful. I love the comed-tea. I can't understand why people miss the point about Draco's attitude toward rape. Non-canonical magical Britain (and to a large degree, canonical magical Britain) has some very ugly and outdated attitudes. Was Rowling being simplistic by portraying blood-purism as the main conscious dispute between the "good guys" and the "bad guys"? Were all those sinister bits of canonical magical Britain that pass unremarked just there for atmosphere, or was the reader supposed to notice them and take pause at some point?
| The Understudy chapter 7 . 4/8/2012
Hm. I like this anomalous friendship Harry and Draco have going on. The two have much more stable personalities than in the books, I think...Harry isn't just the hero and Draco isn't just the callous villain. And yes, now that it's been brought up, Ron is relatively pointless. He was supposed to be the comic relief, I guess...but even that served little purpose...
| Hidden Lines chapter 7 . 4/7/2012
Wow. This chapter was epic. It was long, too, so excuse me for not having any immediate examples to quote from.
This is starting to sound more like one of those epic science fiction stories with power struggles and crazy Batman level plans. In which main characters are manipulative and epic intelligent. But it's even better than that, because in addition to the awesomeness, you have great humor.
| George Heichelheim chapter 7 . 4/4/2012
Scientific Method (Simplified)
Answer the questions
Question the answers
| Anonymous chapter 7 . 4/3/2012
"It was like that in every place and time that didn't descend directly from the Enlightenment. A line of descent, it seemed, which didn't quite include magical Britain, for all that there had been cross-cultural contamination of things like pop-top soda cans."
So institutionalized rape exists in every non-Enlightenment culture, and its existence in a culture strongly implies that that culture is not descended from the Enlightenment?
This belief is ignorant and appalling. Your main character is a bigot.
| IrishKitten chapter 7 . 3/27/2012
So I haven't actually read this chapter, I had been meaning to review since halfway through the first one but couldn't drag myself away from your enticing story. Luckily for both of us I remembered. I loved the refreshing way you bring the character to life and altering the Harry Potter of J.K Rollings Books to your Harry Evens-Verres, with drive and passion in his thoughts. Thank you so much for being creative.
| Mavarax chapter 7 . 3/25/2012
"Then again, it wouldn't take much time to write up the Ninety-Five Theses of the Snitchless Reformation and nail it to a church door -""
I LOVE the Martin Luther reference.
| estrella solitaria chapter 7 . 3/24/2012
I just realized you setup chapter 80 since chapter 7!
I don't think I have a solution (yet) but has anyone considered:
A) Discrediting the Malfoys as a blood traitors
B) Blaming Quirrell.
Now, I don't think this are True Solutions. But they might help someone.
| Kitti chapter 7 . 3/19/2012
I am so incredibly interested in knowing where Draco and Potter's friendship is going to go. Strange how you even change his friendships, but I'm not going to argue. This shit is great! More reading...
| TooLazyToThinkOneUp chapter 7 . 3/18/2012
Because Harry has remarked that the wizardry world is basically in the dark ages
And the age of exploration is a result of the age of enlightenment
does anyone in Wizard!Iberia,France,and Britain know anything about the two continents on the other side of the Atlantic?
| tricorvus chapter 7 . 3/18/2012
I love Science. This is great stuff.
| Beren chapter 7 . 3/16/2012
My twenty year-old son recommended this to me. I was enjoying it hugely, laughing my ass off during Chapter 7, until the part about raping Luna Lovegood, who is surely the Mockingbird of Rowling's story. While there was a point to be made, it was painfully cavalier too long for this reader. I was going to post a link on Facebook and now I will read longer before pledging my support for this story. Rape is far too common among young readers to make light of.
| SqrlLrd chapter 7 . 3/12/2012
I'm finding the interactions of Harry with Draco very interesting, I have to admit having had a very painful experience with being manipulated I have a great dislike for people who use other people (I have a dislike for Draco based on this, but realize that it an almost pathological reaction to having it done to me at one time.) I hope that Harry's morals are a bit more grounded it right than they are in wrong. Not that a dark Harry is necessarily bad but I find a more traditional light or even gray Harry more interesting. It's easy to be bad, it takes character to be good. And it makes for a better story in my opinion.
| whatweareafreaidof chapter 7 . 3/11/2012
so draco is a jerk, and he a jerk in yoru story, so ron has reason to not like the guy, and what reason does harry for not likeing ron, he talk to him for a hour, ron was not stupid, very brave, he could a someone that could help you or hurt a lot, hope harry remembers this, and relize that he made the wrong chooice.
| excelsia chapter 7 . 3/1/2012
this was so utterly fucking awesome ! too bad i have exams going on
| Robbie the Phoenix chapter 7 . 2/18/2012
Potions shop. Snape. Right, yes, I feel like that should have occurred to me right away, but even after reading Lucius's response, it took a minute for that to sink in.
This chapter was fascinating and absolutely mind bending, and perhaps a little bit disturbing in parts, but so are most stories I find fascinating.
For some reason, I've always enjoyed stories where Harry and Draco aren't enemies, but Draco remains fundamentally the same person. It's one thing to change his character to make him Harry's friend, and another entirely to make them friends without changing who he is.
Okay, friends might not be the right word in this case, and Harry is definitely very different, but still, I like where this is going.
| The Blind One chapter 7 . 2/17/2012
Mmm, a thousand pounds' worth of science books. *drools*
I really do wonder how the Muggleborns are supposed to get to the platform their first time. Bloody wizards.
I also wonder what the Incident with the Science Fair Project was. I'm picturing something along the lines of David Hahn. Could we hear about that in a future chapter, please?
The twins are awesome even when they only have two lines.
Haha, luggage that believes in the platform. Harry, if you think that's disturbing, wait'll you see the hat.
Quidditch, the utterly illogical game! I can actually see how that alone would keep this Harry'n'Ron apart, even if subsequent occurrences hadn't helped that.
I didn't notice before that the metals they name are of their future houses, including Harry's bronze. Neat!
Scabbers. Yet further backstory oddity, and we've just barely got started with this tale. *narrow-eyed glare*
I love the Malfoy family dynamic. Two screwed-up Slytherin-to-the-core guys that genuinely love each other. That anecdote Draco shares is both completely in-character (and would be even for their canon counterparts) and adorable. But don't tell either of them I said that...
Comed-Tea! And the Quibbler! And completely left-field Values Dissonance! "I am going to tear apart your pathetic little magical remnant of the Dark Ages into pieces smaller than its constituent atoms." Allow me to cheer you on in that endeavour, Harry.
Yep, humans can go to the moon. And I don't know why that brings a sappy grin to my face, but it does. Humans are awesome.
Huh, Lucius' rejoinder at the very end is odd. Not "further fuel for my paranoia" odd, just odd.
| Cheerfully Cynical chapter 7 . 2/11/2012
I have always seen this fan fiction everywhere in HP communities and for some unknown reason, I have never clicked on it. I have learned that I am an idiot for not doing so.
You story is mind blowing. I, a 14 year old girl who has not really ever interested in science, but still had some kind of passion for it, am now obsessed with just the thought of everything.
The second chapter was what got me hooked. When McGonagall turned into a cat, Harry's reaction was perfect in its own way. Not only did his mind come up for a scientific way of how that is possible, but he wanted to know more about magic. He could have walked away from the magical world and stay with the world he knew (science), but he went anyway, to learn more! He had no reason to, but he did, proving that, sometimes, 'curiosity kills that cat.'- in other words- he would not have learned about what really happened to his parents. Now, is this a sign of fate, or was this some type of science?
If I am over doing this, sorry. But I think you have an AMAZING understanding of how the world works.
Anyway, in chapter 3-6 (I think,) You talk about how Harry is never really understood by anyone, how he is isolated and adults think that they should be Superior. I agree wholeheartedly with Harry's point. If you are smarter and better then this does not apply. I love how you're adding real life advice in you story.
Another example of what I really love is how Harry thinks about the future. Is it actually good to be that prepared? I often think about this when going to bed. Say one day a man comes into my house and tries to kill my parents. Should I have been thanking god that I bought a first aid kit a month ago, or was it just a coincidence that I had it. Maybe it was just a mathematical luck that I bought it? Who knows. So, should I always expect the worse or should I just let fate, god whatever do its thing?
Another thing I like was when Harry started talking about muggles going to the moon, (chapter 7) It is another example of how people really are- single minded. There could be a whole different universe thinking a different way then you right now and we would have no idea.
In other words, your story is FREAKIN' AMAZING! Everything you said is what I lay in bed a thinking about every night. Thank you for making such and incredible story! Well done!
| Hedgehog chapter 7 . 2/5/2012
Once again you leave me breathless. Breathless with suspense and laughter (how can a story be so serious, yet so funny at the same time?) and utter admiration.
I've got nothing to add except that I love the interactions between your Harry and the other characters. Even with topics that are completely ... missing a word here ... out there... somehow, the conversations flow naturally. Well done, indeed.
| TheFlynnEffect chapter 7 . 1/29/2012
I made it as far as the end of this chapter when I decided I'd stick around, leading me to leave this review. I've never actually looked into the website you based your name from, or really any other collaborations of works centered on rationality, but I've always identified with something similar. Never formally identified, but I've always strived to think about how I think. This being said, I also enjoyed Harry Potter, to an extent. I never could compare it to my preferred classics or science fiction. At least, I enjoyed it enough to be poking around in FanFiction when I was introduced to it. And now, after so luckily (although it really isn't luck-just a certain outlook and perspective) stumbling upon your piece, I must say I really am enjoying this. Your characters, while bearing a certain resemblance to Rowling's, are much more preferable. Harry is so logical, so frank, that the other characters seem to be at a loss, which really says something about what is considered to be normal. Your exploration of the magical world mirrors my questioning of it. I never could understand the variation of the value of money in the wizarding world. The acceptance of magic while blatantly disregarding all of science-that is to say, all of our observations of the behavior of the world-greatly frustrated me in Rowling's work. I'm looking forward to reading on to see Harry's discoveries, and where his union of magic and science will take him. And, hoping that reviews do help you as an author, I'll leave some more as I progress.
| Awkward Little Boxes chapter 7 . 1/28/2012
You write with such enviable clarity!
Reading Harry's thoughts and words about and to Draco was actually kind of inspiring (whether that's indicative of me reading too many simple, gratuitous adventures or of me degrading mentally...I'm not going to analyze), and that you managed to convey these ideas without being verbose or convoluted is quite awesome.
Thanks again for taking the time to write,
| eastern rosebud chapter 7 . 1/22/2012
Apparently, Quidditch and fantastic racism stand no chance against Science. I'd say this, not the 5th, is the chapter where the story gets in full swing: not only we get another lession on rational thinking and well-crafted characters, but also the hero begins his quest for World Optimalization.
| Beyond Ordinary chapter 7 . 1/6/2012
"As soon as I'm old enough I'm going to rape her."
This new Draco I'm seeing is even scarier than the last...
| J chapter 7 . 12/27/2011
Why are two eleven year olds joking about raping a ten year old to prove scientific inaccuracies in a work of fiction?
| SuddenMaelstrom chapter 7 . 12/17/2011
Every time I read this story, it's an emotional response.
| EpitomyofShyness chapter 7 . 11/9/2011
HARRY IS LIKE SNAPE? Oh my god brilliant!
| Guest chapter 7 . 11/5/2011
Originally I hadn't thought it odd. It was just a game in the Harry Potter Universe. Then you mentioned it's absurdity and the basic highlighting of a single character became obvious. Months later I thought perhaps it isn't the game itself which has anything wrong with it, but the way people play it.
That it isn't basketball with hide and seek, but hide and seek with basketball. (Two thirds for the first and One third of the other.)
For example, if you realize the true focus of the game is the snitch, why don't you attack the Seeker to remove them from the game and prevent the other team from winning? (Brutal Version.)
If not allowed to do that, why not have most of the team searching for the snitch? Because if everyone on one team was looking for it while ignoring their own goalposts, the other team would probably be able to go far over 150 points in...30 seconds.
No, seriously. Five points a goal, two people tossing the quaffle back and forth between them at a rate of one goal a second means 50 points in 10 seconds and 150 in 30.
This means having to put most of your focus on finding the snitch, but still defending your goal enough to prevent losing that way.
Add to that constantly harassing the Seeker who should not be left alone.
How would you play a game with two objectives?
In the end, even if the Seeker is the only one who is allowed by the rules to touch the snitch, instead of someone like the Chasers being able to grab it and take it to them... You know, if it wasn't for the heavy amounts of luck involved I might say get rid of the Seeker position. It's really just a glorified Chaser.
Recon/Convoy defense/Base defense.
No, never mind. The real answer is that the way to keep the game as close as possible to it's original design is to not have the snitch end the game. Buy a clock and make grabbing the thing much harder.
Heh. If the original version was the brutal one, perhaps Quidditch used to be a punishment. The Seeker was the one being punished and everyone would beat the snot out of them until the snitch was found.
| ShadowDragon010 chapter 7 . 11/4/2011
WOW Harry is very rational and quite devious. His interaction with Draco is the most surprising. I cant wait to see his impact on the wizarding community.
| catinthebath chapter 7 . 11/1/2011
The conversation about Luna disturbed me more than I care to admit. But that was very effective! This is a brilliant story.
| Mother of Kins chapter 7 . 10/30/2011
By far, this chapter has been the most piercingly interesting so far. So brilliant to offer Draco the tantalizing view of Earth from the Moon and thus introduce him to the cult, the game-changing, brain expanding reality that is science. And, the concept of mastering both worlds. This is delicious.
| Asparagus chapter 7 . 10/14/2011
This is amazing.
I cannot believe you have made me write three reviews for one story, because half the time I don't review and if I do it's always at the last completed chapter, so I hope this flatters you somewhat.
But holy crap, this is awesome. When authors give more depth to side characters we don't really learn about much cannonically, it usually ends badly because the author will make them out of character. But what you've written is astounding because you have captured exactly who Draco Malfoy is - Not leather pantsy, but a bit more than just your average school bully.
Good show, sir. Good show.
| Jonakhensu chapter 7 . 10/12/2011
"Our powers have been growing weaker, generation by generation, as the mudblood taint grows."
No... I'm pretty sure that's the inbreeding.
| Guest chapter 7 . 10/7/2011
In "Chapter 7, Reciprocation," you showed something which could be useful. And if it is useful, I'm betting Mad Eye Moody is using something similar.
I missed it the first two times around, but Comed-Tea might be useful as an early warning system. If you're moving through dangerous territory (Mad Eye Moody: His living room counts as one, but then most places do.) and you suddenly feel thirsty...
Especially if they can be fine tuned for different situations.
It isn't perfect. Having your head a'sploded because of a sniper probably isn't very surprising. I mean, how would you notice it afterwards?
But if it's allowed by our DM I'm going to make something similar.
| Toratchi888 chapter 7 . 10/6/2011
Hmm... Deep philosophical discussion between brilliant peers, mixed with the absurdity of a secret society of scarf-wearers and the over-the-top absurdity of reality-warping lime soda? YES MORE PLEASE!
| Tocka e chapter 7 . 10/5/2011
I don't normally (meaning don't at all) read fanfictions for Harry Potter but when I accidentally stumbled upon the summary for your story I couldn't help but find myself intrigued. And I have to say that I'm real glad that I decided to at least try it, because this, my dear friend, is plain brilliant.
It's funny, it's smart and really catching. And the geek in me absolutely adore that you write the way you do and have made science an irreplaceable part of this story!
Highest score possibly for you and this fic~!
| LoliBat chapter 7 . 10/3/2011
-bursts out laughing- This fic is so much better than my Psych textbook! I should print it out and stick it in the textbook for the next person who gets it...
| skywiseskychan chapter 7 . 10/2/2011
The Tom Leher song quote is just hilarious, and of course makes me wonder just how prepared for such a contingency this Harry is even if that’s all of the snippet he knows. Maybe his father will play him the whole thing in third year or so instead of having the talk along with handing him a biology text.
| hikarinayoshi chapter 7 . 10/2/2011
the sweatband thing just makes me flashback to A very potter Sequel
| skyfiresarah chapter 7 . 9/30/2011
This is not a review of this particular chapter, but of the whole story so far. I just wanted to say that this is the best fan fiction I have ever read. Absolute genius: incredibly intellectual, but hysterically funny at the same time. It's hard to find stories as witty as this.
Thanks for writing it!
| seirios aster chapter 7 . 9/9/2011
To preface: I know I'm not the best writer, and I know I'm not the most rational scientist in the world. I wanted to get that out of the way because of what I am about to say.
The way Harry is portrayed in this story is really upsetting. I use that word because I don't quite know how to verbalize my feelings on the matter without sounding completely uncivilized. I must admit that I thought "Ender's Game" was a mediocre book at best for the same reasons. Yes, there are likely incredibly smart children like this out there, but I cannot believe an eleven-year-old would be this rational OR that an university professor at Oxford would home school their child to the detriment to said child's social skills and quality of life.
I'll admit I'm not that intelligent, but I only started reading science for fun when I was in late middle school. You have Harry coming off as the holder of a physics or philosophy BA at the very least. Rationality and belief in the scientific method is one thing, but having an eleven-year-old (whose parents should clearly know better than to raise their child as they have) act and speak like those two things are the end-all, be-all to existence pains me.
You're clearly a good writer, and you've a large fanbase, but I question the plausibility of your premise on account of the premise itself. A rational, intelligent adult of means with a gifted child would do their best to make sure said child got the best education and the best quality of life. Petunia and her husband as you present them clearly fall into that category of adult. A professor would know that home-schooling this child would not be the best way to let the child grow. Letting the child have a *childhood* as well as a good education would.
In any case, I question the rationality of skewing Harry's personality as you have. Had you made him simply rational instead of a semi-functioning savant, then I would not have had these objections. However, you took a good concept and pushed it too far. I feel no emotions when I read your story, and the best writing in the world wouldn't convince me to continue reading something so barren. If I wanted to read a love letter to science, I go upstairs right now and read Nature. I'd read about how people actually make the world better instead of a dry corruption of the fantastic.
I love science, science fiction, and fantasy as much as the next person, and mixing them together in writing for work or play is one of the greatest pleasures in this world. That said, when you go too far, you go too far. I unfortunately think you have indeed gone too far and mixed too much rationality into what should be a work of escapism. Dramatic irony and humor are some of the greatest weapons in a writer's arsenal, but this story has used them for ill and not good. In sum, I can only say that I think you have taken a good premise and a good strategy for its execution and perverted the good by pushing those conceits too far.
I am aware my review is somewhat scathing, and receiving negative feedback always hurts, but take solace in the fact that 15,000 reviews to the contrary implies I'm likely wrong. That, or your story simply pushes the buttons that cause me personally to feel depressed without the catharsis characteristic of depressing literature.
Regardless, I wish you all the best and hope you continue to enjoy writing this magnum opus.
| Overlooked Supporting Cast chapter 7 . 9/4/2011
This chapter is incredibly important in laying the foundation of the setting and the characters of Harry and Draco, establishing just how twisted and antiquated the magical world is, and Harry's own conviction to change it. It uses shocking concepts and shocking language, and quite brilliantly sublimates a lot of the emotional impact through invoking the comic image of the spit take by way of Comed-Tea. But this isn't what I think when I actually sit down and read it.
Every time I try to do /that/, I inevitably end up at the line:
Moving? Oh. "Muggles can do moving pictures but they need a bigger box to show it, they can't fit them onto single book pages yet."
Then I spend the next five minutes imagining MoR's Draco Malfoy watching early nineties television. World news? No. Shuttle launches? Nuh-uh. Carl Sagan? Hah, he should be so lucky.
Maybe it's just the fever talking, but I picture him watching Pee-Wee's Playhouse, Quantum Leap, Michael Jackson's Smooth Criminal music video, or something similarly surreal, and try to imagine his response. My mind spins and spins and comes up with nothing but frenzied giggles. "Pansy, are you okay? Pansy, are you okay? Are you okay, Pansy? You've been kissed by, you've been kissed by, a smooth thaumaturge... "
| MegaF0nz chapter 7 . 8/29/2011
Brilliant story. I cant stop reading. Looking forward to catching up and seeing where this story leads!
| Reader123456789 chapter 7 . 8/28/2011
Wow. Ummmm... I... Well this isn't important to the story, but does Ron become the new nemisis. Like it says on your profiel, "The hero can not become more powerful then his nemesis," which would be completely true if he HAD no nemesis... other then voldemort
| Fenrir666 chapter 7 . 8/24/2011
Okay, that was just awesome.
| TwentyTawnyTigers chapter 7 . 8/14/2011
Wow, I don't even have words for what I have just read. You have somehow put into print everything that has ever danced across the edge of my mind, but has been too...complex or better yet abstract and undefinable to string into coherant thought. All I can say is thank you.
| Killingmemory chapter 7 . 8/2/2011
This is as far as I've read into this story. I usually wait until finishing the entire completed portion of a posted fic before leaving a review, much less favoriting said story, but I had to stop right here and say that this is a wonderful, smart, magnificently written piece of work, and I absolutely adore it. I can't wait to continue to see where you'll take it, and I hope you keep updating regularly. In the meanwhile I'm going to try to read as slowly as possible, to keep from running out of chapters any time in the near future. Thank you for writing this! Favorited.
| dp chapter 7 . 7/31/2011
Just read my comment and noted that the first paragraph sounded wrong. I do not think this fiction has too long descriptions, I just meant that I dislike them in general. Yours, obviously has none.
Sorry for the errors, actually I know how to spell but I am to clumsy to type (and too lazy to check).
| The Morrigan 92 chapter 7 . 7/29/2011
Hey! I just came across your story and it's really good! I like the points you made about Quidditch - I never thought about it that way before, but it definitely makes sense.
| N chapter 7 . 7/20/2011
Why does every year at Hogwarts begin on Sept. 1?
| Incog chapter 7 . 7/17/2011
(wow, it's nice seeing how many reviews get added in the space of a couple of hours. I wonder what it would take to make this truly go viral, though?)
"Apparently, for magical purposes, his luggage had also managed to believe with sufficient strength to pass through the barrier. "
""Er, what, mate?"
Not headed for Ravenclaw, I take it. "Yes, I'm Harry Potter.""
...yeah, that exchange was a bit mean to Ron.
""So let me get this straight," Harry said as it seemed that Ron's explanation (with associated hand gestures) was winding down. "Catching the Snitch is worth one hundred and fifty points?"""
You do not understand how much I love you for addressing one of my biggest pet peeves. The absolute absurdity of Quidditch is something that has always driven me bonkers.
(Although, while Harry's idea is to get rid of the snitch, I wonder if it might not be interesting to keep the snitch as a game-ender, just without any point value. That automatically makes strategy a bit complicated, since you now want to catch the snitch at the exact right moment while preventing the other team from catching it at any of the wrong ones... I mean, you might have to redesign the snitch to be something other than a tiny fast gold ball, but still...
and without the weirdness of the snitch Quidditch /does/ end up being basketball on broomsticks.)
The facedown between Ron and Draco ends radically differently from the books (duh). I personally am completely willing to buy this. In the book, Draco is the one who says he won't hang out with people who talk to Weasleys. In the fic, Ron says he won't hang out with people who talk to Malfoys. I see both as perfectly reasonable, coming from the characters, and it just so happened that in your fic Ron got the chance to put his foot in his mouth first.
I do wish you'd been a bit kinder to him, though. I didn't really like Ron that much in the books but you could have painted a slightly more nuanced picture of him than "utter idiot".
""I just, just..." Harry searched for words.
"Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco."
...of course this presumably is your exact line of thought while removing him from the story.
(The truth of the matter is, in a sense I'm inclined to agree. Draco serves a function as a foil, and a challenge, yadda yadda. In addition to being a friend. Ron, in the books, was just there to be a friend and occasionally to angst about not being special. Still, sometimes a friend is just a friend...))
"People will judge you by who they see you with, and you don't want to be seen with the likes of Ron Weasley."
Harry nodded again. "
See, again, a bit harsh on the Ron here. There's no reason for Harry to nod instead of thinking "woah, woah".
"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."
whee, another one of the lines from this fic that I quote like crazy.
the dialogue between Harry and Draco about fathers and manipulation and such is lovely (and, well, the sort of conversation Ron and Harry would never have... I had a whole rant analyzing why your Draco-Harry arrangement allows for more complex contrasting, but whatever)
Comed Tea is hilarious. HILARIOUS. Some of the times, the reader is less shocked than Harry is (like when Dumbledore says the magic words of power, since we know Dumbledore already, whereas Harry doesn't), but I can promise you, had I been drinking soda, I, too, would have sprayed it all over my keyboard at the Quibbler headline.
DRACO MALFOY PREGNANT
Harry's lips opened and said, "buh-bluh-buh-buh..."
Too many competing objections, that was the problem. Every time Harry tried to say "But we're only eleven!" the objection "But men can't get pregnant!" demanded first priority and was then run over by "But there's nothing between us, really!"""
You know this is even funnier when I remember the omake D
alright, now here we get to the sensitive part.
I know you already heard a lot about this section.
I definitely appreciate what you did hear in terms of how very many fics about Malfoy end up being him being snarky and snobby and cool and not really evil at all. Which is a total cop-out.
It is true that there is something positively bizarre about this conversation coming from the mouths of /eleven-year-old boys/, though.
Mostly, I'm able to accept this conversation because I'm under the impression that Draco hasn't the slightest clue what rape actually means, just that it's something he's heard other people say they're going to do.
It is also a bit weird that Harry continues calmly talking after being this horrified.
| David DeLaney chapter 7 . 7/10/2011
You have to love how the branchpoints keep splitting - McGonagall comes to get Harry instead of Hagrid doing it, so Hagrid recedes into the background for the whole year so far ... and that causes Harry to meet Hermione on the train instead of later, and is partly responsible for him having an ENTIRELY different interaction with Draco in Madame Malkin's store, leading to this chapter, and the start of the B.C. (and the start of Neville's extremely odd awesomeness, still unfolding).
Isa - "if they were still in the train station during the afternoon, how did Harry point to the moon?" ...I'm not sure what you're getting at here. The moon is visible during parts of the daytime for nearly all of each month; the only time it's NOT is right at full moon, when it's furthest away from the Sun in the sky.
Right now (July 11th) it's ... quick google ... close to full, about 3 days away from it, so it's rising a couple hours before sunset and setting a couple hours before sunrise. It would be fairly easy to see the moon in the afternoon sky around waxing half-moon, when it's halfway across the upper sky from the sun.
| Megan McAlistair chapter 7 . 7/10/2011
you use so many big words and I have to look them all up because I'm German!
I know them in German but not in English...
I won't bother looking for a translated version though, I want the raw original
the story's still a lot of fun though
| Isa Knightwalker chapter 7 . 7/10/2011
The moment with Petunia (that he'd use magic for her or not use it at all) was really sweet. I am sad that he didn't get Hedwig though :( omg Harry's interpretation of Quidditch was HILARIOUS. I also loved the line about Lucius having a photo of Fudge haha.
I think that you characterized Draco very well in that he still seems to have that kind of dark side to him. I also enjoyed the science! Since it does seem like the Magical World kind of ignores all of the amazing things that Muggles can do. Although I don't get how Harry knew what the Imperius curse was already, did he just really study in the two days after getting his school supplies? I also think social science (which Harry doesn't seem as familiar with) like psychology or sociology involves knowing someone well enough to make them think it was their idea all along, etc. Not sure if you were thinking of that, since Harry is portrayed (from my pov) as more hard science-oriented and in my experience, most hard scientists often do not give much credit to social sciences.
Also one thing that seemed weird- if they were still in the train station during the afternoon, how did Harry point to the moon?
Awesome chapter overall though! :3
| Katy Williams chapter 7 . 7/8/2011
(I thought there was an error at one point - 'Has Harry actually heard of/does he know what the Imperius curse is, before he uses it in his example to illustrate to Draco what science is/does? But, then, I do believe he's heard of it; it was mentioned in reference to Lucius, saying his allegiance to Voldemort was due to having been cursed. Carry on, and jolly well done!
Oh, and you needn't marry me - I'm not in immanent peril of being raped by a Malfoy, to the best of my knowledge - but that *would* help explain to everyone around me while I was reading the first several chapters just why I was laughing out loud with such irregularity. And squirming, too, actually.)
Thanks much for this wonderful story - and the LessWrong site, too, if you're more than passingly affiliated with it,
| Guest chapter 7 . 7/5/2011
The rapey bit was unsettling, but otherwise a very interesting chapter.
| mizu chapter 7 . 7/5/2011
When I grow up, I'm going to be a SCIENTIST! yaaah!
...scratch that, I'll become a scientist right now! YAAAAAAAAAH! I didn't know they rocked just so much!
| Diz chapter 7 . 6/26/2011
First, I liked the reference to Atlantis. Props. Also I liked that Harry showed Draco Muggle's potential to achieve with the rocket.
You made Draco into a real piece of snot. I mean he's eleven! I feel like 11-year-olds don't sit around fantasizing about the nut jobs they're going to rape. That's so sick.
Third, I am excited for Harry to meet Hermione because of their affinity for books. Perhaps they will become more than friends?
| Tovath chapter 7 . 6/25/2011
You did a good job with this chapter. I like how you are handling Draco's characterization.
| zork chapter 7 . 6/25/2011
"Me", one possible reason - I don't know whether it's the one Eliezer had in mind, nor whether he had any in mind - is that Harry is living in the UK, where traditionally "billion" has meant "million million" but (at the time of the story) the meaning "thousand million" is beginning to take over (being the dominant meaning just about everywhere else), and he prefers not to risk being misunderstood. For what it's worth, I live in the UK and generally avoided the word "billion" around the time when the story was set. (Nowadays the "million million" meaning is almost completely dead, and I use "billion" again.)
| Me chapter 7 . 6/24/2011
I was just wondering... If Harry is as awesome and science-y person as he appears, why does he use phrases like "thousand million"?
Billion is so much more precise. It always bugs me when people extend such clunkiness to things like sextillion, saying "million million million", and I'm afraid Harry will descend into such madness. There are numbers bigger than one million.
| ABCDEFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWQYZ1234 chapter 7 . 6/15/2011
The section with the drink (forgot the name) was really amusing and I liked how you changed the topic into the bid discussion about muggle and magic between Harry and Draco. Draco's obliviousness to the achievements of muggle's was quite amusing. I like the fact you made Harry's Manipulative side shine through and it was very clever of you to skip the sorting and talk in Draco's POV!
I have to read the next chapter to find out what house harry was put in!
As always fantastic work!
P.S I also liked your description of muggle science and how it can be used to save wizards and even if magic did die out it wouldn't be the end of humanity like the wizarding world seems to think. Its is probably one of the best descriptions I have found that describe this because is shows the strengths of both the muggle and wizarding world, most fan fictions I read with this sort of genre (excluding the super smart Harry twist) are biased to one side of the world, they are either completely against the wizarding world or the muggle one.
Kudos to you! (I have always wanted to say that and its probably not even in the right context :L)
| Guest chapter 7 . 6/12/2011
I dont think lucius woud have missed the word "student" thus his response doesnt make sense
| Slayer End chapter 7 . 6/5/2011
SNAPE! Excellent! I just had to look at the beginning of this again... and I am STILL stunned!
Forever Signed in Blood,
| Death by manga chapter 7 . 6/5/2011
OK First, Have you ever Read the Manga LostBrain? I have a sure, 99.999% chance that you would fall in love with it after the first chapter. Unless... Have you already read it?
Second. I seriously hope you are a woman, because I have fallen in love with you're work.
Everything you've stated is practically the exact same things that have come to my head when I think of Harry Potter.
| Nomsterli chapter 7 . 6/5/2011
I love this story so much I cannot put it in words.
| Clownwithachainsaw chapter 7 . 6/4/2011
This is brilliant.
This is just brilliant.
I love how Harry and Minerva interact with each other. I also love how Harry's parents react to how he distracted her.
Harry's shaky alliance with Draco proves interesting. The way Draco wants Harry for power, but Harry wants Draco to be a good person and is using power as a motivator... Harry's right, this game is huge and this is only one square.
I hesitate to think how Ron will turn out without Harry. Ron is really quite smart, and he's brave too. If Harry tries to take over the world with Draco at his side, I can imagine Ron becoming a formidable opponent.
This story has me at the edge of my seat.
| Kimi chapter 7 . 6/2/2011
Mr. Spoo! Mr. Spoo! Mr. Spoooooooo! lmaosmmsfoaidmt! (Laughing My Arse Off So Hard My Sumbraro Fell Off And I Dropped My Taco) MR. SPOOOOO! Enough said.
| chaSing b0b chapter 7 . 6/1/2011
Hey :) I have to words to describe this. Maybe after I have read a bit more :P:P
| FmaFan10 chapter 7 . 5/23/2011
wow draco really had reality thrown at him to a certain extent, now the real question is whether he will go along with harry or not? i think yes, yes he will
| simaetha chapter 7 . 5/22/2011
You know, looking back at this chapter in the context of the much later SPHEW arc... surely, if British magical society is as relatively gender-equal as that arc suggests, Draco wouldn't be making such a casual remark about rape? Because if heroing really is about the only area where witches suffer any prejudice, I just can't reconcile that with the sort of pervasive misogyny it would take to think of rape as such a horribly normal thing to do to a girl who annoyed you. It doesn't even seem to enter Draco's head that Harry might not agree :(
| Maskless Masquerade chapter 7 . 5/18/2011
This is just the right sort of mad brilliance and personality to endear me to this story greatly...and its only chapter 7...of 71! You actually had me completely by chapter 4 but I didn't want to stop reading quite yet to review. The amazing detail into Harry's thought process makes it interesting and his personality is scarily similar to my own at his age-without the prodigy level repository of information and mental speed of course. I just have been talking about "I could do that better/ there is a simple solution for all their problems but only I can see it apparently/ I should be the dictator of the world, is be good at it and I could give my Mom Australia." Type of stuff since before I could remember (my Mom has the stories to prove it) and if that weren't enough to make this story amusing, what I call "positive pessimism" which is always expecting the worst outcomes in any situation and always end up being pleasantly surprised, is my motto. It again, sounds a lot like your version of Harry Potter. In short: I absolutely love this story and I'm going to go back to reading it now...and he hasn't even gotten to hogwarts yet!
| sarj2490 chapter 7 . 5/14/2011
And we're back to brilliance. I have many favorite lines and sections from this chapter, but to be concise, I shall just pick the first one I liked.
"Okay, so either (a) I just teleported somewhere else entirely (b) they can fold space like no one's business or (c) they are simply ignoring the rules."
Thank you again. I continuously find myself smiling while reading this story. :)
| Morwen Tindomerel chapter 7 . 5/10/2011
Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.
Haven't we all felt like this? No question but the MofM needs some SERIOUS reforming!
| Rognik chapter 7 . 5/10/2011
Enjoying the story so far. I an especially enjoying the reversal of Harry's personality (in the books, he's kind of the dumb jock instead of this brilliant borderline-psychopath). However, I do have to object to one of Harry's comment about science. Lots of Roman-age technology is either lost, or merely not replicated. The massive acqueducts stretching hundred of miles that still work? The pyramids? And I believe we've lost the recipe to Greek Fire at some point. True, the post-Enlightenment science is merely on the shoulder of giants, but tech has been lost to the ages and we either haven't been able to recreate it, or (in the case of Greek Fire) surpassed it so far it's not worth going back.
| iphis17 chapter 7 . 5/1/2011
I think that there is something severely wrong with me. This hypothesis is based on the fact that I found a conversation about rape versus murder amusing. In the extreme.
If this is not my fault, then I blame Society.
| poplarleaves chapter 7 . 4/26/2011
I love how the luggage resembles the Luggage from Terry Pratchett's Discworld series. Aww!
| anonymous chapter 7 . 4/13/2011
"...there's lots of rumors..." should be "there're lots of rumors" ("there is" for singular, "there are" for plural).
| MouetteHeartsErik chapter 7 . 4/12/2011
*giggles* Draco and Harry. Not in any, ahh, slashy way, but quickly becoming one of my favorite parts of a great read. I love their exchanges, absolutely love them. Poor Ron... ahh well.
And the Order of the Chaos. Oh heavens :D
| Kitty O chapter 7 . 4/7/2011
Yea, when he quite calmly seriously stated that he was going to rape her, that's when my eyebrows climbed up my forehead. At least Harry was suitably horrified. And he used smartness to combat it; I was getting out my theology notes and channeling my priest. But it probably wouldn't have been effective.
| MinhaPessoa chapter 7 . 4/7/2011
Olá novamente, Primeiramente devo dizer que apesar de ter lido os outros capítulos, eu decidi que não vou comentar todos eles, porque eu demoro tempo demais para escrever tudo o que eu quero...
Primeiramente, devo dizer que fico feliz por você ter seguido a minha sugestão e colocado Pai e Mãe no lugar de papai e mamãe. Novamente elogio a inciativa. Eu sinto muito que os meus comentários se resumam a apontar erros de tradução e passagens que não estão realmente erradas, mas poderiam ser melhoradas. Observe que com o passar do tempo os comentários ficaram mais curtos, isso porque já é tarde, tenho prova amanhã e eu ainda tenho que estudar algumas coisas...mas vamos aos comentários de tradução.
"Harry figurou que seu pai deve ter gasto..." esse figurou ficou muito estranho, a tradução literal não preserva o sentido, algo do tipo "Harry tinha quase certeza que ..." ou "Harry tinha plena convicção de que seu pai havia gastado "
"Foi uma muito, muito, muito boa tentativa." O sentido ficou o mesmo, mas a ordem ficou estranha... melhor colocar "Foi uma tentativa muito, muito, muito boa".
"metade tão ruim" também é uma expressão estranha, mas eu não sei como traduzir melhor isso...
"(b) eles podem manipular espaço como nenhuma outra coisa" também me soa estranho, talvez colocar uma analogia fique melhor, sai um pouco do original, uma espécie de licença de tradutor "eles podem dobrar o espaço como se fosse papel de origami"
"Não encabeçado para Corvinal, eu vejo" essa frase ficou esquisitíssima, "headed" se traduz melhor como "em direção a" e o "eu vejo" no final ficou parecendo Yoda falando... melhor seria algo como: "Vejo que esse aí não vai para Ravenclaw"
"A coruja deu a Harry uma esquisita mesura e um cortês piado" a tradução aqui está de fato errada, o "oddly measured" é adjetivo do "hoot", então o correto seria algo do tipo: "A coruja deu a Harry um piado estranhamente calculado e cortês"
Aqui uma pequena dúvida... Eu não sei se na versão em português o nome do time de Ron muda a forma de se escrever, de Chudley Cannons para Cudley Canons.
Outra dúvida de tradução oficial é a coisa da família Black, eu não me lembro muito bem, mas eu acho que o correto era "A Mui Antiga e Nobre Casa dos Black".
"Isso basta" também ficou estranho, acho que ficaria melhor com "já chega"
"esse é o certo" é outra parte que ficou estranha "É isso mesmo" mantém o sentido sem ficar muito esquisito...
" um velho hábito deixado pela idade de cinco quando sua mãe tinha primeiro introduzido-o a ele" outro lugar em que a tradução ficou errada, o hábito foi adquirido quando ele tinha 5 anos, sem contar que a forma com que você escreveu ficou estranha... então acho que seria mais correto algo como: "Um velho hábito, que lhe fora ensinado por sua mãe quando tinha cinco anos"
"A face de Ron ficou branca com surpresa" esta parecendo que Ron ficou muito pálido, e eu só consegui enxergar o outro sentido da frase (o sentido original) porque eu li a frase em inglês. Não consigo pensar em uma boa tradução, talvez porque eu ache difícil de imaginar a cena. Para mim, a expressão facial no rosto de Ron seria uma de choque.
"Pai me comprou tutores" essa é outra frase estranha... parte do motivo é a falta do pronome, e a outra parte... é melhor substituir comprou por trouxe, ou então escrever: Meu pai providenciou tutores
"Não, ela não diria nada para mim sobre" a conjugação aqui ficou estranha... acho que você não traduziu certo. Talvez ficasse melhor "Não", ela não quis me dizer nada sobre..."
"Você está indo totalmente para Sonserina." ficou estranho, é melhor trocar o totalmente e indo de lugar: "Vocês está totalmente indo para Slytherin"
"em retorno... e a coisa era, Harry se sentiu pressionado" coloca no lugar de "coisa" a palavra questão... fica menos esquisito
"fosse um instrumento infalível da morte" novamente, um caso de tradução literal..."fosse uma infalível instrumento de morte". Note que tirei o artigo "a" em "da".
"em uma voz neutra" tira o "uma"... fica mais conciso: "disse em voz neutra"
" pedaços menores que eles constituem átomos" "pedaços menores que os átomos que o constituem"
"dez mil sociedades"eu sei que essa é a tradução correta, mas não se fala isso em português. Seria melhor colocar "milhares de sociedades"
"países onde aquela sorte de nobreza " sorte ficou estranho... melhor colocar "aquele tipo de nobreza"
"Aquele aparentava ser o argumento inteiro tão longe quanto Draco era concernido." tradução literal, em português não se escreve assim...seria melhor algo como: "Aparentemente, do ponto de vista de Draco, todo o argumento se resumia a isso".
"Burundi. "Tudo certo. Checagem rápida..." substitui o tudo certo por "pois bem" ou Ok ou "muito bem" ou no mínimo tira o "tudo" da frente.
"herdado a mágica-noturna habilidade" WTF? parece que você não leu o que você copiou do google... isso não faz sentido... "herdou a habilidade praticamente supernatural dos Verres"
"Nós seremos hábeis a olhar" "Nós seremos capases" ou "Nós conseguiremos"
"Em alguma extensão," "Em parte" ou "Uma parte"
"Mas não faça engano" "Mas não se iluda"
"Ao tentar figurar como" "Ao tentar compreender como"
"jogo que Potter mesmo em sua totalidade não entendia" "jogo que mesmo Potter não o entendia em sua totalidade"
"Draco não podia se afasta" "Draco não podia recusar"
"Potter, em sua correria louca, tinha confiado uma chave para a alma de Draco" "tinha adivinhado a chave"
"realmente o tinha roído no caso todo" "realmente o remoeu durante todo o caso"
"tinha sido tão afortunado a conhecer" "você foi afortunado em conhecer"
| Dalxein chapter 7 . 4/1/2011
Oh god. By the time I read that "Can we interest you in joining the Order of Chaos?" line, my throat was so hoarse from the previous bouts of humor that it actually hurt to laugh.
I worry you may have written this too well.
| Mitchell.S chapter 7 . 3/31/2011
I'm absolutely loving this so far, about to check out your blog now and then spread the word about this. In a lot of ways your Harry thinks how I aspire to! Anyway, great work and I hope you continue to write, whether in this form or any other.
| Elibeth-hobbit chapter 7 . 3/29/2011
These children terrify me. Best fanfic ever!
| Smooth Trooper chapter 7 . 3/3/2011
Pretty interest stuff, canit wait to see what happens.
| Goldrune09 chapter 7 . 2/27/2011
The order of chaos...REALLY? lmao
| Kerr Avonsen chapter 7 . 2/27/2011
Whoa! Holy unexpected deepness, Batman!
*Right. Because he seemed like such a normal kid. And he is a normal kid, he is just what you'd expect a baseline male child to be like if he were raised by the Dark Lord's most fearsome servant and/or doting father.*
I admire your characterisation of Draco; not a psychopath, but not "good" either. And the way that both he and Harry dance around each other, knowing that they are dancing around each other. And the way that Harry feels compassion towards Draco, and wants to give him a paradigm shift rather than scorn.
| atma chapter 7 . 2/26/2011
Hi, I don't normally review stories that I read, but this is simply one of the best stories I've ever encountered, not to mention very amusing. I was hooked after the first two chapters, and I really can't wait to see where the story leads!
Thank you for doing such a wonderful job on this story, and I love the humor that Harry displays. Unfortunately, that wise suggestion another reader made about tea and lungs not playing well together was just too little, too late for me and my poor lungs. I hope you keep up the hilarity!
| braindoll chapter 7 . 2/26/2011
J.K. Rowling and her magic boy
would be good if they weren't so coy.
Since just "snogging" is measly,
it's less wrong without Weasley.
Harry Potter slash Draco Malfoy!
| jessj chapter 7 . 2/23/2011
comed-tea is a little weird. I like the rest though.
| AnFan-n-More chapter 7 . 2/22/2011
I absolutely love the phrase: "Harry opened his eyes and stumbled to a halt, feeling vaguely dirtied by having made a deliberate effort to believe something."
Also, the phrase: "No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said." makes a nice statement. Er, well, maybe not nice. Maybe profound? It definitely makes a statement.
| ARMH chapter 7 . 2/20/2011
Woah, Harry's speech about science was actually really inspiring.
| Tashie chapter 7 . 2/20/2011
Hey, Draco, you know what I bet is even better for becoming friends than exchanging secrets? Committing murder."
"I have a tutor who says that
What tutor? And can I hire them?
| Stume chapter 7 . 2/17/2011
I've read to about chapter 20 and decided to read it all again as i logged on and there were over 60 chapters, i am loving seeing all the humour again, especially the robe shop, but i only just noticed that last time i missed that when you talk about the Incident at the potions shop you spell "incident" with a capital "I" as though it is a major event, which cracked me up when i read it, the subtle humour is great, and the in your face humour even better, love your story.
| SlytherinRiter chapter 7 . 1/27/2011
Harry...and...Snape? Friends? Oh, that is too much.
| Reader chapter 7 . 1/24/2011
"I can't do that, it makes me feel stupid." That's not just a feeling.
Then what is it? I understand that Harry Potter shouldn't call himself , similarly to Bellatrix Black, but what's wrong with ? Seriusly?
If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice.
A human is irrational; and if the lie isn't necessary, then asking twice might actually make him reply truthfully. But in case of a rational human...who isn't really a human then
Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.
Waiting for it! If the note to self is still here after all the many events.
Help would be helpful.
Who/what is (rampaging) nundu?
And why Harry is not already part of Malfoys' circle of acquaintances if both Draco and Lucius have already met him (robs fitting scene)?
Malfoys' friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape. So what side is Severus Snape on? Both Dumbledore and Lucius Malfoy consider him to be an ally.
| BrailleErin chapter 7 . 1/18/2011
The intuitive mind is a sacred gift and the rational mind is a faithful servant. We have created a society that honors the servant and has forgotten the gift. — Albert Einstein
| mnemonica chapter 7 . 1/17/2011
...Heh. This is either completely genius or completely insane. I'm still not sure which. There's so much psychology in here it could pass for meta, but luckily it isn't, because -and I've been enough of a creep to google you- you're fresh to fanon, yes? I would have thought you were an AP Psych student or something. With all those Zimbardo references and experiment whatnots. Well. It's damn original, for one thing. Writing a little cluttered for fanfic, but I bet your novels sell pretty well anyway. Characterization of everyone seemingly accurate (except for well...you know, but that's a given because of the nurture thing). It horrifies me in some way, seeing Potter in this new light, but I'm compelled to read more of it. Your mannerisms in writing *slightly* resemble David Foster Wallace, and I hope you take that as a compliment and not a curse.
Sorry for the completely confusing comment. Suffice to say I'm just a little perplexed.
| Tormuse chapter 7 . 1/12/2011
As horrible as the subject of rape is, I couldn't help laughing when Draco first brought it up just for the absurdity of those words coming out of the mouth of an eleven-year-old boy. (Kind of like the absurdity of a lot of the stuff baby Stewie says from Family Guy)
But now that I think about it... How would Draco even know what rape is in the first place? The only way I can imagine is that his father must have taught him, and, judging by the way Draco talks about it, Lucius must have said something like, "it's a great way to punish and humiliate your enemies." I find the idea that an adult would teach such things to his child even more disturbing than anything else Draco said. : *shudder*
Anyway, this is a brilliant chapter that sets up what's sure to be a really interesting power struggle between Draco and Harry as they each try to use and manipulate each other.
| Phoenix Crystal Star chapter 7 . 1/8/2011
Dear Less Wrong:
Your writing is amazing. lm marveling at your metaphors and explanations of science. i must say I have read more than my fair share of fan fictions, but yours outwits all that l have read. Its no wonder why youre an author of one story if youre put so much work on to these story. You should beg J. K. Rowling for copyrights and then get this publish this.
| DukeAtreides22 chapter 7 . 1/5/2011
I loved the insertion of the Medieval mind set. Its an interesting take on the subject, as a Medievalist, it made me smile to see it.
Also, Fold Space? yes please.
Can I expect more references to great sci-fi?
| Tangshou chapter 7 . 1/3/2011
I promised a review for every chapter, but only made it thru ch 6. Here's the next round.
Not much to say about this one. A good, solid chapter. Love the Comed-Tea and the things you do with it in the coming chapters.
| Silvar Sunstrider chapter 7 . 12/25/2010
""I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books.""
*stares at it*
its...so alike my own catch phrase..."I'm going to take over the world, so I can read in peace."
Considering HE want to take over teh world -metaphiracal, I guess, but still- I'm SO like this fic!
| Niyalune chapter 7 . 12/23/2010
Very interesting story.
Harry is way too knowledgable for an 11 year old, but his opinion of the Wizarding World and all the experiences he wants to do... Well, it makes my inner scientist happy
On a more random note, Harry with a sweatband on his forehead made me think of A Very Potter Sequel, it made me laugh
| Kirinin chapter 7 . 12/19/2010
Thank you for your love letter to science.
| Gelacacine chapter 7 . 12/13/2010
Although Harry can be as creepy as Draco (mass murder instead of Luna Lovegood wasn't my first thought)
| Will Petillo chapter 7 . 12/6/2010
Love the chapter and writing, just had a quick content comment (ch. 5). It seems to me that it would occur to Harry to buy several (perhaps cheaper) bags of holding and put the others inside the first one for virtually unlimited space.
That's all for now, I look forward to reading the rest of this!
| SakiSenka chapter 7 . 12/6/2010
so does that mean lucius is saying snape told harry and thats how he knows or that harry should be held in as high regard as snape? is lucius trying to allude to dumbles or voldy but doesnt actually know that its really harry? i dont get the reply.
| Los Grotos chapter 7 . 12/4/2010
I can't wait for him to meet Hermione.
| Matthew Fallshaw chapter 7 . 11/29/2010
I always love the aftermaths.
| HoosYourDaddy chapter 7 . 11/23/2010
"Harry stared down at the can in his hand, the coldness settling into his blood. Charming, happy, generous with his favors to his friends, Draco wasn't a psychopath. That was the sad and awful part, knowing human psychology well enough to know that Draco wasn't a monster. There had been ten thousand societies over the history of the world where this conversation could have happened. No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. To Draco, his enemies weren't people."
A brilliant, even stirring, observation on Harry's part, and it took me totally by surprise. Perhaps he's not a robot after all. But it seems out of character, quite honestly, given what's come before.
The 'reason' is that human morality is not rooted in reason, or at least not solely in reason. It's rooted in what David Hume called 'sentiment,' or what Richard Rorty called an irreducible belief that 'cruelty is a bad thing.' You cannot arrive at morality through science alone. To be clear, I'm not invoking religion here - quite the opposite. I'm suggesting that no amount of scientific reasoning can result in empathy, the first precondition for the existence of morality.
And empathy, until this moment, is something that was totally lacking in Harry's character. He viewed the world as data to be investigated, and people as sets of data to be manipulated for his own ends. In other words, he treated people as B. F. Skinner might - not as thinking beings, but as discrete collections of behaviors ripe for manipulation.
I'm running off at the mouth here, and I apologize. But so far this story has engaged my critical instincts far more than any other Harry Potter fanfiction - I mean that both as the highest praise and as criticism.
Harry is growing on me, and I hope that what you're doing is giving us a well-rounded, flawed human being as the protagonist (i.e., that Harry eventually sees how limited and, frankly, dehumanizing some of his own views are). If that's the case, then my only criticism of the story is that the authorial voice of the opening chapters compels us to sympathize with Harry and Harry alone, masking his flaws by inviting us to laugh at the 'absurdity' of the other characters.
Sorry if this is not the kind of criticism you usually get - I can't help it. Keep up the good work :)
| Mind's III chapter 7 . 11/21/2010
I don't have much to say about chapter 7. The comed tea is genius, of course.
The mention of the mechanical watch does make me surprised that Harry hasn't, throughout the fic, looked further at this thing about electronic devices not working in the presence of magic (or Hogwarts, whichever it is). I'd be worried about the sort of dangerous magnetic fields or radiation, etc, that might disrupt electrical things. It also sounds like a Clue about the nature of magic, and by the time he's capable of transfiguring devices, he really should be exploring this limitation.
| Daughter of Ether chapter 7 . 11/14/2010
oh gods harry is teentch!
| AspergianStoryteller chapter 7 . 11/2/2010
| Multitaskmom chapter 7 . 10/18/2010
Boy, I do hope that Harry and Snape find each other. Truly. Ah. It would make me so very happy.
| Indigo Ziona chapter 7 . 10/16/2010
Oh Draco, Draco... I've read a few takes on Harry and Draco being friends (/lovers), and I love what you have done with Draco here. He's both terrifying, and yet almost likeable...
| w chapter 7 . 10/9/2010
I forgot to mention - I also recollected Petunia as fat and I thought that way was better in chapter 1. And who is to say that Petunia wasn't fat pre-canon-HP too? :)
Running makeup with trembling hand - moving.
Ran... walk - funny.
I bought you enough books.
Go jump in a lake - moving too. Very nice description of harry's relations with his parents. Shouldn't they get worried over Quirrell during the Christmas break?
A very good suggestion... worse.
Science Fair Project - funny. And _very_ good you don't reveal anything more.
Death to air quality.
Ron-Harry interaction, including Quidditch.
"(now containing his useless headband, though it didn't really belong there)" this feels superfluous.
Draco-Harry. Really, altogether this chapter is excellent too.
Murder conversation. (b) BTW is something he should realize when laughing with Quirrell too.
Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.
No, the world would have been a very different place indeed, if it took an evil mutant to say what Draco had said. It was very simple, very human, it was the default if nothing else intervened. Yes. Kudos for putting this here too. It'd be in character if Harry thought about Hume too.
Aren't we a clever little serpent. Eleven years old and already coaxing your prey from hiding. Shouldn't he think about the irony of Quirrell being a serpent Animagus.
Harry had inherited the nigh-magical Verres ability to remember where all his books were, even after seeing them just once ... connection. So nice.
If only one picture were to survive.
Severus Snape? Still don't get this answer, even after 42 more chapters :)
| Kutta chapter 7 . 10/6/2010
| Nakedkali chapter 7 . 10/4/2010
This is the second mention of that Incident at the Potions Shop. We haven't seen anything further about this. Maybe this is a particularly potent Checkov's Gun? This is the intro to the Quibbler. Enquiring Minds want to know.
| dinosaurusgede chapter 7 . 10/4/2010
Wahaha, comed-tea? that's brilliant! and the Quibbler's headline was soo funny. Harry showing draco muggle's achievement is pure original. also, when harry suggesting to eliminate seeker position, I was like 'Wow, why nobody didnt think bout that before'. All in all this is pure awesomeness, :D
| dinosaurusgede chapter 7 . 10/3/2010
Excellent! The comed-tea is just hilarious! oh, and the Quibbler's headline too. and ,
| Eli Courtwright chapter 7 . 10/2/2010
I love how you've made Draco (and others) so much more competent. Not only mentioning that he received lessons on how to manipulate people, but actually showing him doing a good job at it.
Indeed, seeing so many different types of skill and wisdom and intellect in your cast of characters is a joy, doubly so because you do it while keeping them all true to their portrayal in the original novels. (Quirrel is the only exception, but he had so little face time in the original novel that it's easy to ignore my preconceived mental picture of him.)
| LunaSlashSea chapter 7 . 9/28/2010
Excellent chapter. Finally, someone points out the idiocy of the seeker and snitch!
| E.A.V chapter 7 . 9/26/2010
Comed-Tea...Brilliant. Wonderful chapter!
| ReadingStuffff chapter 7 . 9/26/2010
''Draco sniggered. Then his eyes lit on the white owl on Ron's shoulder. "Oh, what's this?" Draco said in a drawl rich with malice. "Where is the famous Weasley family rat?"
"Buried in the backyard," Ron said coldly.''
This means that peter pettigrew is dead?
| zw chapter 7 . 9/26/2010
It's just plain brilliant. A bit hard to read in some places, but hilarious
| Serpent In Red chapter 7 . 9/11/2010
"Harry had said to his father that he would pay him back as soon as he figured out how to convert wizarding gold into Muggle money, and his father had told him to go jump in a lake." - Awww. I do love this adopted family you've created for Harry.
*sniggers* Michael thinking that Harry caused so much trouble that he got in the newspapers. Now that would be a LOT of trouble.
Got to love George and Fred. Thinking of elephants. Yes, Gred and Forge, do tell us why he would think of elephants. XD
ROTFLMAO! I have to agree with Harry there. Ron feeling stupid is not just a feeling. That scene was absolutely hilarious. Yes, people won't stare at you now, Harry, when you have a scarf over your head.
"Who was the first Seeker, the King's idiot son who wanted to play Quidditch but couldn't understand the rules?" - *snnnnrks*
*wide grin* Did you really killed off Pettigrew? Somehow that strikes me as funny. don't mind me. ;)
Of course, you had to put up with my babbling reviews, so ... sorry about that. ;)
""Don't see any reason for him to exist?" offered Draco.
"Pretty much."" - ROTFLMAO! I've said this before, but I have to say this again: I really do love your sense of humor.
DRACO MALFOY PREGNANT" - Buahahahahaha!
"It's a Muggle thing, in Muggle Britain there's a hell of a political difference between getting away with murder and getting away with raping a little girl." - Mmm, I completely agree with this, since we do have a bunch of censors against rape, sex, and so on, but none on torture, violence, murders, and so on. What a weird society we live in.
Ohhh, I do like how he's manipulating Draco to see things his way. However, I still doubt he doesn't want to take over the world, though he's wording it differently.
| NX-Loveless-XN chapter 7 . 9/7/2010
"Okay, Mister Spoo -" Ron stopped. "I can't do that, it makes me feel stupid."
That's not just a feeling. "Okay. You pick a name." - Funny. Oh, and I like the weird friendship between Draco and Harry. They always have the most strangest ones.
I wish there were Comed-tin drinks here.
| Sancria chapter 7 . 9/4/2010
There was a slithering sound behind him, and Harry turned to confirm that his trunk had indeed followed him on its small clawed tentacles. Apparently, for magical purposes, his luggage had also managed to believe with sufficient strength to pass through the barrier. Actually that was quite disturbing when Harry started thinking about it.
Quite likely the funniest thing i've read all week! I stumbled upon this story and all I can say is I'm having so much fun, I think my wife is getting jealous.
| Crazy Iemon chapter 7 . 8/27/2010
That chapter was deep. o.o
| Cuckoo Cloud Lander chapter 7 . 8/15/2010
When Harry explained science to Draco...
IT MAKES ME FEEL SO HAPPY.
And proud, and like swearing at a wizard. It is... cathartic, at the last. In the book, the best example we have of Muggle-born-and-raised is Hermione.
It's not as awesome as this.
| Samwise O'Keefe chapter 7 . 8/4/2010
At last! someone who agrees with me about the Quidditch scoring system!
Really enjoyed Draco being honest about what he could do and how he would get away with it, and that Harry still tried to work with him.
| anime junkie2 chapter 7 . 8/3/2010
KEEP IT UP!
| Makiuchi chapter 7 . 8/3/2010
...I honestly don't know what to say. This has got to be the most unique story I have yet to come by on this site; in a good way though. I have only read a few chapters, but I indefinitely hooked on this story. I find myself almost laughing so hard that I almost fall out of my chair at the utter brilliance of it. I can't, even if I tried, stop smiling as I read on. I love Harry's character and thoughts banter with the other characters.
Well, I'm going to stop myself before I am unable to. I can not wait to read more of the story and I do hope that you continue until it is complete because I would love to see an end to it. Very good job dear author.
| Lucille chapter 7 . 7/27/2010
"As soon as I'm old enough to get an erection I'm going to rape that bitch."
I think I just died.
| Furcas chapter 7 . 7/26/2010
Harry should have at least suspected Blaise's true motives after Quirrel mentioned the quadruple agent.
| Naramyon chapter 7 . 7/9/2010
Fred & George. No one else would wrap their head and call themselves 'Order of Chaos'.
...Order of Chaos.
I think Harry just discovered the name of his 'organization to fight Voldemort'.
| Jonathan chapter 7 . 7/5/2010
I do not even know where to begin.
This is the best fan-fict I have ever read? - (though I read little)
How about just a hearty thanks - a thoroughly enjoyable read, I love most the Bayesian comments.
| FictionA chapter 7 . 7/4/2010
Wow I read some philosophy of science and I'm a big fan of anti-positivism like the Pepper School.
This chapter is so, so, so great..
And it turns out to be a nice, complex story with manipulation and mind games.
Definitely hooked. Thanks so much for writing this.
| hypercell chapter 7 . 7/2/2010
So, I didn't really understand what his father replied to him, at the very end. Please explain it?
| Unagi chapter 7 . 6/30/2010
He's not saying that only brown people are rapists; that's objectively and demonstratively false. He's saying that places like the Congo and Saudi Arabia are the only places were it's not frowned upon, and people could causually discuss their plans to do so in public places in the manner Draco is doing without fear of reprecussion.
| Herdsbane chapter 7 . 6/30/2010
Wow. Racism, misogyny and nice-guyism all tied up in a nice pretentious package. Lovely.
| James Birdsong chapter 7 . 6/23/2010
| Alli chapter 7 . 6/18/2010
"Trying to figure out how something works on that deep level, the first ninety-nine explanations you come up with are wrong. The hundredth is right. So you have to learn how to admit you're wrong, over and over and over again. It doesn't sound like much, but it's so hard that most people can't do true science. Always questioning yourself, always taking another look at things you've always taken for granted,"
Loved that. As a fifth year neuropharmacology grad student, I appreciated that.
Also love this story! It's an interesting twist on cannon and appeals to my inner nerd.
| Plumbum chapter 7 . 6/16/2010
Ah, Snape is joining the bunch! I've been waiting for this :-)
| Guyro chapter 7 . 6/13/2010
im only a few lines into chap. 7 (well the bit where he has gone through the platform wall)
and i think i spotted a terry pratchett reference
also your harry reminds me a little of artemis fowl which is a good thing
| the bird of the chapel chapter 7 . 6/7/2010
Harry's real father...is LELOUCH
| TankerMDK chapter 7 . 6/7/2010
Oh my god. i have to go to sleep. this is...thank you for existing.
| Arkh Cthuul chapter 7 . 6/6/2010
This Chapter was...simply brilliant.
Im almost at a loss for words, the combination of serious matters (welle xecuted) and brilliantly done humor is among the best Ive yet read.
Very well done, and consider me officially "taken" by your story now.
| Gerbalfluff chapter 7 . 6/3/2010
OMG this is such a good story!
| luosha chapter 7 . 6/1/2010
better than the original for sure. funny, characters. love malfoy. found it a little smug (hp as ey's alter ego - SO sure he's so much better than everyone else... not sure someone like him would so effectively and efficiently "win" in real life. also not so sure that he's all that likable, although he'd certainly be really *interesting* to spend time with).
the only part that really rings false is "i only want power so i can get books". giant bullshit alarm. surely he has enough money to get all the books he wants, both in the real world and in magicworld.
let's say "books" is actually shorthand for knowledge, or understanding the way things work (this seems likely). that seems a little more likely, since power might give you access to knowledge that would otherwise be kept from you by those in power.
even so, it doens't strike me that tha'ts really what HP is after, based on his other behavior. he doens't *just* want to understand how shit works, he relaly wants to DO somehting significant, important, worthwhile.
so saying he just wants books is a dishonest, disingenuous disclaimer.
anyway, fun read. great for procrastinating.
| Mother of Tears chapter 7 . 6/1/2010
Wow! That really was a masterful bunch of clever brush strokes on canvas. I am impressed not only by your command of prose, but by the subtlety of your understanding and your grasp of human nature and philosophy. Are you human? I must keep reading.
| Xadro chapter 7 . 5/29/2010
Draco seems like a great friend, his way of looking at people gives me warm feeling inside, and he's funny to boot, i wonder why people seem to dislike him.
| Apricot chapter 7 . 5/15/2010
At first I was not going to review, I only tend to review when I truly do enjoy the story. Yours was simply a good story until I got to the bit about the snitch. Now all I have to say is thank you.
| CeilingFan chapter 7 . 5/15/2010
So, um, thanks for reminding us that Draco is a horrible person AND that extreme culture differences exist in the same so-awful-it's-funny moment. (I can accept that Draco is not more monstrous than the culture that spawned him, but he's still pretty monstrous by muggle standards. It's like dealing with slave-holders in history. You can accept that it was a standard practice of the time, etc, so Thomas Jefferson might have been an okay guy; but you also have a lot more respect for the people who acknowledged what a terrible practice it was before the rest of society caught up.)
Also, Comed tea is dangerous.
| Loonynamelass chapter 7 . 5/13/2010
Your characterization is so spot on. Character complexity is really your forte. One of many, actually.
| Tangerine-Alert chapter 7 . 5/13/2010
I think I'm starting to run out of words to praise this story by.
I could turn to Roget for help, but that would seem a little less spur of the moment.
It was a brilliant and unexpected chapter, I wasn't expecting any of this. I thought briefly this might be a 'Harry and Hermione wax on about books' sort of thing. But proven wrong I was, fantastically, brilliantly wrong. Just an amazingly detailed and fascinating chapter.
| perfidiouspink chapter 7 . 5/11/2010
This is effin hilarious man
| Greytune chapter 7 . 5/11/2010
Okay, I wasn't going to review on this chapter, but then I saw this sentence. THAT'S JUST WRONG.
| Silblue09 chapter 7 . 5/11/2010
I Love this story. It's so funny and love the way Harry is so rational about everything. What a original story! More chapters please!
| Poliphilus chapter 7 . 5/10/2010
Just to be clear, the "as soon as I'm old enough to get an erection" thing is a bit of ignorance on Draco's part, not yours, right? There's no age limit (at least no -lower- limit).
| darksidhe42 chapter 7 . 5/6/2010
oh! Is Harry's luggage going to be like Rincewind's luggage from Diskworld?
hmm. ". It's like someone took a real game and grafted on this pointless extra position just so that you could be the Most Important Player without needing to really get involved or learn the rest of it." Or maybe so your hero could be a sports star in school too, and you wouldn't have to deal with writing it? Very nice!
sweet take on Luna and the Quibbler, too!
| Nightdreamerms chapter 7 . 5/3/2010
Just wanted to say, you speak of Science and Logic beautifully. I personally, have always despised Science, or rather the views of the ones that taught it to me, for it seemed to be full of contempt and concretes. In retrospect, I suppose it was because I terribly disliked the power adults held over me and thus their ignorance of my thoughts and reasonings- similar to your Harry. Even in the "Gifted" classes I was set in based on IQ, it always irked me to no end the way all my teachers commanded compliance but not understanding of their teachings; science, especially. I guess what I'm trying to say is, I understand science is supposed to based on the "Rat is always Right." sentiment. But commonly, those who study the sciences fail to allow this concept to sink through all and instead stubbornly call, "Mistake!" on rats that don't follow the regular pattern. It makes me happy that instead of condemning the magical world as impossible and trickery for all it's eccentricities, Scientist!Harry is looking at the illogical logically.
P.S. And the whole "Science is to Muggles what Magic is to Wizards, but all can use Science" was Genius.
| KrisTerms chapter 7 . 5/2/2010
Little dark for me, but great chapter.
Draco should read a sci-fy book. :D
| MegaB chapter 7 . 4/26/2010
And so we say 'like father like son'.
| Svetastic chapter 7 . 4/25/2010
I wish you'd stop indulging your rape fetish in your writing. Thanks to chapter 7, I can't show this fic to anyone.
| tati1 chapter 7 . 4/25/2010
Actually, I'd recommend keeping the Snitch but modifying the game through reducing the amount of points provided to, say, twenty or fifty. Then it would be reasonably acceptable to fanatics, the traditional game ending would still apply, and the Seeker would still have a significant but non-superhero role in the game.
| TxA-GunFighter chapter 7 . 4/20/2010
Very good chapter.
| Carma Nightmare chapter 7 . 4/17/2010
your mind is so horofaing, awsome, insane, exsquisit, imaginetive, expanded, worded, expresionet, amasing, gob smaking fabulas i dont rightly know what to think or call this storry. But i know one thing for sore I"M HANGING ON YOUR EVERY WORD! God, Merlin and Morgana your amasing. please never stop.
| Wyrm chapter 7 . 4/16/2010
I absolutely agree about the Quidditch bashing.
| Kehlen chapter 7 . 4/13/2010
Better and better. Now I just can't wait for Potter-Snape confrontation :)
| Makurayami Ookami chapter 7 . 4/11/2010
| He Who Comes With the Dusk chapter 7 . 4/10/2010
Excellent yet again!
| Jinx of the 2nd Law chapter 7 . 4/7/2010
**Stunned silence slowly gives way to clapping, then thunderous applause.**
Wow! This story is fabulous! All it was touted to be through Reddit, I will share it with FB friends to enjoy.
I must say, I want 2 shirts. One saying "If you can't criticize, you can't optimize." and one saying "I only want power so I can get books.". TRUTH!
Wow, my head was spinning on a few points there, I need to learn this stuff! If you wrote the book in a format like this story, you' have millions of Junior High kids learning not only the Scientific Method, but Rational Thought - we could take over the WORLD! LOL!
Thank you for writing and sharing this story, it is worth the read!
| Bob Dole chapter 7 . 4/3/2010
There were, and are, a great many things in this and the preceding chapter that I had wanted to comment on and compliment. Sadly they seem to all have been pushed from my head by desire to go on to the next chapter.
| lilyoftheval5 chapter 7 . 4/3/2010
Well, it's obvious this story is an addicting jewel.
Thank you very much for it.
However, I don't understand Lucius's answer to Draco's letter and it's really starting to bug me.
What did he say?
| tatewaki2000 chapter 7 . 4/2/2010
What a lovely finish. :3
But me thinks Draco is too smart. dun dun dun.
But still! I'm so excited! Me wanna see Granger.
All Hail Less W.
| Orchamus chapter 7 . 4/1/2010
The power, the mad, mad power!
| Wandering Me chapter 7 . 3/31/2010
When I saw Feynmann in the story summary I knew this story was going to be awesome! Great job-I love the science/math/econ/real-life references!
| morriganscrow chapter 7 . 3/31/2010
Brilliantly painted characterizations of Draco and his father, and a fascinating version of Harry. This is proving to be an engaging, complex and beautifully crafted AU story.
| dogbertcarroll chapter 7 . 3/31/2010
'The First Law of Fanfiction states that every change which strengthens the protagonists over canon must be matched by an equal or greater increase in their difficulties.'
That rule only fits DBZ anime and the like where they insure that both sides keep getting stronger and stronger until everything devolves into mindless crap.
Harry was overmatched from the beggining on the series to a ridiculous degree and only the author's power kept things going, while making plot holes all over the scenery.
As has often been mentioned, anyone with a pieces of string, a stuffed animal, and a lick of sense could take over the wizarding world. Does that mean if Harry has common sense Voldemort gets a nuke?
It doesn't matter who has more power unless they are in a straight slugfest and I seriesly doubt you'll let this devolve into that.
Sorry, but my two biggest pet peeves are making changes and yet keeping the series of events exactly the same and giving a boost to the bad guy just because the hero got one.
The hero starts off in the minus column to begin with while the villain gets 1k plus points to start, I don't think Harry getting a hundred points means we have to give Voldy
any more to keep the story entertaining.
'"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."'
Hermione is going to jump him before he reaches puberty with an attitude like that!
The scene with Draco and Harry talking gave me goosebumps!
| nwspor chapter 7 . 3/30/2010
lol draco's rug has been torn from under him ohohohohoho
do it to voldy next
| Memories-of-the-Shadows chapter 7 . 3/29/2010
Harry's speech on science and magic made me cry. It's just what I've always said.
| duj chapter 7 . 3/28/2010
The strange thing about canon is that the people who really belong in Slytherin are precisely the ones with the nous to know to ask for Gryfindor...
| Digimouse chapter 7 . 3/27/2010
Draco mentioned Oblivation and Penseives to erase and store memories as a way to fake court testimony, which freaked Harry out. Finding how a Penseive operates is more difficult than simply buying one because craftsmen want to protect their trade secrets, but Harry would see it as a justifiable expense if it meant protect his memories from being wiped by Oblivators.
Penseives seem to have elements in common with quantum superposition as it shows memories in detail far beyond what the human mind can process and retain when seen from a third-person point of view, as well as an analogue of brain-machine interface, optical fiber, liquid crystal display, and wireless energy transfer.
| Train Locomotive chapter 7 . 3/27/2010
Harry might question the conductor on how the Hogwarts Express operates and what happens to the train when not ferrying students.
A normal train couldn't have gone from London to northern Scotland without refueling for water or coal, implying that either (A)boiler temperature is magically sustained; and/or (B)the effectiveness of pressurized steam to turn pistons have been magically enhanced; and/or (C)water is conjured like with the "Aguamenti" spell albeit in larger quantities, and/or (D)animation charms reduce the amount of kinetic energy needed to move the train.
Unlike electricity, most energy in thermal, kinetic, and chemical form function normally in a high-magic environment like Hogwarts unless deliberately influenced by a spell or potion. Charles Babbage's analytical engine, the predecessor of the computer, would work as intended.
Because objects can be shrunken down, a large analytical engine could be carried around like a laptap computer to store and process Harry's findings. However, I assume that preventing the device from re-enlarging requires periodically "recharging" the spells that keep it in miniature size. In most cases, enchanted objects and clothing gradually wear off, like with the Victor Krumm action figure or the Irish necklace that shouted out the name of players.
| ammybah chapter 7 . 3/27/2010
After showing Draco that picture of the NASA astronauts, the young Malfoy could dream of becoming the first wizard in space. For an aristocrat who has everything, finding out that something is beyond your grasp just makes you want it even more. Quote: "Hope and greed are two sides of the same emotion. To have one without acknowledging the other is self-destructive." (Tzintchi, 'the Open Door' by Academia Nut)
In the long-term, the most practical solution would be to launch a small space station equipped with the equivalent of a portkey beacon or Floo fireplace onboard to “beam up” wizards from Earth’s surface, and then use it as a layover and construction platform for further exploration. Canon!Hermione was skilled in "water-proof fire" in Book1, so have a Floo fire submerged in liquid would take care of the dangers of having a flame in an exclosed oxygenated environment.
In the early 90s, companies paid NASA an average of $50million to put a satellite into orbit. On the other hand, the Soviet USSR was collapsing in ’91 and a few Confundus charms could persuade the Russians into selling one of their Soyuz manned rockets or maybe even the MIR space station. On today’s market, the Soyuz goes for $14.5million (fuel, crew, and launch facilities not included), while historians estimate that MIR cost $3billion. In comparison, NASA's Skylab1 cost $7billion.
| ploychan chapter 7 . 3/27/2010
How did Ron get Hedwig? Owls of that quality are expensive.
Its bad financial management that keeps the Weasleys poor. Arthur must make a semi-decent amount of money if he can afford to feed and cloth a family of nine, yet they blew the entire seven-hundred galleon prize from the Daily Prophet Grand Prize Galleon Draw on a trip to Egypt. They should have saved a little for a rainy day as their vault in Gringott’s only has a few sickles in it. Hogwarts doesn’t teach how live on a balanced budget, personal finance, or life management, and most graduates have few vocational skills.
Also, a used Ford Anglia in good condition can cost up to six-hundred pounds, or one-hundred and twenty galleons. The ‘Reparo’ spell isn’t as effective on complicated machinery, so it must have been in reasonable shape before Arthur purchased it.
Or think about how Arthur somehow got premier tickets to the Quidditch World Cup and sat in the top box with the Minister of Magic. He claimed that he got the tickets from Ludo Bagman, but just one ticket ought to have cost a small fortune and Bagman was heavily in debt with the Goblins due to a gambling addiction. Alas, more plotholes left by J.K.R.'s incontinuity.
| liareh chapter 7 . 3/27/2010
Ch 7 Review:
Heavy. Disturbing. cold. And depressing to think that there might be some 11 yr olds who might actually think like that.
Harry is being too mature here. I am not sure about that. He has done better than psychologists with years of experience.
Draco's struggle - his father's game or his own is ironical in that he is walking his father's line.
And Lucius' reply is even better.
| FuzzyBoots chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
Fascinating stuff... my brother pointed me to this story, saying that it was one of the few stories that could make him laugh uproariously when he wasn't expecting it. Me, I'll admit that there are parts when I laugh, but a great number of parts where it's more uncomfortable than amusing, like Draco's gleeful description of what he could get away with with Luna. It's... very well done. Good art amuses, but it also disturbs. You've got a subscribed reader here who's also favorited the story. _ Good work. I would close this with my usual "looking forward to you writing more" but I see there's another part that got added between me starting this review and clicking the submit button so instead I'll just say that I'm reading avidly even as I post.
| Deritine chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
Wow. What a good chapter! What a good story! I rarely read HP anymore, but this totally sucked me in. It is simply great. Harry maybe is a bit too smart to be totally believable, but not really. And I think that half-hearted critique might be the only one I an think of... great job, hope you keep up the good work. I have a long patience, so no rush. Though sooner is usually better, ne? ;P
| Ratus chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
Very interesting story. I am sure I have never seen this plot before, but I am now looking forward to seeing how reason can be used in the world of wizards. Keep up the good work.
| Jedi Buttercup chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
OK, this I have to comment on before even reading the chapter, because after the delight of earlier it made me quail: "I am well aware of the First Law of Fanfiction stating that every change which strengthens the protagonists over canon must be matched by an equal or greater increase in their difficulties."
99% of the time, when I see people quote something like this, they unbalance it in the entire opposite direction. Some people do love angst, but some people delight in fanfics that start out like this one has because it promises a *better* outcome than canon. What's the point if it all comes out the same, or even worse?
All the same, I *have* loved it so far, so I follow onward, though much more cautiously than before...
| Pointer3109 chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
"I only want power so I can get books."
My kind of guy."
"And if he blurted the whole thing out, it would become his father's."
He went for it.
"I would say that you had been so fortunate as to meet someone who enjoys the intimate confidence of our friend and valuable ally, Severus Snape."
He thinks Snape's smooth? lmao He just lost Draco.
| The Lady Reaper of the Shadows chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
can't wait to read more
| Meneldur chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
My Lord (swear, not address) I cannot express the beauty of your creation in the limited terms allowed us. This story... it is the purest work I've ever seen. I cannot stand canon Harry Potter - just reading it makes me feel like I'm becoming less and less logical/rational. Which is why I tapped into fanfiction - where people make better rules, improve on the idea, and bring it out as a complete product. This is why I love this work.
Enough with praise (flattery?). I don't think it's possible to comment on every single detail of the story, so I'll try to focus on a few things I feel are important:
Harry - Draco: The simple brilliance of this is amazing. Rowling seemed to think that SlytherinEvilStupid, but wrote that 'Slytherins are cunning'. You take the cunning part, and admit it may have connotations to evil - but it also means smart, quick, intelligent. The budding relationship between Harry and Draco is perfectly written. They understand each other quite well, each has his own goals - but they are willing to work together, each believing he has much to gain from this relationship. I am certain theirs will be a complex relationship, full of many revelations, arguments, pitfalls and problems – but not only will the end result be worth it, the path to it will be as well. Draco's evil (?) will need to be addressed of course, and I hope to see that – especially next year, when he might actually meet Luna.
Just a short note on that subject: I personally think Luna is far wiser than she pretends to be. She is a Ravenclaw, after all, and says some very true things when she wants to. I've always felt that the 'Loony' persona was at least partly a disguise. There is a Luna behind the disguise, who knows how bad a shape the world is in, and because she can't fix it, escapes into different worlds, but still tries to warn the others in her own way (with Luna, the entire Ministry comes off evil - Fudge eats goblins in pie, Scrimegour is a vampire, there's a rotfang conspiracy, Fudge has a secret army). Of course, no one listens and everybody mocks her, which only drives her deeper inside - a vicious circle. That's my view at least, and I personally feel that in your story, they could get along rather well – if Luna doesn't drive Harry insane first with inane sayings.
Harry – Minerva: I don't have much to say, simply that I much admire Harry's beliefs and skills, and that I hope this will be enough to change Minerva from her 'children can't possibly know anything/be right about anything' attitude in the books.
Harry and Belief: The last issue I will address. If Harry will study the magic system as propagated by Rowling, he will quickly realize that it can be easily improved on. If a wand has no innate power, it is only a tool for focusing and enhancing; ergo, it can be disposed of, or refined. If magic does not require words, it should not require gestures either; these are obviously only more focusing/enhancing techniques. My belief regarding magic in Harry Potter is simple: Magic comes from within, and with enough concentration, could be cast simply by the power of thinking it so. All other enhancements simply aid your training, and should be disposed of as soon as possible – you don't want your kid riding a bicycle with training wheels forever. I hope that in your story, at least some of this will be realized by Harry. I'm certainly not saying that you should adopt my beliefs into your story; simply that logic (as far as I see it) dictates the existence of at least some of the rules I've just mentioned.
Which leads to the more complex problem: It would seem that much of magic is based on belief. I do not believe that if a wizard would 'swish-and-flick' while saying wingardium leviosa and thinking about eating porridge, something would happen. In fact, in book four, Hermione seems to stress this point – Harry can't manage the Summoning Charm because he's not focusing. This implies the importance of belief and focus in magic. Harry will need to change his stance on 'not believing in anything' (at least, that was how I understood his internal debate regarding the platform). Personally I do not see how it would be a problem for him: existence of a higher power can be proved by simple logic combined with science. I feel no need for this, personally; I'm religious because I want to; after all the definition of faith is usually belief without proof. But just to explain my claims regarding Harry's paradigm shift, I'll write what my Rabbi told me: "There is no single person in this world who does not believe in a Creator. All scientists must believe in it – the Big Bang theory, generally accepted as the most correct one, cannot and does not provide any explanation for initial conditions. Yet it is one of the fundamental laws of the universe that matter does not come from nothing. Something must have created that matter, and moreover, caused it to 'move' in such a way that the Big Bang happened. That is the Creator.
Again, I haven't written this to argue theology or prove the existence of God – I'm simply writing this to explain why Harry could (and should?) have a paradigm shift as I am suggesting, simply to improve (as I see it) on the story.
Oh, I also enjoyed Harry's thoughts the economy. I never understood how it survived either – here's how I put it: It is impossible that a GOLD galleon, the size of a HUBCAP (Muggles in book 4, at the World Cup), is only worth five pounds. Either the goblins are under pricing their gold to make the Wizarding World more accessible to muggle-borns (yeah, right!), or they're not using real gold. Otherwise some smart muggle-born would have converted all his wealth to Galleons, sold the gold in the muggle world (for comparison - as of a few weeks ago, the price of a troy ounce of gold [1 troy ounce 31.1034768 grams] is 1107 USD, or 816.85 Euros), and made a fortune by doing this over and over! I hope Harry does do something about it.
Thank you so much for giving me such pleasure and stimulation, until the next chapter, Meneldur.
| skowler chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
Those whose lives are totally devoted to the church of Reason, tend to live lives either meaningless, amoral or both - if one will forgive the generality. I sincerely hope that your HP will find room in his life for matters of Faith - the unproveable, the uknowable, the unseen.
J Michael Straczynski (I hope I spelled that correctly) said it best in the final episode of Season 4 of Babylon 5: "Faith and Reason are the shoes on your feet - you can travel much further with both than with only one."
That said, I laughed so hard my ribs hurt during the Diagon Alley trip. You have entertained me and intrigued me, and I certainly look forward to reading more.
| jjeeff185 chapter 7 . 3/26/2010
Oh! What a wonder-us story of greatness. If You haven't already accepted one of your marriage proposals please think on this one.
Oh amazingly dazzling and brightly intelligent logic minded Author my love for this story and you is ever growing if only you would in all your power 'even' so much as design to think of accepting this proposal of my hand in marriage I would be absolutely ever so delighted! Yours for all eternity with all the love that my large and non-proportional metaphoric heart can give...
| Riye Link Reue chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Oh my sweet Jesus...I just realized what sort of shit Harry will flip when he gets his hands on a Time Turner...Oh sweet god.
| ene who sees chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
to see such writings makes my mind calm. I say kudos to you Less Wong. If i were to see your work published, well your talent would be spoken in reverence
awesome dude! I'm waiting for more. *demented laughter*
| AStatine11 chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
one of the most intriguing authors ever and ur story has a really in-depth plot.
i absolutely love to read such stories.
i have always thought of ron and draco as having the same personalities - arrogant, set in their beliefs, racists and much more.
thus i was surprised at the communication between harry and draco. from harry i can understand, but draco?
also even though given hard proof like the book harry showed to draco i always felt that draco would deny it and not see to reason.
so will harry and draco be friends and all?
and when will see hermione's character?
now harry's character seems a lot like hermione's but way too mature. he is like an older version of hermione, one with experience and maturity.
he just doesn't seem like a 11-year-old boy, even a prodigy.
i just felt that his character was too knowing, like the character a person gets when he is way too old and wise. maybe like dumbledore.
also how long do u intend to make this?
i am assuming here which is a bad decision on my part but still, is this going to be harry/hermione story. as in a couple, later?
i am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter and hopefully the interaction between harry and hermione.
Keep up the GREAT work and Thank You!
p.s. is every quote at the start of a chapter from future chapters?
| Twinheart chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
OMG I love this story! It's so original and funny. I LOVE genius-Harry's POV. Terrific stuff! Thanks!
| WaxWings chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Thank you for this update. I look forward to the Rational Lord Potter and his flunky Draco taking over the world :) Surely, Harry posseses a power that neither Voldemort nor the rest of the wizarding world knows.
I have enjoyed this story so far. The premise has a humor of its own.
I like how wonderfully frustrated Harry gets. He expects that there exists rational rules that govern the world. I wonder if such rules actually exist, or if it will, in the end, turn out to be "magic" after all.
| the true elec chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
I love this story, it contains one of the best Harry's I've ever read. It's absolutely hilarious. The interactions with Draco this chapter were both enlightening and humourous. My favourite scene though has to be Draco and Harry first meeting.
| PeanutTree chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Wah. My brain is fried. This is-this is better than chocolate. This is better than chocolate AND peanut butter, together. I'm going to have to go lie down. Maybe by the time the next chapter rolls out, I'll be more coherent.
Liked: McGonagall's influence; Harry's displays of youth; hilarity; Draco's independence
Disliked: let me get back to you on that
| Tess chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Sometimes in life, you find a piece of writing that causes you to spew coffee all over your monitor. And instead of cursing that person, you gasp aloud to a silent house "It hurts...hurts.." while you stumble into the kitchen to find some microfiber wipes.
For every word.
You may want to warn readers, however. It is possible to laugh so hard as to (nearly, very nearly) piss yourself.
| Lord Sia chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Brilliant, so brilliant that I'm still shivering. That last part was a tad bit confusing though; the meaning could have been clearer - but then, thet would take away the fun, wouldn't it?
| greengirl6 chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
I can't wait to see how you're going to present Snape but so far I'm loving Harry. Usually I don't like genius's in stories, though I enjoy the idea of geniuses, but you're managing to not just say that Harry's a genius, but you're making us believ it as well. I also happen to love how he doesn't just sudenly because the super-powerful elven mage warrior dude.
Can't wait to read more.
| Mel72000 chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Mix rationality and humour and you obtain a fantastic fanfic !
i love your story and I thank you for this incredible chapter !
| krachum chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
So far, Harry with a rational attitude had been done right! Keep it up!
| J. Egbert chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
The fan explanation I like the best for the oddness of Quidditch point scoring is that the rules are set up such that the team which most recently scored has a significant advantage at scoring the next point as well. Combining that with a point-based league system could result in an interesting strategic metagame, and prevent the snitch from dominating the field on the professional level.
The assumption, of course, is that at low levels of skill the game is only a degenerate form.
The point-based league system, then, obviously devolved into the House Point system that is present in canon - docking points in the sports league from the house for minor infractions eventually turned into using the points system for more and more minor incentives or punishments. Eventually they became completely uncoupled, and the house cup and Quidditch cup were made separate prizes. (presumably students became outraged that even though their team had won all the Quidditch games they didn't get the house cup)
| Cinnamon Selkie chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
~And then his father had asked him: Do you think I bought you enough books? It was very clear what answer Dad was looking for.
Harry's throat was hoarse, for some reason. "You can never have enough books," he recited the Verres family motto, and his father knelt down and gave him a quick, firm embrace. "But you certainly tried," Harry said, and felt himself choking up again. "It was a really, really, really good try."~
Aw, that's so sweet. All things considered, I think Michael is rather a good father to Harry. He's just not quite sure how to deal with the magical aspect.
~His mother had a hand over her face. "How bad was it?"
"I, ah," I can't talk about that for reasons of National Security, "about half as bad as the Incident with the Science Fair Project?"
*Snorts with laughter* Do I even want to ask?...No, actually, I don't think I do. If it was about twice as bad as what he did to McGonagall I might not survive the laughter.
~Okay, so either (a) I just teleported somewhere else entirely (b) they can fold space like no one's business or (c) they are simply ignoring the rules.~
Hmm...my guess would be b...but a and c are both quite plausible too :)
I just had a thought...Is Harry's luggage in any way related to Rincewind's luggage? You know, Terry Pratchett, the Discworld, all that?
As much as I adore Ron, I can completely understand how this version of Harry might not take to him so well. And I loved Harry's take on Quidditch. I have frequently thought the same, although NOT the bit about the king's idiot son...
~Harry nodded again. "If you don't mind my asking, how did you recognize me?"
"Mister Bronze," Draco drawled, "I have met you, remember. I met you very well indeed. I saw someone going around with a scarf wrapped around his head, looking absolutely ridiculous. So I took a wild guess."~
Already, Draco understands him so well. Draco's explanation of how he survived Lucius's wrath was rather amazing, although it does prove that Lucius does retain soem level of humanity.
~Harry looked at the vendor, who was watching them benevolently.
All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of green soda pop, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him.~
I love the way your Harry thinks. He is a little bit insane himself, I'm thinking.
Ok, getting raised by dark wizards is officially not good for normal interpersonal relations.
So Snape and Harry share a similar view of Lucius Malfoy then? It's going to be very interesting to see how they react to each other. Cinnamon.
| notBald chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Brilliant story. Enjoyed it all the way.
| uo-chou chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Seriously, you are awesome. Keep up the excellent work, this story is gold. I love the interaction between Harry and Draco, especially Harry's thought process. I love your character's complexity, they become more than the two dimensional constructs from canon. I eagerly await future chapters!
| liathum chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
I. Love. Your. Harry. He is fantastically gifted and incredibly hilarious! Please, please, keep this going. I love it! Thank you so much.
| carms chapter 7 . 3/25/2010
Amazing story! It cracked me up and got me thinking. Keep up the great job I. Look forward to your future posts.
| Rebecca chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
this. is. the. best. hp. fanfic. ever. in. the. history. of. ever.
| Judah chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Love the 'thinking parts' of the fic.
You have a penchant for emotional overdrive. Characters break down laughing so badly they leave the room. A tragic story reduces a character to tears. A stressful situation causes dry heaves. A tough explanation makes someone bite their lip into bloodiness.
Those are exaggerated reactions. Even when you are showing, you need to keep it within certain limits. If it were only Harry I could put it down to genius having exceptionally strong emotions, but your other characters do it too. That means it's a flaw you should be aware of.
| coonassblondie chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
I'm really enjoying this story so far, and it's refreshing to read a fic that makes some logical sense for a change. A bit of a breath of fresh air, if you will.
You've left me with just enough lingering questions to be intrigued, and I believe you will be a good enough writer to not leave loose ends hanging at the end of the story. I
Looking forward to the next installment,
| malcolm75k chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Ah! Almost forgot.
I would think Harry would be interested in non-human sentient entities. He pretty much brushed by goblins.
The hat should provide some insight into AI, while centaurs, house elves and goblins should bring up the fascinating question of "how do non-humans think?" Is it the same as us, or are the thought processes different?
Once he starts talking to snakes, that will add yet another whole vista of this branch of research.
He may even try to communicate with mandrakes, plants and etc, perhaps figuring out *how* parselmouths do what they do and generalizing it to talk to other species.
Cue the Dr. Doolittle references. :D
| BoomboomPOWWWW chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Oh... Cool! I really like this story for a LOT of reasons. First, it's very entertaining by all means, with all the humor and the manipulations. And it teaches me at the same time too, which is a very nice bonus ) I love psychology. Great job! I have a feeling that Fred and George are the two mysterious figures... Or not. Who knows? Anyways, great job!
| NorthernLights25 chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
I loved this! I am really mad that Ron has Hedwig. What happened to Peter though? Please update soon!
| cyran chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
This story is impressive, and at times - amazing. Thank you very much for writing it. It is a path I have not seen taken or at the very least not taken nearly as well as what you've written here. I hope to see more of this work in the future as you've sold me on being a reader of your works.
| Anonymus Evildoer chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Definitely one of the best fanfic's I've read. Your attention to detail is impeccable, and the plot is original as well. I'm hoping to see some stunts worthy of Dr. Frankenstein at some point, but if you decide to have Harry follow a different course of action I'll be interested in seeing the results.
I'm not particularly bothered by your treatment of Ron (as much as I like him as a character, I do have to admit he would react like that), but I do hope you'll give him a few chances to redeem himself.
| Aoi24 chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
This has got to be one of the most creative stories I have read in a very long time.
And so well written too! *gushes* Bravo!
| malcolm75k chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
A very worthy entry. :)
I liked the insights into human nature, and the analysis of Draco Malfoy and what makes him tick. You do well with all of the characters, really, especially Harry's parents.
I also love Harry's sales pitch for science. I've tried to convey that sense of amazed wonder before to others. You succeed admirably.
I found this telling, adding in McGonnagal's comments about obliviation: "I thought he was going to c-crucify you." Harry doesn't stutter. Perhaps another hint? Crucio/crucify?
I think your greatest challenge in a fic like this is to come up with a rational explanation of magic. :) Most writers would just wave their hands at the subject, not trying to explain its intricacies or designing experiments to reveal those intricacies. You have set yourself quite the task.
If I might, I would recommend looking into brane theory and perhaps n-space. You could explain some of the levitation effects as pushing away, in the 11th dimension, of the brane projecting gravity into our universe.
Perhaps magic as an awareness of n-dimensional space, where a wizard is capable of perceiving and projecting force at right angles to reality. This would handle folding space, apparating, portkeys and other such happenings.
If you posit branes containing alternate realities, you can use this to handle transfiguration and even the time-turners should you wish to keep the arrow of time inviolate.
Transfiguration, with its slow bluring from one form to another and its eventual return to a subjects original shape could be considered pulling a fragment of an alternate reality, separated from this one in a non-trivial nth dimension, through that nth axis and into this reality. The blurring portion is the cycling through the other almost alternate realities until the target shape is found. The "stretching" will eventually snap back, unless made permanent by "snipping" from that alternate reality.
Time travel could be handled by temporarily shifting oneself from one time-space brane to another where events were just a bit behind, almost as if 2 moves were playing with a 5 minute delay in them. This would leave the arrow of time intact and avoid issues with paradox. Most wizards wouldn't have the framework to tell the difference.
You can handle conservation of energy, and even the 3rd law of entropy, by being able to push and pull matter/energy from alternate branes, not so much destroying or creating something, but moving it between universes through the 11th dimension.
Theories are also in play where there is such a thing as a free lunch, wherein people in this brane are attempting to spawn another brane, or universe if you will, that will expand in its own big-bang. Positing the ability to create and draw from such universes will allow a way around the rule as well.
There are drawbacks, though - the reality of the science is such that to open a portal to another dimension large enough for nano-machines to pass through would require a sub-atomic accelerator capable of bringing particles to a significantly large fraction of light speed and then inject particles that repulse matter into the singularity breach thus created. Such a device would be the diameter of our asteroid belt.
There would also be the problem with control, and knowing the state of atoms and molecules to such a fine degree.
Perhaps power output could be handled by being able to exploit natural balances - like two long poles pressing against each other with great force. You couldn't pull them apart along their axis, but if you tapped them at the point they met perpendicular to their axis, you would release a lot of energy.
Anyway, keep up the good work. This has joined some of my favorite stories near the top of the list. This, Wastelands of Time, Phantom Limb...All quite well written.
| vabbie chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
In medieval times, it was possible for the winner of a feud to gain the loser’s property due to the doctrine of “might makes right,” so Harry might have inherited ownership of Bellatrix LeStrange because he vanquished Voldemort in mortal combat ((Harry’s home life is TOO PEACEFUL, so he’ll need a complication or two to make his summers more difficult and hectic)). In all fairness, the Ministry has never awarded Harry for defeating Voldemort a decade ago, so they might see giving him Bellatrix as fair compensation for his deeds and won't cost the Ministry a knut. Who wouldn’t want a daughter of the House of Black as a vassal and/or concubine?
Plus, it’d be funny if Harry treated Bellatrix more like a pet instead of a servant or prisoner.
Harry: “Bad, Bellatrix! Bad! We don’t attack guests!”
(Harry sprits water at Bellatrix as punishment)
Hermione: "Harry, why is there a woman sleeping in the doghouse in your backyard?"
Harry: "Because she was a bad girl and lost her bedroom previliges."
| Garahs chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Interesting. Just as an fyi, Wizards are still very advanced even if it doesn't seem like it. In the beginning of the third book, Harry spots a scale model of the galaxy.
I'm a little disappointed that Ron, Quidditch expert, was apparently unable to explain the intrecacies of Quidditch strategy. In a game that can last literally days, 150 points isn't necessarily a deal breaker and watching the other seeker is a bad idea as they can feint.
| ryuou chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Will be waiting impatiently
| anothergoneagain chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
No matter what, you must keep going! Your story is unique and well written. I look forward to watching you keep those balls in the air ;-)
| Darkandus chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
I am truly glad you have written this fanfiction, it brightens up my day considerably. Not to mention giving me the strenght to continue searching for the diamonds among the vast mounds of rubbish plots and bad storytelling that litter this place.
I'm glad you found my remark about how lungs and tea are not meant to interact oddly inspiring, I hope it serves you well as a small token of my appreciation.
Thank you for the time and effort you put into this story.
| phily chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Wow, this is good !
In hindsight, I can't believe Rationalist!Harry wasn't done far more frequently, with all those little inconsistencies adding up, there is a whole lot of those ...
Even if the earlier chapters were a bit thin story-wise, I think they were necessary because Harry is quite drastically different from canon. They were still a very good read (and I rarely laugh as hard as I did in chapter five).
I'm looking forward to the next chapters, especially how Harry and Hermione get get along ... I think this Harry might be able to out-bookworm/rationalize HER, which would inverse a lot of their relationship - then there is Harry meeting Hogwarts (the irrationality of it!), meeting that hat, learning magic and having time to experiment on it ...
Oh yeah, there is definitely fun to be had this way, keep going !
| Coral Skipper chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Thank you for pointing out the stupidity of quidditch. I like the premise and execution of the story, but it's still nice to hear someone else finds quidditch to be a badly put together game.
| Eleanna chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
I love this. Your Harry is one of the most original "Harry's" I've read. He's brilliant, yet still has the insecurities of a 11 year old.
I liked how you presented Petunia. And the brief description of this fic "What if Petunia had married higher up the food chain..." When I read that I about lost it.
I look forward to Harry's encounter with Snape. In the back of my mind is "if you can't dazzle them with brilliance, baffle them with bullshit" and wonder who will be dazzling and who will be baffling.
I hope you will address Harry's encounter with Hermione, the Hat, and Dumbledore. I can just see Dumbledore getting a migrain over Harry.
Just curious if this will be a "manipulating Dumbledore" story or not. I like your treatment of McGonagal. Even in the books she's always came across to me as an intelligent, caring, emotionally conservative individual.
Your characterization of Ron Weasley does seem appropriate. He's such waste of space.
Look forward to more.
| eggplant purple chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
where is the great Hermione Granger... I was so looking forward to meeting her in this chapter. I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Sorcyress chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Dear Less Wrong:
I'm not sure I can adequately express how much I adore this story. I may have literally shouted "no!" when I realized I was on the last chapter, and there was no more for me to read (yet).
This may very well be the finest fanfiction I've ever read. Thank you, so much.
| KGB chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
I really like this story. Most stories with a genius are a load of crap, because they just assume the genius is right most of the time without giving a plausible explanation why that person is right. I really like your genius Harry, because he at least tries to explain his reasoning through a logical method.
I think the totally disconnection of the magical world from the normal world is the best shown when Harry is in Gringotts, but the way Draco didn't know Harry was kidding about killing Luna was a nice illustration too.
I however don't get why Lucius would think would Snape trusts the person knowing about Lucius weakness, unless Lucius is recommending to have Snape obliviate or otherwise remove the person mentioned.
| Meandering Fox chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Still very funny, but also REALLY interesting. This chapter was nice and meaty... I feel like it could lead to a truly epic story. Please continue.
| Nighetray chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
very cool keep it up...
| wolf550e chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
It was hilarious and intelligent, I love it.
| Alrissa chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
That order of chaos thing? Please tell me it's the twins.
Otherwise your story is going to go off on a timetravel tangent with harry sending agents of himself into the past to off the Rat and entice himself into a self fulfilling circle of world conquest...
Or perhaps I'm just hungry.
I LIKE a properly worded intrigueby the way. I stink at it, but I like reading about it. (Mind you I'm not a rationalist, the closest thing i come to that is lamenting on how everyone is comunicating so imprcisely when using spoken language.)
| R-Gomeni chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Wow... I can see where the 'slightly mad' assessment comes from, but Harry's monologue was worded so brilliantly that it made me want to go out there and become a scientist. Overall, your separation from canon can only get better. Should be awesome!
| DarkPencil chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
wow. well done.
Slytherin!Harry (if he goes into that house or not is irrelevant) is hard to write well, and I'm impressed.
Draco generally sides with Harry for retarded reasons, its refreshing to see him have an actual brain )
| jonez227 chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
every story i've read where harry is extremely smart have been some of the best, and your story is no different. it is amazing to read. i love how you can make it so serious like real life scenes while adding in great humor to those same scenes. i just hope that you don't flake out like some people who write these stories and decide to abandon it. it really has tons of potential to become one of the most popular harry potter stories on here. so i salute you and wish you luck with your writing.
| TardisIsTheOnlyWayToTravel chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Harry gave Draco a puzzled look. "If I lied the first time, I'm not going to tell you the truth just because you ask twice."
There was a certain pause as Draco absorbed this.
"You're so completely going to be in Slytherin."
"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."
And the bti where the reality-altering drinks kicked in? I almost fell out of my chair laughing.
I love the conversation between Harry and Draco; you'd think a fic would have picked up on all this before, but no. this is brilliant.
And I love Draco's thoughts later, and the contents of the letters.
Harry is scary brilliant, and he's totally going to rule Britain just to put it all in order, even if he then gives it away later :D
| Ershistalos chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
This chapter was also quite funny. I loved the soda of improbable hilarity!
| Edengrave chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Incredibly ambitious. But can you carry it off? It appears you can, as so far, the execution is "flawless" to my eyes.
Thank you for this delicious chapter.
| cheekylildevil chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Wow, this was fantastic. It really was. Congratulations.
Really, that's all I can say, oh and congrats on the reviews.
| michelle chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
Wonderful. I mean really you have real talent for this. I can't wait to see how this progresses.
| bounder7985 chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
picking my jaws off the floor and...
this is a direction ive never seen a harry potter fic go and im loving it.
if you think about it, the plot is so concrete, i cant see a gap anywhere.
now i have to wait for more!
| Wulfenbach chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
The return letter... I'm not quite sure what to make of it.
| SensiblyTainted chapter 7 . 3/24/2010
So, I hope you know I am forced to read your chapters a few times to catch all the subtle clues. I was shocked that Pettigrew as pet rat was so casully flung into the story. I am dying to know what happened and if it is now impossible to prove Sirius' innocence. Boy is Harry going to freak when he finds out about Sirius being imprisioned without a trial. Anyway, I really liked the similarities between Draco and Harry. Draco is a weird reflection of Harry. He talks the talk, but when actually presented with the situation to do the things he says, well, I don't think he would find it as easy as all that. Saying you will rape a girl, horrible as it is, is a whole different kettle of fish of actually doing it. The screaming, crying, fighting... Not so clean as the image, I would think. And in canon we see Draco hesitate to kill Dumbledore, so perhaps like Harry, he will find his ideas do not quite match up wiht reality. Hopefully he can adapt as gracefully and we do see hints that he might with his letter to his dad. Speaking of, so Severus spoke to Harry in teh potio's shop? I wonder if he knew it was Harry. And why the heck would he spill the beans about Draco like that. I am in agony to read your next chapter. I suppose it will be the introducton of Hermione. Well, good luck! You have MANY fans hoping your muse doesn't leave you.
| Hakkai Suiren chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Your story... is absolutely chilling. I can't wait for the next update.
| Dreylin chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Sheer brilliance. I must have more, in vast quantity if possible.
| Bob The Mercenary chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
One can feel very small when they think such big thoughts. I am truly interested in seeing where Harry goes with this story.
Thank you for sharing your story with us and I look forward to more in the future.
| xDelta-Ha-chanx chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Mad as a hatter! despise the well used cliche of Smart!harry, You've rejuvenated this well worn idea, truly a phoenix rising from the ashes of defeat!
I await your next update with baited breath.
| BionicLegs chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
There is a feeling you get sometimes, only sometimes, when you happen upon an exceptional example of a craft you love. The whole of your being quivers with an inarticulate joy, taut with an excitement you don't immediately recognize. Upon realizing what it is you've found, that joy becomes something profound, something that resonates with you for as long as you exist. It is the fact that the world you know has had something precious added to it, something whose existence makes you days a little weary from that point on. That, is exactly what I have found in this story and I, cannot for the life of me, begin to properly thank you. All I can say is that this is a joy to read and that I cannot wait for more.
| 1Batman4u chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
McGonagall let it slip that there’s a prophecy about Harry, so he might befriend Sybill Trelawney as a character foil for McGonagall and to see if he can scientifically quantify her “heightened temporal awareness.” Harry expressed admiration of Luna Lovegood, so Trelawney’s oddness might be seen as a refreshing change of pace from the other professors at Hogwarts.
Everyone in Britain watches DOCTOR WHO, so Harry has a decent model on how to study Seers and the field of divination. In the series, Time Lords have a extrasensory perceptions related to time, space, and energy that allow them to travel the space/time continuum with minimal risk, avoid paradoxes, and intuitively judge probability scenarios.
In theory, a Seer like Trelawney could gain a low-level version of Time Lord abilities once she gains a better understanding of how her “heightened temporal awareness” functions in relationship to the localized space/time continuum.
| Sean Mulligan chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Another great chapter. I just added you to my alert list. What does Harry mean, he won't turn into his mother? Whats wrong with Lily? I don't think that Draco would be thinking about raping someone at the age of 11. Harry is being a little hard on Quidditch. The beaters also play an important part by protecting the seeker from the bludgers and setting bludgers on the other seekers. The seekers also have an incentive to wait until they already have a high score before they catch the snitch, since it appears the margins of victory count toward winning the Quidditch Cup at Hogwarts. Being a Seeker also seems to require a lot of flying skill and good reflexes.
| DarkHuntress01 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
very interesting - can't wait to see what happens next. your writing is absolutely brilliant! i love your voice, especially the way it comes out of Harry.
| Balatros chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Hey I just want to say that I enjoy your story Greatly, As someone of above average intelligence(though I am in No means exceptional) who has come across certain problems that Harry did in your retelling of this story, I can appreciate it and empathize. Also having Read and studied Dr. Cialdini's Textbook under the name you used instead of its original Title Influence: The Psychology of Persuasion. I understand Many of the points you make.
However and I say this not in a negative way, for I Greatly enjoy your writing, the conversation you have between Draco and Harry at the train station.. It terrified me, the logical and Reason'd argument you have towards world domination and treatment of People(while appropriate for the character and the story) is; to put it simply Terrifying. The rationality behind what you are saying while valid can have underlying effects. and while I am not in the least trying to tell you how to write the story I am a little concerned as to what people can take from the message. It brings to mind the justification of Hitler/Robert Kajuga(leader of the Rwandan Genocide)I would at least ask that you Consider Changing the rating of the story to M(even though i know this in reality changes nothing) because If this story were to be read by teens and people who do not properly think things through. even if they do not understand what they are reading and are just reading for a good story(which it is and I will continue reading) will at least subconsciously pick up on some of the queues to what you are writing.
Now I do not wish to come down on your writing style, I would merely request that you make some of the more Visceral details..downplayed unless you increase the rating of the story to reflect the content. Either way I will continue to read your story because it is rare that I get to read something like this that interests me as much as yours does.
Thank you for your time in Reading this review and Once again I hope you do not Think this is a flame. I have nothing but respect for your writing and the plot you have come up with.
| Hahukum Konn chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Harry has some -incredible- fortitude not just leaving and slamming the door behind him after hearing Draco at 11 years old casually discuss raping a girl.
I have to say I LOVED Harry's speech about science and its implications. Kudos to you on that part.
| Harriverse chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
"You can never have enough books," -doesn't everyone think this way? Personally, booksellers across my state cried when I discovered the internet. My nearly non-existent bank account sighed in relief. The library just was glad I stopped racking up late-fees which were offset by the cost of sending the letters out. I find your Harry has taken a giant leap away from comedy in this chappie, just as you said he would. Fortunately you have already established him as a non-child already, as in he actually 'thinks things through' rather than just having them pop out already established. What I mean is you're developing him from the ground floor up instead of just having him descend from the penthouse. It gives him more depth than usual. Then again, his way of looking at the world also is unusual. For all his jokes about running the world, his hugs for his mother, his covered face-the ideas he espoused when he realized the way Draco was taught to think of his world and his decision to work to change that mentality stamped him as the classic hero. Will he be the classic hero who lives happily ever after or the modern hero that either dies or lives miserably? How rational is your world? Darn it! Fanfiction is not supposed to make me think this hard!
| Patricka chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Best chapter so far, by a mile. Before, Harry seemed rather pretentious and the whole "I'm-going-to-take-over-the-world" Harry seemed more like part of the humor than something serious. With this chapter, however, things have suddenly changed so that now, I COULD see your Harry feasibly doing something like that, and not doing so instantly and easily like I've seen happen in so many other stories.
The humor in your story is great, but it's this chapter that moved it up, in my mental list, from "oh this is a nice story, and great for a quick laugh or two - I can't wait to see where this goes," to a "Hey, this is actually starting to get to a good plot behind the humor - Give me the next chapter now!" category.
I can't wait to see where this story goes.
| Dormant Account 24 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Seven chapters and 850 reviews? That tells you something right there. This chapter is no exception. The conversation between Harry and Draco was probably one of the best written pieces of dialogue I've read in HP fanfic. Even if it was a tad old for children, nonetheless it was brilliant. The fact that Harry recognizes Draco as being completely amoral and nonetheless attempts to save him in order to save his future victims is simply perfect.
Thank you for writing this.
| Wedge12 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Great story so far.
I particularly like your characterization of Draco Malfoy. I'm not a fan of his character due to most authors writing him as either completely evil with no conscience, or as a misunderstood, conflicted sob story. I look forward to finding out if Harry is able to encourage his growth into a human being, or if he is forced to abandon him as a lost cause.
| 94685118984 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
What an amusing idea. I've certainly seen !Genius Harry done plenty of times before, but this has to be one of the most entertaining approaches I've seen. The focus on the methodology of scientific thought, combined with mention of some of the larger moments of illogic in the book (the Seeker in Quiddich and it's complete destruction of any sort of meaningful game balance for example) provide a fuller bodied story then is usual. I hope to see more.
| ImUpToNoGood chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
OH! This is truly delightful, getting more so page by page. And with that ending, I am SO hoping forward to an understanding between Severus and Harry.
I LOVED Harry's lure to Draco. I loved how you kept them in character, and made them real, and gave us a chance to see Draco in all his functionally evil glory, without him actually being evil. Product of his culture indeed.
I love how Harry thinks, and I absolutely agree with him about Quidditch. 50 points for the snitch, sure. I can live with that. 150 just creates a hero of the seeker, as if that it the sole function of the game.
You are amazing, and I would bear your children if I still could. (Well, you got a marriage proposal, so this is the next step, right?)
Thanks for writing and making my day just that much better.
| red-jacobson chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Now that is an interesting twist! And, I'm not ashamed to admit that my blood ran cold during parts of the conversation between Harry and Draco.
| OrionTheHunter chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Interesting concept. I look forward to seeing where you take it. Thanks for writing.
| LddStyx chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
| firelordeg chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
i love this story thank you for sharing another fantastic chapter please continue to update a.s.a.l.a.
| Puidwen chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
eh, an all right chapter
| squiditch chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I just found this story and love the angle you've taken. Will be interested to see what develops with Draco and Ron and am eagerly looking forward to reading about the sorting and first meeting with Snape.
| Katamabob chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Great chapter! I always thought that the snitch was a ridiculous part of Quidditch, although it did add fun to the books. And I like Harry's explanations of Science and its Wonders. Draco seemed rather nice at times, but at others I wanted to kill the little brat. Rape Luna? I love Luna :( It would kill her soul...
I think Harry's a bit too superior and condescending. I love Ron :( Harry was being a bit mean, and I think you made Ron a bit OOC.
But I liked this, can't wait to read more!
| SeaStones chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Because of you I went out and bought several books on rationality. I'm now much poorer, yet richer for it.
Good update. I love how Harry handled Draco. Also, I think the Comed-Tea can be used to discover another person's belief system. See what surprises them and what doesn't, yeah?
I'm looking forward to Harry meeting Hermione! Really looking forward to that. And the twins. That'll be fun.
| SomeGuyFawkes chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Very nice, entertaining and humorous chapter. Thanks!
Even had a good book recommendation.
"Maybe she was distracted," - LOL
}} Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing...
Dang, I was going to use that... :D
Comed-Tea... brilliant scene.
Thanks for the update.
| Zoroz chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
| TegwenielWestwind chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent addition to the story. I love the scene with the cans of soda. And keeping the friendship going between Draco and Harry over Harry and Ron makes so much sense in your story.
| that1 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
That chapter was a home run. Do it again!
| emanon chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent chapter. I about died from laughter over the Quibbler headline. But what really impressed me was how you switched from Humor to Drama so seamlessly, that I had to jump up to the top of the browser to see how the story was classified. This promises to be one hell of a story. Thanks.
| jesusfreak100percent chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I love this story! I just found it now, but I'll definitely continue following it.
I've been looking up a lot of things. I already knew about the power of conformity, and I'd heard of the theory of the bystander effect, but now I actually know it's been experimented on and proven. Some things were too mathematical for me to completely understand, but I got the basics - the Bayes theorem, for example. Wikipedia can get confusing sometimes.
I didn't quite get the letters between Draco and his father, and, more importantly, Draco's reaction. Could you explain that to me?
Also - did astronauts really leave a sign on the moon?
| bloocheeze chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
It feels like this story is getting a lot darker and more twisted. I approve BD Awesome as always and wow, you update really fast :o
| Anaerobie chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Whoa, it was rational. More couldn't make it.
I think I can't describe the First Law like that it's more : you shouldn't needlessly and endlessly power boosting your character less you make them mary-sue or gary-stu or God. It's more like the First Law of Writing : "For that art needs plot, intrigue, and confrontation". And you can't seriously enjoy Bulldozer wrecking houses because it's always the Bulldozer that wins.
An effectively made chapter, with very good confrontational point like a good discusses. The talk between Draco and Harry was like fencing in my opinion.
I find the headline and reaction refreshing and good come-back at slash little fangirl.
The canned good that is comed-tea is a very good idea (I want desperately one already).
I like the 'Afterwards' as ending, it let gently take down the chapter and give an inside finality on what is Harry : an insane scientist (one of the best that are).
Your exposition of pureblood ideology is a classical one but what is remarkable is your insight on them we are noble so we can't make wrong to the other that are less than us and which are here to serve us.
It make a new light on the blood traitor status of the Weasley for example.
Also the remark "Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience" make Harry like a wannabe dictator or dark should have first thought to improve said magical government, no ?(overthrown is a first step, I know)
I also very much liked the rivalry of speech that translate as improvement by practice (because Harry couldn't stop himself to explain and Draco couldn't stop from reciprocity).
Also Luna as a future love interest is interesting as she is the madness, and Hermione is the common sense, to him.
The two-fold communication between Draco and his father is a very good one too.
| LoireLoa chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This was awesome. I LOVE the logic.
| faithaholic chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I LOVED this chapter. I'm about to explode from loving it so much. Thank you.
| AngelForm chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Loved the line:
Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience.
Some very interesting thought brought up in this.
Are you actually going to remove seekers?
| The French Dark Lord chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Just luv it!
| MartinDeShade chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow. Seeing the purebloods through a slice in ancient history is very enlightening.
| blue artemis chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
That was really amazingly disturbing. But it does show both boys as products of their upbringings.
| Heidinanookie chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Say, did I mention in my last review that you have a talent for comedy? Well, if it somehow slipped from my account, I'm saying it now! You've done it again. I'm rolling on the floor with laughter. The Comed-Tea thing is a really creative idea, to start with, and just like Harry I kept wondering what could surprise me now that I know the trick... And then this! Harry getting Draco pregnant. Priceless headline.
omg, and Harry is really aiming to become quite the dictator! "Note to self: Overthrow government of magical Britain at earliest convenience."
okay, I though Harry was a little... touched in the head but the real psycho here clearly is Draco.
Anyway, great chapter! I can't wait to see what house Harry got sorted into in the end.
Also, it's brilliant that you really have frequent updates for your story. I'm looking forward to the next one!
| Techpriest of Tzeentch chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Awe inspiring on levels of scientific knowhow that I havent even begun to imagine the implications of on my own.
| Violet Shadows chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Awesome, the juxtaposition between the humor right before switching into a pretty dark conversation about rape and bigotry was impressive - it would have been better if it was capable of being darkly humorous (see Nugar's People Lie if you want a good example), but altogether I think it shows excellent potential at melding both gripping plot and delightful humor.
| Vah4 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This is awesome.
| Maethoriel Raina chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Brilliant! Chapter 5 made me cry with laughter! I love this story, though some of the more in depth technical parts go right over my head, it's great and a new spin on stories where Harry questions the flaws in the wizarding world.
| Greener chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Oh, this is most excellently written. The back-and-forth conversations and arguments are witty and funny. I'm especially enjoying the dialog that Draco and Harry have, and look forward to their future interactions - and future chapters.
| Dreamweaver Mirar chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Looking forward to your next update.
| PiecesOfSerendipity chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Getting intense in this chapter now, and the comic element of this story i think, has bled away to the more serious, intense part.
I can honestly say, that I didn't understand ecerything he said to Draco and what exactly happened but I understood most of it. It was certainly quite deep into the plot, especially with the inclusion of world optimizimation. I'm worried that in the next chapter the humour will be gone - I know that whatever comedy i imagine in the future is going to be overshadowed with the intense drama and darker tones going on here. You are brilliant at writing homour so i hope that doesn't happen.
Also, about world optimization. I'm a bit ishy about that because, whilst the world preforming at optimal capacity is quite good, it is only good in theory, in my opinion. What if someone wanted to do something stupid? Or disagreed to what he wants? The road to hell to paved with good intentions and whilst Harry has a noble goal, it might become twisted until the end result is a world restristed and completely taking away all the progress in the wizard world towards freedom. I worry about his dark rages as well.
| pfeil chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Brilliant way of adjusting Draco. Far better than the usual crap that's either Slash or making the Malfoys just "tragically misunderstood".
I like the idea of seeing the further communication between Draco and his father.
And, of course, you hint that the next chapter will be Hermione's introduction, which I've been looking forward to.
| RiverGold chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Well. This is nice. I LOVED the madam Malkin scene, and much of the mcGonagall role. Can't wait to see more of both. Also, nerdy Harry is very well done.
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| yoyoente chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
*cracks up* Of COURSE Harry would get Severus Snape to tell him about Lucius Malfoy. My only question is whether or not Severus knew it was HARRY POTTER he was speaking to, or if he was just talking. And if he WAS just talking...well that doesn't bode too well for his level of discretion.
"Boy-Who-Lived gets Draco Malfoy pregnant." *snorts*
| Illution chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I'm starting to love this story. It's just so different than anything I have read. It's completely realistically presented also.
Although when I think about possible ways to write fanfic 450 is a large number but it's just a dot on a line. Out of the 450k fics out there your writing sets you apart from others.
I read some of logic!harry science!harry fics before but you sir presented a great characterization.
I had some skepticism about the fic before but now I can see a (possible) clear direction.I no longer think of this as just well written a run of the mill humor fic with a reoccurring theme that the author will likely run out of motivation and abandon.
Although the idea of Harry taking over the world was introduced as humor, this new chapter had made the entire possibility REAL to me.
This Harry can really achieve world domination and it will be a grand journey with plenty of obstacles on the way. The story is still catagorized as humor but it's turning towards a more serious leaf while keeping the same types of humor in tact. I hope for more Epicness :D
| DvorakQ chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Chapter 7 was really good. I really liked the abrupt transition from humor to seriousness. This fic has the most potential out of all the fanfics I've read in the past year. Please keep up the quality work!
| Vilkath chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Funny and dark stuff, sadly pretty true. Even ignoring the blatant ability to ignore the law Draco has nearly any wizard could easily rape some one, oblivate them and walk away from it. JKR really messed up with how unbeatable oblivates were, even a joke like Lockhart could use them on battle hardened wizards who fought werewolves, vampires etc. People who should know they forgot something, especialy if any villager, friend etc who was with them durring the heroics would know Lockhart was lying.
That also means not only does the Oblivate work on wizards with no real chance of resisting, but no counter curse exist to really restore the memories or they would of done it. It is a dark and dangerous path to take some the magic in HP seriously, to the point where if it really worked like they said it did you have to wonder how the world still turns and it's not all chaos. Oblivate isn't even an unforgivable spell!
As for the 'balance of power' bit I think it's over rated. Just because Harry is smarter/better does not mean all his enemies have to suddenly be better. To a point I think it's anoying when it happens for no reason other than harry is better. Idiots that lost to dumb luck and an untrained child in canon like Harry should not pose a real threat to anyone with proper training, intelegence and conviction. Half of the death eaters fearsome ability to succeed was the fact their enemies did not use lethal force and requires some insane amount of proof to even convict them. Catching them red handed at the scene of the crime wasn't even enough to get them in jail some times!
Given there couldn't be more than a hundred or two death eaters at the worst due to the limited british pureblood gene pool if every conflict merely killed one or two death eaters per raid in return fire the uprising would run out of men in no time. And while Voldemort is powerful in himself he couldn't be half as effective as a single man running around killing people. Plus I have to believe a group of wizards could take him down easily, even if not kill him he could be contained. HP does not deal well with multiple spells from multiple angles at one time.
Even in canon Voldemort would run away from a large group of people, despite being stronger than all them indivualy.
| Looney the coon chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I love how you are applying logic and science to the magical world. This is one of the best stories I've read all year. Keep writing!
| Cassandra30 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Poor Draco. Now he truly has a dilemma. I really like this chapter. A rational harry explains a lot of things very well indeed.
| Darkwill0w chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I love it!
Harry potter implementing the scientific method to everything, what a brilliant idea.
Reading this reminds me of reynmans video, The Pleasure of Finding Things Out which made a large contribution to my interest in science.
Btw, i just though about it and the process of fanfiction writing is often scientific with writers, beta readers and reviews
Good luck and keep up the good work.
| phoebe turner chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
i loved it!
| drang88 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Incredible...I have no words...but I'm definitely going to have to re-read this chapter, and other chapters, a few times over in order to understand just about everything that you've touched on here...
| Nothing Gold chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Another amazing chapter for this story. Harry's finally on his way to Hogwarts, his Dad is indeed awesome, the humour is still very humourous...
and I almost feel guilty about how much I'm loving Draco and Lucius. Their relationship and view of the world is fascinating and I'm very curious how involved Harry will get with them and what effect he will have on the Malfoy's.
Anyway, this is one of the best written stories I've read this year and I'm really hoping to see more soon.
| SJ chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent synopsis on why the Death Eaters are as the are. But looking back on the chapter I really enjoyed the Petunia/Hary scene. I also thought there should be a reason why Petunia (and Vernon) hated magic. Not just because it was "other". In my imagination I thought that perhaps Mr. & Mrs. Evan died mysteriously. Killing Curse anyone? Or perhaps James and Co. made Petunia's wedding hellacious by playing magical tricks.
Anyway, I like your explanation on why Petunia is not a fan of magic.
Looking foward to more.
| hjcallipygian chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow, this story is so good! I loved the comedy, that was great, and I love the interesting game that Harry is playing with Draco Malfoy. While I'm a fan of Ron Weasley, I do agree with your direction of the story here - Ron's not nearly mature enough to get on with this version of Harry, yet. (I do feel that, eventually, Harry could do something that proves to Ron that he doesn't have to always understand, but he should still listen to and follow Harry, but that's likely years away.)
Can't wait to see him run into Hermione finally. It'll be interesting to see if McGonagall's prediction was correct.
Also interested in this Order of Chaos thing. Sounds like the Weasley Twins to me. )
| MogtheGnome chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Harry Potter pulling a Carl Sagan on Draco Malfoy.
This story is fucking amazing. Keep it up.
| Madame de Victoire chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This is a wonderful piece of writing and I eagerly await every new update. Hopefully you won't run out of steam.
| Paralelsky chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
It's incredible how this chapter can take me from giggling maddness to complete seriousness in 1 second flat. It's simply amazing. And I'm loving it!
Have a nice day,
| CheshireLion chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I have to say that while I don't normally deviate from certain pairings I'm glad I took the chance with this one. You are writing an amazing story and I can fully appreciate the use of logic, one of my favorite subjects.
| kail chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
almost too good
| DarkHeart81 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Interesting chapter. For a while I thought Draco was on the side of good then wow. Great chapter! Though I'm sure I wasn't the only one that was expecting Hermione to show up in this chapter. And it's very odd that you completely skipped over the train ride and sorting ceremony. Are those going to be done as a flashback?
| darqueside chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I rarely write reviews but when I come across a fic that is both well written and seems completely new to me I have to say something. We done and please continue the awesome work...
| Potterworm chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
| FaerieGirl301 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I couldn't stop reading. Great story. :)
| DaveInACave chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
If you can continue to follow this up then I will bow in your presence because I have never read a fic so well steeped in the science of science itself before. I was a looking forward to what this looked like in the first few chapters, but now that I see the SCOPE of exactly how much Harry is going to turn the wizarding world on it's side I absolutely can't wait for more. Hell I LOVED Cialdini's Influence, but to see it put into practice in both subtle and not so subtle ways was wonderful. Turning Draco by offering him a piece of the pie was a stroke of brilliance, especially after espousing in clinical terms exactly how big a pie it is. And "The line of Francis Bacon and the blood of enlightenment."? Brilliant. Exactly the kind of thing to speak to Draco's aristocratic mindset. The only question now though, is whether Draco can pick up what Harry sees as the "True" scientific mindset or whether he will pick up just enough to use his new "power" for his own ends.
I can only begin to imagine how Harry will react to the Hat.
I love how you played up the subtleties in the letter writing, it was brilliantly well done.
| Aries The Ram chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Still a fan, enjoying the chapters and the deep meanings between the conversations are nice and endearing. Hoping for more soon.
| graynavarre chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow, I had to reread that about 3 or 4 times to understand it all.
Harry and Draco together (with perhaps Hermione, Severus Snape, and Luna) could remake the wizarding world. I loved how Harry lured Draco in and snagged him and how Draco realized what Harry was doing.
Hm, what potions store incident? Did I miss something?
I am figuring that the Lords of Chaos are the Wesley twins.
I can't wait until Harry mets Severus.
Looking forward to more.
| mumimeanjudy chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I love what Harry says about quidditch, though it could be argued that the chasers, et al, were there to amuse the crowd until the snitch had been spotted and was being pursued by the seekers. As far as seeking goes, it seems to involve luck more than skill. And Ron seems to have lost Harry the same way that Draco did in canon - by trying to dictate who he should associate with. I am loving this story!
| greywizard-dumblemort chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Its astounding how consistently the quality of this fic increases with every consecutive chapter. You've greatly improved your already brilliant writing and I'm all the more looking forward to future updates.
Keep up the good work
| Garm88 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I seriously love this story, its so much better than any other that tries to bring a scientific view to the Magical World in the Harry Potter Universe by an order of magnitude. And I can't wait to see what happens when Fred and George finally get a hold of Harry (that's who I'm guessing just approached him at the end).
| David M. Potter chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
may the muse be with you! bravo...
| theodora.pyrene chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
An inarticulate exclamation - can't think of anything appropriate to express enough approval of your amazing chapter. I think you are turning me into a sycophant this story is so good...
HARRY wanting to remove the snitch from quidditch!
Harry choosing Draco over Ron for all the usual reasons and yet not. Ultimately Draco's intelligence trumps Ron's warmth without trying.
Then the masterful Temptation of Harry Potter and reciprocal Temptation of Draco Malfoy. I've NEVER read a fanfic that so clearly outlined the base doctrine of the Death Eater stance as well as your Draco-discusses-raping-Luna monologue, nor contextualized it so well as Draco being trained to objectify the other as not people.
And Harry's answer starts with trying to save one victim to quickly wanting to save them all, but not in a Gryffindor attack Draco sort of way, but in a combined Slytherin/Ravenclaw appeal to power, knowledge, pride, & REASON. What better way to PROVE that Muggles have their own version of power to a Muggle-ignorant Pureblood than with a picture of the Moon walk? What better proposition than the mastery of magic at the genetic level? And that Harry has caused the smallest (and most logical) fissure between Draco & Lucius at the Train (Day One so to speak) is fantastic (and very very encouraging for your reader).
But the absolute best line in the whole chapter is:
"If you can learn to think of yourself as a human instead of a wizard then you can train and refine your powers as a human."
With all its implications...
Oh and if Luna is a seer than does it mean this will be an HPDM bottom!draco mpreg? lol
| Vienna Marx chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
You have no idea how much my brain hurts every time I read a chapter of this story. But don't worry! It's a good hurt! Lol. It's fascinating how you've managed to bring science and rationality into the totally irrational world of magic. I look forward to seeing how you further this story. I am particularly intrigued to see how Harry reacts to meeting Hermione. Keep up the fantastic work!
| iota0000 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Woot, plot! Love the darker direction this chapter took, especially Harry's horrified realization as to what type of society he was immersing himself in and the tug-of-war Harry and Draco are setting up with each other's wills and ambitions.
I just hope that this darker direction doesn't preclude the previous humor present in the story. The fact that the twins (or so I presume) greeted him in imitation of his earlier disguise following the portentous conversation with Draco at least provides some hope that you're planning to take up a dual-tone of humor and gravitas.
I cannot wait for the next chapter. Keep up the excellent work.
| Shadowface chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Very good chapter, I hope to see an update soon.
| Lady Shagging Godiva chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
It's good that Harry got Draco's view on things. I mean you can't really change it if you don't understand it, right?
I'm going to take a guess that the two in the winter scarves are the twins yes?
I wonder if he did met Snape in diagon alley.
Ron having an owl?
What happened to Scabbers?
Weasley's arriving same time as Harry in this story and canon, interesting.
Also what will he think of Hermione?
I fiqure it could go both ways. Either he likes her intelligence or is put off by her superior attitude and blind loyalty to authority fiqures, plus he said science is about saying you're wrong and thats very hard for her. But maybe he could corrupt her. Seeing as how this is a Harry P./Hermione G. story I'm going for the corrupting her.
| Darth Drafter chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
With a slow and steady plot progression combined with a mind bogglingly deep... (insert some words Less Wrong would use but I can't think of off the top of my head) ...this is one story I really want to see completed. Pardon me while I go chase that shiny thing.
| J-Kid chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Hold on here; I love this chapter (Draco Malfoy needs some serious help, though), but at the part where Harry's talking about muggles going to the moon, he points up to the moon in the sky. It's probably not even mid-afternoon yet (I think), so what's with that? Also, aren't they in the train station, away from the open sky? (My perception was that platform nine-and-three-quarters was underground.) Which is not to say that we can't see the moon sometimes during the day, but I would have nit-picked the timing to be a little bit too early.
I do love that scene though. And Luna Lovegood. If Harry meets her that much earlier I will be thrilled. I wonder if he'll try his hand at writing some articles for one of the wizarding newspapers or setting up his own Press? It would help spread his cause AND spread better information! :-D
| Rufus Shinra SFFS chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
That's just... brilliant!
The way you describe Draco, and make him a representation of all the failings of pure-blood thinking... great job ! Indeed, the Malfoys, the Lestranges, are as much the result of the wizard society as of their own choices. I really anticipate the next chapters, to see what shape their relation will have.
Hilariou at times, utterly and dramatically serious at others, that's great fanfiction for us, readers.
| Poirot chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I am at an absolute loss for words. I cannot wait until Harry meets Hermione. I hope my appreciation for your genius motivates you to update soon, :)
| mamapyjama chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
That got pretty philosophical in places - definitely not as light-hearted as the last chapter, but with some equally clever moments. Is the Order of Chaos the Weasley twins? I am really enjoying this - it is really rather different to most fic I have read before and I am intrigued to see where your story is going. Best wishes.
| MrRobertsIII chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
"Put him on a broomstick and tell him to catch the shiny thing..."
-Best explanation I've heard yet
Harry's jaw dropped. "You managed to spin that into an ice-cream?"
Draco nodded, looking every bit as smug as the feat deserved
-That had me laughing
"I only want power so I can get books."
-another good one!
Excellent, really excellent job with Draco.
| SuperiorShortness chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Again this was very well thought out... Thanks for the chapter, well done!
| hordac85 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Great work. I'm loving it. Very unique & very brain fuzzingly entertaining.
| Weasel Fu chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Sweet! I really liked your point about Draco not seeing his enemies as human and how that wasn't really too unusual in some parts of the world. A lot of people get all het up about the evils of the wizarding world, without taking into account that their flaws have all been done in real life and it isn't all the magic that makes them act that way, it's the fact that they're human. I think your Harry-Draco interactions were well done, they're both acting mature for their ages but it was very interesting seeing their competing points of view and methods for manipulation. I'm really looking forward to seeing what comes of that.
| japanese-jew chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Despite the title of the story, it doesn't really make any sense whatsoever. It is somewhat disconcerting to try to believe that you are bringing rationality to the Harry Potter universe while you are simultaneously destabilizing what little rationale it had in order to make it funny. Personally, I wish you had stuck with the "keeping it serious" way of writing this, but on the other hand, you are pleasing many, many people, so keep it up.
| Wonderbee31 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow, this Draco is an amoral little pig isn't he, and it looks like his indoctrination as taken quite well for the time being. Chilling how he was able to explain away exactly how he'd pretty much get away with what would happen if he got Luna in a fix, and then to see Harry take that moment, and use it to start to break a bit of the set path he had, I've got to say, Harry'll have his work cut out for him, but with his genius skills, he might just be able to make a difference. I do look forward to who all he might be friends with, not Ron it seems for now, as the lad is bound to not jump the tracks for now, but to see some Slytherins and other characters not used so much in fanfics.
| Bob-san chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
That final letter isn't particularly clear. I'm guessing that Lucy wants Drake to become a spy of sorts.
| Gogolu chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
It was Dark and amazing.
| poloport chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
A very good chapter
| Arkeus chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
that was quite impressive.
I have wanted a fic where Harry doesn't get brainwashed by Draco in 2.5 sec for a long time now (when it comes to him talking with Draco).
| shiro-wolfman-k chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This chapter was good, not nice, but really good, and that was not bashing, Ron was rather pushy, and they just meet each and other a few minutes ago, he did not have the right to tell or ask harry to choose who he will be friends.
But, the presence of the weasley's an hour more early (I believe that he was more earlier if I am not mistaken,) was a little too suspicious to me... too convenient, when they are always a few minutes before the train departs.
And there was when the humor died and opened the path to a more serious situation, yes, Harry did get really fast how "indoctrinated" was Draco, and that Draco was in fact, trying to temp him to their cause, I liked the fact that Harry is more quick whit his brain, and catch that, and even trown his own bait.
The poor Luna, but I do hope that you dont rape her... really, or mistreath her, but I can't see Harry whit a frienship whit her, at least right now, she could be a good friend, and a big frustration too.
It's seems that Draco learned something awful in that moment, I am not a big fan of "good Draco Malfoy" but in this moment, he is just a child that could be moulded or changed.
AND the order of chaos, well, the twins do in fact are really chaothic, but I could be really wrong, I am hoping to see how will he react to Hermione, and of course what will be the reaction of Draco when Harry appears whit her by her side.
| hhrforeverhhr chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
wow.. just wow. i love it, i frekin love it. your story is very well written, and i can't stop reading once i start, its just WOW. i have no other word to describe it.
| Meteoricshipyards chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I can see this Harry during his rant about science. Very, very interesting dynamics between Harry and Draco.
"improvised at top speed with the subtlety of a rampaging nundu." - wonderful imagery.
The Comed-Tea was great, too. I did a spit take when I saw the headline.
And I hope Harry can appreciate the lunacy of Luna when when they meet. (sigh, Harry/Luna shipper here).
Thanks for the story.
| jpdt19 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Harry quized 'snape' in Diagon alley?
Ouch, how can you not have included that scene :D
Very nice, please do carry on!
| riayi chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This fanfictions seems to keep getting better and better. The portrayal of both Draco Malfoy and his father (tangential as the last may be)adds a depth that is absent even from the original material, where they are little more than slightly three-dimensional characters that happen to have familial affiliations that somewhat outweigh their Dark allegiance. This Draco is a very smart, ambitious, and even likeable boy (if you don't mind the amorality), where he is often portrayed in fanfiction as a near-idiot that is without any redeeming qualities, or any justification for his actions (much like he appears in the first JKR books). This Harry is smarter than Malfoy (being a brave, mediocre wizard really), ethical enough to care about the state of the wizarding world, and of course knowledgeable enough to understand (truly understand) what makes it tick.
| Celestial Moonwalker chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I'm about to profess my undying love and unyielding devotion to this story. Please give me a moment.
On second thought, you know I already did that in my heart of hearts so I don't fancy repeating.
This is a thoroughly enjoyable read.
And I really feel there is no better description of your Harry Potter than the one McGonnagal gave to Dumbledore in the previous chapter. (That last scene)
Does Lucius mean 'this kid is probably a friend of our friend'?
I FEEL there's a compliment lurking in that sentence (for Harry, not Draco) and can't help but shiver considering WHO gives it. But then again - the best compliment is the one given to you by your enemy.
Thank you for introducing Less Wrong. I think I found my Heaven. Well, Heaven other than a library or a bookstore.
I kind of wish MY parent were as bookish as Harry's dad. "You can never have enough books!" - I just wish My parents understood THAT, instead of giving half exasperated half horrified exclamations of 'ANOTHER BOOK?' after one of my shopping sprees.
Oh, and I CAN justify your story as being educational. Merlin knows my parents -and most of my friends- don't understand my fascination with fanfiction. Come to think of it, is there something wrong with the image I project to the people of the Real World -you know, the one that doesn't exist? I wonder...
Thank God for public libraries! And I'm looking forward to future updates.
| Allen Pitt chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
yeesh, HP is playing a dangerous game. Imagine death eaters who know magic, AND know science & technology really well? Could get very sticky.
Draco can see the power/advantages to learning this sort of thing, but the typical person on the other side-a Weasley etc -would resist it quite a lot...
Order of Chaos? Ok, a completely new element. Maybe an order that has already come to this conclusion? That ignoring the muggles is a mistake? Kind of opposite to the death eaters?
HP is going to be quite isolated (regarded as mad /dangerous) if he isn't careful. I sure hope he does end up in Ravenclaw & that Hermione does also.
| immortal7 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
The only question i have to ask is are you going to redeem Draco? It seems that he is already set on his path of life. Also I like how you came up with the quibbler titles. later.
| Angurvddel chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Very good story blah blah like the characters blah blah, hilarious blah blah.
I'm sure you've heard that all before in various reviews.
Me? I'm just stopping by to say that your description of science and rationality quite literally brought a tear to my eye. Truly, it was a wonderful and eloquent monologue.
Also, Sequences, which I am assuming is also by you, is very fascinating. I plan to read the whole thing though I'm just getting started at the moment.
| derillianstone chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
You have a gift for characterization - I can quite literally feel what Harry and Draco were feeling in this chapter, and combined with your delightful penchant for writing in profound lessons, humorous rants, and unexpected twists, I can safely say that I enjoy this story immensely.
I'm sending this to all my friends.
| Madame Norberta chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I decided to comment on my favorite line in this chapter, but then I couldn't decide which one it was:
Magic ran in families, and Michael Verres-Evans couldn't even walk.
Harry eyed Draco calculatingly, sensing the presence of another master. "You've gotten lessons on how to manipulate people?"
"I'm so completely going to be in Ravenclaw, thank you very much. I only want power so I can get books."
All right, if this guy just took advantage of a natural accident to sell me twenty-four cans of green soda pop, I'm going to applaud his creative entrepreneurial spirit and then kill him.
But, in the end, my favorite aspect of this chapter was Harry engaging Draco in his power play - and, by extension, Lucius.
I like to offer constructive criticism when I can, but all I can come up with is: "Write faster!"
With great appreciation,
P.S.: I'm sending the link to your story to all the mad scientists of my acquaintance, starting with my husband.
| TaraLi chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Um. WOW! Just ... *WOW*.
I hope that one day, you start writing original fiction, and can get it published and out there. You have a powerful gift for sneaking lessons in, and I hope that one day you're recognized on a level with Isaac Asimov, Robert Heinlein, and C. S. Lewis.
BTW, Richard Feynman is one of my heroes, as well.
| Ceralyn chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Brilliant chapter! I liked Draco at first, but find it much harder now that you've revealed his darker side. An 11-year old who speaks so casually about rape and murder is just a bit too creepy, but I did like the way Harry rationalized it.
I also liked how you pointed out the smallness of the wizarding world and its ignorance of the muggle world. I never understood how wizards could be so ignorant of simple things like how to dress muggle and use appliances when they grew up knowing about the muggle world. It always annoyed me. Glad to have Harry point out that astronauts went to the moon.
This story is very interesting, and I don't find it out of character for someone so rational and curious as Harry to have some political ambitions. I really do hope he gets to do some revolutionizing - but I especially look forward to his meeting Hermione.
Hope that happens in the next chapter because the suspense is really getting to me!
| Ralob chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent update. I dearly hope you finish this story unlike the multitude of other unfinished fics that started off with a band and ended in a whimper.
Your Harry is absolutely fantastic and I adore both his genuine warmth at the world around him, and his deep well of rage regarding ignorance and cruelty. His adventures are going to be brilliant.
| moregoth chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Great story! I'm really enjoying your Harry and your writing style has a wonderful flow to it. The interaction between Harry and Draco is quite hilarious, and I agree with how you handled the meeting with Ron I can't see Harry having much patience with him.
Looking forward to next part!
| Thekilleregglord chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
This is awesome on so many levels, I'm not sure I've ever read a more stirring explanation of the power of science and its purpose, even if it bears little resemblance to the actual lives of scientist.
I am disappointed that you are leaving out the most noble discipline of the human soul, Mathematics. If Harry is ever going to be able to do anything as disgustingly practical as generate a Grand Unified Theory that explains magic, intent and souls along with all of the previously discovered physical forces, he is going to need in depth mathematical training, for example to work out the physics of enlarged spaces he'll need serious background in topology.
But still, I'm Loving it.
| Sarah1281 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow, that was creepy...
| SituationalExtrovert chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
So, obviously, Draco had been sorted into Slytherin. Presumably there will either a flashback or some sort of expositionary chapter in which Harry meets Hermione? One can only hope. Now, to specific lines which inspire aject worship:
"Not headed for Ravenclaw, I take it."
"But, but, but if you get rid of the Snitch, how will anyone know when the game ends?" "Buy. A. Clock..."
Hilarious AND awesome; Ron can be such a berk.
And this, the most awesome of all:
And right afterward, after a delay short enough to imply that they had been watching for at least some time, Harry saw the approach of two figures with their faces cloaked by winter scarves. "Hello, Mr. Bronze," said one of the masked figures. "Can we interest you in joining the Order of Chaos?"
Ah. The twins. Because everyone needs psuedo-Slytherin minions.
Picture me kowtowing madly, with an expression of utter devotion.
| Intelligo chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
It is hard to express my feelings about this story.
Maybe...I am occasionally intrigued and entertained by fanfiction.
This is perhaps the first time I've felt legitimately intellectually intrigued by fanfiction.
| Nargus chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
"The Mary Sue is not defined by her power, but by her lack of an even more powerful opponent."
I think I'd like to disagree with you here. I believe the definition of Mary Sue is that the character keep gaining power progressively non-stop, which in effect /force/ their adversary to be gaining in /equal/ power to keep the story going. I believe it is all about reasons. The dual power gaining can only reach to a certain level, and for certain times, before it start turning into Mary Sue.
And also, sometimes dual power gaining cause annoyance to the readers. I think an example of this is Time-travelling Harry fics. If I were a 100 year olds elemental arch-megi who travel back in time to defeat Voldermort and save his ex-dead friends, it'd be expected that I'd face a much easier time in all things than when I was 14. Unless, of course, the enemy also regain their memory of the future also. Otherwise, many readers would be expecting a more relaxing storyline. Sometimes people want to read 'I-always-win' fics just to balance out with the overly dramatic 'world-has-ended' types.
| Dark Elf2 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I have read some Smart Harry Fics, and those are usually fairly crack types of fics. This is the first time I have seen one that is taking itself seriously. Good luck, and I hope to keep enjoying this.
| what are you even saying chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Brilliant update, I can definitely handle a lack of comedy in this story. It's unbelievably grand! The final scene brought everything together, particularly Lucius' misinterpretation.
Looking forward to more.
| Sayle chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
You know, I must say that this story never ceases to surprise me. When it seems to settle into the calm and predictable genres from which is sprung, like a hyper-intelligent Harry or such other concepts, it immediately springs out again. The first moment in this chapter for me was the discussion of morality and the psychology of a child who hadn't been taught that his opponents were people. I mean, truly people.
Then: 'I am going to tear apart your pathetic little magical remnant of the Dark Ages into pieces smaller than its constitutent atoms.' It's cold, it's chilling, and it is totally in context. The delicate dance here between flirting with slapstick and dark humour is excellently performed.
The second part which caught my notice was the letter to Lucius from Draco. Part of the implication is that only Severus Snape would have used those words with that kind of current to them, a sense of understanding and calculation. Another part is that within a few hours Harry has cut to the heart of both what Draco and his father were in relation to each other.
Genius is rare, it can be very cold, and very, very frightening.
| Baughn chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
..sometimes, I take the time to look around me and see what we have done.
For all that is left undone, for all the howling of the sword of good, there is still this: That we are much more than our ancestors could have dreamt, more than they were even capable of dreaming.
With three paragraphs describing Apollo, you did the same thing. Well done.
| Zicou chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Wow Awesome chapter!
| jtptan chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Another great chapter! This really is a gem to fanfiction, in a fandom I'd rather lately been considering mostly 'over' with little in the way of new ideas.
I may have come across some introduction of coffee to the lungs this morning - the pregnancy headline started me choking, but Harry's inarticulateness in addressing the multitude of problems the headline posed was what really put me over.
I'm finding myself in anticipation of what his reactions to the Felix Felicis potion altering the laws of probability might be...
| jojobevco chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Yeah, the raping thing was a bit disgusting and I'm still waiting for Hermione to show, but Good Chapter!
| CJNyfalt chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent and intriguing chapter.
| ARedHair chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Great characterization of Draco.
I am very much looking forward to your next.
| Rahul chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Fantastic starting premise- A Harry who not only uses his brain but is good at it is certainly very interesting. Especially more so since by removing the Dursley taint, it gives him a loving childhood and threfore we dont see an obvious dark or evil Harry.
I really like the story and your writing style.
Please keep the chapters coming.
Any idea how long the story will be?
| jouve25 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Absolutely loved that last scene. Brilliant.
| Aealket chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I really do like what you are doing to the world of Harry Potters, although I would have liked to have seen the result of the Twin's prank and the meeting of Hermione.
| AiSard chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
I LOVE this fic. - just had to get that off my chest update more D~
| Dnic5 chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
love the story. keep up the good work.
| mblackzabini chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Love this story! It gets more interesting with every chapter.
| Darchias chapter 7 . 3/23/2010
Excellent, just excellent. A touch of granduer, oozing charisma, and promises of power. What better way to win a Malfoy? I definately look forward to reading more.